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The story is currently on hiatus but I still have two chapters to upload until I can pick it up again  :^^spike

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Chapter 6: The challenge
 
Littlefoot stood rooted where he was, his heart beat doubling speed within seconds. That voice... It was so obviously Rhett but... How? How did he manage to find them so quickly? At this point, Littlefoot had reached his limit of how much of his crap he could take, a tremendous amount of anger rising up his chest. Rhett's voice sounded somewhat distant but the echoes of rapid footsteps that cut through the silence indicated that he couldn't be far away from their position. Evading was also impossible - the cave now becoming a dangerous dead end where Rhett had cornered them perfectly.

Suddenly, Ali was at his side, sending mute support. He knew that he had to defend Ali and their relationship here and now.

"I'll put an end to this," he mumbled quietly, trembling with rage. Ali touched his tail with hers firmly as a sign that she agreed wholeheartedly.

That was when the face of the beige-coloured longneck appeared behind the corner.

*

*crumble*

"Oof," Cera cried as the wall finally collapsed after repeatedly striking it with her hard head with some help from Spike using his tail to weaken the structure.

"Good job, Cera, Cera good job," Ruby said happily while Ducky coughed from the dust that suddenly filled the air.

"Let's clean this up and see if it's big enough already," Chomper suggested, grabbing some debris and carrying it away with his short arms.

"Might have to break away more at the top for the flatheads," Cera grunted dismissively as her head stung at the mention of yet another round of rock ramming. "But yeah, let's clean up the mess first."

*

Rhett had sworn to himself to act fierce and aggressive but right now he couldn't help but feel happy and victorious for managing to find the two longnecks (who were even separated from the rest which made things a lot smoother) against many odds - a true example of his superior ability and his blessed luck. When Littlefoot's angered face and Ali's beautiful features came into view, he couldn't help but laugh hysterically.

"Hahahahah, don't you realize that you can't run away from me? I am Rhett the Awesome, deal with it!" His face was as smug as it could possibly be and, with satisfaction, he noted that it made the two even more angry. "As it should be, they deserve no less for defying me after all..."

"Ah, look what the bellydragger dragged in..." Littlefoot spoke coldly, pure hate radiating off him and same went for Ali.

"I can't believe how stupid you are, Rhett. Now you've done it," the girl spoke in disgust. She already knew what she was going to do once she got home this evening.

"Right back at you... Ali," Rhett sneered, his tone shifting. "Even though I explained to you with extreme care what'll happen if you disobey me, you did so, hanging out with that pussy here and gave me a very very long morning on top of that. You'll be sorry very soon."

Ali trembled with anger but it was Littlefoot who snapped first.

"Shut your foul mouth Rhett, nobody wants to hear your dumb voice!" he yelled, taking an aggressive stance.

“Whether or not you like my awesome voice doesn’t concern me, loser,” Rhett laughed coldly, clearly enjoying himself which made the other boy even more mad. “But enough of this talk, let’s talk some business, Littleneck.”

Littlefoot exchanged a quick glance with Ali. What was Rhett going to do now? If it was what he indicated the other night, then Littlefoot already knew how to respond…

“I gave you a choice but you didn’t take the opportunity to avoid confrontation. You could have given Ali to me as I suggested and renounced your friendship but you had to defy me. Now you’ll bear the consequences, both of you.” Rhett spoke in an almost formal tone which sounded ridiculous to the two longnecks.

“You call THAT a choice you moron?” Ali blurted out. “There was never a choice to begin with!”

“Well observed, Ali.” Rhett raised his eyebrows. “You’ve been mine all along and there’s no changing that fact. But your dumb lover clearly hasn’t realized this yet… how unfortunate that I have to crush him…” A cold laugh escaped the boy’s mouth, dragging on for a long time. Littlefoot was struggling to refrain himself from charging at him.

“You lost your choice, Littlefoot; now you’re going to do as I say; now I make the choices. Shall I tell you what options you have left?” Rhett sneered, walking up to the boy until they were face to face, staring into each other’s eyes, Rhett’s derogative, Littlefoot’s full of anger and Rhett could feel Ali’s penetrating stare too.

“Speak your nonsense and leave quick, Rhett,” Littlefoot said in the most hateful tone he could muster.

“I will only leave once I have your reply,” Rhett declared. “Unless... ,” he chuckled. “Feel free to try and make me leave, I’m sure it’ll be entertaining… hahahahaha!”

Littlefoot gritted his teeth but refrained from taking the invitation.

“Very well, as I thought…” Rhett cackled before his formal voice returned. “Due to your failure to comply to the terms I gave you, we shall take our dispute to the battlefield! According to the traditions, I, Rhett, hereby challenge you, Littlefoot, to fight for the right to decide upon Ali’s future! I’m sure you are aware of the conditions?”

“Crap, so he really is challenging me…” Littlefoot knew in this instant that he couldn’t back out without losing his face not only in front of Ali but also in front of himself. He just couldn’t forgive himself for letting Rhett do as he pleased and abandoning Ali in the process. He mustn’t allow it! “But I know nothing about these traditions, how can I be sure he isn’t making things up as he pleases? And what if I decline?”

“Don’t worry, Littlefoot, I know the rules,” Ali whispered, apparently reading the boy’s troubles from his mind.

“Very reassuring,” Littlefoot whispered back.

“It seems they don’t practise the rightful traditions in these lands, how unfortunate…” Rhett teased with a sigh. “Let me break it down for ya, dumbface. Females are subjected to the male’s selection and if there’s competition, it’s settled with a fight. The female must be witness to declare the winner formally. The fight is one on one, there aren’t any rules. The fight is decided once one of us is unable to get up or if one of us surrenders. Now I ask you, Littlefoot. Will you accept my challenge or will you give me Ali without a fight? You must decide here and now!”

Littlefoot flinched. The conditions for the fight surely weren’t in his favor. Even though he didn’t practise these traditions, accepting the challenge would still force him to accept whatever result the battle between Rhett and him would bring. If Rhett was a resident of the Great Valley, he wouldn’t have to worry about anything but since he was a member of Ali’s herd and around Ali all the time while he was only with her temporarily, he could protect Ali for all eternity from Rhett if only he’d win the fight… Besides, why was Rhett so focussed on Ali? Littlefoot never really got the impression that Rhett even remotely liked her.

"Before I give my reply, I demand that you tell me why you want to have Ali!" he shouted at the beige-coloured longneck. "I never got the impression that you like her at all."

Now Ali took her eyes off Rhett to look at Littlefoot curiously. Ali couldn't doubt that Rhett liked her but it was distinctly different from the kind of love that Littlefoot expressed towards her.

"Ali belongs to me, that is all you need to know," Rhett sneered with an awful smile. "But if you really want to know, Ali is very attractive and pretty and she doesn't deserve a loser like you as a lover."

"But do you love her?" Littlefoot inquired angrily.

"I do," Rhett declared proudly but neither of the two believed him.

"You don't," Ali deadpanned.

"Yeah, you're a liar, Rhett," Littlefoot stated firmly. "All you want is to possess her, and you call that loving her? Give me a break, you creep."

Rhett's expression froze.

"Your reply?" he insisted.

"Guess there's no helping it," Littlefoot sighed. With a firm expression, he stared at his opponent.

"I'll accept your challenge, Rhett. When and where?" He glanced at Ali who nodded in mute support.

"So you actually got some backbone after all… very well,” Rhett said with a triumphant look. “Tonight after the Bright Circle has set. We’ll do it up on the wall where you two got lovey-dovey - for the first and only time. Ali, you know the rules; make sure this dumbass doesn’t try to play any tricks. If he does… well, let’s just say a traditional fight ends when the winner is clear. If he breaks the rules it won’t end. Enjoy the rest of your day, it’ll be your last.” And with that, Rhett turned around and left without another word, leaving Littlefoot and Ali behind.

*

“I did it, tonight Ali will be finally mine, MINE, and mine all alone!” Rhett celebrated as he jogged back. The insolent flathead accepting the challenge wasn’t the easiest way to gain Ali for himself but it would be the most rewarding and entertaining one. Ever since joining up with that herd after seeing Ali from afar, he hadn’t had a chance to fight other longnecks and he honestly missed the feeling of stepping on other people’s tails and kicking their butts until they grovelled on the ground begging for mercy. He would certainly make sure to drag out the fight and see to it that Littlefoot would suffer for his crimes. Yes, he was looking forward to that.

Suddenly, he heard something approaching fast, probably airbourne. Quickly deducing that it might be the insolent flyer Ali was friends with, he duck into a small cove to his right lest the flyer knew he had been there. Rhett needn’t say it out loud since Ali was aware of the traditions. If any of Littlefoot’s friends were to intervene, there would be hell to pay and the boy sincerely hoped that Ali had enough sense not to get those insolent friends of theirs involved for her own sake as well as theirs…

The flyer quickly swooshed by without taking notice of him. Pleased, Rhett snuck back out and continued his walk back to eat his fill, rest and prepare for the night. Even though he didn’t consider Littlefoot a worthy opponent, one should never take things too lightly after all…

*

“Okay, at least he’s gone…” Littlefoot muttered eventually before collapsing on the spot. Not only was he afraid of what was expecting him now but also did he now bear the responsibility for Ali’s immediate future. Unless Ali somehow managed to get her mother to live in the Great Valley, there was really nothing he could do but win this fight with everything he got which, sadly, wasn’t much safe for his wits.

“Littlefoot?” Ali was trembling a little too, looking at him in concern but a quick nod quickly reassured her that he was at least okay.

“Yes, Ali?” the boy responded weakly. Suddenly, he felt Ali’s warm body right next to him as the girl nuzzled him. Feeling a little better, he leaned against her.

“Thank you so much…,” the girl said with some unease. “See… y-you didn’t have to do this, you know?”

“Seriously…” Littlefoot sighed. “Ali, I cannot stand back and watch as this son of a tarpit takes away the longneck I love. I… I’ll find a way… somehow, yes, somehow I must win this fight… for our sake and even more so for your sake…”

“But there are ways to stop him that don’t involve you two going at each other’s throats…” the girl objected with slight worry but Littlefoot gave a cold laugh. “Right… Ali, I’ve never despised another dinosaur this much in my whole life… maybe safe for that sharptooth who took mother away. Not even when Cera insulted my mother back then and we broke into a vicious fight, I was this angry at someone. Ali, I’m no good at this but I’ll kick his ass for what he’s putting us all through and I’ll find a way to trick him and if it means getting hurt in the process… That’s a promise!”

Ali looked at the purple-grey longneck in utter surprise.

“Y-you don’t have to go that far, Littlefoot… d-don’t make me worry about you!” She cried, getting even closer to him. “Also… I also have a promise I want to make… No matter who wins this fight, I promise that I will be yours… The world will freeze over before I’ll let Rhett have me!”

Littlefoot couldn’t help but smile at this.

“Hey, let’s go back to the others and pretend for now that this never happened. Rhett said he’ll let us go until the fight so maybe we should really try to enjoy this day nevertheless?” he proposed. “We can still think of ideas along the way.”

“Yeah, it probably isn’t later than noon, that should give us some time to prepare ourselves,” Ali agreed but just then they heard the unmistaken sound of wings flapping.

“Guuuuys, we find right cave!” Petrie yelled from afar as he approached the two longnecks. Littlefoot and Ali quickly broke free from each other but not before exchanging another quick nuzzle.

“Great, we only found a dead end!” Littlefoot yelled back. “Come on, Ali!”

*

A little later, the two longnecks stood in front of the entrance into the cave that supposedly had the Sky Color Stones hidden in it. Littlefoot had never seen it of course but the word of Cera, Ducky and Ruby was enough to make him a firm believer that those stones could be found in that place. A lot of rubble indicated that Cera had done some work to allow them all to pass through.

“Let’s go in,” Cera grinned, gesturing into the dark tunnel that opened in front of their eyes. “I’ll be first to find a stone of course.”

“We’ll see about that!” Chomper retorted with a firm expression, excited like a little child to start with the search.

“Yep yep yep! Remember who found all the stones the last time,” Ducky chirped in a rare smug moment.

“Yeah, and you lost them all,” Cera deadpanned. “Come on, let’s go!”

The group walked along the path (even Spike didn’t get stuck in the hole Cera had rammed into the wall) which gradually widened while darkness gradually weakened. Soon, they entered a spacious cavern illuminated by a small ray of light coming from a window in the ceiling high above their heads. Further behind, the sounds of a waterfall and a river could be heard.

“Whoa,” Chomper exclaimed. “And this is where you found them?!”

“Eeyup!” Cera stated with a grin.

“This place sure looks cool…” Littlefoot had to admit and Ali seemed to think likewise. Without another word, everyone split up to look for Sky Color Stones, however Ali remained rooted on the spot.

“Uhm… how exactly…” Ali stammered uncertainly. Ruby quickly halted in her movement.

“I think you don’t know how to know when you see a Sky Color Stone.” When Ali nodded, the fast runner continued. “Sky Color Stones look bland on the outside but pretty on the inside. Good luck searching!” Then, she raced after Chomper, who had already begun to burrow in a pile of rubble.

Ali looked at Littlefoot in confusion.

“I still don’t know how to find them…” she said ineptly. Littlefoot laughed.

“Follow me, I’ll show you.”

The matter between Rhett and them was momentarily forgotten as Littlefoot and Ali searched the cavern for Sky Color Stones. After a good hour had passed, every search party had discovered at least one of them and Ali couldn’t deny that they were really really pretty, a sight she would never forget. However, it was then when suddenly the voice of Ducky echoed through the cavern.

“Excuse me, could we all meet for a moment?”

As it turned out, Ducky just couldn’t let go of the Sky Color Stones she had lost back then.

“I would like to try looking for the stones I losted-ed,” the swimmer explained once everyone had gathered around her. “Spiky thinks there’s a tunnel that leads down to the river.”

“Let me guess, he smelled food or something?” Cera deadpanned. When Spike nodded, she rolled her eyes while hitting her head somewhat gently against the nearest wall. “Good grief…”

“Can’t we just go down there directly?” Ali wondered.

“Nope, it’s too steep,” Chomper quickly explained.

“Yeah, Ducky would have turned to smithereens if we hadn’t caught her back then…” Cera grunted. Ducky tried to look as innocent as she could. “Well, go ahead, I’m gonna keep looking up here,” she declared, leaving the circle to pick up her search again (she had only found a single, very small stone yet).

“Me go with you, Ducky,” Petrie declared, flapping over to where the swimmer was standing.

“Count us in too!” Chomper grinned as he dragged Ruby over to the group which naturally also included Spike.

Littlefoot was about to join them as well when Ali held him back.

“We’ll keep looking up here too,” she announced. “You go without us.”

“Okay, see you later!” Ducky called. “And if you change your mind, you can just follow us, yes you can!”

Littlefoot could swear hearing Cera mutter something but right now he didn’t care so much about the threehorn. Rather, why had Ali held him back?

“What’s the big deal, Ali?” he questioned as soon as Cera was out of hearing range. 

“Well, see, I figured this might be a good chance to exchange some ideas for… tonight.” Uncertainly, she looked at the boy. “We can still go after them if you don’t want to do it right now.”

“No, no, that was good thinking there…” Littlefoot admitted as the harsh reality of the situation they were facing came back to him. “Well, what did you come up with then?”

“No matter how we look at this, we’ll need some help if we want to win,” Ali began. “See, you have no experience in fighting other longnecks so we need to find someone who could tell you a few tricks before you head into the fight. I don’t know much about Rhett’s past but I’m sure he fought with other kids frequently if he’s so sure of himself.”

“Well, he could be all talk but he seemed too sincere about this to be bluffing,” Littlefoot pondered wildly. “I agree that some tricks might help me tonight though I doubt my grandpa would tell me even if he knew a few…”

“Well, we’ll figure something out,” Ali reassured. “Another thing, we… uhm, have to make sure that Rhett can’t keep me away from you guys even if he wins. Do you have any idea how to achieve this?”

“That’s a good question…” Littlefoot sighed. “We could probably prohibit Rhett from bothering you if you get your leader to restrict him after the fight though I don’t believe that’ll patch things up in the long run. He won’t stop until he’s achieved his goal and he’ll do everything to get what he wants. That makes him extremely dangerous…”

“Yeah, you’re right,” Ali sighed. “If only he could just go away… like, forever!”

“Wait a second…” Suddenly, Littlefoot had a bright moment. A few pieces clicked together in the blink of an eye and Ali’s wish would come true if it all went according to that sudden inspiration. “I’ve got a plan and it’s good!”

*

“Spiky was right, there is some food here, hehehehe,” Ducky giggled as the spiketail greedily devoured some odd herbs growing in a little side chamber with a little pond in it - rainwater falling through another window in the ceiling that was gathering and feeding some tough plants who were able to grow on solid rock - although now none were left.

“Aww, I didn’t see any bugs yet,” Chomper silently complained, massaging his stomach.

“What now?” Petrie wondered.

“Of course we keep following the tunnel!” Ducky exclaimed happily. “Even if it does not lead us to the water where the stones fell in last time, it is still a great adventure, yep yep yep!”

“Me no can argue with that,” Petrie sniggered.

“Let’s go my friends, my friends let’s go,” Ruby said in her sing-song and so the group continued along the tunnel which slowly descended as they walked on.

*

Ali gave Littlefoot a surprised look.

“A plan?”

“Yeah, I think I know how to get rid of Rhett!” the boy declared with determination although he wasn’t sure yet whether he should be looking forward to the moment he played his role in that plan yet.

“Oh, how?!” Ali inquired. “Lock him up in this cavern?”

“That’s not half bad either, haha, but we don’t know if there’s another exit somewhere,” Littlefoot laughed. “Anyway, here goes.”

Ali sat down in front of him, listening intently.

“First of all, this plan is a bit dangerous, I’m not sure if you’ll approve of it and I don’t know if it’ll work but I think we’ve gotta try. It’ll get Rhett into trouble for sure and that alone would be worth it I think…”

“Just say what it is then,” Ali spoke a little impatiently.

“Remember what he said about following the rules? What if we deliberately break them? Rhett will be super mad and try to hurt me instead of just winning that damn fight. We could make it look like he assaulted me and we could get the gang to help us and stop him once he’s gone far enough…”

“No, just no…” Ali shouted immediately. “I’m not letting you get hurt for my sake!”

Littlefoot gave her a sad smile.

“You know, if it means we can be together for the rest of your stay, I don’t mind if I have to take a beating from that idiot. I’m not saying I’ll go down without a fight either and we could even win if the others help us, just saying, though I personally don’t think it’s a likely scenario…”

“But what for? How is this going to get him expelled?!” Ali shouted in concern.

“Well, you see, my grandparents will be super pissed when they hear that I’ve been assaulted and injured by that idiot. They will demand Rhett to be punished for such an action and I’m sure other residents of the Valley are ready to jump in too. This will put Old One in a pinch and she’ll have to expel him for besmearing the herd’s reputation or something like that. Either way, it’ll put Old One in a very awkward and embarrassing situation and, given how strict she appears to be, she’ll definitely have to punish Rhett badly.”

“... since he’s just an orphan we took in out of mercy, it might be easy to throw him out… hey, I see where you’re coming from now…” Ali exclaimed though she still couldn’t quite agree to the plan. “Still.. for you to risk getting seriously hurt… it’s too dangerous!”

“Rhett is too dangerous to be around you!” Littlefoot suddenly shouted, forgetting that Cera wasn’t too far away either. “I can’t protect you with strength, Ali, but I can protect you with my wit. We’ll outwit him with this!”

Ali looked down, conflicted thoughts running berserk in her mind. She didn’t want Littlefoot to get hurt because she loved him but she knew that not doing as he proposed might result in them not being able to express the love they shared any longer. The girl had to make up her mind soon. What was the bigger evil? What was right to do? How could she prevent this plan to become a necessary evil to defeat the devil chasing after her?

“Isn’t there another way?” she finally begged with a pleading look in her eyes. Littlefoot looked at her sadly.

“Rhett won’t listen to any rules and he won’t be held back by punishments I reckon,” the boy explained. “He’s fixated on you and he’s that type of dinosaur who’s so deranged that they don’t see reason anymore. You could say he’s beyond help. He’ll definitely continue to try and I’m afraid he’ll even go as far as to hurt you in order to make you obedient to his will… Ali, it has to be done. Rhett needs to go… forever.”

Ali exhaled in a deep, painful sigh. As much as she wanted to, she couldn’t find any gaps in the boy’s logic. Quickly blinking away the tears that were about to form in her eyes, she walked up to the dinosaur she loved and performed a neck hug, crossing each other’s necks and then nuzzling each other in mutual support.

“Promise me that you’ll try everything to win though and don’t get hurt too bad, okay?” she said in a quiet whisper. “Knowing Rhett, he might not care if you die from an injury…”

“You know I won’t let that happen,” Littlefoot promised with a weak smile. “Once we’ll tell the others, I’m sure they’ll want to beat Rhett to a piece of raw meat. It’ll be harder to hold them back and only disturb the fight and not join it. It doesn’t concern them after all since this is something between Rhett and us - I want to be the one who fights since I’ll be fighting for you. Because,” Littlefoot released the longneck hug, interrupting his speech for a dramatic moment. “Because I love you from the deepest of my heart, Ali. Because you’re mine and I am yours and because Rhett isn’t part of that equation…”

Before Littlefoot knew what was happening, he felt a warm and wet sensation on his left cheek, followed by the most intimate head rub he had yet received from the girl. Ali, sheerly overwhelmed by his words, had licked his cheek and now his cheeks were burning hot as he began to blush. Nevertheless, he returned the gesture with a smile that washed all worries away in the blink of an eye. He still dreaded the confrontation and all the preparations that were necessary for his plan to become a success, however he knew that it was all so that he could enjoy moments like this with Ali whenever he wanted - maybe not in the near future but once they were old enough to decide on their own path for sure.

*

“What are these flatheads doing?” Cera wondered. After picking up a part of their conversation that distinctively sounded like an argument, the threehorn had decided to quit her rather fruitless search (why did she suck so much at finding these goddamn stones?!) and investigate a little. Just when the two longnecks came into sight, Cera could clearly see Ali licking Littlefoot in a clearly intimate manner before their heads touched in an unmistakably romantic fashion.

“Urgh, this is disgusting, I’m outta here…” she frowned, quickly sneaking away before the two would notice her though she was looking forward to teasing them later, now knowing that her suspicions weren’t unfounded after all.

*

“So… I guess we should tell the others about this when they’re back…” Littlefoot eventually spoke after losing himself in the warmth of Ali’s body for a while.

“About what?” Ali wondered, also feeling a little lost in their little moment together.

“Ah, well, about everything, I suppose,” Littlefoot mentioned awkwardly. “We’ve gotta tell them about the situation with Rhett, about our plan and, well, I doubt we can explain this without giving away that we’re in love with each other…”

“Oh…” Ali said thoughtfully. “Hmm… I guess it is another necessary evil to defeat Rhett.”

“Precisely!” Littlefoot shouted. “Okay, then let’s do it like this when they are back!”

Just then, he heard familiar voices coming from the bottom of the cave where Ducky and the others had intended to go.

“Hmm, looks like they really found a way down there,” he mused, gesturing to Ali in order to follow him to the edge of the higher part of the cavern which was separated from the lower part by an almost vertical cliff of roughly 30-40 meters…

*

“Hey, we did it!” Petrie shouted against the characteristic sound of water rushing down a blank wall of rocks into a small pond that gave birth to a small river that lead who knows where.

“Yep, yep, yep!” Ducky exclaimed, sprinting ahead of the group into the open and, without hesitation, dived into the water with a squeal of joy.

“Wow, from down here the cliff looks even scarier, even scarier it looks,” Ruby mused as her gaze checked the surrounding features. If Ducky had fallen from up there back then, surely she would have gotten more than a little hurt.

“Come on, Ruby, we still gotta beat Ducky,” Chomper exclaimed, dragging Ruby away to look for more stones while Spike found a cozy spot to take a nap and Petrie flew up the cliff to verify just how high it was. Just then, he saw Littlefoot and Ali arrive at the edge.

“Oh, hello Littlefoot and Ali. You guys wanna come down too?” he wondered with a happy giggle.”

“Maybe next time,” Littlefoot said with a weak smile. “Ali and I are a little exhausted but could you relay a message to the others?”

“Sure, Petrie do what Petrie can!” the flyer exclaimed while flying a few loopings.

“Tell the others that we have something to announce and something to discuss when you guys are coming back up. But there’s no need to hurry as long as we’re back home before the Bright Circle leaves the sky.”

“We’ll watch from up here,” Ali added. “We already found enough stones.”

“Alright, Petrie see you later then, ehehehe!” he snickered before swooshing back down to perform more flight maneuvers which entertained the longnecks greatly.

About an hour later, a couple dozen of Sky Color Stones had been arranged in a little trough on the ground, some retrieved from underwater by Ducky and others gathered by Chomper and Ruby with aerial support of Petrie while Spike was snoring peacefully in a corner. Littlefoot and Ali sat close to each other, simply enjoying to watch their friends enjoy themselves while feeling each other’s warmth as their bodies touched. Eventually, they seemed to be pleased with the amount of stones they had uncovered and recovered, waking up Spike who, grumpily, obeyed and began to head back through the tunnel they had used to get there in the first place.

“Should I ask Cera for advice on how to fight by the way?” Littlefoot spoke up just then as the thought crossed his mind. “I mean, she’s much better at it than I am and I’ve usually lost when we took our disputes to the battlefield…”

“Yes, Cera is strong…” Ali said absentmindedly with a slightly amused smile. “I think you should ask her.”

“Oh, I will,” Littlefoot announced with determination.

“Okay, I’ll just think about some ways to distract Rhett during the fight while Cera trains you.”

“If she does,” Littlefoot remarked. “Yeah, that’s a good idea too. Well, I’ll be off looking for her.”

“See you later,” Ali said with a smile.

It didn’t take him long to find Cera who seemed to have given up on her search and who seemed to be in a slightly bad mood.

“Are you coming here to mock me?” she began though she quickly sauntered up. “Oh whatever, I suppose I’m just not made to find these bloody stones. Never mind that, okay?!”

“Yes, yes…” Littlefoot quickly reassured. “You’re much better at breaking them than any of us after all.”

“Indeed!” Cera beamed and, in an instant, she was back to her usual self.

“Cera, the others will be back here soon. Could I, uhh, you see, there’s something you could help me with… although it may sound a bit odd to you out of the blue… but you’re the best at what I need some advice on...”

“Oh?” Cera teased. “You’re not asking about girl things now that you’re… uhh, sorry, I kinda walked in on you two earlier…Congratulations, I’m happy for you.”

“You mean it?!” Littlefoot was baffled. Was this really Cera he was talking to?

“D-don’t get the wrong idea! I’ll still make fun of you, count on it!!! It’s just… if it means that Ali will be with us more often, it’s a good thing in my opinion. She’s my friend too after all.”

“That’s completely fine, make fun of me all you want since I know there’s no ill will behind it, Cera,” Littlefoot laughed and, reluctantly, the threehorn joined in. “Anyway, the thing I’m asking of you is not advice about girls though it has to do with Ali in a way… is it okay if I save the explanation for later when everyone’s around?”

“Oh? Well, this sounds like it’ll be interesting,” Cera beamed. “Come at me, what do you want you insolent flathead?”

Littlefoot momentarily shot a glance at her for her playful insult before he uttered his request.

“Teach me how to fight…”

Cera laughed immediately.

“Hahaha, do you want to beat me up whenever I tease you about you and Ali now?”

“No, it’s not that…” Littlefoot explained with some unease. “You see, there’s someone I need to fight with soon… and I’m pretty sure they are stronger than me so I could really need some advice…”

“Oooh, don’t tell me it’s who I think it is…” Cera deadpanned and, not much to her surprise, the longneck nodded.

“Just let me do it,” she beamed with high spirits. “He won’t be able to move for a week when I’m done with him!”

“Cera, I don’t doubt that but… this is something I will need to do on my own… for Ali’s sake… and I guess I’ve got some pride too… sometimes at least…”

Cera looked at the longneck with an understanding grin.

“Now THAT’S something I can get behind,” she declared. “Sure, I’ll help you just this once.”

And so, Cera gave him some general tips and tricks about fighting as well as telling him how to react best in common situations during a real fight. Obviously, not all of the things she told him could be applied to a fight between two longnecks but, generally, Littlefoot found them very useful and made sure to remember them and promise Cera to repay her some day for her great help.

Sooner than he liked, the others returned and Cera ended their training with a final word of advice.

“Never give up even if things are hopeless. Find an opening in the enemy’s defense and break through with all your might!”

“Thank you, Cera,” Littlefoot sighed in relief. Now he felt prepared for whatever Rhett might throw at him even if his body mightn’t keep up with what he meant to do.

Ali joined with the rest as soon as she heard the happy chit-chat between her friends. When everyone was gathered in a circle around the two longnecks (Cera was in such a good mood in anticipation of the two lovers bursting the secret that it almost made her look scary), Littlefoot took the word.

“I’m sorry to annoy you with this after you’ve had so much fun but some things happened since Ali arrived here and we need to talk about a few things right now since it’s kinda important,” the boy began, a little nervous for he couldn’t really tell for sure how his friends would react to the individual things he’d tell them about now. “There are three things. First, there’s something about Rhett we can’t withhold from you; second, we need your help with something related to Rhett and, third, we have an announcement to make. I… guess we should get that over with, shall we, Ali?” With a shy smile, Ali nodded, walking up a little closer to Littlefoot.

“Gee, I wonder what it is?” Cera said much louder than was necessary, wearing a mirthful smirk. The threehorn hadn’t been lying when she warned him about her teasing, Littlefoot deduced quickly.

“We originally meant to hide this from you but, considering the circumstances which you’ll hear about soon, I think you need to know and it’ll be one less thing to worry about. Ali… would you… tell them?” Littlefoot said awkwardly but Ali didn’t quite seem ready to blow the bomb either.

“If I were to guess…” Ruby spoke up with a puzzling expression on her face, Ducky catching on to her drift as she noticed how close the two longnecks were standing.

“Oh, I know, I do, I do!” she squirmed in excitement. With a big smile, she interrogated. “Say, do you like each other, heh? heeeehh?”

“I daresay it’s a bit more than just “liking” each other…” Cera sneered. “Come on, say it, Littlefoot.”

“Alright, alright! Shut up already,” he laughed. “It’s true, Ali and I, uhh, well, we kinda love each other…” Littlefoot could feel himself blushing again as he said these words, Ali, as if to underline his statement, nuzzling him playfully which he returned, naturally.

“Okay, I’m getting sick,” Cera grunted but everyone else’s faces brightened up upon hearing the announcement.

“Congratulations!” Ruby was the first one to speak up.

“I am so so happy for you, oh yes I am, I am!” Ducky cried in joy, grabbing Petrie by the hands and dancing around in celebration.

“Wow, that was fast,” Chomper stuttered in utter surprise. “That’s really cool though!”

“Me never think you be first of us to get girlfriend, Petrie so jealous!” the flyer declared in a playful pout once he had managed to free himself from the swimmer’s grasp.

“Nobody would want to be your girlfriend, Petrie, you’re just too weird,” Cera blurted out, earning herself an angry stare.

“That not true!” Petrie barked. “You too big idiot to get boyfriend too!”

As the banter between the two carried on, everyone else turned their attention to Spike who appeared to be unsure of how to react.

“Spiky, what is the matter? Do you not understand?” Ducky wondered. “Littlefoot and Ali now like each other like old Topsy likes Tria and like Littlefoot’s grandparents like each other, you know? Do you not think that is a good thing, huh?”

Spike looked from one longneck to the other, seemingly grossed out by the thought.

“Oh Spiky, sometimes it really does show that you are a little younger than the rest of us, oh yes it does, it does,” Ducky giggled heartily at the spiketail’s expense who gave her a slightly ungentle but playful push.

“What’s so great about this btw?” Chomper wondered.

“Oh you know…” Ducky said with a slightly dreamy voice. “That moment when you see a handsome swimmer and they look at you and… ahhh…” While Ducky was spacing out, Cera had finished her squarrel with Petrie, ready to make another uncalled for comment.

“Can you guys be love-sick somewhere else?” Of course, nobody paid her any attention.

“Say, Ducky, if me be handsome swimmer, you be me girlfriend?” Petrie said, giggling.

“Hmm… maybe? I do not know what you would look like as a swimmer, oh no no no,” Ducky explained.

“You’d be as ugly as always,” Cera deadpanned. Petrie was about to counter but Littlefoot found his voice again before the banter could turn into an actual fight.

“Guys, let’s not be too harsh on one another, okay?” he proposed which ultimately broke down the banter. “I totally needed that though, now it’s much easier to talk about the… not so pretty stuff…”

“Rhett.” Ali spit out as everyone turned their attention to the longnecks entirely.

“Yep, Rhett.” Littlefoot’s expression hardened. “You didn’t realize it but he’s been stalking us all day and even though we made sure that he had errands to run until noon today, he managed to find Ali and me earlier while we were separated from you guys to pester us.”

“And worst of it all, he ruined our, well, you get the idea…” Ali added sadly.

“So you two went off somewhere and he followed you and observed you two being lovers or what?” Cera deadpanned, not even trying to use this opportunity for another tease.

“That sums it up,” Littlefoot sighed. “He’s obviously after Ali and now that we’re… you know, he’s super mad.”

“What a retarded piece of shit…” Cera growled. “This is so maddening, I wanna ram him right down this cliff here, right now!”

“Understandably…” Ducky said with unusual blandness in her voice. “I am so sorry that he is bothering you two, yes I am, I am…”

“Uh-huh!!!” Spike ranted, looking no less threatening than Cera with his developing spikes.

“He so mean me wanna be mean to him too!!!” Petrie cried, puffing his chest.

“He needs to learn a lesson for sure, a lesson he needs to learn!” Ruby grunted.

“Uhh, I hate to say this, guys but… I’m kinda hungry,” Chomper spoke up awkwardly.

“Eat him for all I care,” Cera spat. “This is the last time I’ll let that son of a tarpit harm any of my friends!”

“Well, this makes the next step a lot easier…” Littlefoot sighed. “I’ll definitely need your help tonight.”

“We will,” Ali added, standing firmly next to the purple-grey longneck.

“Tell us what to do and we’ll do it…” Cera growled. “Right?” A murmur went through their ranks, even kindhearted Ducky feeling a rather unfamiliar surge of anger rise within her chest.

“Rhett challenged me to a fight earlier after demanding twice that I stay away from Ali,” Littlefoot explained. “The fight will be to determine who will be allowed to be Ali’s lover - at least according to some rather old-fashioned longneck traditions he believes in.”

“Rhett doesn’t love me, he just wants to possess me and order me around, and obviously none of us are planning to go along with his terms,” Ali continued.

“Did you agree to that fight?” Cera demanded. “And what if you decline? Aside from being a coward, I mean?”

“Well, I suppose he would have dragged Ali out of the cavern right away, using force if need be,” Littlefoot reckoned darkly. “Ali and I have had quite a few difficult conversations since yesterday thanks to Rhett. He’s putting us through quite some hell and I want to prevent this from ever happening again. That’s why I accepted… and that’s why I need you guys… because I can’t win alone…”

“So you  want us to fight with you after all?” Cera deadpanned. “That’s not what you told me earlier!”

“No, no, you’re getting the wrong idea!” Ali quickly amended. “Rhett demands a fair fight, one on one, however he’s in many ways tougher than Littlefoot so he’s likely to beat him up left and right…”

“We don’t even know if Rhett’ll play fair at all,” Littlefoot grunted. “He said there wouldn’t be any rules other than it being between the two of us so he could just do anything, really. I’ve come up with a plan that’ll either help me win and stuff that insolent idiot’s foul mouth forever or, if I lose, it’ll hopefully get him expelled from Ali’s herd…”

“How’s that supposed to work?” Chomper shrugged. “I bet he’s still a coward who runs from a little biter like me - although I’ve grown a bit since then! Let’s just show him not to mess with us!”

“I wouldn’t mind that plan,” Cera sighed.

“It’s gotta be me, sorry,” Littlefoot declared with an apologizing expression. “This is between us longnecks and you have no idea how much shit I’ve had to endure from Rhett until now. Cera’s teasing is a blessing compared to his nonsense. I will definitely fight him on my own and I don’t want any of you to get hurt for my sake. However, there’s something you can do for me - for us. I’ll explain the plan to you…”

And so, Littlefoot layed out to them what he had already discussed with Ali in utmost detail, not surprised in the slightest when he got mixed reactions about it.

“Oh no no no, you mustn’t do that!” Ducky cried in horror as the image of a bloodied version of her friend appeared in front of her inner eye while Spike urgently shook his head.

“Yeah, why you want to get hurt? Petrie no understand!”

“In a sharptooth battle, you wouldn’t survive that,” Chomper remarked uneasily. “I’m not sure if it’s a good plan…”

“...what Chomper said,” Ruby repeated. “Although this is no sharptooth battle because no sharptooth will be fighting.”

“I was against it too at first, believe me,” Ali exclaimed in an attempt to sway the opinions within the group but their expressions remained wary and full of concern. “Cera, what do you think?”

“I’m... trying to make up my mind whether I should encourage him or not,” the threehorn said, her thoughts clearly conflicted. “I mean… I never thought Littlefoot had guts like that. He clearly wants to fight for your sake Ali so you must be very important to him… I suppose. I’m not really getting how that’s gonna get Rhett banned from here though…”

“Well, what’d your father do if someone beat you up?” The rhetoric question was hardly necessary as everybody knew that Mr. Threehorn would go around rioting until the culprit was found and dealt with.” No one is likely to believe Rhett; if we say he assaulted me, that’d make our folks very mad and concerned. They’d blame Ali’s herd and their leader will be made responsible.”

“As a result, Rhett might get punished or even banished from the herd which would save me from his idiocy for all eternity…” Ali finished the thought. “I’m not sure if I can convince my mother to live in the Great Valley so if we don’t do something about Rhett in the long run, nothing is achieved. If Littlefoot wins, it’d be ideal but since we plan to have you guys intervene and distract Rhett, I doubt he’ll consider the loss rightful and will probably threaten all of us as a result. It’s the best option we have and, as much as I hate to allow Littlefoot to do it, we have a lot to win and I think we should do all we can to support him.”

“I get what you’re saying, Ali, but how does this relate to whether you live here or not? Rhett might just say “fuck this, I’ll just stay here too” and we’re stuck with him anyway!” Cera stomped her foot. “Can’t he just fuck off? Or can’t we just get the grown-ups to chase him out or something?”

“It’d be easy if he weren’t a member of Ali’s herd,” Littlefoot sighed. “However, since he is, the Valley has little influence on him. That’s why we want him to fuck up big time by hurting me and causing a riot in the Valley that way. It’s gotta get him into trouble!”

“It’d better…” Cera growled. “Well, I’m not gonna stop you if you’re reckless enough to let him beat you up but you’d better put up a good fight first, is that clear?!”

“If it means I can scare him again, I might just agree to this…” Chomper sighed. “But still, that’s pretty crazy, Littlefoot…”

“But what if plan not work?” Petrie objected.

“Yes, what if Rhett does not get banished-ed from the herd, yes what if then?” Ducky inquired with great worry.

“Then we’ll move to plan B and gang up on him,” Cera growled angrily.

“I’m sure it’ll work, Rhett even said he’d get rough with me if I tried to trick him - which we’ll definitely do. As long as you guys stop him once he’s done enough damage, I should be fine. I’d rather be hurt than having to put up with that idiot any longer…”

“Same goes for me,” Ali declared firmly. “He makes me sick.”

“I guess we’ll help you then because helping is what friends do,” Ruby said at last and with this, even Ducky and Spike eventually gave in their resistance, though reluctantly, and agreed to help their undisputed leader in his quest to get rid of Rhett.

“Great, now we need a plan…” Littlefoot announced with slightly higher spirits.

“I thought you had a plan already?” Cera deadpanned.

“Yeah, I mean, a detailed plan for how to distract and annoy Rhett as we fight,” Littlefoot amended his statement.

“About that, I’ve thought about it,” Ali said with a firm voice. “See, I suddenly remembered what you guys did during the many times you ran into sharpteeth on your adventures and…”

“Way too many times in fact…” Cera deadpanned. “But hey, that’s not bad at all. I totally wanna trip that moron with a vine just like we did with Chomper’s parents once!”

“That wasn’t nice at all, you know?” Chomper said while sulking a little.

“You go give him the scare of his lifetime, Spike and I will take care of the vines,” Cera decided, Spike nodding in approvement.

“Petrie, Ducky, you could hide in the trees and throw stuff at him when he’s passing underneath,” Ali suggested which met the approval of the two smaller dinosaurs immediately.

“Oh yes, Rhett shall fear Petrie from the skies! Hahaha!” Petrie laughed in an attempt to sound vicious and evil.

“I will help you, Petrie, yes I will,” Ducky announced, her fists clenched.

“I’ll gather some snapping shells when I have dinner later, snapping shells I’ll collect,” Ruby announced, a scheming look on her face. “A snapping shell to the face has got to hurt!”

“I could go fetch a hive of buzzy stingers but those sure are noisy…” Chomper sighed as he mentally scrapped his idea in the making.

“Hmm… maybe we could use them just this once, Chomper,” Littlefoot said with another great idea on the verge of being completed. “What if we prepare a trap? The earth up where the fight will take place is rather soft and muddy after the frequent Sky Water recently.”

“Brilliant!” Ruby exclaimed in great excitement. “We will dig a hole but Rhett won’t know that it is a hole until he knows but once he knows he’ll be stung by buzzy stingers!”

“Amazing…” Cera simply stated while picturing the scene in her head, a grin soon flashing across her face. “Yea, we totally gotta do that. Littlefoot might be better off not jumping on Rhett until he gets back out though.”

“Yeah, I might just be stung myself,” Littlefoot laughed. “Honestly guys, this is amazing! Just playing this prank on him will be worth it!”

“Agreed,” Chomper said while practising his toothiest grin.

“Yep, yep, yep, buzzy stingers are very very ouch-y so Rhett will surely like them, oh yep yep yep,” Ducky giggled.

“You know you sound kinda creepy when you get like that, Ducky,” Ali laughed. “See, it’s just so totally not you.”

“Rhett is a meanie though!” Ducky explained firmly. “I may not like to fight unlike Cera but I do not like bullies like him, oh no no no!!!”

“Just goes to show how bad of an influence he is even on Ducky…” the threehorn joked with a sigh. “Ali, what are you gonna do by the way?”

“Me?” the girl sighed. “Well, see, I… I’m supposed to sit back and watch the carnage unfold between them until one of them wins… it’d be too obvious for me to try to do something…”

Littlefoot suddenly looked at her with a weak smile.

“Just cheering on me every now and then would be great,” he said while poking her nose gently. “It’ll piss off Rhett as well.”

“True… I think it goes without saying that while you guys will all be nearby, none of you must show yourselves to Rhett lest you give him a chance to attack you in the worst case. Therefore, Ali, you should be cheering on me on behalf of everyone.”

As Ali looked into the circle around her, everyone was nodding and giving her encouraging glances and gestures.

“I will cheer for all of us!” she shouted loudly, her voice echoing through the cavern for half an eternity before it finally shut down.

“Well, I think, unless there are more ideas, we’re done discussing here,” Littlefoot spoke up once Ali’s echo had died down at last. “It should be a little bit past afternoon now, I reckon. Let’s head back, tell our folks that we’ll be home late and meet up at the lookout into the Mysterious Beyond.”

“Which one?” Cera wondered. “There’s two I can remember, one that faces towards the Land of Mists and one that overlooks the big crater where the falling rocks fell long ago.”

“It’s the one facing towards the Land of Mists,” Littlefoot answered quickly. “You see, Ali’s herd lives nearby and I thought I’d show Ali at night how marvelous it is during that time of the day.”

“And that’s where Rhett spied on us while we were… enjoying ourselves while gazing at the blinky lights… we even saw a travelling light and made a wish!” Ali added.

“You know, Littlefoot, you’re actually half decent at this,” Cera commented drily while raising her eyebrow. “It’s no surprise Ali fell for you…”

“Haha, well, it was my idea in the first place but Littlefoot suggested the location since I don’t know the Valley very well,” Ali laughed.

“Yeah, gee thanks Cera,” Littlefoot laughed. “Anyway, let’s go. We don’t know how long it’s gonna take us to prepare everything and of course we’ve gotta make sure that Rhett doesn’t arrive while we’re running preparations…”

“Leave that to Petrie, me spy on Rhett, not other way around, and let you know when he head towards place!” the flyer offered.

“Alright, let’s do that!” Littlefoot agreed.

“Thanks,” Ali said with a smile which momentarily made the flyer blush.

“And don’t mess up, will ya?” Cera barked.

“Yes, yes, this be too important for Petrie to mess up!” the flyer retorted before everyone started moving out of the cavern of Sky Color Stones, back towards the outside world, completely oblivious to the outcome of the confrontation between Rhett and Littlefoot. Who would be victorious, who would be crushed by the other? Would their efforts be enough to sway the favor of the battle or would it bear consequences for them which they couldn’t even begin to fathom?

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Oh boy, a lotta stuff to talk about in this chapter! It's quite above my usual chapter length after all :D Knowing you guys you'll analyze this pretty accurately so I'll skip that part in my author's note this time  :)petrie

I wanna say a few things about this chapter regardless. Those who are interested in trivia might be astonished that this was written in one big session a few months ago. I've just read through this chapter again to get back into the story and boy something really rare happened. I read my own stuff and actually thought "Dang, this is actually good!" I rarely get those vibes from my own writing, especially considering the stakes some people are setting with their outstanding work! I must have been really inspired when I wrote this because seldom have I managed to write such natural and fun dialogues I think. Feel free to disagree, it's what I'm feeling when putting myself into the position of the reader here  :angel

I'm looking forward to hearing your thoughts on this chapter in particular detail since there's a LOT to talk about (really curious what you think of the developments, given that there is plenty of room to argue about the decisions everyone has made here  :^^spike) and I'll try to respond as soon as I can as opposed to my usual style of attaching responses to the next chapter. Speaking of which... it's 13k words and given that I'm still considering to enter this story into the fanfic awards after all, I might upload it as soon as next week! Let me just say that things are getting really intense really soon  :lol


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ah yes, there was something else... oh right... Reviews!!  :olittlefoot

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While this chapter was pretty short and didn't bring much new information, it's still fun to see that this story still goes on. Too many times I have seen that the authors reject their creations and do not publish them. Granted, I myself have done this a couple of times, so I can’t exactly whine about now can I?
And Rhett likes to continue to be a stalker of the lowest with him continuously harassing Ali and Littlefoot. It is a little amusing to see how this whole situation eventually comes to its conclusion or will it ever end? :thinking

Right now, I don’t have anything else on my mind about this chapter that I could speak about, so we’ll just let the future speak for itself when new chapters are eventually released. If things really will get heated soon, I hope that will be the turning point of this story that transforms it into something even more interesting.

Yes, this story is still going on (albeit a bit too slow, yes, I know  :sducky) and will not be discarded at all, given how much fun it is to write whenever I can dedicate myself to it! SDP is giving me a really hard time at the moment but this was never a challenge but rather super fun and entertaining to develop and write!

Rest assured it will end. When the story is finished  :bestsharptooth But seriously, the next chapter (7) and its aftermath should give you a good idea where this story is headed to. Turning point? Quite so! Stay tuned! :exactly


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This chapter continued the trends set in the previous ones which suite the narrative decently. It is often true that people who care so very much about other peoples’ lives lead miserable ones themselves and indeed, that goes for Rhett here. It’s a good idea to show the Gang just trying to act as normally as possible with Rhett only hoping he could in many ways take Littlefoot’s place.

The dialogue inside the Gang was written quite well and it’s easy to see these kinds of mechanics playing out within them. However, it seems like their brief moment of normalcy is getting interrupted soon enough as Rhett is finally ready to make his next move. I second Anagnos in hoping that it will lead to some major drama as it would give this story a rather big boost which is what it needs.

I'm glad you liked the dialogue between the gang. If you liked them in chapter 5 already, you'll probably like them even more in 6! Rhett's move (as you can probably tell by now) is really spicing things up now and the climax is just about to arrive on this first arc of the story  ;)

That comment about Rhett is too true by the way. Perfectly fits what he is and what he is doing.


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My apologies for not getting to reviewing the previous chapter.  I have been quite busy as of late and it appears that I missed the notification for the previous installment.  That being said, I hope that you will forgive me if I give a general review of the previous two chapters here.

Rhett is certainly a piece of work here.  Not only do we have an unhealthy fixation of Ali’s happiness and an obsessive desire to monopolize her attentions, but we also have a lack of a self-image apart from the object of his affections.  Such a mindset can only lead to tragedy or misery, and we are seeing this here.  Though I am curious how he went from the lessons learned (presumably feigned in this narrative) from his first meeting with the gang to the situation he is in now mentally. Ultimately, both in terms of friendship and romance, he is on the outside looking in and his ignoble attempts to intimidate the others only keeps him stuck on the outside.

The interactions between the gang was handled quite well, as is the dialogue and interactions between our two protagonists.  I do look forward to the gang figuring out a bit more about how Ali and Littlefoot are acting around one another.  I am sure that will add an interesting angle to this tangled web that is being weaved.

Your slacking off shall be forgiven lol. If reviews were written on an "eye for an eye, tooth for a tooth" mentality, I'd not really get any from you atm  :opetrie

I don't believe Rhett ever truly learned a lesson in that episode he was introduced. He seems like the type of character who might be smart enough to pretend for a greater goal. In the case of the episode, his goal might have been to keep an eye on Ali, thus admitting his faults in order to be admitted to play with Ali's friends if just to prevent Ali from getting too close to them and too distant from him. This is just my theory though and you are free to disagree :DD

The gang have now figured out what's going on between our lovenecks but to carry on your metaphor, the web is about to snap  :)petrie 


Thanks for those reviews guys even if I'm responding awfully late! They're much appreciated!  :)littlefoot
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I’ll start by saying that I’m glad to see you continue this story once again and while there were some problems in this chapter that I couldn’t help but pay attention to, the recent developments seem to indicate that in the upcoming chapters we will finally see another side to this story that will give it the boost it needs in order to prosper.

Rhett’s actions have taken a complete turn for the worst with the start of the chapter. Indeed, he appears to be even more obnoxious than before, and needless to say that it’s making matters extremely awkward between the characters and dare I say that this transition is starting to make things a bit more interesting. Time will tell if it will continue to keep things interesting, but for now we have passed the inelasticity.

Even so, there were quite a few problems that one should take into consideration in this chapter. My main points would be your use of profanity among the gang, as that seems highly unlikely to happen. I also couldn’t help but notice that there were quite a few grammatical errors present, but they didn’t ruin reading the chapter for me at least. It is likewise unfathomable to understand the Gang’s feelings about potentially throwing Rhett out into the wilderness so carelessly, as that most certainly doesn’t fit their characterizations very well.

Despite these issues I mentioned, it is once again a pleasure to see you continue this story and like I said, the future installments will no doubt be very intriguing as we finally get to see the confrontation come to light between Littlefoot and Rhett. The loser of that fight will be in a rock and a hard place, and I hate to think of the implications for the individual whom suffers this fate in the end. Very nice job, Ducky! :)littlefoot




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I’ll start by saying that I’m glad to see you continue this story once again and while there were some problems in this chapter that I couldn’t help but pay attention to, the recent developments seem to indicate that in the upcoming chapters we will finally see another side to this story that will give it the boost it needs in order to prosper.

We'll know after seeing the next chapter for sure  :)petrie Abandoning stories never feels easy. The two bigger stories that I abandoned (and my first fanfiction which was awful) are still projects I would perhaps pick up given enough time to work out a proper outline but managing the stories currently active is all I can do for now. This is probably right after SDP in terms of priority at the moment, given that it is perhaps the easiest to finish due to the medium-length (we're probably looking at a little above 100k for the full story). SDP is at least on the scale of Separate Ways, TST or TSH and that is not including the various ideas I have for a sequel  :PAli ), Not Supposed is certainly a longer work which would take some time to get back into at the moment and the novellization project is basically a project that will haunt me until I'm old at the current rate  :bolt

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Rhett’s actions have taken a complete turn for the worst with the start of the chapter. Indeed, he appears to be even more obnoxious than before, and needless to say that it’s making matters extremely awkward between the characters and dare I say that this transition is starting to make things a bit more interesting. Time will tell if it will continue to keep things interesting, but for now we have passed the inelasticity.


I am glad to hear that things are starting to get interesting in your view :) Indeed it makes things extremely awkward and forces some of them to take rather extreme measures and decisions...

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Even so, there were quite a few problems that one should take into consideration in this chapter. My main points would be your use of profanity among the gang, as that seems highly unlikely to happen. I also couldn’t help but notice that there were quite a few grammatical errors present, but they didn’t ruin reading the chapter for me at least. It is likewise unfathomable to understand the Gang’s feelings about potentially throwing Rhett out into the wilderness so carelessly, as that most certainly doesn’t fit their characterizations very well.

I would like to discuss these problems if you don't mind (and I will also be curious to see if others see the same issues that you do). First of all, it's probably pretty rough asking to point out the grammatical errors you found when a chapter is 9k in length but by all means if you can still recall a few or just the general type of mistakes I made, let me know and I'll review them  :exactly I usually don't have any issues with my grammar so I'm really curious what you are referring to now  :olittlefoot
Next, profanity. Please do realise that the gang have aged a little. This is set a year after the events of the tv-series (which, in my opinion, is set when the gang are just entering their double-digit age). Albeit not fully entering the Time of Great Growing yet, there are a few changes that I think they are likely to undergo and, aside from being a little more mature and, physically speaking, quite a bit bigger, I also thought that this development would coincide with their language gradually becoming less one children would use and using a little more slang and also profanity (Cera in particular :DD). I'm not sure if you agree with my opinion (it is just an opinion after all not precisely based on hard facts  :PAli) but I hope I could explain well why I did use this kind of language a little more than we might expect in the movies. I'm happy to hear more discussion/opinions about this matter. If the general consensus is that the language is too rough, I will review the chapter once more of course  :^^spike

About the gangs attitude towards Rhett. You are correct that their reactions are, frankly speaking, quite over the top and extreme. Believe me, I've had a rather lengthy discussion with my proofreader about this matter, mostly because he found it hard to accept that Ali who is among the most compassionate characters of the LBT cast would agree to such a plan. I agree that the gang are too harsh on Rhett but please rest assured. I have scenes planned in the near future that will address this "misbehavior" of them (I cannot really say more because saying any more would probably be spoiler territory  :opetrie ). And to explain why they are acting like that towards Rhett, you've got to consider their situation. You said it yourself that Rhett is extremely obnoxious and I would add to that that he is quite toxic and even dangerous, given his qualities as a bully and his absurd mindset.
Littlefoot and Ali thoroughly hate Rhett at this point for how he is getting inbetween the relationship that just blossomed between them and this hate is blinding them to some extent. This hate goes to a lesser extend for the rest of the gang but their loyalties are pretty strong. They're pushing each other during that conversation, failing to realize that what they are suggesting might be a little too harsh (not that Rhett would care in their position). Some sort of gang mentality (no pun intended) is quickly developing and nobody spares a result for Rhett's future as a result. It is pretty hard to feel any empathy towards someone who is acting the way Rhett does, which seems beyond redeemable at this point. Therefore, I believe, while certainly extreme and uncalled for, the gang are not acting out of character given the situation they're placed in but certainly it is not behavior you would expect of them. As I said, you would do me wrong to assume I haven't considered it and I can assure you that the gang and particularly our two flatheads will realize soon enough that they've gone too far.  :^^spike (and, without saying too much, Rhett might not be as irredeemable as it currently seems either. I'm all prepared to do some serious character development  ;)Cera )

Again, I'd like to hear more opinions and responses to this because I'm really curious if my line of thinking is wrong or not. Just place yourself in this situation. What would you do? Think about it. I would totally do it like Littlefoot and Ali but realize later that it's shit once my anger is gone  :p

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Despite these issues I mentioned, it is once again a pleasure to see you continue this story and like I said, the future installments will no doubt be very intriguing as we finally get to see the confrontation come to light between Littlefoot and Rhett. The loser of that fight will be in a rock and a hard place, and I hate to think of the implications for the individual whom suffers this fate in the end. Very nice job, Ducky! :)littlefoot
Well said  :)littlefoot I can only second the the next chapter will be extremely intriguing. Either Littlefoot or Rhett will go through hell soon enough. Or both?  :bestsharptooth I'd better not wait another 2 months huh?

Anyway, thanks for the honest and thorough review, I'm more than happy to hear your reply and I'm happy that you liked the developments regardless of the issues you pinpointed because, in the end, that is the most important for me, yep yep yep  :lol
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This was in many ways a rather strange chapter. What I mean by that is that the plot developments left me with a mixed feeling just about how probable they’d be in a story like this, namely the challenge itself and the later plotting inside the Gang. While the writing and dialogue mostly worked, there are somethings I’d like to mention.

The beginning of this chapter was quite intense as Rhett’s ultimatum to Littlefoot raised the stakes quite drastically. However, I’d never see him actively threatening to kill Littlefoot but then again, my opinion of him in this story is quite clear. What bugged me more was that I started to wonder why Littlefoot ever accepted the challenge. After all, neither he nor Ali cared about this tradition so they could have just rejected the offer and beaten Rhett up together if he got violent. I never got over this question.

As for the latter parts of this chapter, the dialogue inside the Gang worked quite well and it was quite fun to hear all of their ideas on how to deal with the longneck. You gave that discussion quite a lot of depth and I enjoyed that scene quite a lot. I have to second Anagnos’ concerns about the swear words the Gang uses as well as their willingness to actually hurt Rhett. However, the latter part could be possible in this situation so it’s okay.

As for the next chapter, it’s practically certain Rhett will be bested quite handily with the Gang’s plot unless he’s planning on playing dirty as well. In any case, it’s clear that the next chapter will be an intense one and whatever is going to happen, I’m sure it will be a gamechanger for this story. But for now, this chapter built solid foundations for what’s to come. :)




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Thank you very much for the review, Sovereign  :duckyhappy

I'm very glad to hear that you, too, have rather enjoyed the developments and particularly the interactions within the gang  :^^spike

You are wondering why Littlefoot accepted and that's a good point. I'm not sure if Littlefoot would really act like this to be honest but I have a few possible reasons for his behavior to make sense in the circumstances of this story.

First of all, as you can clearly tell, I've been working towards this Rhett vs. Littlefoot situation all the time. It's no real spoiler that they will fight in the next chapter. I needed a reason for them to fight because, as you said, Littlefoot might not be the type to look for a confrontation if it can be solved by other means. You could perfectly argue that the fight can be prevented but then all the build-up would be for nothing, wouldn't it? So why did Littlefoot accept?

1. Perhaps the most important and immediate reason why Littlefoot accepts is because he wants to protect Ali as Rhett corners both of them. Littlefoot is afraid of Rhett becoming violent towards him and possibly Ali to obtain the latter if he declines. He does not know how Rhett would react (Violence? Teasing/Mocking? A "I'll have Ali all to myself anyway as soon as we're gone" response? (out-of-character for the Rhett of this story)) so he does the best thing to make sure that he and Ali can escape from Rhett unscathed in this cornered situation. You suggest that they could have ganged up on Rhett to drive him away but, aside from this being quite out of character for Ali in particular, Rhett is also far from a dog who only barks in this story. You'll have to wait a while to learn about the backstory I forged for him (nobody has done that before AFAIK) but rest assured that he is quite capable of taking on Littlefoot and Ali at the same time and emerging victorious since neither of them know how to fight while he certainly does. It is therefore the best option for Littlefoot to accept (regardless of his actual intentions)

2. This is an additional point that coincides with 1. He wants to buy time to discuss the situation with Ali and his friends and review his options. You could argue that they should have fetched their folks to sort this out and prohibit Rhett from taking action. As a matter of fact that would have been the best way to sort this out. However, the story would be a lot more boring if that happened, wouldn't it? Certainly, it would be more in-character for Littlefoot trying to resolve the problem in a more diplomatic manner but to make sure that the conflict reaches a good and thrilling climax I decided that Littlefoot would accept the challenge.

3. This is probably the weakest and most arguable reason but Littlefoot simply hates Rhett. He has suffered greatly from Rhett's stalking, his harassment and for ruining his first romantic experience. Therefore, his reasoning is somewhat limited as his mind is clouded by his anger and he makes this decision without pondering about alternatives (as mentioned above).

4. This is a more indirect influence but one I think could be very well possible. Littlefoot is in a pre-pubescent age, the Time of Great Growing already in its early stages. I'm placing the gang and him at about 10-11 years of age during the TV show (an estimate after analyzing the events of the sequels) so we can assume that Littlefoot is around 11-12 years old as are Ali and Rhett. While he still has a childish mind, he is beginning to feel the effects of the hormones that help kickstarting his puberty. He already begins to view Ali as his future partner (even if this hasn't reached his mind yet) and thus a set of male instincts (which are the reason why longnecks are fighting over females in some sort of tradition) are influencing Littlefoot. He subconsciously wants to prove himself and he wants to protect the girl he has chosen from another male.

While we're talking about the tradition, he indeed doesn't care about it at all and therefore has no plans to stick to the rules that accompany it. Nevertheless, he accepts because.

1. Rhett wouldn't leave them alone unless drastic sanctions for Rhett would be put in place (as I said, too boring for the story)

2. If Littlefoot's far fetched plan actually works, he would have found a way to keep Rhett away from Ali even during her travels. Since Rhett is a keen believer of the traditions, it might be the only way that he would actually accept the loss of Ali’s heart to Littlefoot.

Which brings us to 5.

The biggest issue for Littlefoot, perhaps, is that he cannot prevent Rhett from doing as he pleases once Ali's herd sets out on their migration again. Therefore, he has a special motivation to do something about that. As mentioned above, Rhett would back down upon a loss he considers rightful and fair. It is for vain since neither party plans to play fair but he still wants to beat him somehow. And since that is rather unlikely at best, he uses his wit to come up with his devious plan to trick Rhett...

I hope this lengthy response doesn't bother you. I think Littlefoot's most likely behavior is likely somewhere between what I wrote in the chapter and what you suggested in your review.

I certainly hope that the path I have chosen will not disappoint  :^^spike

PS: I almost forgot to mention something. While the plot is about the gang helping Littlefoot in the fight, Littlefoot absolutely refuses any direct help from them. I've tried to point that out quite clearly in the chapter. In Littlefoot's opinion, he should be fighting Rhett on his own, only asking for some support because he knows that he is too weak. Since the fight has nothing to do with his friends, he doesn't want them to take on Rhett actively (with the risk of them getting hurt) but help from afar. I hope you'll like my ideas and the way they'll be worked into the narrative  :^^spike
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The time has come guys... Littlefoot or Rhett, find out in 13k words who will be victorious at the end of the chapter  :lol

(Do I need to mention that there will be language unsuitable for children and young teens as well as considerable violence in this chapter?  :thinking  :opetrie  :olittlefoot  :sducky


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Chapter 7: Rhett vs. Littlefoot

A slight breeze touched his skin. Rhett looked into the evening sky, where he could see it peeking through the trees left and right of him at least. Some harmless clouds were floating gently across, seeming to be as if they had no burdens to carry at all. It was unusually quiet too where he decided to take a nap earlier after having a large pile of treestars for lunch. In many ways, it was like the calm before the storm came rushing in with its full brutality. It summed up Rhett’s situation perfectly and, while he didn’t mind the calm atmosphere around him, he only truly lived once the storm would arrive. He was fairly certain that he was built to prosper under its harsh conditions yet a grain of doubt remained. Would the storm play along with his rules or would it do as it pleased, stabbing him in the back when he was expecting it the least?

“All nonsense, I’ll win no matter what he tries to pull on me…” Honestly speaking, Rhett was all in favor of him breaking the rules just so he could look at Ali’s horrified expression when he’d repeatedly kick the pathetic boy she’d chosen in his bloody, unrecognizable face… Yes, surely it’d come down to that and even if Littlefoot played this game fairly, Rhett just knew how to torture him and Ali likewise while entertaining himself to the fullest…

As he was indulged in his fantasies and theories about beating up his opponent, and small figure took a seat on a tree above him with watchful eyes.

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It was about thirty minutes from sunset when Littlefoot and Ali met up at the girl’s nest. Ali had reported the events of the day to her mother already who clearly seemed to be in a foul mood when Littlefoot came charging in, sprinting all the way to her nest after his grandparents had kept him back for a while to have dinner with them - which was something he had been planning to do all along as he’d skipped lunch and needed the strength later but yet it seemed like time was running twice as fast due to his constant nervosity. There were many things that could go wrong after all.

“Hey Ali, shall we go?” he panted once he came to a standstill in front of the girl he loved.

“Sure,” Ali replied and without further notice, the two jogged away to make their way up the steep walls of the Valley.

“What’d your mother say, Ali?” he eventually interrogated once the forest the herd resided in was out of hearing range.

“Well, I didn’t tell her of the actual plan we have of course but she’d have preferred if you just let the grown-ups handle things with Rhett instead of fighting him…”

“Well, if it lead to any tangible results, I wouldn’t mind going that route myself but that’s all but wishful thinking now. We’re as prepared as we could be… we’ve just gotta hope that things play out in our favor in the end,” Littlefoot said, slightly out of breath due to the demanding ascend.

“Yeah…” Ali sighed.

Much to their delight, Rhett wasn’t present when they arrived but Cera was already digging a sizable hole just between a group of trees with great dedication under the instruction of Ruby who had placed as many snapping shells as she could carry in a pile next to her.

“Let me help you!” Ali called but Ruby quickly shrugged her off.

“If you’re dirty with mud, Rhett is going to be wondering why you’re dirty with dirt so don’t help us or you’ll get dirty, okay?”

Ali supposed that there was no fault with the fastrunner’s reasoning so she halted in her movement and began aiding Littlefoot in walking around the area to look for possible ways to exploit their surroundings and, as soon as Ducky and Spike arrived around sunset, she helped the swimmer to stock up on berries that contained a sticky, gooey juice and those tree sweets which had a tremendously hard shell. Just when dusk began to roll in, the sound of pesky insects indicated that Chomper had managed to find some buzzy stingers after all. Throwing as many leaves and grass as they could onto the trap, they somehow managed to avoid getting stung by the insects (largely because Chomper ate most of those that had escaped) and hide the trap so well that even Littlefoot had to double check before he realized where it was, memorizing its position well to exploit it during battle. Cera and Spike had prepared a strong and thick vine between a group of trees with lots of bushes to hide in while Ruby had added a few smaller rocks and pebbles to her arsenal, hiding it all behind a large boulder from where she had a good overview of the designated battlefield, and she even managed to retrieve a few anti-bleeding leaves just in case they’d be needed. Chomper, meanwhile, had chosen a hollow log which was so old and hollow in fact that the wood would break as soon as he rammed his thick skull through the ceiling, hopefully creating a surprise for Rhett he surely wouldn’t like…

As the last light of the day vanished, Petrie finally arrived with the news that Rhett would arrive soon. Everyone wished Littlefoot the best before they took their positions, well hidden in the dark of the quickly spreading night. Rhett would regret choosing the nighttime very soon, Littlefoot noted while grimacing. Ali stood next to him in a supportive manner as they dreadfully waited for Rhett to arrive. There was no going back now and, slowly, Littlefoot began to wonder what had bitten him when he agreed to his own plan but now he had no choice but to stick with it and show more courage than he actually felt in his heart…

“Remember how much you hate him,” Ali whispered quietly into his ear when she noticed the mental state her love was caught in. “Don’t worry for a second, only focus on how much you hate him. It’ll make you stronger if you think like that, see?”

“R-right, you’re right,” Littlefoot said, taking a deep breath and seeking support in Ali’s neck which calmed him down enough to be able to focus on what was important. “Right… we’ll show this insolent idiot!”

“Much better,” Ali smiled, snuggling up to the boy. Whispering, she added. “I’ll give you something very special once this is over, okay?” And with these words, she licked across his cheek again. It was just in time as the sounds of distant, quickly approaching footsteps reached their ears just then as the Night Circle began to rise on the horizon.

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Rhett could only smile as he saw the two longnecks appear in front of his eyes when the designated battlefield slowly came into view. There had been a small chance that Littlefoot wouldn’t have the courage to face him after all, ruining all his anticipation in the process but, thankfully, it hadn’t come to that. Littlefoot was standing in front of him, his eyes and his posture radiating off hate and determination to win. The boy was grateful to be greeted in such a manner, given that it’d make this fight worthwhile and memorable at least to a certain degree. It sure wouldn’t be boring if that pathetic idiot gave his all to stop him, even if it’d turn out to be an effort wasted in the end for there simply wasn’t any chance he’d actually lose to such a wimp; or was there? No, he was simply too awesome and skilled to lose to a rookie in battle whose determination to achieve his goals was simply too weak and his body too frail to keep up with his ambitions.

Yes, he, Rhett, would win this struggle for Ali’s sake as well as his own.

“Nice guts, Littlefoot, Ali. You really came here after all…” he sneered once they were face to face, confidence radiating off him while Ali was clearly displaying fear and Littlefoot looked as if he couldn’t wait for their fight to commence. “I suppose there’s no need for further words, is there?”

“We’ve talked plenty,” Littlefoot said through gritted teeth.

“That’s right!” Rhett exclaimed with a laugh. “Let’s settle this with the power of our muscles until one shall grovel before the other!”

“Let’s do this!” Littlefoot shouted, trembling as he felt his rage, fueled by his feelings for Ali, seep through his whole body, embedding every muscle with much needed strength.

“Ali, step aside and give the signal,” Rhett ordered. “Once you do, I’ll prove to you how worthy I truly am of being the one to walk at your side!”

“Tsk,” Littlefoot snorted.

“There is nothing left to prove but the depth of your idiocy,” Ali said coldly, stepping back and coming to a halt in the small opening that lead to the ledge where she’d spent the previous night with Littlefoot stargazing. Funny how fast things could change. Inhaling, she exclaimed.

“May the better longneck win. Start!”

*

One last time, Littlefoot saught eye-contact with his enemy, Rhett, who was clearly looking down on him in entertainment, yet he could tell that he didn’t take this lightly either.

“Rhett, I see you’re prepared but are you prepared to learn the difference between strength fueled by love and your strength originating from your desire and greed? Well, I’m going to show you with everything I’ve got that Ali doesn’t belong anywhere near you!”

Gritting his teeth, Littlefoot reinforced his footing, ready to charge.

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“I wonder how long he can keep up a fight?” Rhett wondered as he mustered his opponent in a disparaging manner. Naturally, for the sake of his own entertainment as well as to break the insolent flathead’s will, he didn’t plan to secure his victory in a swift manner. Rather, he would make sure the boy would walk through hell before he’d unleash his full power and destroy him utterly lest he becomes an obstacle ever again. Not only him but Ali too; he’d have to break her resistance as well and there was no better way than to demonstrate the difference in strength in the most imposing, most impressive and least destructive manner; that was until Littlefoot would break.

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Littlefoot’s gaze wandered over to Ali as the girl overlooked the two combatants. Their eyes met for a brief second before Ali finally gave the signal with a pained expression.

“I mustn’t waste any time; gotta start strong to stop Rhett from taking the lead!”

Without hesitation and in spite of his lack of actual experience, Littlefoot rammed his feet into the ground to gain speed. He wouldn’t hold back against Rhett, disregarding everything for the sake of getting back at the boy who tried to separate him from Ali even if it was a futile attempt. Knowing though that he had an ace up his sleeve, he could charge in recklessly without having to worry about the consequences of the fight.

“I’ll make you pay for what you’ve done to us!!!” the purple-gray longneck cried as he entered a mad sprint, aiming to crash right into his opponent but Rhett only laughed and jumped out of the way just in time.

“Charging at me blindly without thinking, are we?” he teased as Littlefoot aimed for the next tree, planning to use it as a tool to change direction abruptly and preserve most of his momentum. “Such foolish actions will surely lead to my victory!” With those words, he entered a sprint himself, accelerating much faster than Littlefoot ever could. By the time he jumped at the tree, Rhett was already right behind him and, before he could fling his body back towards Rhett, Littlefoot felt pain erupt in his flank as the beige-coloured longneck thrust his knees right into him, smacking him against the tree and pinning him there.

“You’re so weak that it’s agonizing!” he laughed with a mad expression. “At least show me what you’ve got before I’ll utterly crush you, fool!”

“Crap, this backfired badly!” Littlefoot panicked as he tried not to lose himself in his rage and keep his thinking rational. It was one of the things Cera had taught him, although he could tell from experience that the threehorn had never been one to practise this during their many square-offs in the past. Right now, what he needed the most was to struggle free and Rhett had given him just the push he needed to get his rage under control and turn it into controlled, calculated strength rather than blind anger that’d lead him astray.

“Watch this, asshole.”

Suddenly, Littlefoot used his tail in one swift movement to slap Rhett’s feet who lost his footing in surprise. Littlefoot quickly regained his own footing now that he wasn’t being pushed against the rough bark of a tree anymore and, before Rhett could recover, he charged. Upon the impact, Rhett fell and tumbled over. Carried by his own motion, he too lost his footing as he stumbled over the boy clumsily, ending up on top.

“Eat dirt!” he yelled before launching an array of kicks with his forelegs, Rhett only being able to dodge a few of them as he struggled to push his opponent off him.

“Show him!” Ali yelled from the distance as she observed the fight take place, unable to do anything but observe and support Littlefoot with everything she got.

“Don’t worry, Ali, I will!” Littlefoot thought as he landed yet another punch though Rhett was moving his neck in quick succession to avoid most of the impacts while wearing a distorted expression. Clearly, he hadn’t expected to be put in a pinch so soon and it made him mad.

*crash*

In the blink of an eye, Littlefoot’s head exploded with pain as Rhett landed a well executed headbutt out of nowhere, stunning Littlefoot which gave him enough time to free himself. With a demonstration of his strength, he threw the other longneck off him where he landed in the dirt ungently.

“Nice try, Littleneck. I’ll take control of this fight from now on!” And before Littlefoot could recover, Rhett was upon him, issuing kicks all over his body in quick succession but refraining from pinning him again. Littlefoot frowned and winded to avoid the worst, waiting for a chance to strike back and regain his footing. Rhett’s kicks surely hurt but it didn’t take him long to realize.

“He’s toying with me; he’s not even trying to hurt me or trying to win for that matter…” Seemingly, as he began to use his legs to block the incoming kicks only to get his face slapped by Rhett’s tail in return, Rhett wasn’t trying to end this fight quickly which left only one possible conclusion.

“He wants to wear me out and trample me only once I’m tired and beat. Also, he wants to humiliate me but he’s not achieving anything with this! No, he’s just making me more angry and stronger… yes, let him do this for now while I prepare my next move!”

*

“What the hell is he even doing…” Cera felt like headbutting the nearest tree but that would surely expose her presence on this battlefield. Hadn’t she taught Littlefoot how to fight well? Right now, it seemed like Rhett had gotten the upper hand and way too easily and quickly too. Littlefoot was already stuck on the ground for more than two minutes now, constantly taking the beige-coloured longneck’s assaults with only crude and half-hearted defense. Just what was the stupid flathead thinking?!

*

“As expected, Rhett is really stronger than him…” Ali muttered as she continued to monitor the fight which was surprisingly boring and one-sided now and much less ferocious than she’d expected. Littlefoot didn’t put up much of a fight at this point despite his claims to take all measures in order to win against Rhett, risking injury in the process but, right now, none of that was showing.

“Littlefoot, don’t give up!!!” she yelled in an attempt to wake him up but Ali didn’t realize yet that she had greatly underestimated the boy she loved…

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“Just how much longer is he going to keep this up?”

Several minutes had passed and, while the number of bruises was slowly growing, Littlefoot didn’t feel affected in his agility at all, merely preserving his own strength until Rhett would get careless or impatient. That would be when he’d use the opening to launch a merciless assault, however Rhett didn’t seem to be ready to change his pattern at all, still wearing that smug expression he wanted to wipe from his face so desperately...

“If I wait for an eternity, he’ll still have the advantage after all even if I play along with his little game. Therefore, I should take matters into my own hands and create that opening myself!” With great resolve, Littlefoot prepared his words carefully.

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“Geez, to think he’d just let me punch him like that… did he see through me?” Rhett frowned as he repeatedly struck the boy with his tail though without the intent to cause injury. Yet. Humiliation was his primary goal for now, however, that insolent flathead endured it without a complaint, without much resistance whatsoever safe for self-defense. Had he already broken him? No, he could tell that he was trembling with rage, his eyes lit up with a fire that made him a little worried.

“If he’s not showing the true extent of his strength, then perhaps I should just crush him right now?” However, that was when Littlefoot raised his voice.

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“Did anyone ever tell you that you fight like a girl, Rhett?” Littlefoot announced with a bold voice, noting with pleasure that Rhett froze a little. “How do you want to defeat me without the resolve to win? Fight me seriously, you weakling!”

“Shut up!” Rhett froze, anger disturbing his controlled and calm mind as Littlefoot, for the first time ever, switched roles with him. How dare he tease the great Rhett? He’d regret ever taking such a step immediately!

“Very well, let’s stop this game of pretend and fight serio…”

*smack*

In a swift and powerful movement his dad once taught him, Littlefoot rammed his leg skywards right into Rhett’s face, who staggered from the ferocity of the attack. Not giving the boy any time to recover, Littlefoot landed a quick succession of tail whips, driving Rhett towards the nearby rock wall.

“NOT ON MY WATCH!!!” Rhett screamed, attempting to charge but Littlefoot felt a power unlike anything he’d ever felt through him as he began to take the upper hand, ramming Rhett repeatedly to drive him back until he finally managed to push him against the rock wall. Now, Rhett had nowhere to go.

“Insolent dumbass!!!” Rhett raged but Littlefoot held control for now.

“You’re the ass around here, Rhett!” he barked, his emotions boiling up. “I’ll show you!”

“OH YEAH?” Rhett screamed, desperately kicking his legs in order to struggle free.

“It’s pointless now, I won’t let go until you acknowledge Ali and me! Surrender or feel the pain you’ve inflicted on us!"

“Pah! You’re one to talk, Littleneck! Soon, I’ll reduce you to a bloody piece of meat!”

“I wanna see you try, asshole!” As he said this, Littlefoot landed a fierce headbutt only for Rhett to return the favor just as ferociously. It was a battle of wills and insults.

“You little dumbfuck, I’LL CRUSH YOU!!!” Rhett cried while wrestling with Littlefoot who didn’t give in.

“You’re all talk, you can’t even break free, weakling!”

Rhett froze again which earned him another painful headbutt, followed by a powerful kick to the stomach which made him wince.

“SHUT UP!!!”

“Guess I hit a nerve,” Littlefoot noted with satisfaction, landing more hits on Rhett who seemed to by more focussed on keeping his face in their verbal exchange for now.

“Oh, did that hurt?” he asked, releasing the pin while Rhett was stunned from another powerful kick and switching into full assault on the boy who had caused him and Ali so much pain. He could hear Ali cheering for him loudly, Rhett flinching and wincing as he punished him for his offenses.

“FEEL OUR PAIN, RHETT!!!” he cried as he worked himself into blind rage, striking without aim, simply trying to cause as much damage as he could to Rhett who merely shielded his face from the array of attacks hailing down onto him.

“ALI. CHOSE. ME!!!” Littlefoot scolded, underlining each word with a tailwhip so powerful that it threw Rhett completely to the ground, panting in exertion but not willing to stop before he’d get enough retribution for his insolence.

“YOU UGLY BASTAAAAAARRRRRD!!!” Rhett cried in pain as he tried to get back to his feet after those heavy blows. “YOU’RE A DISGRACE OF A LONGNECK!!! SOMEONE LIKE YOU SHOULDN’T BE ALLOWED TO MATE WITH FEMALES AT ALL!!!”

“SAYS THE ONE NOT EVEN RESPECTING FEMALES!!!” Littlefoot shot back.

“THAT’S PRECISELY WHY YOU’RE SUCH A D…” but Littlefoot charged so fiercely into Rhett, pinning him once more against the wall that he couldn’t finish his insult.

“Give up or I’ll hurt you!” Littlefoot threatened, even pinning Rhett’s head to the wall but that was, to everyone’s surprise, when a wicked smile appeared on the boy’s face.

“Give up? Hahaha, good joke. I think it's about time I stopped toying with you indeed… " Without hesitations, Rhett increased his strength twofold and easily freed himself from his opponent who fell on his back in utter surprise.

"Shit, he's getting serious now!” Littlefoot cursed, immediately realizing that he was in big trouble now. It simply had been too easy thus far to keep up with the more muscular and experienced longneck. It went without having to raise the thought that he’d have to give his everything from now on lest his resistance died down prematurely but already Rhett’s first serious counterattack was so ferocious and well aimed that he was losing a little faith in his chances to win this fight without the help of his friends. He hardly had enough time to react when he saw the attack coming, failing to protect his well exposed chest. Immediately when Rhett’s fierce kick hit, every ounce of air was being knocked out of his system and the boy collapsed with a pained sigh awfully akin to suffocating sounds.

“This is the true difference of strength between you and me, you bloody piece of shit!” Rhett proclaimed triumphantly as he stepped on Littlefoot’s stomach but the boy didn’t make the same mistake again. Before Littlefoot could recover, Rhett initiated his next attack, using his muscular tail to whip a little sense into Littlefoot’s exposed flank, strike upon strike smashing into the purple-grey longneck who tried to take the beating without crying out in pain. Giving Rhett that kind of satisfaction just wouldn’t do but he had to admit, quite grudgingly so, that he was completely unable to do anything against this series of attacks no matter how hard he tried to get back up, much to Rhett’s pleasure.

“I’ll crush you now, loser!” he announced in a voice mimicking a hatchling, making painfully sure not to launch any attacks that would lead to serious injury and incapacitate the insolent flathead but strong and fierce enough to keep him from getting to his feet and cause him maximal pain - well, that was for now; of course he did intend to hurt him eventually. He deserved no less than that in his book.

Littlefoot continued to tank a lot of damage from Rhett, kicks to his stomach and powerful slaps from Rhett’s tail hailing upon him ever so violently. It took him a lot of willpower to remain silent and to stop himself from crying out in pain. In addition to that, Ali’s constant pleas for him to rise and right back physically hurt somewhere deep in his chest, fueling up his rage slowly but certainly. In spite of this surge of power and aggression, he couldn’t manage to break free and if this trend continued, he might have to rely on his friends much earlier than he wanted to; before he could beat the heck out of Rhett until he was tired of doing so at least. Right now, however, Rhett was making painfully sure to fight him awfully close to where Ali was standing, preventing Littlefoot from escaping and forcing Ali to watch her love getting beat up in all glorious detail. The positions where his friends hid, waiting to take action and interfere with this battle upon his signal, were far away from the rock wall in the bushes and trees. Though he’d prefer to put up a bit more of a fight before he’d have to resort to use them. Slowly, his anger rose to a very high level again as his whole body ached from the bruises all over his body, caused by Rhett’s unrelentless attacks. Ali’s desperate screams were beginning to make him turn a blind spot to his pain and the damage he was receiving. He didn’t want her to feel terrible like this so he made a resolve.

“Enough, I must fight back no matter what! I mustn’t let Ali watch this until I’m too weak to respond… Rhett, that bastard… I’m not done with you yet…”

Littlefoot was gathering all of his strength, watching Rhett’s attack pattern observantly until a brief opening popped up.

“Now! Take this!”
He was timing his counterattack perfectly as Rhett took a quick sneer at Ali who glared back so fiercely that one would think she’d jump at Rhett any second now, hating the beige-coloured longneck at least as much as Littlefoot did at the moment. He shot forward like a spear from his ducked position, ramming into Rhett’s legs which gave in due to the unexpected pressure but he reacted quickly, stopping Littlefoot with a headbutt, frowning.

“So you can still fight, amateur?”

Littlefoot didn’t answer but put all his strength into holding his ground against Rhett who was attempting to push him against the wall again. Slowly but surely, he felt his power drained from him as he had to use all of his strength just to keep Rhett where he was. Judging from Rhett’s frown slowly turning into mild amusement, it was clear that he was testing the limits of his strength once more and Littlefoot had fallen right into his trap.

“How much longer do you want to get your ass kicked, loser? Isn’t it about time you surrendered to me?” Rhett bragged, slowly beginning to increase the pressure. Littlefoot was able to withhold but for how much longer? Certainly, though, he hadn’t lost his spirit yet.

“Sounds like someone is afraid of losing!” he blurted out between ragged breaths. “If you don’t finish this soon, I might just win, Rhett!”

“Tsk, ridiculous!” Rhett laughed. “Don’t you realize how retarded you sound? But good… luck…. trying!” Without warning, Rhett pushed with all his might. Littlefoot didn’t have any reserve strength to call and felt himself being pushed away like a heavy boulder, somersaulting when he hit the ground again. It was a perfect, intimidating demonstration of the brute strength Rhett possessed but clearly hadn’t used yet. But why though, Littlefoot wondered? By now, he should have gotten just about enough humiliation out of him who had largely been on the receiving end and Ali, who was watching the scene unfold in clear shock, even forgetting to cheer him on. As he scrambled back to his feet, half expecting to be rammed in the guts before he got a chance to do so, he realized with surprise that Rhett didn’t charge in but circled him with a vicious expression.

“I can see on your face that you’re scared, Littleneck!” he called with a victorious expression. Littlefoot couldn’t deny that he was impressed by the toss, however he’d never admit that in such a situation.

“Want me to back out again, Rhett? I’m not thinking about it!” he answered in a loud yell. “I won’t back out until one of us is unable to fight! Keep this up and the Bright Circle will be back before we’re done!”

“Fine by me!” Rhett declared with a shrug. “But tell me, rockhead, most opponents I fought gave up quickly when they realized they were weak! But you keep on rising even though you already look like a bunch of Sharpteeth played a game of Toss the Seed using you!” Littlefoot reckoned that this description mightn’t be too far from reality but what was Rhett aiming at?

“Is Ali really that important to you?! Is it not clear that you’ll never succeed here? Don’t you get it that she’s MINE?! Just fuck off, will you?”

Littlefoot stared at Rhett, wondering whether to be offended or amused about this turn of events while constantly keeping watch in case Rhett tried to charge again.

“Of course she’s that important to me; isn’t this why you called this fight in the first place, idiot?! I could ask you the same thing, you know? You must be extremely dense if you think Ali will accept you, ever!”

“That’s right!” Ali declared proudly from her position at the edge of the battlefield.

“See? Will you finally give up, Rhett? You’re walking on a path to nowhere! You’re a senseless idiot with no friends who pretends to be super amazing and all when you’re just a poor dumbwit with a hang for violence and a very poor understanding of the thing you desire! It’s not Ali you desire; you don’t even care about her and you would beat her up too if it’d make her obedient, wouldn’t you?”

“Loser, you’re the dumb witted individual around here!” Rhett argued promptly, spitting in Ali’s direction for her intervention. “I AM amazing, you’re pathetic. Understand that before we can talk on the same level.”

“Whahaha, who believes that anyway?” Littlefoot taunted in a short-lived fit of laughter which made Rhett’s facade darken. “Would you hurt her for the sake of making her what you say? Answer me, you irredeemable douchebag!”

“Of course I would!!! Ali doesn’t know what’s good for her! She’s been spoiled ever since meeting you and I shall lead her away from your underwhelming existence with my awesomeness! If it means applying force, I will apply force to achieve that goal!”

Littlefoot felt his body twitch and before he knew it, he had charged blindly at Rhett who swiftly outmaneuvered him with a cackling grin on his face.

“Pathetic…” he described the forceful but uncoordinated and badly planned assault. Littlefoot scuffed and resumed the mutual circling and preying game once more.

“You don’t understand ANYthing, Rhett! Is this what you call love!? Answer me, son of a tar pit!”

“Right back at you, offspring of a bunch of retards…” he sneered, taking notice of Littlefoot stiffening up at this particular insult. “Love, isn’t it?” he laughed in disgust. “My idiotic friend, I believe you need to be taught a lesson about the meaning of that word. Love… it’s the greatest weapon to keep the Circle of Life running. It only serves one purpose - to generate worthless offspring the likes of you. It’s just a tool to make females fart out some eggs to keep our kind, most fabulous of them all, from perishing. That’s really all there is. Don’t tell me you didn’t know this? Haha, some wimps you got for parents if they haven’t taught you that…”

Littlefoot’s body twitched once more but this time he managed just barely to hold back his energy.

“One more time, Rhett, and I’ll personally throw you from that ledge over there…” he thought, shaking with wrath. It was a good thing that Rhett wasn’t aware of what he was digging into with these low insults because he didn’t bring any more of them.

Meanwhile, Ali stood rooted at the spot with her mouth agape in shock. It wasn’t like she hadn’t known Rhett’s mindset at all but hearing those words out of his mouth made something break inside of her.

“You’re... “ Littlefoot growled, slowly brewing his anger until he found the right mixture. “YOU’RE UNWORTHY OF EVER GETTING INVOLVED WITH EGGS! WHAT THE HECK ARE YOU EVEN THINKING?! I DO NOT EVER WANT YOU NEAR ALI EVER AGAIN!!!”

“I second that!!!” Ali yelled, finding her voice again.

“SHADDDDUUUUUUPPP!!! Rhett screamed.

“I might as well do,” Littlefoot growled, uncontained wrath turning into calculated, controlled power waiting to be propelled at the target of interest. “...for you’re so far beyond help that you couldn’t possibly understand what love truly means! Scum like you will never be loved!”

“Either way, you look like you still wanna go at it?” Rhett raised an eyebrow. “Fine, I won’t hold back anymore. You better had some ace up your sleeve or your head will be a lot flatter than it is already!”

“Answer me one last question!!!” Littlefoot demanded, almost screaming. “WHAT IS IT THAT MAKES YOU TARGET ALI? There are many longneck girls out there; can’t you just bother someone else?!”

“I could ask you the same thing, stupid boy, but I guess our answer would be the same, wouldn’t it? I’ve seen many longneck girls, unlike you, and Ali is by far the most pretty and attractive girl I’ve ever seen. Awesome parents should account to outstanding offspring but I guess as someone who is unfortunate to be blessed with underwhelming features in every regard, you wouldn’t understand this anyway? Well, whatever. I don’t care about your reasons. I only have mine and they’re superior to your lowly ones…” Rhett offered a taunting grin, almost inviting Littlefoot to charge again.

“We’ll see about that now…” Littlefoot hissed, coming to a halt and fortifying his footing in preparation for an attack which came almost immediately. Knowing he couldn’t stop Rhett in full charge, he decided to evade but Rhett was quick to turn and ended up running into him though the power of his charge had been lost. Once again, their battle was stalling in a pushing contest. Littlefoot, feeling enough anger rise inside him to take on a fully grown sharptooth at the moment, was able to keep up for a little while despite Rhett operating at full strength now.

“Go, Littlefoot, make him pay for this!” Ali cheered from the sidelines and Littlefoot felt even more power rush into his muscles. For just a brief moment, he made Rhett step back but then his body ceased to keep up with what his mind wanted to accomplish. His advance quickly halted and he soon found himself fighting on the retreat.

“Is this all you can do, eh?” Rhett barked. “You’re so weak that it physically hurts knowing scum like you even exists!”

Littlefoot tried to block out the penetrating voice and focussed entirely on fighting but it was impossible to ignore this amount of foul language directed at him in its entirety.

“Even a goddamn hornface is still worth more than you and hornfaces truly are the worst!”

Littlefoot could swear that the bush Cera was hiding in had just jerked but the threehorn was showing better self control in that situation than he was.

“SHUT UP!!!” he cried, just in that moment finding a little rock to use to fortify his footing and hold his ground against Rhett while mobilizing some extra strength from deep within. He wouldn’t be able to keep this up for much longer but at least he wanted to launch one last and powerful attack to inflict some damage and get a earn a mental victory over Rhett before his stamina would completely collapse and his great scheme would come into play at last. Defeating Rhett on his own was impossible and he knew that now with utmost certainty. Even with his friends’ help, it seemed like an impossible task now but Littlefoot was prepared to go down in glory. Panting, he tried to resist but in spite of having a rock as an additional stabilizing element, Rhett’s sheer charge unbalanced him so much that he had to give up the position which proved to be a fatal mistake. Before he knew it, he felt his ribcage ache as Rhett rammed him against the nearby rockwall using his whole body, the particularly hard and painful knees connecting exactly with the base of his neck, stealing every bit of breath, making him choke for air while yelping in terrible pain. This attack had been on a whole different level, well aimed and executed in such a speed that it was impossible to prevent the damage.

“Aww, did that hurt?” Rhett spoke up with a smirk, rejoicing in LIttlefoot’s suffering before resuming the speech. “This fight is over for you now…” Fiercely, Littlefoot felt a leg crash into his face, stunning him - the time of teasing and toying around was definitely over now, Rhett had been telling the truth for once. With a murderous expression, he took a few steps back and charged at Littlefoot who had sunken into a heap of misery while trying not to suffocate, body screaming after oxygene while his brain was on overdrive from the extreme pain sensation. Now he was fighting not to destroy Rhett but to prevent Rhett from destroying him before he could set off the traps his friends had prepared.

It was a battle for survival. Rhett didn’t grant him a single break, using his hard shoulders and knees to bruise up his flanks and legs while making sure he never got to breathe properly. Quickly, a significant amount of his skin was either sore or covered by small cuts and the underlying flesh was swelling up to form ugly, blackish-blue bruises. Rhett still didn’t inflict any truly horrifying wounds on him but, even like this, Littlefoot knew that he wouldn’t be able to hold out for much longer if the beating didn’t stop anytime soon. He’d long since given up on trying to endure it quietly, crying out with every punch, every kick, every bang when Rhett’s tail clapped against various parts of his body. Just when he was seriously beginning to ponder about admitting defeat just to stop this hell, Ali stopped crying and insulting Rhett frequently and resolved to aid her lover with a cunning maneuver, hoping Rhett wouldn’t realize what she was up to.

“Let him go, bastard!” she screamed, tears flying in all directions as she shook her head wildly in barely contained rage. It was just one of many insults she’d been throwing at Rhett within the last few minutes but this time it’d be different.

“You’ve won, okay?! He can’t get up, isn’t that the goddamn rule for this stupid tradition?!!” This was a question Rhett could hardly ignore. Ali was merely hoping that Rhett would take the bait and that Littlefoot still had enough strength left to get back up and lead Rhett towards the fortified area of the battlefield where his friends were still patiently waiting, hearing him cry in pain and seeing him suffer in the most cruel fashion.

“Only after he’s out cold or if he surrenders!!!” Rhett screeched angrily, turning his attention to the completely beat up boy again. “Yo, you have enough, retard? Want some more of... THIS?!” With tremendous force, Rhett smacked Littlefoot’s face which he had mostly spared thus far, immediately drawing blood as it came trickling from his left nostril. Pleased with the outcome he displayed a wicked grin. “Serves him right.”

“STOP IT!!!” Ali demanded, realizing that her plan might have failed though, to her utter surprise, Rhett turned his back to Littlefoot and walked a few steps towards her. With a threatening swing of his tail which barely missed the girl, he hissed.

“Watch out, Ali. You’ve heard me earlier; once I win this, I can and I will do with you want I want! Learn to respect me or suffer until you finally get the picture and abide by my w…”

*snap*

Littlefoot winced from his countless bruises, every part of his body burning as if bathing in hot water for too long, but Ali’s distraction was too good to let it pass unexploited. With tremendous effort, he heaved himself up and bit down on Rhett’s tail until the taste of blood other than that trickling from his nose filled his mouth. Quickly, he let go as his opponent drew back his tail while crying out in pain and outrage and took the opportunity to kick Rhett precisely into his butt, followed immediately by a well aimed punch into the backside of his left knee with tremendous success. Rhett collapsed like a tree in a storm, unable to use that leg for a few moments (thankfully, Cera had taught him about weak spots like that). Suddenly, Rhett lay before him, paralyzed and almost helpless. Littlefoot knew no hesitation; without mercy he penetrated every inch of Rhett’s back he could reach with his front legs until Rhett finally managed to get up and slap him across the face with his tail, causing his right nostril to start bleeding too. Quickly, he retreated a few body lengths. This was just the kind of mental victory he had been looking for; it needed no genius to tell that Rhett’s ego had taken a bad hit, the surprise sitting so deep that he hadn’t even been able to spew out insults like usual for the duration of his brief beating. However, as soon as he stood firmly on all four legs, his rage couldn’t be greater and same could be said about this mouth.

“ASSHOLE, I’LL MAKE YOU RETCH YOUR OWN BLOOD FOR THIS!!!” the beige-coloured boy screamed while shooting a murderous side glance at Ali. The girl could prepare for some serious punishment once he was done here, that much was certain… However, he hadn’t made that plan in sync with Littlefoot.

“Big words for someone who can’t even protect his own butt hole!” Littlefoot taunted, sticking out his tongue in an almost childish manner in spite of the huge pain he was feeling everywhere. “Guess you’re too big an asshole to protect it all, Rhett!”

“SCREEEEEEEEEEWWWWWW YOUUUUUUU!!!!” Rhett thundered, echoing through the whole Great Valley, seemingly which gave his words a whole new quality. “I’LL STUFF THAT MOUTH OF YOURS!!!”

“In that case, you’ll have to catch me first!!!” Littlefoot announced boldly, waving his tail while Rhett’s was leaking quite a bit of blood (Chomper would be proud of that bite, he reckoned), before entering a slow sprint (running at full speed wasn’t possible thanks to his bruises). Slowly, he felt the pain wear off just barely, however he was absolutely unable to run away from Rhett even if he sincerely attempted it. His physical condition already was too bad, his stamina almost gone and his body damaged while Rhett had hardly lost much in either category with higher stats to begin with. It was a hopeless case but that was where his friends came into play. Casting a glance into the general direction of where most of them were lying in wait to participate in this battle, Littlefoot confirmed that they were all ready. Taking a deep breath while running, he exhaled the codeword they had previously agreed on to commence the planned attacks on Rhett.

“Travelling Light!”

*

“The codeword!” Ducky hissed, grabbing a fruit with a very hard shell while Petrie next to her prepared to throw berries full of stink juice from the skies. Watching the fight between the two longnecks had been extremely painful, especially for pacifist Ducky, so they were glad that they’d finally be able to support their friend at last and, hopefully, sway the odds a bit in Littlefoot’s favor…

*

“Finally, I’m about to go crazy!”

Cera sighed with great relief as the signal rang through the cool night air at last. Being on standby while one’s friend was being abused as a living punching bag wasn’t a pleasant experience, particularly for a belligerent threehorn like her, but her mood was improving quite significantly as she pictured Rhett falling for the numerous obstacles they had planted, including Spike’s and her vine. Nodding to the spiketail, they grabbed both ends of the vine, ready to pull whenever Littlefoot would lead Rhett their way…

“I hope you’ll enjoy this, Rhett…”

*

"Come here, Rhett, I'll definitely scare you to the bones..." Chomper gritted his teeth as he practiced his scariest face. He could only hear (and smell) from his position hidden in a log and he was in a way grateful for he doubted that he could stay calm and wait while Littlefoot was beaten senseless. Of course he didn't know for sure how bad the situation for his best friend truly was, however the sounds carrying over from the battlefield and Ali's desperate cries gave him a pretty good idea of Littlefoot's condition. He could only muse as to why the longneck hadn't used them sooner but he guessed that he had truly tried his best to defeat Rhett on his own first. Either way, he hoped to get at least some entertainment out of the situation and repay Rhett a small favor for ruining their days...

*

Ruby smacked her fingers in anticipation of their coordinated indirect attack. It were moments like this when her predatory nature took over her line of thinking. Although her friends weren't always aware of it, a fastrunnner like her was quite capable of killing and right now she really wouldn't mind lashing out at the insolent longneck who had hurt her friends so much. In the end though, Ruby was just barely composed enough to stay on standby, a snapping shell firmly seated in her hand, ready to throw anytime, hoping to land a few good impacts with those shells as hard as rock. Surely a direct hit to the head would be painful, she reckoned.

"Littlefoot, lead him towards me so I can teach him a lesson, a lesson I want to teach!" Ruby begged, however her friend chose to lead Rhett into the range of Ducky's tree base... Ruby didn't mind too much as the trap they had dug was definitely in her range and surely Littlefoot wouldn't forget to lead Rhett right into the buzzy stinger hell... "

*

Rhett shot up a glance towards the night sky, there weren’t any travelling lights dancing across the sky after all. Littlefoot had already distanced himself a fair bit in the meantime. Angry, Rhett whirled around to where Ali was standing, only to be met by her devious smile. He had been had again!

“SCREW YOU!!!” he exhaled before resuming his chase, sprinting after Littlefoot at full speed and quickly gaining ground again.

*

Littlefoot noted with pleasure that Rhett had bought Ali’s distraction wholeheartedly and, apparently, he had also chosen a very fortunate code word. He definitely owed Ali a thanks for not only buying himself some more time but also, as an additional reward for the two of them working together, they had effectively ticked Rhett off which was working into their plan as well. As Littlefoot could contest from his experiences so far, his own attacks gained a lot of spice from his wrath, however they lost coordination and wit quickly when he worked himself into a rage. If Rhett was furious and heated, surely he would focus on him, try to hurt him and not pay much attention to his surroundings. Thus, or so he hoped, he wouldn’t see the traps and attacks coming and every single one would just make him more and more furious. Despite knowing that he was walking on the edge of a smoking mountain at great unrest, he was looking forward to see the spectacle unfold. Soon, he met eyes with Ducky and Petrie as he ran towards the tree they were sitting in, nodding to them. Immediately, Petrie took off and soon a bunch of berries came raining from the night sky, the flyer blending in exceptionally with the darkness, only visible as a diffuse shadow to confuse Rhett. Smacking sounds confirmed that the berries were hitting the intended target, bursting open and revealing their not-so-desirable contents…

“EWW, WHAT THE FUCK!?!?” came Rhett’s enraged cry, slowing down as the berries burst open everywhere on his body, engulfing his nose with a painfully biting stench impossible to ignore and lots of yuck sticking to his body. Due to his now reduced speed, Ducky had an easier time aiming her throw, the first fruit meeting its target, crashing into Rhett’s lower neck, causing the longneck to stagger and gasp in shock and mild pain as the object came raining down from above. Though, unable to tell where exactly the attacks were coming from, he screamed.

“ARE YOU SHITTING ME!?!?”

Ali was already laughing loudly which enraged Rhett even further, suspecting that the girl and her stupid lover were behind this. Furious, he charged again but Ducky hit his hindleg with her next fruit, making him stagger in pain once more. Curious, Littlefoot turned around to see how well things were working so far. Through his intense pain, a satisfied grin made a short appearance on his face. At this rate, he mused, he mightn’t even have to run very fast to keep ahead of Rhett if his friends continued to keep him from picking up pace. Certainly, the distraction was working well.

“YOU SET SOMETHING UP, ASSHOLE!!!” Rhett wailed as a third fruit barely missed his head, Ducky refining her aim with every fruit she tossed at the longneck. “THIS WILL HAVE CONSEQUENCES!!!” Just then, he charged into another shower of berries, some of the sticky juice now covering his nostrils, the stench causing physical pain as his sense of smell was coming under extreme torture.

“SCREW YOU, SCREW YOU, SCREEEEEEEEEEEEWWWWW Y…”

*WHAM*

The forth fruit, finally, was a full success. Rhett’s repeated standstill had allowed the swimmer to aim perfectly, the hard-shell fruit smashing into Rhett’s forehead with a resounding crack as it burst open while the boy stumbled across his own feet and crashed into a tree head-first, groaning. Littlefoot stopped his sprint to see if he could exploit this but Rhett’s blood was boiling to such an extent that any pain was merely a mild annoyance he hardly felt. Within a few seconds, he had regained his senses and came back to his feet with murderous intent.

“WAIT ‘TILL I CATCH YOU, SON OF A FUCKING TAR PIT!!!” he cried, sprinting through one last shower of Petrie’s stink-juice berries, ignoring it entirely since his sense of smell was now out cold from the overload, and ignoring another few fruits repelling from his body at various places, running into the dense parts of the forest where Littlefoot had already disappeared. Constantly taking turns and running in circles, Littlefoot attempted to confuse the stronger longneck and, as a side effect, Rhett wouldn’t be able to run at full speed if he constantly had to take sharp turns while squeezing through the gaps between the trees. Moreover, it was doing wonders against his much greater stamina which was taking a serious hit during this wild chase while Littlefoot could just barely get by with what endurance and strength he had left. Slowly, eventually, Littlefoot began aiming towards a slightly wider path which Cera, Spike and Chomper had prepared for Rhett. Lots of fun was waiting for his opponent for sure and Ruby and the trap would be just at the end of it when the path would lead back into the open. The plan was almost certain to work - he doubted Rhett would see through the trap or miss stepping into it by chance but one uncertain factor remained. Would Rhett continue to chase after him or run away in the opposite direction once Chomper made his move? Well, he supposed, he’d find out very soon.

“STOP RUNNING LIKE A GIRL YOU ROTTEN GIT!!!” Rhett panted but Littlefoot merely waved his tail and kept running. Slowly, Rhett was catching up, some worry rising in Littlefoot as his legs showed sudden signs of falling off but Chomper’s log was already firmly in sight.

“Just… a little… FURTHER!” he urged himself on, putting in some extra effort to stay just a body length in front of Rhett who was panting like a smoking mountain on a very gassy day. Finally, he reached the log just as he began to feel said breath in his neck.

“Rhett, I hope you properly enjoy this…” he thought grimly as he passed by. Just then…

*ROOOOOOAAAAAAAARRRRRRRR*

Even though he was prepared, Littlefoot still felt his heart skip a few beats as the terrifying and furious roar of Chomper split the air, shaking the nearby forest and everyone nearby. Chomper’s recent training to become more scary in preparation to leave the valley one day really paid off for them in this situation. Looking back, he saw Rhett petrifying in shock mid-sprint, thus falling to the ground face-first and eating a good amount of dirt as he slid on due to his great momentum. With a violent sound of old wood splintering into little pieces and pieces of the log raining down everywhere, Chomper emerged, whirling around with his short arms frantically while posing above Rhett right in front of the friendly sharptooth, although he certainly wasn’t acting like one right now.

Rhett, as soon as the initial shock wore off, could easily tell at this point that Littlefoot had brought his insolent friends to attack him cowardly from the shadows where he least expected it. Additionally, he could tell that it was that little biter of theirs (who had grown a little less little in the meantime) threatening him and, if their first encounter was any indication, wasn’t allowed to harm him a single bit, but, still, he didn’t like to take any chances, not when dealing with sharpteeth that was. What if Littlefoot hated him so much that he ordered that sharptooth (Chomper, wasn’t it?) to dispose of him secretly? From the corner of his eyes, he could see the predator slowly stepping closer to his poor form lying flat on the dirt, baring his teeth, growling, even salivating… Immediately, he leapt to his feet just in time before the sound of sharp teeth crashing into each other could be heard awfully close to his precious tail which had already been bitten one too many times that night. Screaming in panic, he raced after Littlefoot who was clearly pretending to be afraid, yelling for help though it didn’t even sound a little bit honest. Rhett quickly gained some distance between the sharptooth who was trampling after him with repeated roars and growls and him while gaining on Littlefoot again, his mind patterns slowly making the switch from flight to fight again. Unfortunately, he didn’t get far before he felt something thick and hard ramming into his forelegs. Abruptly, the boy found himself somersaulting a few times before coming to a halt lying on his back. Immediately, Chomper caught up, posing above the fallen longneck in a threatening manner, saliva dripping from his mouth which made him believably frightening despite his small size.

“AHH!!!” Rhett yelped, and crawled away before Chomper’s nuzzle came down, playfully of course, drilling into the dirt with great velocity, but how would Rhett know? Chomper called off the hunt at this point, though lying in wait as Rhett continued to run away like a chicken even without him chasing him around which was no longer necessary as Littlefoot was leading him straight towards the hole he had prepared with a truly tasty surprise…

“LIIIIIIITTTTTLEFOOOOOOOTTT!!!” Rhett yelled, angry beyond comprehension, charging at the purple-grey longneck in an all-or-nothing sprint who had stopping running for whatever reason, the goofy smile he wore driving him nuts.

“PERISH!!!” Rhett screamed, about to ram Littlefoot into a world full of pain when his feet hit a layer of leaves and then… nothing.”

“Wha…” Rhett yelped in confusion before he fell face-first into the trap, crashing into a hive of stinging buzzers butt-first and crushing it entirely. Immediately, Littlefoot ran for it as countless insects were rising from their former prison, their angry buzzing noice filling the air, only interrupted by Rhett’s pained cries as the buzzers attacked him in all imaginable body parts while Chomper jogged up to the scene to snack on as many of them as he could. At this point, everyone began to drop their guard as it became awfully clear that they had won this round of the battle, roaring laughter without holding anything back echoing through the nearby forest, Rhett only screaming and cursing louder inside the pit as the laughter met his ears.

“BASTARDS, now they’ve truly done it! I’ll make them pay for this and if it’s the last thing I do!!!” he decided, calming down as the number of bees injecting their poison into him slowly decreased, taking a deep breath before everything escalated. Suddenly, he didn’t feel the pain anymore, only hate, bottomless, uncontained hate remaining.

“I’ll mess up his goofy face until not even Ali can recognize it anymore! And if they interfere, I’ll give them the same treatment!!!”

In one, powerful jump, Rhett emerged from the the traphole and, immediately, the laughter ceased, Chomper retreating from the scene, smelling Rhett’s wrath and knowing he’d best refrain from getting into an actual fight with the longneck for his own sake. Meanwhile, Cera also smelled (in a figurative way of course) the extreme destruction Rhett was about to unleash - Littlefoot had indeed predicted his behavior perfectly. Rhett looked more furious than she’d ever seen her dad, which was saying quite a lot after all… Her friend was about to be attacked by a Rhett so furious that he wouldn’t care about injuring Littlefoot, which was part of the plan of course and also a correct prediction of the longneck but… still it didn’t sit well with the threehorn.

“I’ve got a bad feeling…” she thought but nonetheless allowed the following scenes to happen in order to get Rhett into deep shit. At the very least, she mused, she’d get to save Littlefoot’s butt from the annoying beige-coloured idiot which was something to look forward to, though at the price of seeing her best friend getting torn apart.

Littlefoot instinctively knew that he was about to be slaughtered by Rhett the second he emerged from the pit. Quickly, he retreated, allowing Ruby to fire snapping shells in rapid succession at Rhett, some of them smashing straight into his face but, despite drawing a fair amount of blood, the boy didn’t even falter in the slightest. His face looked truly awful, smeared in blood, berry juice, pieces of broken clam and covered all over in quickly swelling bee stings, some of the insects still chasing after him. But nothing made Rhett look as ugly as the contorted, pained expression of rage he wore.

“LITTLEFOOT, I’LL KILL YOU!!!” he roared before he entered a mad sprint, thrusting his tormented body forward towards Littlefoot as more objects came flying at him from a rock to their left but it hardly mattered. Littlefoot had turned tail of course but his speed had yet to be matched. Faster than ever, he sprinted with a strength and determination matched by no one but the sharptooth the five members of the original gang had once defeated long ago on their perilous journey to the Great Valley. The reckless power of Rhett was reminiscent of him in more than one way and the jump the raging longneck performed to bring Littlefoot down, leaping as high as his own height, seemed just as much out of this world as that of that legendary sharptooth. With incredible force, Rhett crashed belly-first onto Littlefoot’s back whose legs immediately gave in upon the ferocious impact, both longnecks tumbling to the ground as Ali uttered a terrified scream.

“Littlefoot!!!” Ali knew what stage of their plan the fight had reached now. Of course, she had agreed to it in the end but it didn’t change the fact that she didn’t want to see the dinosaur she admired getting hurt. Nevertheless, she forced herself with tremendous effort to watch it all unfold to see for herself how terrible a longneck Rhett truly was.

After a quick wrestle, Rhett gained the upper hand, managing to pin down his opponent.

“YOU BROKE THE RULES YOU FUCKING BASTARD!!!” he screamed into Littlefoot’s face who didn’t even try to struggle against Rhett’s effective pin, knowing he had a lot of pain coming his way from now on.

“I’LL KILL YOU!!!” Without hesitation, he brought one of his knees forward, ramming it with extreme force into Littlefoot’s face, repeated this procedure many time over. At first, the boy was able to avoid a few of those kneeing attacks but, after a short while, Rhett succeeded to land a critical hit. Right above the right eye, a big cut opened, spilling blood all over Littlefoot’s face. A groan was all that escaped his mouth.

“TAKE THIS YOU FUCKING ASSHOLE!!!” Rhett screeched, continuing with unrelentless punches, hammering down onto Littlefoot’s face who, at first, attempted to avoid them by constantly moving around his neck but the number of heavy blows quickly dampered his mind. Soon, he blacked out. Rhett got up as soon as he noticed it and continued to kick the poor longneck’s face, soon beginning to use his tail as well on his relentless path of destruction to make sure Littlefoot would never ever get in his way again. Littlefoot’s head was thrown left and right. By now, he was bleeding from several gashes on his head which quickly began to stain the grass in a crimson colour.

“STOP IT!!!” Ali cried, sending a begging look towards Cera as more and more blood seeped out of this wounds. Littlefoot was unable to respond to any of Rhett’s attacks and Ali could only hope that he had passed out by now lest he’d have to endure the unimaginable pain Rhett was putting him through.

“Don’t worry, I’ll kick his butt for this with all I’ve got, Ali,” Cera thought grimly while jumping out of her hideout and hauling her sturdy body towards Rhett who was too caught up in his assault to notice her speedy approach until it was too late. Lowering her head, Cera rammed at full speed into Rhett’s unprotected flank, her nose horn leaving a bloody mark as it stabbed into the longneck, catapulting him away from Littlefoot. Immediately, everybody else raced to the scene to back Cera up.

Rhett screamed in fury, getting up and trying to charge at the threehorn but Ali had closed in the distance and, with an angry swing of her tail, she chopped away Rhett’s legs who fell in the dirt in front of the threehorn looking down onto the violent longneck.

“You know, Rhett, I agree that Littlefoot is worse than a threehorn like me, from my perspective that is, but you’re scum worse than an eggstealer! Attack one of my friends ever again and you won’t be using that foul mouth of yours in a long, long time…”

“YOU ROTTEN B...” Rhett exhaled, angry enough to ignore the threat entirely but when Chomper arrived at the scene, making attempts to bite off his tail, Rhett bolted.

“Works everytime…” Chomper commented in a gruff voice when he got a closer look at Littlefoot, Ruby already rushing to retrieve the leaves against bleeding she had previously deposited nearby while he, along with Cera and Spike, was staring Rhett down and keeping him from attacking again.

“Littlefoot, oh brave Littlefoot…” Ali sobbed as she hung over Littlefoot’s bloodied, unconscious face, her tears falling into the pool of blood in quick succession. He had done it all for her sake and now she could only hope that he’d survive and recover from these horrible injuries lest his sacrifice would be for vain.

“Oh crap, this bad,” Petrie flinched as he arrived at the scene along with Ducky who immediately teared up as she got a closer look.

“Oh no no no… “ There was only one cause for this, only one dinosaur responsible for hurting her best friend so Ducky darted over to the others to take a threatening pose on top of Spike, however silly it may look, Petrie taking to the skies, ready to swipe down with his talons any time in case Rhett tried something funny.

“Darn them!!!” Now, a few body lengths separated him from his target who, in his opinion, still had a recognizable face so his revenge was far from being complete. However, he was not only facing the threehorn who, without doubt, was a worthy opponent on her own but also that sloth of a spiketail, the dangerous sharptooth and those pesky little squibbeaks. No matter how he looked at the situation, it was impossible for him now to reach Littlefoot, their advantage of numbers simply too great to ignore. Angrily, he glared at the group.

“You’ll regret the day you stood up to this loser, all of you…” he announced in a cold voice while trembling with unresolved fury, the resurfacing pain and the slowly increasing effect of the poison. Turning towards Ali who had left Littlefoot’s side to allow Ruby to treat him well, joining their front against Rhett, he demanded.

“Well, in spite of his unfair methods, I won, Ali. Come, you’re mine now…”

While Ruby began treating Littlefoot’s worst bleeding injuries, Ali froze.

“That’s right, technically, he won, but…”

“Ali is going nowhere!!!” Cera shouted, positioning herself in front of her friend, showcasing her horns. “Unless you wanna feel those horns again, that is, I suggest that you drag your filthy ass out of here right now!”

“Yeah, get lost, idiot!” Petrie puffed from above.

“Yep yep yep!” Ducky stated angrily, pointing her finger at the longneck. “Go go go!!!”

“A-huh!” Spike grunted, stomping the ground in anger.

“I’m kind of hungry, y’know?” Chomper casually mentioned, smacking his lips to intimidate Rhett a little more, although Cera shot him a worried glance. “Wonder what that tail of yours tastes like…”

“Better than mine, I shall hope…” Cera said sourly which Chomper shrugged off in the heat of the moment and their shared anger directed at Rhett.

“You heard them!” Ali declared firmly. “I’m not going with you, leave us alone!”

“I’M NOT THINKING ABOUT IT!!!” Rhett roared, puffing his chest in wrath. “I WON! YOU’RE COMING WITH ME!!!”

“NO! I stinking will not!” Ali declared, sending tears flying in every direction as she shook her head frantically. “We never wanted to participate in this stinking tradition so it doesn’t concern us!!!”

Rhett deadpanned before he screamed at the girl.

“THEN WHY DID THAT ASSHOLE FIGHT??? WHY DID HE ACCEPT MY CHALLENGE?!?!” Rhett was furious.

“You’ll see soon enough…” Ali frowned, Rhett ignoring her completely and rampaging on.

“And besides… THERE. IS. NO. SUCH. THING. AS. DISOBEYING. TRADITIONS!!!”

“Oh?” Cera sneered,” now that’s a debatable opinion.”

“SHUT UP, HORNFACE!!! I WASN’T TALKING TO A LOW CREATURE LIKE YOU!!!”

Cera’s expression hardened. Although her temper had somewhat grown more controlled and stable over the years, insults like this still got her blood boiling. Luckily, Ali saved her the effort of starting a fight with the longneck as Ali rescued her.

“He’s not worth it, he can’t do anything now,” she mumbled as she stepped in front of Cera who had been scraping her feet at the ground in preparation to charge.

“Oh, I guess you’re right…” Cera grunted though she still wasn’t happy. “He’d deserve it though.”

“Me no doubt that,” Petrie commented, flying down to Cera to completely the rest of his statement whispering. “But he get what he deserve when grown-ups see Littlefoot, just be patient.”

“I know, I know…” Cera hissed, reluctantly relaxing a bit though still staying on alert in case Rhett was pulling something.

“Whatever, you’re not even worth my attention,” Rhett hissed at Cera, whose eyebrow began to twitch dangerously. “Anyway… WHY DID HE ACCEPT?!”

“You’ll see for yourself soon enough,” Ali repeated with a derogative tone in her voice.

“I DEMAND AN ANSWER YOU STUPID GIRL!!!” Rhett thundered. “TELL ME!!!”

Angry, Ali suddenly stepped forward until she stood right in front of the boy.

“You want to know? FINE!” she spat out as she eyed Rhett with disgust and hate. “Littlefoot accepted only to protect me! Both of us figured you might just take me by force if he declined… Isn’t that true!?”

Rhett gave a cold laugh.

“Of course it is! You were going to be mine either way but that dumbass chose the hard way!”

“Right,” Cera deadpanned. “You’re awfully smug for someone who can’t even see through Littlefoot’s reasoning!”

Rhett frowned.

“I should’ve just taken you away…”

“But that’d surely be against your oh so holy traditions, right?” Cera continued to tease, gritting her teeth at the boy.

“Yes, indeed!” Ali spoke before Rhett got a chance to reply. “Why are you so keen on following those traditions anyway!? They’re just stupid!”

“DON’T YOU DARE CALL THEM STUPID!!!” Rhett roared. “They’re ensuring the survival of our species; your retarded love thing is only for stupid females and wimpy cunts like that bleeding meatface over there!”

*smack*

In one fluid motion, Ali whirled around, slapping Rhett across his face with her tail before quickly retreating behind Cera’s protective body and taking a look at the boy she admired enough to gather the courage to slap Rhett. Littlefoot’s face had been covered with leaves by Ruby and, by the looks of it, the bleeding was subsiding quickly.

“Coward,” was Rhett’s only comment, continuing where he had left off as if he hadn’t felt the powerful hit at all.

“Only the BEST should mate; that’s why there’s a tradition to determine the strongest, most fit longneck! Strong longnecks are parents to strong eggs who will live up to adulthood and become strong adults who ensure the survival of us longnecks and our superiority! I AM strong; I WON the fight BECAUSE I AM strong! You finally get it? ALI, COME HERE NOW!!!” But Ali had decided to walk away some distance, the group of her friends standing firm as a wall between the two longnecks.

“Try seizing me if you can!” the girl challenged, making Rhett’s expression freeze. “You’re strong, right? A few lowly leafeaters and a juvenile sharptooth are no match for you anyway, right?” Ali said with sarcasm Cera was proud of as she listened to her friend. “Come on, come and get me, Rhett. Should be easy for you…”

Rhett’s face twisted, going through many different stages but, in the end, all that happened was Ruby joining the protective wall around Littlefoot and Ali while Rhett’s face got stuck in an angry frown.

“Just as I thought, now who’s the coward around here?” Cera taunted.

“Shut the fuck up, threehorn,” Rhett hissed but Cera could only laugh at his poor attempt to cover up his obvious fright to charge at the whole group in order to get Ali who decided to go on a rant about the traditions.

“Anyway, that tradition is just barbaric and obsolete!”

“Right…” Ruby said, joining the conversation at last with an angry frown. “Don’t you have any empathy for how Ali feels? How can you keep saying these bad things without feeling thoroughly bad? I’ve had to kill to survive before yet I’ve never lost my empathy towards those who had to perish so I can live on. But you who knows no such struggles can’t even understand and won’t even acknowledge something as simple as love? Has no empathy for the girl he claims to love? Excuse me but you’re one of a kind and that kind is the worst among all living creatures and I couldn’t care less if it went extinct!”

Not just Rhett but everyone was stunned momentarily by Ruby’s heartfelt speech, however that effect was only of temporary nature.

“Say what you want, killer, you don’t survive with crap like that,” he declared firmly.

“... and you’ll never get laid with that mindset of yours, just saying…” Cera deadpanned but nobody laughed at her joke.

“FEMALES MUST OBEY THE MALES, BECAUSE THE MALES ARE STRONG AND THE MALES DECIDE WHO THEY MAKE EGGS WITH!!!” Rhett continued to spew nonsense but the group was slowly growing tired of it.

“When he finally go deaf from all nonsense he spouting?!” Petrie sighed in annoyance.

“Yeah, his stupidity will never end,” Chomper sighed as well.

“Yeah, he should just leave us alone, yes he should, he should!” Ducky demanded.

“I agree!” Ali stated firmly, meanwhile having joined back up with the group since Rhett hadn’t made any attempts to go after her.

“He should just converse with dinosaurs on his own low cognitive level, converse with other stupid dinosaurs he should!” Ruby spat out.

“Shut up, I’m not going!” Rhett declared.

“Ruby, you won’t find anyone this hopeless,” Cera sighed. “I mean, even those Yellowbellies are brilliant compared to him…”

This actually stifled a few weak chuckles. Ali was not among them though.

“Just to clarify, I am NOT going with you, EVER!!!” she declared firmly, demonstratively placing herself next to Littlefoot who was still unconscious. “Now get lost!”

“YOU ARE COMING WITH ME!!!” Rhett screamed but it was a futile demand. He was badly outnumbered and, with horror, he realized that the seven still standing dinosaurs formed a slowly advancing line with firm stares directed at him.

“Last warning, Rhett,” Cera sighed. When would the violent flathead finally get the picture and piss off? “It’s seven against one; you’re strong, no doubt, but we’re stronger. Run or get hurt trying to take Ali with you while we chase you away!”

“Rhett’s mind was in a turmoil as he realized that he couldn’t take Ali with him. Despite his spirit, he possibly wouldn’t fight well anymore as the buzzers’ poison slowly dampered his movements and the pain was getting ever so prominent as it slowly began to return to his awareness. It was a fight he would lose even on a good day. Grudgingly, he cast a decision.

“Fine, I get it. That coward just barely got what he deserved but don’t think for a second that I’m done with you!!! As soon as we leave this cursed valley, there’s nothing you retards can do against me claiming Ali for myself anyway! Good riddance.”

And with that, Rhett took his leave.

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Seven empty faces were following Rhett’s retreating figure until their fiend was finally out of sight. They had won; the plan Littlefoot had deviced had worked perfectly up until now and, somehow, they had managed to show Rhett his rightful place… and yet, despite the emotional victory over Rhett, it felt more like a tremendous defeat. What good was it if Littlefoot was hurt and out of commission, his recovery still on the line? They could only hope that their dear friend would recover and that he would be correct about Rhett’s possible banishment as a result of what had just transpired between them. As the adrenaline of the confrontation slowly faded from their tired bodies and minds, only Ali’s occasional sobs broke the serene silence of the night which was suddenly a welcomed gift after all the ruckus and shouting, the tolls of the long day finally catching up with them as they all congregated around Ali who was sitting at Littlefoot’s side.

“Will he be alright?” Ducky wondered in a meek voice.

“He’d better be…” Ali cried silently. “So soon after we…”

“Hey, I’m sure he’ll be fine!” Cera declared in an attempt to cheer Ali up. “He may be many things but he’s not weak. He’ll be up to his feet in no time, just you wait!”

“The bleeding stopped so since it stopped I think he’ll recover,” Ruby added while undertaking one last examination of his condition. “Though I can’t say for certain how much damage his skull has taken.”

“Well, it’s rather thick for a flathead, he’ll be fine,” Cera commented without any sarcasm for once. “Just give him some rest and he’ll be back up, right?” She looked into the circle.

“Right!” the others exclaimed with more or less forced smiles to cheer each other up. Awkward stares followed since nobody knew what to say or what to do.

“Well, I’m beat,” Cera eventually sighed. “Daddy’s gonna yell at me for this but let’s just spend the night here…”

“Yeah, there’s no point walking home if we can’t walk home together,” Ruby pointed out with a slightly concerned glance at the fallen longneck.

“Will he be alright though…” Ali asked again in a fretful voice, still scared of her big love never opening his eyes again.

“Sure, have some faith!” Cera demanded with slight anger at Ali’s lack of belief in her words. “As I said, he’s tougher than he looks,” she shrugged in an attempt to cheer the depressed longneck up if just a little. “He’ll be back to his usual annoying self sooner than you think!”

“Yep yep yep, he will be fine, he will, he will!” Ducky piped up to support the threehorn although deep inside the swimmer also had her doubts.

“Thanks guys, L-let’s hope so…” Ali mumbled with a deep sigh, curling herself up next to Littlefoot in preparation for sleep.

“Me beat too, Petrie gonna nap now,” the flyer sighed, finding himself a comfy spot on Ali’s back.

“Yep yep yep I am tired too, I am, I am;” Ducky agreed, lying down next to Spike who had already taken his sleeping pose while yawning contently.

“Night guys.” Cera commented quickly before dropping like a boulder where she was standing.

“Good night my friends, my friends good night, “ Ruby cooed before resting herself, only Chomper quietly sneaking off to look for leftovers from the hive of buzzy stingers.

“I’m not sure if I can sleep…” Ali winced, feeling fresh tears welling up in her eyes. That was when she heard the sound of a body getting up and footsteps approaching until another warm body seated itself on her other flank (she was leaning against Littlefoot). It was Cera.

“I’m gonna keep you company, okay?” the girl said quietly as she lied down next to the other girl. “You’ll see, everything will be fine tomorrow.”

“Thanks, Cera,” Ali mumbled. “I hope so…” That was when a slightly more satisfying thought entered Ali’s mind which put her more at ease immediately.

“Tomorrow Rhett will learn the true reason why Littlefoot chose to fight…” It was the last, crucial part of their plan and it better damned worked out as they had schemed. Rhett had dealt a serious injury and, with some twisting of facts, they would be able to frame Rhett for committing a crime they both agreed on… but that was something the grown-ups didn’t need to know, right? With a slightly better feeling, Ali eventually found into an uneasy sleep.

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This may be slightly late but this chapter was supposed to enter for the March 2019 prompt challenge :lol One could argue that it also fits the category for April, however I have another scene in mind that I could enter though it lies somewhat it the future of the story  :^^spike

Okay, first off, take a breather lol. This was intense, even though I've written this I still feel how intense this was after reading it all myself to spot the last couple awkward typos I still hadn't spotted until now (and who knows how many I've still missed). Since I ended up having to explain a lot in responses to reviews and since this chapter, at best, is even more controversial than the previous installment, I shall attempt to mention the most obvious ones in my author's note here.

I've carefully reviewed the language used here after people deemed it a little unfit in the previous chapter. Arguably, in a situation where emotions get this heated, you'll have to endure a bit of extreme language, especially since the characters are a little older and the last couple sequels do their mental maturity no justice. People think of the cast as never-changing in terms of age while I think that they do age gradually over the course of the sequels (which has largely been ignored by the writers but this is not the place to ramble about these things lol). That being said, I removed most of the really extreme language and, following a suggestion of my proofreader/editor I also removed any insults that would sound a little awkward if dinosaurs are using them (like "pussy" or "bitch").

Did Rhett go too far? Did the Gang go too far as well? Those are questions I probably can't fully answer but I feel like I was able to reach the maximum effect here. Rhett has shown us an even more extreme and over-the-top behavior here, one that has certainly reached its peak with this chapter. As for the Gang, they will get to reflect critically on what has happened on that night soon enough  :yes^

Out of character? No need to mention that, of course the gang aren't in-character. The whole situation demands it and causes them to act outside of their usual patterns and preferences. Out of character isn't bad, it just has to make sense in the context of what's happening around them. I don't hear people rambling about Ducky being awfully OOC in "The Big Freeze" when she clearly was (but this ain't the time and place to ramble xD)

I am very curious about the pacing in this chapter. It's a very long chapter for sure because, especially with fights and action, it's never a sign of great writing if it's awfully short. I've wanted to address a lot of things in this chapter aside from the obvious conflict and of course it's easy to get carried away when things go absolutely crazy :lol I tried to focus on the action between the two combatants but also give them some moments to reflect and give the reader an insight into their mindset and motivations. The dialogue is getting heavier the longer the chapter drags on and I hope that I was able to write it in a way that works in the context of this story. It was extremely emotional dialogue, a lot of bullying and teasing and shittalking, a lot of ugly words etc. I've never written such a thing before so I'm really curious to hear your thoughts. I was certainly trying to write a rather epic and fierce fight and if I've managed to make that impression, I think I'm happy with myself as I can already predict that not everyone might agree with the style of this story.

Littlefoot is significantly hurt now, Rhett has won and yet lost, the gang have lost and still won... and the big question is what the next morning will bring when the Great Valley learns of what has transpired over night. Will Littlefoot's plan really work? Will Rhett get into trouble? What are the characters going to feel about everything that's happened once emotions have calmed down again? And why the heck is this story called "Return To The Land Of Mists" when, so far, this was all about Rhett being a *censored* and Littlefoot and Ali discovering their love for each other? The next 4 chapters should answer these questions; I planned and wrote the outline for them two days ago and story will revive from its hiatus immediately!!!  :duckyhappy

Thanks for reading until now, we've gotten over the toughest part now and the really interesting events are about to unfold!  :)petrie

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Rhett continued to run away like a chicken

And once the Chicken Run starts...he will do more running away like a chicken  :lol

THAT JERK
OMG ASSHOLE
UGH
i hate rhett
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Major kudos to anyone who figures out what that means :)

I will find ways to make sure “lol dino” is in all of my posts :lol


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Well, a lot certainly happened in this chapter and there is quite a lot to go through this time. Overall, I’d say that things developed quite nicely and I very much enjoyed the plurality of the narrative in totality. While I don’t have any major issues to point out, there still were some matters I would like to bring to light that irritated me to say the least.

The start of the chapter gave us an idea what was going to go down before, during and after the long anticipated duel between Littlefoot and Rhett and it worked fluently despite the fact that some parts of the dialogue and narrative were slightly bizarre. Concerning this point, I must recount about the previous chapter some more that it was specifically explained that there would be no rules, but then that piece converted to pure bewilderment later on when it was told that there indeed was rules after all, which made me feel flabbergasted to say the least.

As for the duel itself, in my opinion, it was done remarkably well in terms of offering enough action while also making room for brief periods of well controlled ambiance. The feeling of utter professionalism shined in this portion the most, and you should definitely be commended for achieving that as it is not an easy task altogether. I was also very much amused by some parts of the dialogue you chose to implement that created out of the ordinary mood for the story.

I probably could have found a lot more to nitpick about, and even if this story is moving slowly forward, progress is being made with every step on the way and the next few chapters will be exceptionally intriguing to oversee how exactly this contest will ultimately end. I am certain that the upcoming occurrences as the groundwork has been exceedingly spontaneous. :)
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And once the Chicken Run starts...he will do more running away like a chicken  :lol

THAT JERK
OMG ASSHOLE
UGH
i hate rhett

No cheating, who doesn't hate him?  :bestsharptooth

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    Well, a lot certainly happened in this chapter and there is quite a lot to go through this time. Overall, I’d say that things developed quite nicely and I very much enjoyed the plurality of the narrative in totality. While I don’t have any major issues to point out, there still were some matters I would like to bring to light that irritated me to say the least.

The start of the chapter gave us an idea what was going to go down before, during and after the long anticipated duel between Littlefoot and Rhett and it worked fluently despite the fact that some parts of the dialogue and narrative were slightly bizarre. Concerning this point, I must recount about the previous chapter some more that it was specifically explained that there would be no rules, but then that piece converted to pure bewilderment later on when it was told that there indeed was rules after all, which made me feel flabbergasted to say the least.

As for the duel itself, in my opinion, it was done remarkably well in terms of offering enough action while also making room for brief periods of well controlled ambiance. The feeling of utter professionalism shined in this portion the most, and you should definitely be commended for achieving that as it is not an easy task altogether. I was also very much amused by some parts of the dialogue you chose to implement that created out of the ordinary mood for the story.

I probably could have found a lot more to nitpick about, and even if this story is moving slowly forward, progress is being made with every step on the way and the next few chapters will be exceptionally intriguing to oversee how exactly this contest will ultimately end. I am certain that the upcoming occurrences as the groundwork has been exceedingly spontaneous. :)   

Thanks a lot for the review!  ;)Cera

I'm really happy that there weren't any big issues with the new chapter, I was really worried  :lol

About the rules of the duel, it looks like I I might have worded a few things in a bit of an unfortunate manner. What I meant to get across is this:

1. the duel is supposed to be held in accordance with the tradition which means there are a few formal rules to follow such as the female of interest standing witness to the fight and its outcome or "victory by submission or K. O. These are things that I made up of course, mostly in a manner that supports my interests as the author to make this a great battle  :^^spike
So, yes, there actually are a few things you could call" rules" here.

2. What I was trying to say when I wrote "no rules" is that there are no illegal attacks or anything like that as long as it's fair and 1 against 1 (of course it wasn't because Littlefoot gave a f... about the tradition  :)Petrie)

I hope that clears things up but I agree with you that it's been worded badly.

Oh you... Calling it professionalism takes things a bit too high  :angel but anyway I appreciate that you think of it that way lol. I certainly hope that the coming developmens will also fall into that category  :lol

Ah yes, of course some of these moments were supposed to be a little funny too to make a bit of a contrast to the fighting and cursing  :bolt

About the last paragraph, don't worry about not being nitpicky enough, you've gotta leave some nitpicking for Sovereign after all :SmugSpike
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Now, this wasn’t the most LBT-style chapter there is. While the situation was rather well-built, I still couldn’t quite picture any of this happening. Yet, the fight itself was well-written and it certainly carried a lot of emotion and suspense in it. I quite liked how you made the fight that long as it allowed some real drama to be built in it which certainly is an important factor in a story like this.

In the end, the battle was more or less a stalemate which was bit of a surprise after this kind of a struggle. It remains to be seen just how the Valley will react to what has happened even if it seems at this point that there will be some tension coming between Ali’s herd and the Valley. Yet, it’s quite clear that the Gang isn’t going to give up and it’s only right they want to undo Rhett’s plot.

While the fight was built well, I had a few problems with this chapter as well. While most of the dialogue was done well, there was also stuff like “FEEL OUR PAIN, RHETT!!!” which sounded just goofy. Likewise, even if I’ve disagreed with Rhett’s characterization before, his comments here were just… something absolutely nobody would say. I had a hard time taking that fight seriously after that exchange as Rhett didn’t even feel like a character at all but some cartoony archetype of some evil dude. None of that was believable at all.

That being said, the future is full of tension and it remains to be seen whether Rhett will get what he deserves. It was surprising that there weren’t more immediate effects from this fight but it’s starting to look quite clear that there is a wider conflict brewing inside the Valley. Yet, it remains to be seen how it’ll all turn out for our main characters.
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Review of chapter 6:

Oh man is Rhett so insufferable in this story!  His possessive fixation on Ali is one that only highlights his own inner emptiness that he feels the need to fill through dominating others.  Though he is an orphan and thus is an object of some pity, his lack of empathy and actual malice does make the gang's reaction (and Littlefoot's willingness to fight him) all the more understandable. 

I do wish that the inner struggle within Littlefoot concerning accepting the challenge was elaborated on a little more, however, as I could see him perhaps questioning his own motives after accepting it.  This could show that his own rationality was being dampened by the deepening love between him and Ali.  Though I do not share the reservations of the others concerning the mild swearing as my understanding of this story is that the gang is getting a bit older here.  So perhaps some loosening of their language (and additional hormones in the case of a certain longneck) is to be expected.

Now on to the challenge itself...

Review of Chapter 7:

Well, I hate to be a bit of a downer, but I must admit that I have some mixed feelings about this chapter. 

The overall interactions are believable enough considering the characterizations of Rhett thus far and what he has placed Littlefoot and Ali through, and the pacing did indeed fit the scene well, but there were some lingering issues that continuously took me out of the flow of the narrative.  The first major issue was the confusion concerning the rules of the battle.  Like Anagnos I was originally under the impression that it was going to be an absolute free-for-all, but then the mentioning of rules confused me a bit.  As the exchange of blows began in the chapter my confusion was swiftly forgotten, but it was something that briefly took me out of the story.

The second issue was the use of all caps, which I think would have been better served by using normal font but then describing the intonation and volume of the voices, and thus flow better with the rest of the description.  On a related note some of this screamed dialogue was worded quite oddly. “DON’T YOU DARE CALLING THEM STUPID!!!” For example, does not make grammatical sense. It should be phrased as "Don't you dare call them stupid!" 

The last issue had to deal with the actual content of the dialogue, especially in the case of Rhett.  Though sometimes the actual hurling of insults in an altercation would not be the most coherent set of words, his dialogue just seemed really off in the fight itself.  The utter lack of control and hiding of his base desires is not really something that matches the characterization of Rhett in the lone television episode in which he appears.  In the previous chapters there was at least an attempt to cloak his mannerisms in some veneer of knowing Ali's best interest better than herself, but in this chapter he seems to just completely drop this and to become even more uncontrolled than Sierra - the only canon depiction of a character that could be called sociopathic.

That being said the events of this chapter does create some serious tensions going forward which will be interesting to see.  For one, we do not quite know how banged up Littlefoot is and what, if any, his permanent injuries might be from this conflict.  Secondly, the gang's plan is going forward with the fact that the Old One will be forced to act now... but I do wonder what the full implications of what will happen now has been fully considered by the gang.  With questions like this still remaining to be answered, I do look forward to seeing how things develop from here.  :yes
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Chapter 8: Dawn of a new day

“C’mon Littlefoot! Beat him to a pulp!!!”

Ali had stopped counting how many times she had yelled at Littlefoot to keep on fighting. The longneck she loved had been locked in a fierce battle with Rhett who unarguably held control over her friend, kicking him in all possible places, over and over, Littlefoot barely capable of defending himself as his injuries grew. She had also stopped counting just for how long this fight had been going - certainly it felt like it had been at least an hour since it had begun.

“Hey Ali!”

Ali suddenly perked up from her introspection when Rhett addressed her with a malicious grin. What did that idiot want?

“How d’ya reckon I should finish this ass-cunt off?” Rhett inquired while casually kicking into Littlefoot’s face who was hardly able to resist at this point, covered in bruises and bleeding from several cuts and lacerations.

“Don’t you think this has been going on for long enough?!” Ali blurted out without giving her words much thought. “It’s obvious that you’re stronger but don’t hurt my Littlefoot!”

“Ali, Ali… he doesn’t belong to you. Females belong to the males, not the other way around, did you forget?” he smirked in such an evil fashion that Ali’s blood began to boil.

“Just let go of him you jerk!!!” she yelled, slowly growing desperate as Rhett held all power in his paws now.

“Anyway, if you fail to give me a good inspiration to finish him off, I will come up with something myself… something that’s doing this meatface justice, I daresay…”

“Just leave him alone for the Bright Circle’s sake!” Ali begged, being very close to tearing up. “You’ve won, okay?!”

“He’s still a threat though because he’s brainwashed you, Ali…” Rhett had abandoned Littlefoot for a second, who was unable to get up after receiving a few well-aimed kicks at the back of his head, and walked up to Ali until his smug grin was pushing against Ali’s face contorted in rage and also fear as the boy intruded her personal space quite rudely.

“Listen, Ali. You’ll be mine now. I’ll dispose of this weakling now, I’ve had enough fun now. It’s time to get serious…”

Ali could only utter a faint cry as a horrible realization began to dawn on her. Rhett didn’t just want to win this fight and claim the right to mate with her. The tradition didn’t prohibit the loser from challenging the winner again; Rhett wanted to remove Littlefoot as a threat altogether, which meant…

“D-don’t tell me…” she suddenly whispered in utter shock, tears glimmering in the corners of her eyes. Rhett’s gleeful gaze was more penetrating than any physical attack could have ever been.

“Say goodbye to him, you’ll never see him again, hahahahaha!!!” Rhett broke into a fit of evil laughter as posed over the fallen body of Littlefoot.

“No…” Ali couldn’t believe this was actually happening. Rhett was about to murder Littlefoot - she had to do something!!!

“I WON’T ALLOW IT!!!” Without a plan in mind, Ali’s body thrusted forward on its own accord. She wouldn’t allow Rhett to kill the dinosaur she loved so she fought even if it was pointless. Rhett didn’t waver as she approached him, his wicked grin only growing more entertained as Ali prepared to ram Rhett into oblivion…

*SLAP*

It had happened so fast that Ali had no time to react. Rhett had rotated his body so fast that she didn’t see his tail before it whipped against her chin with tremendous force. Ali felt all control fall from her body as she crashed into Littlefoot’s groaning, unmoving body. Although she hadn’t lost conscience, she couldn’t move a muscle as she had been temporarily paralyzed by the powerful slap. Rhett cackled, kicking her away from Littlefoot before beginning to drag Littlefoot away… away from her… dragged him towards that ledge… that ledge where they had spent their first romantic moments together… that ledge with ended in a drop so deep that Ali felt sick just looking into the looming abyss below. Rhett was now standing at the edge, Littlefoot in front of him. Rhett smirked one last time before…

*WHAM*

… he slapped his tail against Littlefoot who was pushed over the edge and began to fall, disappear from her view, fall for what seemed like an eternity before…

*CRASH*

...his body hit something. It was a sound so sickening that it continued to echo in her mind long after the actual sound of it had been swallowed by the darkness of the night. Ali suddenly realized that her paralysation had lifted at last. With shaking legs, she walked towards the edge like a zombie, exchanged an unbelieving glance with Rhett, and looked down. Somewhere far below was an unrecognizable mess of blood, flesh and bones…

It was Littlefoot - or what was left of him anyhow.

“NOOOOOOOOOOOOO…

*


...OOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!”

Ali sat upright, her heart aching as it hammered in her chest, her lungs expanding to the point of physical pain with each panicky breath. Her eyes were wide open in shock and the echo of her scream was reverberating off the mountains. It was early morning, just a little short of daybreak and something warm next to her soon caught her attention.

It was Littlefoot, covered in many swollen bruises, taking on a large variety of ugly colours, and his face still covered in healing leaves which were soaked in his dried blood. Ali looked at him and almost started to cry like a hatchling when she realized that Littlefoot was very well alive, maybe not in a very good shape, but alive, sleeping peacefully beside her, his chest rising and falling in a rhythm that quickly gave her the comfort she needed to blink away the tears that were forming in her eyes and calm down from her nightmare. Only then, Ali gradually became aware of a few more figures stirring around her. Cera was rising next to her, groaning groggily, a spooked Petrie clinging onto her back. Ducky had unarguably fallen off Spike’s back where she had been sleeping and even Spike seemed to be awake in mild shock. A duet of yawns a little to her right confirmed that she had truly woken the entirety of her friends with her scream of terror just now, with the exception of Littlefoot who was still unconscious.

“S-sorry…” Ali stammered as she felt a few judging eyes lingering on her bashful face, sinking a little lower to the ground. Since Cera was the closest to her, it was also the one whose gaze she couldn’t avoid. It rested on her, annoyed and judging before it suddenly eased up and turned into a heavy sigh.

“Well, I’m glad threehorns don’t have sleepstories like that,” the girl mused while rolling her eyes but then she gave Ali a wink that everything was alright and the longneck eased up a little.

“Never... scare Petrie... like that... ever... again!” Petrie scorned as he finally unattached himself from Cera, shakily hopping off the threehorn.

“Oh Petrie, do not be so mean, no no no,” Ducky reprimanded the flyer, walking over to the longneck while dusting herself off to hug her in comfort which Ali answered with a slight smile.

“Ali did not want to have a scary sleep story because scary sleepstories always come uninvited,” Ruby stated as she and Chomper joined the group, meanwhile inspecting Littlefoot and sighing with relief to see him sleeping peacefully.

“What was it about?” Cera casually requested, not expecting to receive a detailed answer as Ali was still showing heavy signs of being distraught.

“The fight but… it ended badly for Littlefoot, he… “ Ali stopped as the images returned with full brutality.

“Hey, don’t sweat it; whatever happened to him didn’t happen to him in reality, okay?” Cera said pointedly while giving the longneck a pep talk. “Look at his goofy face, in a few days it’ll be as good as new! Cheer up, Ali!”

“Cera is right…” Ali shook her head to force the images away and instead leaned against Littlefoot’s warm body. “You were so brave, I haven’t forgotten about my promise…” she thought which brought a smile to her face.

“Better?” Cera grinned.

“Better!” Ali beamed. Another thing that was worth cheering up for was the coming day. She could hardly wait to report everything to Old One and just imagining how angry Littlefoot’s grandparents would probably be at Rhett gave her new energy.

“I hate to ask this by the way but…” came Chomper’s voice all of a sudden. “But… what are we gonna do now? We can’t exactly stay here all the time and, I mean…”

“Yeah… Littlefoot not going anywhere anytime soon,” Petrie pointed out, still a little sour about the rough wake-up call.

“Maybe we should try to wake him up?” Ducky offered which earned her a few shrugs in return. Certainly, Littlefoot was best off sleeping his injuries away but since there was the possibility of concussion, one had to be careful. Determining whether Littlefoot was simply in a deep sleep or actually still unconscious could be an important piece of information.

“I’ll give it a shot,” Ali eventually confirmed, carefully removing a few of the leaves on his face to reveal his blood-crusted visage.

“L-littlefoot?” she hummed quietly with an uncertain undertone in her voice. Carefully, she rubbed her face against his cheek, giving him a few tender nudges.

“Geez, Ali, you’ve gotta be a little less gentle if you want to wake him up - I mean, he was right next to you and didn’t even hear you scream!” Cera criticized the longneck in a mixture of amusement and a weak attempt at teasing her for her fondness of Littlefoot.

“Yes, I know but… see, if he’s hurt his head badly, maybe I shouldn’t…”

“That’s a good point, a good point it is,” Ruby affirmed wisely, pointing with a finger at Cera who rolled her eyes in response to the reprimand.

“Just poke him somewhere else then, geez…” she grunted and before anyone could stop her, Cera readied her front horn and gave Littlefoot a jog, gentle enough not to cause him additional injury but fierce enough to be felt.

“Cera, stop it!” Ali shouted but her outrage soon died down when Littlefoot began showing signs of life.

“Well, that worked!” As Cera began to wear a smug grin, everyone else gathered around Littlefoot’s stirring form, Ali positioning herself in front of him where he could see her without having to move his neck.

“Littlefoot?” she whispered.

*

“Ouch, my head…”

When Littlefoot came to, the throbbing pain in his head was the first thing that reached his mind. He felt as if someone had pushed him down an entire mountain as his entire body seemed to ache and sting.

“Voices? Ow, can’t they be quieter?”

Any sound was like fire channeling through his brain right now though there was one voice so soft and sweet that it was just barely bearable.

“A...A-li?”

Ali beamed when she heard Littlefoot mutter her name, although her joy was relatively short-lived since it was apparent that the boy was in huge pain.

“Littlefoot, I’m so glad…” she whispered and before Ali knew it she was weeping while nuzzling Littlefoot’s cheek. “You’re so… stupid but… you’re also… amazing and… so so brave!” the girl sobbed and before she knew what she was doing, she had kissed Littlefoot on the cheek much to the astonishment of everyone present, even Cera too surprised to offer a pointy remark.

“Please rest yourself a-and get well s-s-soon!” Ali begged as she looked into Littlefoot’s brown, tired eyes.

“Yeah, we’ll make sure your silly sacrifice will get Rhett thrown from the Great Wall, count on it!” Cera exclaimed, the mere picture of that making her look forward to the events of the day.

“Not… so loud… hurts my head…” Littlefoot suddenly spoke through gritted teeth and Cera immediately made an apologetic gesture.

“Oh, sorry,” she mumbled bashfully.

“Can you walk?” Ruby eventually piped up, careful to speak in a subdued voice while inspecting the cuts on his head which seemed to have crusted over very well over night. “We will have to get to the grown-ups since most of the grown-ups can’t go up here.”

Littlefoot pondered this for a few moments before shaking his head ever so slightly that only Ali was able to pick up the gesture.

“He’s hurt his head; he mustn’t walk yet,” Ali explained in a soft voice which prompted a sigh from the fast runner.

“Then how are we going to get him somewhere the grown-ups can take care of him?” she inquired.

“Well, he’s simply too big for one of us to carry him,” Cera analyzed as she rummaged in her brain. She could have sworn they had once, a long time ago, had to carry something but she couldn’t remember what it had been or how they had resolved the issue back then…

“Wait…” Her gaze fell on Chomper, innocently following a butterfly with his eyes, waiting for it to get into his range, when she suddenly remembered.

“The egg… of course!” Cera barely minded Littlefoot, wincing once again, as she made her triumphant exclamation.

“Huh?” Ducky, Petrie, Chomper and Ruby replied at once, exchanging curious glances with each other while Ali continued to nuzzle Littlefoot to give him comfort in his world of pain and misery.

“Duh, remember when we “rescued” Chomper’s egg back in the days?” Cera prompted which lit Ducky’s and Petrie’s eyes with the answer finally in reach. “If we build something large and strong enough to carry Littlefoot, we could carry him together!”

“How’s that going to work?” Chomper puzzled. “Also, I think this is the first time I hear about you guys carrying my egg like that.”

“Ducky and me too small back then and egg too heavy for us,” Petrie explained matter-of-factly.

“Yep yep yep, and the others did not have hands to carry the egg so we had to think of something…” Ducky added while nodding with a smile.

“What did you do then?” Ruby wondered with great curiosity, intrigued by the creativity at display.

“Easy, we took two twigs and tied them together with vines so the egg couldn’t fall through the gap,” Cera explained smugly, selling it as her idea even when it had been Littlefoot’s back then but Ruby needn’t know about that fact.

“A twig is not going to carry a longneck though, oh no no no…” Ducky eventually sighed.

“Maybe a branch from tree might?” Petrie offered.

“Yeah, that’s what I’ve been thinking too,” Cera confirmed. “Let’s split up and search for something useable lying around here in this forest!”

Cera’s proposal met immediate support from her friends and, quickly, two groups had established, darting off into the forest to look for resources just as the Bright Circle began to peek over the horizon. Cera had stayed behind for now as had Ali.

“You’re gonna stay with Littlefoot, I take it?” the threehorn wondered in a casual voice.

“Hmm,” Ali mumbled as she remained seated in front of Littlefoot, their heads touching. Littlefoot had closed his eyes again, though his pain-contorted face revealed that he wasn’t sleeping.

“I’ll go look on my own then, I’ll be right back!”

“Good luck,” Ali mumbled quietly as not to add to Littlefoot’s torment. Soon, the two longnecks were alone, only the distant conversations of Ruby and Ducky, reprimanding Chomper and Spike respectively not to go snacking when their friend needed their help, carrying over with the gentle morning breeze. It almost made her snicker a little.

“A-li…”

Ali perked up when Littlefoot tried to address her, although it was apparent that his own voice was just as painful for him.

“Don’t talk now, just try to go back to sleep,” she said sweetly while nuzzling the boy in a caressing manner.

“Then why did you wake me up in the first place…” Littlefoot groaned in a pain-stricken voice.

“We had to know if you would wake up at all,” Ali answered with some unease. “It is not unheard of for dinosaurs suffering from head injuries to sleep and never wake up again… we-I had to make sure.”

“I see…” Littlefoot mumbled.

“Rest now, we can talk more when you’re in better shape,” Ali suggested in a soothing voice which Littlefoot couldn’t object with. “Leave the aftermath to us, we’ve got this!”

“Alright, good luck…” Littlefoot mumbled before he drifted back into a deep slumber. Ali giggled at the display; Littlefoot looked so innocent and cute when he slept! With a smile on her face, she continued to watch over him until Cera returned, dragging two entire small trees which had just started growing with great effort.

Soon, everyone had returned and work began on a construction to carry Littlefoot with. Spike had been tasked to retrieve the vines they had used to trip Rhett the other night while Ducky and Chomper were gathering smaller sticks with aerial support from Petrie. The two small trees were trimmed by Ruby and stripped of their leaves by a hungry Spike until only the trunks remained which were around 3-4 inches strong. Smaller sticks were tied parallel to the trunks and the thick vines were locking them in place to make it stable. Granted, it didn’t look too great but when they tested it on Ali, it would carry her with ease.

“Great work, everyone!” Cera beamed as she looked proudly at their handiwork. “Let’s begin!”

With utmost care, the construction was placed next to Littlefoot before they managed to heave Littlefoot onto it, Ruby, Chomper, Ducky and Petrie being able to lift him just barely enough for Ali to fit her neck underneath, lifting him just enough to tow him and carefully put him down parallel to the construction which had been placed on Cera’s and Spike’s backs just before. Since both of them were only carrying half of his weight, it was bearable for a while. Besides, Ali and Ruby were quickly sprinting to both ends, while Chomper ducked underneath Littlefoot’s sleeping form, helping to stabilize the longneck and preventing him from slipping off. Carefully, they began their journey back down into the main parts of the Great Valley…

*

To say that Rhett was furious would be an understatement. The pain from the countless bee stings he had received and, to a lesser extent, from Littlefoot’s occasional attempt to fight back, coupled with the utmost humiliation that insufferable longneck and his stupid friends had put him through and his failure to retrieve Ali, had all added up to make his night a sleepless one. Utterly tired, tormented by pain and constant itching, and unable to calm his mind, he simply sat there in his sleeping spot, well hidden from curious eyes in a group of large bushes, brooding and brooding… and brooding…

*

It usually meant no good when these dinosaurs all met in the same place and today was no different, Grandpa Longneck mused as he and Grandma Longneck looked into the small circle, gathered around a small watering hole, consisting of Mr. Threehorn, Tria, Ducky’s Mother and Petrie’s Mother, all wearing varying degrees of anger, annoyance and, most of all, worry on their faces. Their kids not being home before bedtime wasn’t too unusual as they had just recently allowed them, grudgingly so, to choose for themselves when to sleep as long as they would rise when being asked to in the morning and, of course, sleep with their families. It was unusual though that they all left their nests before the rays of the Bright Circle warmed the Valley, all without even mentioning a word to them. It was sort of an unwritten rule that they’d wake their parents when they left the nest early in the morning but neither of them had been woken that way on this fine morning.

Therefore, Grandpa could only conclude that neither of them had ever been at their nests which meant…

“I am afraid we might have a problem here…”

“That’s putting it mildly, longneck,” Topps ranted, his mood dangerously low as always when trouble arose for his family. “Our children are who knows where, we’ve gotta act!”

“What do you suggest?” Tria wondered. “Ranting isn’t getting us anywhere, we need ideas.”

“First of all, I’d like to confirm if Ali, too, is missing…” Grandpa sighed, feeling a terrible deja-vu somewhere deep in his stomach. When the girl had visited for the first time, he had fallen horribly sick and Littlefoot soon darted off with Ali to find the Night Flower for him. Arguably, he wouldn’t be here if it hadn’t been for Littlefoot’s little heroic act but it didn’t change the fact that he could have gotten himself killed doing so. Grandpa was wondering if their children had gone on some sort of adventure again and Ali, whether by her presence or absence, could provide some clues about their whereabouts.

“What’s that Ali girl to do with this?!” Topps thundered. “We’ve gotta organize a search party!”

“Ali, to my information, is a friend of our children so it wouldn’t be unlikely that she is either missing too or might have a clue where they have gone to.”

“Yeah, it’s worth a shot,” Petrie’s Mother agreed, nodding to Ducky’s Mother.

“Humpff!” Topps grunted while Tria rolled her eyes at the display.

“Grandma and I will check on the longneck herd and ask them for information,” Grandpa announced in a weary voice.

“We suggest that you, too, ask some residents and farwalkers for any clues concerning our young ones’ whereabouts,” Grandma added.

“Yes, and we should regroup here once the Bright Circle has left its morning position on the sky.”

“No objections, let’s go,” Topps barked before walking away quickly, Tria going a slightly different direction while Mama Swimmer and Mama Flyer branched off somewhere else entirely. Grandpa and Grandma exchanged a glance and sighed profoundly.

“Let’s hope that they’re just hiding somewhere in the Valley…”

*

“Almost there…”

Cera felt her whole body ache as they finally stepped into the forests of the Great Valley. Walking back down had proved to be much harder than she thought and Littlefoot was, if anything, only getting heavier by the minute.

“I swear, as soon as we’re at Ali’s nest, I’m just dropping this flathead and calling their grandparents to do the rest…”

“How much longer do we have to walk?” Ducky eventually piped up, throwing a worried glance on Spike who seemed to reach the end of his strength as well.

“Not much further, just another stone’s throw or two from here, hang in there!” Ali replied, pointing with her neck to give directions. She could already see her mother from their current position but, to her utter surprise, there were two elderly longnecks she didn’t really know, unless….

“His grandparents?!”

Squinting her eyes, she recognized his grandfather who appeared a lot livelier than she had ever seen him. Having visited the Valley thrice now, she had only gotten to know Littlefoot’s grandparents from the distance and never interacted with them. Littlefoot’s Grandfather had been very sick during her first visit and it was only through her and Littlefoot’s daring adventure that he was still alive, she reckoned.

“Well, that’s about to change now…”
she mused, though an uneasy feeling quickly spread through her guts. What would these two longnecks say if they saw them carrying their injured grandson around?

Ali would soon find out.

*

“How can I keep Ali away from these idiots until we move out of this stupid Great Valley?!”

It was arguably the most profound question that had been lingering in Rhett’s mind for the better part of the night. He knew Ali wouldn’t listen to him and hide behind the arrogant hornface and those other pipsqueaks for the duration of their stay even if that Littlefoot would prove to be out cold for a longer period of time. Certainly, his beating should keep him from doing much for a few days as he was almost certain that he had given him a serious concussion with his final attack, however Rhett hated to rely on speculations. If only they could leave right now…

*

“Ali? Yes, I haven’t seen her since last evening, are the others missing too? What’s going on?”

Ali’s mother had been quite surprised to see the two elderly longnecks who she didn’t know suddenly approach and talk to her, only to learn that they were the grandparents of her daughter’s best friend and, quite apparently, looking for him. All she knew was that Ali had left with Littlefoot to go to that outlook again, where they had apparently spent the previous evening as well, only to find the nest abandoned in the morning. Knowing that the Valley was a safe place and knowing that Ali had been very keen to see Littlefoot again, she hadn’t thought much of her absence yet, assuming that the girl had left early for some reason though, now that these two longnecks were interrogating her about anything regarding Ali, their grandson or their friends, she had to admit that she began to feel a little uneasy.

“We do not know what’s going on, I’m afraid. That’s why we are here…” Grandma Longneck replied in a wary voice. “You see, our children have a habit of going on adventures that lead them out of the Great Valley. I’m sure you still remember what happened on your first visit to our Valley?”

Oh yes, she did remember. Ali had suddenly disappeared without a trace, only to return many days later with Night Flowers from the Land of Mists. She had been scolded badly back then and it had been for this reason that the Great Valley hadn’t been on their migration schedule for a few years.

“Yes, of course I remember,” the female answered truthfully. “Do you suspect that they’ve wandered off again?”

“Well, all members of their gang of friends haven’t been seen by their parents neither in the evening nor this morning so we are assuming the worst case for now - that they’ve gone on an adventure again. If you know anything… please let us know…”

Ali’s mother looked at the elderly male with concern. Considering that Ali always hung around this particular gang of friends, this was worrisome news for her as well.

“Unfortunately, I do not know more than that they’ve wanted to go to that outlook over there again…” She pointed towards the Great Wall which wasn’t far from the residence of the herd. “However, I’ve only seen Ali taking Littlefoot along with her yesterday, not her other.. friends.” Her hesitation didn’t go unnoticed on Littlefoot’s grandparents, however they were too occupied with Littlefoot’s disappearance to give it any heed.

“That is certainly better than nothing, thank you,” Grandpa Longneck spoke, bowing slightly to the younger longneck in a gesture of appreciation. Just as he raised his head again, some distant figures managed to engage his attention. Intrigued, he squeezed his eyes.

*

“Hey, Littlefoot’s folks are actually here!” Cera eventually panted when she, too, took notice of the two elderly longnecks. “That makes this whole thing a lot easier…”

“Yeah, that’s some good luck, some good luck it is!” Ruby sang with a smile.

“Let’s hurry, they’ve seen us by now,” Ali proposed eagerly.

“Yeah, I’m tired to carrying Bigfoot here all the way through the Valley anyway!” Cera said in a snarky comment, utilizing her last strength to march towards the longnecks whose eyes went wide open when they realized what they were doing…

*

“What in the name of the Bright Circle are they doing?” Grandma Longneck puzzled as her mate nudged her and pointed at the approaching group. Granted, these kids had pulled a lot of funny stunts in the past but she just couldn’t comprehend why they’d walk around carrying something as if abiding by some strange ritual. As soon as they were within hearing range, though, she began to realize just what they were carrying...

“LITTLEFOOT!!!” the two elderly longnecks shouted in unison, leaping and covering the remaining distance in no time with a speed seeming almost impossible for a dinosaur so old.

“Littlefoot!” Grandma Longneck cried as she arrived at the gang who had stopped dead in their tracks now. Carefully, Cera and Spike took a few steps back while everyone else was carrying Littlefoot’s weight with their hands (and Ali with her neck), slowly putting him to the ground. Immediately, the two longnecks were bowing over his beaten body, wailing as they saw the condition their grandson was in. Although, their demeanor changed somewhat when they realized that Littlefoot was simply out cold and very well alive.

“Ali, what on earth happened to your friend?” Ali’s mother interrogated with a rather stern expression. “He looks like he fell down a mountain!”

Ali jerked slightly as she was reminded of her dream at the mention of Littlefoot’s condition, however this was a bad time to reminisce in those horrible pictures.

“Children, I thank you for bringing him back here with this… I must admit, brilliant construction of yours but…” Grandpa Longneck spoke as he attempted to regain some of the composure and dignity that usually accompanied his presence. “Just what did you do this time?”

“And what happened to our Littlefoot?!” Grandma Longneck demanded who, other than her mate, wasn’t composed at all.

“Littlefoot’s been attacked!” Ali spoke up at once, stepping in front of everyone. She had spent the better part of their journey back down to ponder about a way to present their made-up story in a believable way. It hadn’t been easy as the odds of Littlefoot’s friends looking up at the outlook by chance were very low but she eventually managed to weave it all together into a story which she was now telling the Grandparents.

“The two of us wanted to go to that outlook again because you can see the blinky lights so nice and clear from there. But… we were followed; it was Rhett!”

“Rhett?” Grandpa Longneck wondered.

“Yes, Rhett!” Cera chimed in, spitting out his name like a treestar that tasted really awful.

“Rhett is a longneck our age who’s a member of my herd,” Ali explained quickly though she started blushing at her next words. “He’s… see, he’s quite interested in me but, uhh, you see… I’m… I like Littlefoot and I think he perceived him as a threat and started stalking us…”

“Ali invited us to join them last night, yes she did,” Ducky piped up with a sad undertone.

“Yea, but when we arrived, this Rhett guy was beating Littlefoot to a pulp like a maniac!” Cera shouted dramatically. “Of course I chased him away!”

“And I scared him!” Chomper added with a toothy grin.

“But Littlefoot was hurt quite badly at that time already, quite hurt he was,” Ruby said apprehensively. “I quickly gathered some healing leaves against bleeding and tried to patch him up as good as I could since that’s all I could do.”

“It was a brutal assault; I... had to watch it all…” Ali said in a meek voice. “I was so glad when the others finally arrived because I-I couldn’t have stopped Rhett…”

“So, what you are saying is that Littlefoot has been attacked by another longneck that’s a member of your herd, Ali?” Grandpa Longneck questioned the girl in a calm but pointed voice.

“Y-yes, that’s what happened,” Ali replied a little shyly, hoping that the old dinosaurs wouldn’t see through her lie. It was then that the others jumped in to help make the tale more credible.

“We couldn’t leave him alone when he was so hurt so we spent the night with him instead of returning home,” Cera explained matter-of-factly.

“Yeah, and we were all too shocked to think about sending one of us to let you know about the incident until now, yes we were…” Ducky sighed.

“Well, again, I thank you kids for bringing him here,” Grandpa Longneck sighed as he began to realize what this situation would likely require. He felt anger rising inside him, an emotion he rarely used by someone had injured his grandson quite gravely, how grave he couldn’t yet fathom, and this Rhett dinosaur wouldn’t get away with this atrocity.

“We will need to set a lot of things into motion immediately so I am asking for a few things now.” The old longneck took a deep breath and exhaled in a profound sigh.

“Grandma, please take him back to our nest and take good care of him as I handle the rest.”

Grandma Longneck nodded solemnly, walking up to the sleeping boy and gently wrapping her tail around him to lift him onto her back with little effort, although she didn’t leave just yet.

“Ruby, you will run to the small watering hole that’s not far from the Threehorn’s nest,” Grandpa instructed in a stern voice. “Wait until the parents of your friends return and relay them the message that everyone is safe and found, however due to Littlefoot’s injury, a meeting will have to be called immediately. Petrie’s mother will know what to do.”

Ruby nodded and departed immediately from the scene, living up to her species’ name.

“Kids, you will have to stick around me until further notice since you are the only ones who have seen what has happened to Littlefoot,” he spoke with a heavy sigh. “Your word will be needed in the meeting.”

“Does that mean…” Cera prompted.

“Is Rhett g-going to be in trouble?” Ali asked shyly.

“Of course he is!” Ali’s mother had been quietly observing the conversation until now. “Attacking someone from our generous hosts like that… Old One will be furious to hear about this…”

“I was about to ask you, could you arrange a meeting with your leader? I would like to discuss things with Old One before putting Rhett to trial for his actions…”

“Putting him… to trial?” Ducky gasped.

“He has done a terrible, atrocious thing!” Ali’s mother growled. “I should have informed Old One right way after Ali told me about his suspicious behavior…”

“We may be biased since this is affecting our family,” Grandma spoke in a tired voice. “But this sort of behavior simply can’t be tolerated in a place like the Great Valley where we all live together in relative harmony and peace.”

“I absolutely agree,” Ali’s mother sighed in exasperation. “Well, if you’d like to follow me, I’m going to arrange an audience with our leader immediately.”

“That would be much appreciated,” Grandpa said in an appreciative way. “Kids, you must be tired after carrying our Littlefoot all the way down here, hop on, don’t be shy.”

“Oh, that is very kind, yes it is!” Ducky cheered, immediately taking the offer and climbing the old longneck’s tail, followed by Petrie, Chomper and Spike. Cera seemed to be conflicted for a few seconds before she, too, took the offer with a grain of salt.

“If my dad sees me riding on a longneck, he’s going to kick me out of the family…” she muttered much to the amusement of everyone present. Now only Ali remained rooted on the spot.

“I think he invited you too, dear,” her mother spoke, giving her daughter a soft nudge. “Unless, would you rather ride on me?”

Ali was a little unsure about riding on Littlefoot’s grandfather who she’d just barely met but, compared to riding on her mother which was nothing short of embarrassing, she eventually chose to trot over to the elderly longneck and climb up too.

“It is perfectly fine, I owe all of you that Littlefoot isn’t in an even worse shape right now,” Grandpa Longneck spoke, attempting to smile despite the grave situation. As a matter of fact, a little chuckle was just what he needed at the moment.

“And, moreover, I have a feeling that Ali might one day be family…maybe we should get acquainted.”

“Well, that’s certainly true,” Cera mused, stifling a giggle while Ali’s face took on a very dark shade of pink.

“Well, I’m going to tag along as well,” Grandma spoke, her gaze resting on the sleeping longneck on her back. “I believe Old One may want to see Littlefoot to have a better judgement of the situation. He should be comfortable on my back for now.”

“Alright, let’s go then.”

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Here's the next chapter, a rather uneventful one to be frank. This is basically the transition from the fight to its consequences...  :opetrie

As always, let me know if something's odd :)

And since I failed to respond in time, here are some late responses  :duckyhappy


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Now, this wasn’t the most LBT-style chapter there is. While the situation was rather well-built, I still couldn’t quite picture any of this happening. Yet, the fight itself was well-written and it certainly carried a lot of emotion and suspense in it. I quite liked how you made the fight that long as it allowed some real drama to be built in it which certainly is an important factor in a story like this.

In the end, the battle was more or less a stalemate which was bit of a surprise after this kind of a struggle. It remains to be seen just how the Valley will react to what has happened even if it seems at this point that there will be some tension coming between Ali’s herd and the Valley. Yet, it’s quite clear that the Gang isn’t going to give up and it’s only right they want to undo Rhett’s plot.

While the fight was built well, I had a few problems with this chapter as well. While most of the dialogue was done well, there was also stuff like “FEEL OUR PAIN, RHETT!!!” which sounded just goofy. Likewise, even if I’ve disagreed with Rhett’s characterization before, his comments here were just… something absolutely nobody would say. I had a hard time taking that fight seriously after that exchange as Rhett didn’t even feel like a character at all but some cartoony archetype of some evil dude. None of that was believable at all.

That being said, the future is full of tension and it remains to be seen whether Rhett will get what he deserves. It was surprising that there weren’t more immediate effects from this fight but it’s starting to look quite clear that there is a wider conflict brewing inside the Valley. Yet, it remains to be seen how it’ll all turn out for our main characters.
Thank you for your review, I kinda forgot that I planned to respond to this, sorry  :angel

I'm just taking a rather extreme route for Rhett here. You may consider that episode of his canon but I certainly don't haha. The story certainly has a bit of a crackfic character by now but it's largely written to be serious or else I wouldn't bother with all this character development :P

I'm really glad that you liked the writing of the fight though. The stalemate only suggests that the conflict hasn't been resolved yet, doesn't it? I think it would be devastating if Rhett had won this entirely. He had the physical victory but the gang scored a mental victory on Littlefoot's behalf and their next battle is just around the corner. Indeed, this is a bit larger than it first seemed :)


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Review of chapter 6:

Oh man is Rhett so insufferable in this story!  His possessive fixation on Ali is one that only highlights his own inner emptiness that he feels the need to fill through dominating others.  Though he is an orphan and thus is an object of some pity, his lack of empathy and actual malice does make the gang's reaction (and Littlefoot's willingness to fight him) all the more understandable. 

I do wish that the inner struggle within Littlefoot concerning accepting the challenge was elaborated on a little more, however, as I could see him perhaps questioning his own motives after accepting it.  This could show that his own rationality was being dampened by the deepening love between him and Ali.  Though I do not share the reservations of the others concerning the mild swearing as my understanding of this story is that the gang is getting a bit older here.  So perhaps some loosening of their language (and additional hormones in the case of a certain longneck) is to be expected.

Now on to the challenge itself...

Thank you very much for the reviews, rhombus  :duckyhappy

What you say about Rhett is really accurate. He's actually a poor loser without friends and without a family. Ali's only hanging around with him due to the lack of a better option as she, too, doesn't have any real friends in her herd (as far as we know).

Littlefoot is indeed rather quick to accept and you're right to criticize that. I've had him thinking about the conflict with Rhett in chapter 4 I believe but at that point a fight wasn't that obvious yet. I've decided that everyone involved should rather do the questioning after the deed has been done so a lot of this elaboration is actually yet to come in the chapters to follow  :yes You're absolutely right that some hormones are having a small contribution here as puberty is around the corner for these guys.

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Review of Chapter 7:

Well, I hate to be a bit of a downer, but I must admit that I have some mixed feelings about this chapter. 

The overall interactions are believable enough considering the characterizations of Rhett thus far and what he has placed Littlefoot and Ali through, and the pacing did indeed fit the scene well, but there were some lingering issues that continuously took me out of the flow of the narrative.  The first major issue was the confusion concerning the rules of the battle.  Like Anagnos I was originally under the impression that it was going to be an absolute free-for-all, but then the mentioning of rules confused me a bit.  As the exchange of blows began in the chapter my confusion was swiftly forgotten, but it was something that briefly took me out of the story.

The second issue was the use of all caps, which I think would have been better served by using normal font but then describing the intonation and volume of the voices, and thus flow better with the rest of the description.  On a related note some of this screamed dialogue was worded quite oddly. “DON’T YOU DARE CALLING THEM STUPID!!!” For example, does not make grammatical sense. It should be phrased as "Don't you dare call them stupid!" 

The last issue had to deal with the actual content of the dialogue, especially in the case of Rhett.  Though sometimes the actual hurling of insults in an altercation would not be the most coherent set of words, his dialogue just seemed really off in the fight itself.  The utter lack of control and hiding of his base desires is not really something that matches the characterization of Rhett in the lone television episode in which he appears.  In the previous chapters there was at least an attempt to cloak his mannerisms in some veneer of knowing Ali's best interest better than herself, but in this chapter he seems to just completely drop this and to become even more uncontrolled than Sierra - the only canon depiction of a character that could be called sociopathic.

That being said the events of this chapter does create some serious tensions going forward which will be interesting to see.  For one, we do not quite know how banged up Littlefoot is and what, if any, his permanent injuries might be from this conflict.  Secondly, the gang's plan is going forward with the fact that the Old One will be forced to act now... but I do wonder what the full implications of what will happen now has been fully considered by the gang.  With questions like this still remaining to be answered, I do look forward to seeing how things develop from here.  :yes

Nothing wrong with being honest  :exactly

I think it's hard to judge a character after just one episode of screentime and a poor episode at that which screwed over Ali as a character in all its entirety. Ali would have never (reasonably) made friends with some dude like Rhett, not after the character traits that she's been given in LBT 4.

I'll be honest, I never bought Rhett's character. Not at all. I didn't buy his apparent change of heart at the end either. That's why he's such a moron in this story because that's the kind of character I saw in him. The tv-series couldn't show his more extreme characteristics of  course due to the target age of viewers and all but I think a long time of constant rejection by Ali (as far as his romantic interests are concerned) paired with a terrible childhood (something I want to elaborate on later in the story) are quite believable reasons for him to snap like this. Of course, and I'm not denying it, I am exaggerating somewhat. But you'll see that Rhett has shown the worst he has to offer now. I may be writing him as a moron without hope of redeeming himself but that's not true. He'll get some development in the 2nd arc of the story.

I hope the explanation I gave to Anagnos concerning the rules has since cleared your confusion or do I need to elaborate on it?

Oh snap, thanks for pointing out that grammatical error, I'll correct it :) (apparently my proofreader didn't spot this then, hmm... :P )

Rhett is unstable enough to start harassing Ali because she's not acting as he wishes, that's why he is acting so harsh towards her even though she's the girl of his dreams. He's absolutely losing control over himself over the course of the confrontation. At first his language is mostly meant to intimidate and mock but towards the end he is just super mad. I mean, the gang really pulled a nasty stunt on him, he just kinda snapped at some point. I am aware of the unspoken rule not to use caps more than necessary but it's simply one of the best ways to convey extreme emotion in my opinion. It feels more aggressive and violent and since that's the overall tone of the chapter I think it's not entirely unjustified here. Chapter 10 of SDP had a similarly explosive mood and I used caps there as well. I don't think anyone complained about it  :thinking

The tension has certainly reached its preliminary climax for now and the next chapters should indeed reveal the direction the story is going to take  :yes


Just one more comment since everyone seems to be bashing on my writing of Rhett. I might as well start rewriting this or scrap the story mid-way but I'm not changing my characterization of Rhett, it's my personal interpretation of his character and it's not really my fault if yours is a little different. Give me a chance to show you what I have in mind for later, I'm sure you'll end up seeing things a bit different when this story concludes.

Also, I honestly suggest writing a story with Rhett as a MC where he's actually a good guy. It hasn't been done and it's just as likely or unlikely as my interpretation :)
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While the chapter was uneventful for the most part, it is completely comprehensible considering what the previous chapters have brought to the table as of lately, so there’s really not much to criticize about the newest chapter. I did have some mixed feelings about the chapter overall, but for the most part it worked decently.

The aftermath of the duel was pretty much what I’d expect from your words about the next chapter being more on the peaceful side of things, and while that is not necessarily a bad thing, the pacing and the procession of the narrative were noticeable issues, although not major ones. That and the use of CAPS in the early parts of the story did cause me to feel a bit despondent. All of that is by no means due to the overall plot, but of the current pacing we have. I have no doubt that once things pick up on more drama and conflict, then things will get interesting. However, for now it remains to be seen whether this can be pulled off accordingly. I have the utmost trust in your ability to do just that.

What I liked about the chapter was sort of said earlier. Even if the pace of the story is going slowly again, I do think that is a good plan for now as action tends to wear out after a while if done repeatedly. The other thing I enjoyed was the extend of Littlefoot’s injuries brought to a clearer light, and the descriptions for that worked relatively well. The Gang’s idea of carrying Littlefoot, while it might have been a bit silly, was probably the only conceivable option available, as it was precisely told in the narrative that there was no other option, so I will let that slide. The reactions of Littlefoot’s grandparents were pretty much expected to be quite violent and unforgiving, which didn’t overly disappoint me, but I would certainly pay more attention to the dialogue itself, as especially in the rock circle meeting it didn’t really provide enough tension not only for the story itself, but for the reader. And that is something I highly believe is a key to a successful story.

Like you said about the chapter yourself, while it might have been a rather uneventful one, the upcoming backlash that Rhett is about to face all by himself, as I really do not see anyone defending him after this fiasco, will set the groundwork for future engagements and will be quite an interesting development. Albeit, they will probably be a bit more bloody compared to what we have seen thus far, could potentially turn around the plot into something much more intriguing. For now, I remain interested for the future plot developments, but this story definitely needs a big boost in order to prosper. I am confident that we will see exactly that at some point.
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Thank you very much for the review :)

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While the chapter was uneventful for the most part, it is completely comprehensible considering what the previous chapters have brought to the table as of lately, so there’s really not much to criticize about the newest chapter. I did have some mixed feelings about the chapter overall, but for the most part it worked decently.

I think a calmer chapter was just what the story needed at this point, yep. You can't power through a lot of stuff like that without giving people time to breathe lol  :^^spike

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The aftermath of the duel was pretty much what I’d expect from your words about the next chapter being more on the peaceful side of things, and while that is not necessarily a bad thing, the pacing and the procession of the narrative were noticeable issues, although not major ones.
Could you elaborate on the pacing issues? I don't really get why you and Sovereign are always picking on pacing lately but I'd like to know what I should have done or could have done to avoid the issue. I'll just have to check back with my concept to see if it could be implemented like that. If you're pointing out these things, please be a little more specific if you can, otherwise I just feel like I did something wrong without knowing what exactly it is  :o

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That and the use of CAPS in the early parts of the story did cause me to feel a bit despondent.
I believe I already made a comment regarding this issue on the last chapter. I'm aware that it's frowned upon by some but, personally, I think it's just a very useful tool to convey extreme anger and loud screaming in a fight. It's fine if you don't use it but that's just a stylistic choice in my view :)

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I have no doubt that once things pick up on more drama and conflict,
Uhm, this was supposed to have hit the climax in chapter 7 :P For the first arc of the story anyway. Needless to say, we're sailing towards more drama so I'm guessing that's what you meant here  :lol

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However, for now it remains to be seen whether this can be pulled off accordingly. I have the utmost trust in your ability to do just that.
Gee, thanks  :)littlefoot

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What I liked about the chapter was sort of said earlier. Even if the pace of the story is going slowly again, I do think that is a good plan for now as action tends to wear out after a while if done repeatedly.
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The other thing I enjoyed was the extend of Littlefoot’s injuries brought to a clearer light, and the descriptions for that worked relatively well.
Oh, if you liked that, you'll like the coming chapter of my LBT 1 novellization a lot. Considering that I'm currently aiming to work in the medical field, I have acquired quite some knowledge which I can try to apply to my stories wherever it can be implemented. I'm happy that you liked that :)

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The Gang’s idea of carrying Littlefoot, while it might have been a bit silly, was probably the only conceivable option available, as it was precisely told in the narrative that there was no other option, so I will let that slide.
I was debating for quite a bit how to handle this. I was considering that the gang could try to drag him down by surrounding him on all sides, making it impossible for him to fall while walking, but I felt like that would be rather poor in the execution  :sducky I went with that idea instead after remembering how they used to carry Chomper's egg in LBT 2.

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The reactions of Littlefoot’s grandparents were pretty much expected to be quite violent and unforgiving, which didn’t overly disappoint me, but I would certainly pay more attention to the dialogue itself, as especially in the rock circle meeting it didn’t really provide enough tension not only for the story itself, but for the reader. And that is something I highly believe is a key to a successful story.
I don't quite understand what you mean here. Can you elaborate? Was their reaction too harsh or too weak? Grandpa might be the kind of person who can keep his emotions in check in such a moment but I think that goes a little less so for  Grandma. Grandma's reaction is a little more extreme as a result.

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Like you said about the chapter yourself, while it might have been a rather uneventful one, the upcoming backlash that Rhett is about to face all by himself, as I really do not see anyone defending him after this fiasco, will set the groundwork for future engagements and will be quite an interesting development. Albeit, they will probably be a bit more bloody compared to what we have seen thus far, could potentially turn around the plot into something much more intriguing. For now, I remain interested for the future plot developments, but this story definitely needs a big boost in order to prosper. I am confident that we will see exactly that at some point.
I shall hope so, although I still don't see how the fight between Rhett and Littlefoot isn't a big boost already?  :thinking

I hope to get chapter 9 ready by sunday.
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This was a pretty solid chapter even if it left me with a bit worried feeling. While it’s good to see that the grown-ups have agreed that Rhett has to be punished, the fact that it took a chapter for us to approach that point makes me believe that the coming punishment won’t necessarily be as easily imposed as it should be. I’m quite sure there will be untasteful surprises in the store in the upcoming trial.

Ali’s nightmare was written solidly and it was very easy to share her horror and despair about Littlefoot’s fate. I’m not exactly sure about whether that scene was really needed but it showed how things would have been if the battle’s outcome had been different. As for the next scenes, I’m happy to see Littlefoot will be alright even if he is seriously wounded.

However, it is the next scene that left me puzzled. Of course it makes sense that the grown-ups are shocked by the news but it would make little sense for the structure of the story to have this chapter included if everything went smoothly. Considering your version about Ali’s herd, it seems likely that many of them, including the Old One, will defend Rhett and who knows what happens after that. That is my main takeaway here and it’ll be intriguing to see how the speculated meeting will actually go.




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Chapter 9: Prelude to the Trial

As they walked, Ali’s mother began to have second thoughts about bringing Littlefoot’s friends along. For one thing, she knew that Old One didn’t like dinosaurs of other kinds and, although she kind of agreed with that mindset, she wasn’t quite as fanatical about it as Old One. Mingling with other dinosaurs was something the herd could usually avoid on their travels, however it was impossible to stay entirely among themselves in a place like the Great Valley where all kinds of dinosaurs were living together in peace and harmony; a lifestyle she probably wouldn’t enjoy to be fair. The only reason why they had stopped by the Great Valley on their annual migration route was the sheer abundance of food and water.

The group walked quietly, passing by many members of Ali’s herd until, at last, Old One came into view, engaged in conversation with some of the higher-ranked longnecks of her herd. Ali’s mother was met with scornful glares as she cleared her throat to address Old One and gain their attention.

“Old One, there is something that requires your immediate attention,” she said in a humble voice, bowing slightly in a respectful manner, a gesture that Littlefoot’s grandparents replicated immediately. Old One strafed them with a look of utter annoyance as she, reluctantly, interrupted the meeting with the elders of her herd.

“What is it? I am busy, can’t you see that?!” the old female barked, however, as soon as she recognized Littlefoot’s grandparents as representatives of the Great Valley, her tone shifted somewhat. “Oh, excuse me; is there something the Valley wishes to discuss with me? We could arrange an audience later but, right now…”

Suddenly, Old One spotted the children resting on top of Grandpa Longneck and her reaction was pretty much as fierce as Ali’s mother had feared.

“Why are these outsiders here?!” she barked, wearing a disgusted look as it dawned on her who these children were. “I do not converse with non-longnecks, even less so silly children who lead children of my herd astray! Valley elders, what’s the meaning of this? I humbly demand an explanation!”

“I am terribly sorry to intrude,” Grandpa Longneck spoke in a respectful voice which, however, carried a hint of urgency. “There is an urgent matter we must discuss with you, Old One. Here and now, if possible.” He bowed his long neck slightly, awaiting the old female’s answer.

“Given that I am in the middle of an important meeting, I daresay your urgent matters can wait until we have concluded,” the old dinosaur frowned, however the elders signaled quickly that they were okay with the interruption. Old One gave a sigh in response. “Well, keep it brief then.”

“Thank you,” Grandpa spoke, bowing again. “Last night, our grandson was attacked in the vicinity of the nesting grounds that you are currently using while spending time with Ali and his friends here.” He pointed to the group of children with his long neck. “Reportedly, a boy, member of your herd according to young Ali here, has attacked my grandson Littlefoot and injured him gravely. These children are witness to the scene, thus I brought them along.”

“Are they credible?” Old One frowned, stepping closer to inspect Ali and Littlefoot’s friends who backed away slightly. “As you should know, children have a habit of making things up as they please. That threehorn looks suspicious to me and don’t get me started on that sharptooth.”

“I can assure you that these children are to be believed, Old One,” Grandpa reassured. “Grandma and I have known them for a long time; they wouldn’t lie, not when their friend is in such a grave situation.”

“Oh really? Well, I am highly doubting that,” Old One said nonchalantly.

“My daughter is among them, Old One, and I believe her report entirely,” Ali’s mother claimed in response, only to be barked at immediately.

“Did I give you permission to speak?!” Old One reprimanded with a look of anger. “Well, anyway, who do you target with your scheme? Who is the culprit you are suspecting?”

“It’s Rhett! Rhett did it!!!” Ali suddenly cried out loud. “Rhett has hurt Littlefoot!”

“I did not grant you permission to speak either, geez!” Old One thundered in obvious enragement. “I daresay those kids are making up a lot of nonsense! You are wasting my time!”

“Old One, if I may speak…” Grandma Longneck joined the conversation, also bowing respectfully as she addressed the angry leader in a tired voice. “My grandson is currently sleeping on my back as we speak. Maybe you would like to take a look at him?”

“Hrm, I might as well…” Old One said with a grunt that would have made Mr. Threehorn rather proud, approaching the female and taking a good look at Littlefoot.

“Hmm, he has been roughed up quite sincerely,” she noted with a pondering expression. “I was under the impression that the kids might have wanted to cover up an unfortunate accident but those are undoubtedly injuries inflicted by another dinosaur. Neither that biter nor the hornface can inflict such injuries but…” Her angry and annoyed look gradually shifted as her observation concluded with a significant realization. “A longneck certainly could inflict such injuries. Our tails are quite capable after all.”

Ali noted with a side glance that Cera was suppressing some anger at Old One’s rather rude comment, however the threehorn managed to keep her calm.

“Well, even then,” Old One continued. “There are a lot of longnecks in the Great Valley. Why do you think one of the children in my herd, few as there may be, is responsible for this? As far as I am concerned, all I have is the word of these children and that is not a lot…”

“I, too, only have the word of these children,” Grandpa admitted, slightly distracted. “However, I believe it is better to assume that what they say holds some value rather than dismissing the incident as nonsense. At the very least, we should investigate and consider all options we have.”

“Right, and it is only understandable that you are looking for an answer,” Old One said with a sigh. “I am curious as well because in the unlikely case that you are indeed correct about your accusations, it would have unpleasant reverberations for my herd and its reputation. Therefore, it is my duty to investigate this!”

“Rest assured, no one in the Valley would hold you responsible for the deeds of a single individual,” Grandpa proclaimed in response. “Your herd is one of the most decent migrating herds that we know after all.”

“That is good to know,” Old One spoke while bowing in a dignified manner. “Well, I suppose we should get started then. What steps do you propose, Valley elders?”

“Perhaps, we should summon the boy so we can interrogate him ourselves,” Grandma suggested.

“Yes, perhaps…” Old One said, hesitating. The more she gave the matter some thought, the more she began to believe those longnecks and, although she didn’t want to admit it, it wasn’t that unlikely that the injuries she had seen were indeed linked to a member of her herd.

“So… you were accursing a boy named Rhett, correct?”

“Precisely,” Grandpa nodded.

“Very well,” Old One spoke with a voice that held a lot of authority. Turning to the elders who were still present, she announced. “Since we can’t continue our meeting at this rate, let us continue later. I shall task you with the mission to find Rhett and bring him here at once. I shall interrogate him myself. Go!”

The longnecks scattered at once, dashing off to do as they had been ordered. Old One sighed. If Rhett was indeed responsible for attacking the grandson of the Valley elders, no less, then this would hurt her reputation as well as the reputation of her entire herd, regardless of what the two elderly longnecks were claiming. She had to make sure that such an event wouldn’t occur but, at the same time, she was also a person of justice. If she found Rhett to be guilty indeed, she already knew what to do with him. Sighing once more, she addressed Grandpa and Grandma Longneck again.

“While we’re waiting, what makes you so sure that Rhett is the culprit? I will need more proof that your sheer word to believe you.”

*

Rhett was still brooding when, suddenly, he heard thundering footsteps approaching his hideout.

“Who is it? Are they looking for me, the awesome Rhett?” he pondered but that was when a rather stern-looking face suddenly broke through the bushes. It was one of the elders of his herd.

“Follow me, Old One wants to see you…”

Rhett deadpanned. What did that old hag want from him? Knowing Old One, it was more than likely something he couldn’t care less about, not when there were more important matters to take care of.

“Why?” he simply demanded.

“It is an order!” the elder shouted fiercely.

“But I don’t want to, duh,” Rhett deadpanned. Suddenly, he was ungently being grabbed by his tail and lifted high into the air.

“You shall come with me, insolent boy!” the grown-up exclaimed in obvious annoyance, struggling to keep the boy aloft who was struggling to free himself while cursing audibly.

“Let me go, damn it!” But, no matter how much he struggled, Rhett was carried away from his nesting spot.

*

“We cannot say for certain who the culprit behind the hideous attack on our grandson is,” Grandpa elaborated upon being asked by Old One. “We do not even know the kid that Littlefoot’s friends here are accusing.”

“Perhaps you could tell us a little bit about the boy?” Grandma Longneck requested in a neutral voice.

“Sure,” Old One grunted, wearing an indecipherable expression. “Although, I do not know an awful lot about the boy. You must know, our herd underwent a merger with another, smaller herd of longnecks shortly before we visited the Great Valley during the previous season. Rhett was part of them although he has neither parents nor any other relatives taking care of him – and he does not have anyone looking after him as far as I am informed either.”

“In other words, he is an orphan?” Grandpa inquired, exchanging a meaningful glance with Grandma.

“Precisely,” Old One grunted. “He has been known to make up far-fetched stories with little truth behind them but, otherwise, he hasn’t caused my herd any trouble whatsoever. Thus, I am a little hesitant to believe that he is behind this attack to tell you quite frankly.”

“Has he shown any tendencies of violence before?” Grandma wondered in mild curiosity.

“No such reports were made,” the old dinosaur answered curtly.

“I see,” Grandpa commented. “Old One, you did claim though not to know much about the boy,” Grandpa then pointed out hesitantly. “Please do not misunderstand me, I mean no offense, but could it be that you simply do not know him well enough to judge him fairly?”

“I do not take offense in stating the obvious,” Old One admitted grudgingly after a short moment of pondering. “But neither can you judge him fairly.”

“That is quite correct,” Grandpa answered with a small smile. “Perhaps I have misunderstood things but, unless I haven’t, Ali might know a little more about the boy?”

Ali looked at the grown-ups anxiously before nodding in a shy manner.

“Ali, dear, could you tell us a little more about Rhett?” Grandma kindly asked with a smile.

“S-sure, I guess,” Ali said uncertainly, although reassured by the kind faces of the two elderly longnecks.

“That is a good idea,” Old One piped up. “Although, you should only state facts, Ali. This is not the time to be biased – and judging by your earlier reaction, your bias against Rhett must be quite severe.”

“That is an understatement…” Ali thought grimly but, nonetheless, she decided to give it a try lest Old One found a reason to reprimand her.

“Okay,” the girl replied before briefing Littlefoot’s grandparents. “Rhett is indeed an orphan. Soon after the herd merger, he started to hang around me a lot and he’s become a friend, sort of… “Ali explained. “See, Rhett is a dinosaur who is very full of himself – he brags a lot and makes up stuff about himself that he didn’t actually do. He also lies a lot.” Just at that moment, Ali realized that she could lay the groundwork for their scheme against Rhett here as her description of Rhett might very well convince Littlefoot’s Grandparents and Old One that Rhett isn’t a very good dinosaur after all.

“We still had some fun; it was better than being alone for sure. The big issue with him though is that he takes claim of me as his future mate and… I think his attack on Littlefoot may have been about that… since I spent a lot of time with Littlefoot since we arrived here while I cast Rhett aside… and… since we… kinda like each other.”

Ali could feel her cheeks blush slightly as practically everyone had their eyes on her but she attempted to carry on as usual as not to impact the image of Rhett she was trying to draw.

“I didn’t know that Rhett could be so… violent; I thought that he simply had an idiotic side to him – l-like many boys do, but he has been acting strange ever since we arrived here…”

“Are you saying that this Rhett boy has targeted our Littlefoot because he is being jealous?” Grandma Longneck questioned with growing worry.

“As a matter of fact, it can hardly be denied that our Littlefoot and Ali here are rather close friends, almost so close that I am considering introducing her to the family.” Ali was blushing severely as Grandpa threw in a mirthful comment despite the serious situation they were in. “It is therefore not too far-fetched to assume that Rhett may have seen Littlefoot as a rival and attacked him when he was spending time alone with Ali,” Grandpa Longneck further elaborated.

“That’s true,” Ali confirmed, still red around the cheeks. “Littlefoot and I are very good friends – actually…” she blushed slightly again. “Maybe we’re even a liiittle closer than that but Rhett thinks I’m something that belongs only to him! That’s not even love; he just wants me to belong to him! He’s been thinking nonsense like that, particularly since we’ve arrived here!”

“Well, if what you are saying is true, Ali, then Rhett might have viewed Littlefoot as a rival. While an extreme measure, it would explain his motives quite well,” Grandpa added thoughtfully.

“I hate to admit it but your claims concerning Rhett are now a lot more believable,” Old One said grudgingly. “Though, a rivalry between boys is nothing unheard of and something that lies in the nature of males. A male fighting another male over a female isn’t unlawful. It’s a natural instinct and an effective method to ensure that the strongest and fittest give rise to healthy children. Not every herd practices those traditions anymore though.”

“We certainly do not,” Grandpa said rather sternly.

“And they’re children! They’re too young to fight over females!” Grandma Longneck cried.

“And, moreover, I think the children reported an assault, not a traditional fight,” Ali’s mother added.

“It is certainly unusual to perform these fights prior to the Time of Great Growing, that’s true,” Old One mused, soon brushing these thoughts aside, however, to interrogate Ali. “Please confirm: Was it an unprovoked attack or a scheduled fight between the two?”

Ali gulped. Old One was getting to the core of the problem and everything depended on how well she would be able to sell their fabricated version of the tale. Her uneasiness about lying was threatening to overwhelm her but her feelings for Littlefoot and her hate of Rhett were emotions strong enough for the girl to overcome these obstacles.

“That’s right!” Ali shouted with a fierce expression. “He attacked without warning. If the others hadn’t shown up eventually… he might have killed him!” She tried to withstand Old One’s penetrating stare with as much earnest as she could muster, enduring the critical gazes of all other grown-ups present as well if just barely. “Rhett came rushing in, shouted that he wouldn’t allow an idiot like him to steal his girl and attacked without warning. Of course, Littlefoot tried to defend himself – a-and I was too scared to do anything because they were so wild that I was afraid of getting hurt by accident. Anyway, at some point my friends arrived – we were all planning to meet up last night to watch the lights on the night sky from a good location. They chased Rhett away but Littlefoot was already badly hurt…”

Old One listened to her tale with utmost care and Ali could almost hear the old dinosaur’s brain work behind those stern eyes staring at her small form.

“Can you absolutely tell that it wasn’t a fight they agreed on?” the old longneck inquired. “As you should know, it is tradition that males duel each other if they both desire the same female. Perhaps you might have overlooked that?”

Ali began to panic; how was she supposed to wriggle out of the situation without revealing that she wasn’t telling the truth?

“I-I cannot rule it out, b-but…”

“With due respect, our Littlefoot would never agree to such a challenge,” Grandma Longneck declared in a tired voice. “He is always trying to solve conflicts with words; I highly doubt that he would agree to such a duel, even if provoked.”

“Kids, have you seen any signs of Rhett talking Littlefoot into such a duel?” Grandpa wondered, addressing the group of children on his back as well as Ali with a serious gaze.

“We did not notice anything, oh no no no,” Ducky was the first to speak up, everyone else quickly nodding and solidifying the swimmer’s lie.

“Yeah, we’ve been together most of the time,” Cera added with a shrug.

“Littlefoot was just as surprised as I was when Rhett showed up,” Ali answered quickly before Old One could formulate another counter-question. “We’ve been together for most of the time so I doubt Rhett could have talked to Littlefoot privately without any of us noticing. He has been trying to join our games of course but we didn’t want him to join and told him to go away, though he still stalked us.”

“My daughter told me about the stalking so I took Rhett with me the other day to take care of some duties, though it seems like he was later able to track them down anyway,” Ali’s mother explained in support of her daughter’s words. “I, too, have noticed the almost unhealthy degree of worship that Rhett is showing around Ali and I believe that Rhett might have snapped after seeing my Ali being friendly with another boy.”

“Thank you,” Old One said as some ruckus began to break out from the nearby bushes. “I think our guest is arriving now. We shall have answers soon enough I daresay.”

*

After what felt like an eternity, the elder who had dragged him along dropped Rhett to the ground at last where he found himself facing Old One as well as…

“What is Ali doing here?! What is this!?” Confused about the situation and seeing two more unfamiliar longnecks who were giving him rather stern looks, as well as… ”What?! These insolent kids too?!” Rhett began to feel uneasy on top of being extremely pissed upon spotting Littlefoot’s friends as well. Though, ultimately, he didn’t get the right idea about what was actually going on. Not yet.

“Why am I being dragged here?!” Rhett demanded even before Old One had begun to speak.

“You do not speak unless being asked while standing in front of me!” Old One shouted immediately, making Rhett jerk slightly in response though he didn’t quite submit to his leader. “I have summoned you to ask a few questions. Cooperate and I surmise we will be done rather soon.”

“Tsk, what do you want then, Old One?” Rhett grunted dismissively, failing to show any respect for the old longneck who gave him a rather meaningful scorn.

“I do not quite want to drag this conversation myself so I am going to get right to the point.” Old One’s gaze rested on Rhett, scrutinizing him and his body, covered in smaller injuries and, for whatever reason, a ton of bee stings.
“You look like you’ve had a fight, Rhett. Please tell me all about it.”

“Not spilling the beans yet?” Ali blinked. The girl was extremely tense, hoping for Rhett to get into trouble as planned. The fact that Old One wasn’t immediately accusing him puzzled her for a moment until she came up with a plausible explanation.

“Oh, maybe she is trying to coax Rhett into admitting that he’s hurt Littlefoot before he realizes that he’s actually in trouble! She’s trying to use Rhett’s tendency to brag to get past his tendency to lie. Impressive!”

And Ali wouldn’t be wrong. Indeed, Old One’s facial expression changed into a faint grin as Rhett took the bait she had planted in her cunning move to get Rhett to tell her the truth without realizing it.

“Well yeah, there’s this dumbass who’s been hanging around Ali lately,” Rhett blurted out while flexing his muscles, ignoring the pain that move caused him. “As you should know, Ali will be my mate when I grow up so I had to make sure that dumbass wasn’t going to steal her from me. I gave him the beating of his lifetime, ha!”

While Rhett was bragging, Old One merely raised a brow as his statements left her rather unimpressed.

“I see. How did you get stung by bees so severely? Is that related to your fight?”

“Ah, well, a hive of those bastards fell from a tree when I shoved that idiot into it. Fell right onto me, such a pain!” Rhett declared, still oblivious to the purpose of the questioning. However, that was about to change.

“Very well, Rhett,” Old One spoke, suddenly with a lot more authority. “I shall get to the point now. The Great Valley has reported that one of their children has been injured and several children are claiming that it was you.”

Ali watched with sudden pleasure how the brag was instantly wiped from Rhett’s face.

“Considering the answer you just gave me, I have little reason to doubt that you were behind this.”

“W-What?” Rhett’s expression was completely frozen, his mouth gaping open in shock. “Am I in trouble? It was a traditional duel!”

“I am going to have to apologize to you for not believing you,” Old One spoke with a sudden hint of regret and tiredness in her voice as she addressed Littlefoot’s grandparents. “I think there is no doubt that he has attacked your grandson.”

“This dumbass has grandparents? And they’re after me now? What the heck?!”

“Unless you have a very convincing alibi, Rhett, you shall consider yourself under arrest until further notice. That is all.” Old One nodded towards the elders who immediately took a still speechless Rhett into custody.

“W-wait!” he yelled. “I’m sure this is a misunderstanding! Let me go!!!”

“A misunderstanding?” Old One cackled. “You just admitted quite blatantly that you have fought the grandson of the Valley elders unprovoked. Your reaction to seeing Ali and these… non-longneck children could not have been more obvious! You shall be on standby until I have discussed the course of action the Valley is going to take!”

“But!”

“You are no longer my responsibility, Rhett. You have brought dishonor to my herd and upset the Great Valley grievously. Whatever you have to say, you will have to tell the Great Valley about it. I am done with you. Take him away!”

And so, Rhett, struggling and cursing was being dragged out of sight and, soon, hearing range as well.

*

Ali could hardly contain herself. Seeing Rhett much deeper in trouble than she had ever been, made her feel extremely ecstatic. Long ago, she had been close to getting booted for her adventure in the Valley of Mists though the circumstances of her journey and the fact that she had done so with good intentions in mind had appeased Old One somewhat. But Rhett was in a much direr situation now, Old One sounding as if she was quite ready to boot Rhett from the herd, who now had the wrath of the Great Valley to go up against. If the boy hadn’t been acting like the biggest retard she had ever known, she might be feeling a little sorry but such emotions were completely wiped from her mind right now.

“He deserves it!”

The girl cast a quick look at the sleeping longneck on the back of the old longneck with the slightly lighter shade of grey that was Littlefoot’s grandmother.

“Get well soon please.”

*

Old One eventually released a mighty breath as if she had been holding it for a very long time before addressing Littlefoot’s grandparents.

“Now we have determined that you were right about the claims against the boy. What are your intentions now? Surely, I can understand that you are seeking justice.”

“It is custom for our Valley to hold a trial,” Grandpa explained in a tired voice which, however, also carried a hint of relief. “The Rock Circle, a group consisting of our most trusted and acknowledged residents which includes Grandma and myself as representatives for the longnecks, are judging the situation and decide upon a punishment if there’s one due. Rhett will have to speak up in front of the Circle and we must determine if he is indeed guilty and we shall determine the punishment that shall ensue.”

“Surely, any member of your Valley would be biased,” Old One pointed out sharply. “Not that it matters anymore but how do you determine that the judgement will be fair? From my experience, in a group, most dinosaurs easily follow the popular opinions regardless of their value which is why I, myself, am always judging alone on behalf of my herd.”

“The suspects shall speak their mind and so may anyone claiming that the suspect is guilty,” Grandpa explained matter-of-factly. “It is our duty to judge everyone equally, regardless of whether or not a dinosaur is a resident or what kind they belong to. There is no justice unless justice is done without prejudice.”

Old One took a few moments to weigh her opinions before responding to the old longneck.

“Very well, I shall believe you and put trust in your ability to judge the crime Rhett has obviously committed. I do have one question, however. I am assuming that I shall be the one to determine the punishment - if he is found to be guilty by the Valley, that is of course.”

“You are heartily invited to attend the trial with as many members of your herd as you deem necessary, Old One,” Grandpa answered immediately. “Though, I am sure you will understand that this is a tricky situation. I am certain of it that you are capable of doing exceptional judgement, however an attack on one of our own is an attack on all of us and, thus, we stand united in anything we do. I daresay that you should punish Rhett as you deem just, if he is found to be guilty, however we request that you allow the Valley to put him to trial.”

“In other words,” Grandma quickly amended when Old One’s expression began to grow foul. “What we decide during the Trial won’t interfere with your authority over the boy as head of the herd.”

“Yes, since Rhett is not a Valley resident, any punishment we might issue will only apply to the boy and not affect your herd in the slightest,” Grandpa explained, relieved when Old One’s expression eased up again.

“What kind of punishment is likely to be issued?” she inquired more calmly. “I shall allow the Valley to do judgement, however I shall not agree to imprisonment or death as a punishment. Rhett is still a member of my herd!”

“I think the most appropriate punishment shall be banishment from the Valley’s grounds,” Grandpa replied thoroughly.

“Yes, I also think that this would be a fair punishment,” Old One said with a scornful look. “Just imagine the amount of dishonour to my reputation if a member of my herd goes around smacking children of our hosts. Outrageous! Someone like that has no place in my herd!”

“At any rate, it seems to be the act of a stupid child without anyone to guide him,” Grandma sighed. “We wouldn’t blame your herd for the act of an individual.”

“Yes, that would be unjust,” Grandpa nodded.

“Very well, unless you have anything else to discuss, I suggest that you start preparing that trial for the boy,” Old One eventually said when silence began to reign between the old longnecks. “I shall assume that a messenger will be sent to inform me of the location and time once it is settled?”

“Naturally,” Grandpa responded with a slight bow. “Thank you for your patience, we shall take our leave now, Old One.”

“Right, see you later, valley elders.”

*

“What the fuck is this sharptooth crap?!”

Rhett found himself guarded by several longnecks in a rather dense part of the forest they were living in at the moment. He had just been informed by no less than Old One herself that he would have to speak up in front of the entirety of the Great Valley to defend himself and his deeds. Needless to say, he wasn’t quite amused.

“Who would care about some dumbass like him? I bloody challenged him according to the traditions; he bloody accepted. And he got bloody bloodied because he bloody sucks in comparison to me! Yes, that’s right! He’s a poor loser who deserves no less than a kick in the face!!!”

Rhett went on a furious inner rant; however none of this helped him in the current situation. No matter what he considered right or wrong, Old One and the Valley were apparently seeing the matter a little differently and that was a big problem, possibly even bigger on the scale than his girl Ali getting comfy with Littlefoot.

“Ali… she’s behind this.”
Rhett was fuming immediately. “Ali sold me out together with those insolent assholes of friends… That Littlefoot dumbass too! Oh they’re SO going to regret this!”

The boy continued to rage around for what felt like hours but, in the end, it always came down to the key questions again.

“How to get out of this unfortunate situation!?” Rhett didn’t know. All he knew was that if he didn’t come up with something, Ali would no longer be within his grasp and that was something he absolutely could not allow…

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This chapter was delayed quite significantly by a severe case of writer's block. I hope the overall quality of my writing didn't take a big hit but I'm pretty sure this chapter is not quite living up to my abilities as a writer.

So Rhett is now going to face trial and Old One has bought the story at last. In the next chapter, Rhett will have to defend himself in front of the Great Valley  :bolt


and now I'm extremely behind schedule, oof

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This was a pretty solid chapter even if it left me with a bit worried feeling. While it’s good to see that the grown-ups have agreed that Rhett has to be punished, the fact that it took a chapter for us to approach that point makes me believe that the coming punishment won’t necessarily be as easily imposed as it should be. I’m quite sure there will be untasteful surprises in the store in the upcoming trial.

Ali’s nightmare was written solidly and it was very easy to share her horror and despair about Littlefoot’s fate. I’m not exactly sure about whether that scene was really needed but it showed how things would have been if the battle’s outcome had been different. As for the next scenes, I’m happy to see Littlefoot will be alright even if he is seriously wounded.

However, it is the next scene that left me puzzled. Of course it makes sense that the grown-ups are shocked by the news but it would make little sense for the structure of the story to have this chapter included if everything went smoothly. Considering your version about Ali’s herd, it seems likely that many of them, including the Old One, will defend Rhett and who knows what happens after that. That is my main takeaway here and it’ll be intriguing to see how the speculated meeting will actually go.

Thanks for the review :)

The dream wasn't 100% necessary for the story, however I like to use dreams as a mean to show the mental struggle or the emotional impact a previous scene may have had on the characters. I'm glad that you found no big error with it  :^^spike
You were quite right to suspect problems linked to Old One and her herd and that's the part where writer's block screwed with me for the past three weeks. I wasn't entirely sure what's better. Old One sabotaging the trial or her eventually being convinced. As you can see now, I went with the latter.
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It’s nice but surprising to see the Old One acting this reasonably as I had expected her to be more trouble. The entire exchange between her and Littlefoot’s grandparents was pretty well done and it also showed that the Old One isn’t simply a villain like Rhett which was something I had expected. In that way, the events in this chapter were quite satisfying even if it still left the most profound questions wide open.

Most importantly, it remains unclear whether Rhett actually will be convicted as the accusations against him are based on a lie. He did not do himself any favors with the answers to his herd leader but there might still be an opening for him to escape punishment should he somehow prove that there indeed was an agreed battle between the two. And should the Old One find out that she was deceived, she might be more than unhappy with the entire Valley…

I rather enjoyed the flow of this chapter and it’s rather good to see Rhett finally having to face the consequences of his sickening actions. The Trial should be rather interesting and it’s practically certain that there will be more twists coming during it. At this point, it’s difficult to foresee whether Rhett will be actually be convicted and that inevitable meeting might be just enough to give this story more of the boost it needs.




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It was rather bizarre how unchallengingly the encounter between the Old One and Littlefoot’s Grandparents moved forward as like Sovereign, I anticipated more drama to unfold, but that is not a critique but rather a viewpoint interpreted erroneously by me. While the flow of the chapter worked decently and without major problems emerging, it did feel slightly unnecessary by how the different circumstances were shown to the reader in full form.

While the accusations against Rhett may be interpreted as legitimate, in the case that it is revealed that it was all founded on lies and deceit, would make the Valley look very much unfavorable in the eyes of the herd, which in turn may lead to further turmoil as it is pretty clear that neither side is quite ready to accept being lied to by their own members, and therefore, I feel like this was perchance the main focal point in the chapter.

I’m not going to lie, the flow of the narrative feels fractionally phlegmatic in comparison to the previous chapters, as I tend to lose focus most of the time when reading the current chapter and while I to some extent enjoyed what this chapter brought, I feel like we are at that point where a serious boost to the story is pretty much warranted right now. I am not saying that I will abandon reading this story, but right now it isn’t looking too good in retrospect of anterior installments. Nevertheless, I will continue following this story, but I really hope you will find a way to make things roll a bit more smoothly later on.