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STINGERRRRRRSSSSSS!!!!!!

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Bruton the Iguanodon

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a FANFIC OF A LOST SCENE FROM 6.

"One morning
Ducky and Spike were out walking
Cause Spike smelled some really good treestars
And it was a ways away
But they didn't think their mom would mind
Cause they'd be back before she even woke up

They walked and walked and walked
And suddenly they heard a strange droning noise
And ignored it
Cause whatever it was couldn't be that bad
It certainly wasn't a Sharptooth
And then there it was

The trees with the most beautiful treestars
Hidden in a part of the great valley
They'd rarely been into
And Ducky wanted to tell Cera, Littlefoot and Petrie about it
But Spike liked the idea of it being a secret
But they agreed to decide later and chowed down

And then they heard it again
The noise
The noise the they'd heard on the way there
Ducky said, "It sounds close by, Spike, I'm going to go see what it is"
And she walked off
While Spike continued to munch his treestars

Ducky walked a bit
And then it was really loud
But she couldn't see it
All there was was a small brown oval shaped thing
And Ducky realized the noise was coming from it
And she walked toward it and stuck her beak in---

Fire.
Needles.
Knives.
Red hot pokers.
Injections.
Pain.

It all hit her
On her sensitive beak
Like waking up
And she wanted to scream
But all she could do was endure the fire
As she tried to free herself

And Spike
Who was still eating
Heard his sister's screams
And panic rushed through his mind
And he ran to where they came from
And suddenly

He saw it
The hive
He knew at once it spelled danger
He realized Ducky's screams had stopped
She had fallen in
She could be dead

Spike ran as fast
As his heavy body and short legs
Would allow him
He reached the hive
He could hear her screams again
He dipped his tail in the hive for Ducky to grab onto---

And suddenly at the last second he saw her
Right there
Her beak covered in red blotches
But she wasn't screaming cause she was in pain
She was screaming:"SPIKE! NO!"
It was too late.

Fire.
Needles.
Knives.
Red hot pokers.
Injections.
Pain.

It was as if the middle of his tail
Had been set on fire
Ducky screamed "SPIKE GET OUT"
Spike turned around
And pushed on the hive so hard
He broke it

200 wasps
Big nasty wasps
Were suddenly all around
Ducky and Spike screamed
As wasps circled and stung them
And ran like hell

They ran ad ran and ran and ran
Past the area with the treestars
Didn't stop
Till they got to the watering hole
Where they jumped in
And finally, finally the stingers were gone

How long they hid they had no idea
But it was some time later that their mother
Arrived in a panic
She'd heard their screams
She looked at their red blotches
And said she'd fix them

She took them to the mud hole
Lathered cool mud over Ducky's beak
And Spike's tail
And wrapped leaves around them
And told them not to go where they'd gone until
The adults could figure out a way to get rid of the stingers

The injured duo went off to play with their friends
Littlefoot was shocked at what had happened
He was afraid bad luck would happen cause Saurus rock broke
After Petrie fell into a hive of stinger and escaped unscathed, thankfully
Everyone started singing about bad luck
...even Spike."


THE END


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Nice story, Bruton  :p I'm guessing there was a problem with his computer.

EDIT: Ah, here's the rest of it. That was pretty good - it's rare to see a fanfic written in verse like that, but you made it work well.


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Red hot pokers?  :lol Maybe it's just me, but this sounds funny, so it kind of ruins the scary words like needles, knives and injections.

Overall, a nice short story with a rarely used format.