Well, in Italy The Land Before Time isn't very famous, but my father gave it to me when I was three or four years (in Italy this cartoon released later). I saw it and I'll never end! My parents and my elder sister had to watch it every day because of my incredible love for it. I remember all scenes and my family too! . When I was about six or seven years, my best friend came every day at my house and we always watched it! Now, my Boyfriend had to watch it with me! I love the strong friendship between this five dinosaur and I will always love it!
That’s an awesome story. I was about that age when I first saw it, though getting my family to watch it proved to be much harder than trying to take out that sharptooth from the first movie, hehheh. The friendship between them was very touching to me as well. It was a long time before I started making friends, so when I was much younger, I used to spend my free hours imagining I lived in the Great Valley as a longneck, and I did a lot of things with the characters. It was my escape from loneliness. I guess, in a way, the members of the gang were my first “real” friends. I’ll always have a place in my heart for this franchise.
(If I did errors, please tell me. I want to learn english very well!)
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In Italy The Land Before Time isn't very famous, but my father gave it to me when I was three or four years (in Italy this cartoon released later).
“Well” is not a proper word for starting a sentence in English writing, but informally, you’ll see it a lot. There should be a comma after “in Italy” because it’s an introductory clause. Those set the stage of the sentence and must be followed by an independent clause (a complete sentence.) In formal writing, movie titles are italicized. After stating the number of years one has of life, there should also be the word “old” afterwards. If something in quotation marks is a complete sentence, it stands alone, not ends another complete sentence.
I saw it and I'll never end!
Those are two independent clauses, so a comma belongs at the end of “it.” Secondly, in English, it’s not formal to make one independent clause’s meaning entirely dependent on another. Each should be clear alone. If someone just read, “I’ll never end,” it would be taken as you claiming to be immortal.
My parents and my elder sister had to watch it every day because of my incredible love for it.
"My" does not need to be repeated. It’s established for both automaticallyin this case.
I remember all scenes and my family too!
There should be a “the” before “scenes,” and the second part has two meanings like that, so it should be reworded. It could mean that you remember all the scenes and your family remembers the scenes as well or that you remember the scenes and you remember your family as well. Also, we only use one form of punctuation at the end of sentences here. An exclamatory question (!?) is pretty common, but it’s informal outside of dialogue.
When I was about six or seven years, my best friend came every day at my house and we always watched it!
Be sure to add an “old” at the end of describing an age. Next of all, the ending is too infinitely defined. It should be refined to portray your meaning which would be that you and your friend watch it each time your friend came over. Thirdly, the “and” separates two independent clauses, so there should be a comma at the end of “house.”
Now, my Boyfriend had to watch it with me!
“Boyfriend” is not capitalized here. (I only did so since it began my sentence.) This sentence contradicts itself. You have “now” which is present and then “had” which is past. If you want to keep the “Now,” change the “had” to a “has.”
I love the strong friendship between this five dinosaur and I will always love it!
“Between this five dinosaur” is not proper here, needing to be plural, and the “and” does separate two independent clauses, so there should be one after “dinosaur.”
(If I did errors, please tell me. I want to learn english very well!)
Here, we call it “making” errors, not “doing” them. Last of all, we capitalize the word English.
Putting all of that together, here is how someone would write your post in a university essay:
In Italy,
The Land Before Time isn't very famous, but my father gave it to me when I was three or four years old. (In Italy, this cartoon was released later). I saw it then, and I'll never stop watching it! My parents and elder sister had to watch it every day because of my incredible love for it. I remember all the scenes, and my family does too! When I was about six or seven years old, my best friend came every day to my house, and we watched it each time! Now, my boyfriend has to watch it with me! I love the strong friendship between the five dinosaurs, and I will always love it!
(If I made any errors, please tell me. I want to learn English very well!)
Please bear in mind, though, this forum is for people to relax and have fun. You actually will see improper grammar a lot here, and no one really minds that I’m aware of. We’re not graded or judged by how we word things in a grammatical sense. Even I don’t italicize movie titles most of the time on a forum, actually often using quotation marks by mistake instead. So if you’re wanting to improve your English, many people here are more than happy to help, including myself, but it’s not a requirement to post here, and besides, we understand you perfectly. I only said all of this because you asked. Still, your English grammar is good, better than many Americans I know, actually.
