Well, Fyn, that certainly is a far more original idea than mine will ever be
It seems to be your reputation to take established things and make something new out of them. This story is no different, honestly.
The plot seems pretty unspectacular at first. A family of weird looking ceratopsians (I'll completely agree with you that the species is more than... questionable) is pictured here. While the parents go off to gather food, the children may play, just not in the Bubbling Goo. The three children seem to have different personalities. The eldest is the most mature and responsible of the three, the middle child is described as rebellious (I can totally see a middle child having that sort of character) and the youngest being silly, carefree and adventurous.
Certainly a good setting for a short story, the characters just described as much as necessary for the story here. I certainly do wonder whether the story has anything in common with the episode of the tv-series (though I might possibly not recognise the episode as such since I don't remember much of it right now, if anything
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Anyway, reading on...
(Ugh, stupid phone didn't save part of my review, I'll type the rest on my laptop now...)
Aaaaand this story proves again that children are stupid sometimes... adorable but stupid... Tumble you silly thing!
Well, the reactions of everybody involved were certainly far more reasonable than the act that caused them in the first place! Nipper did the most responsible thing and went to get help while Cetris didn't act according to her personality but tried to make Tumble stay where she is. ANd Tumble herself didn't understand the gravity of the situation, that's almost cute
Now that ought to get them into trouble though despite the happy ending? Though I suppose that's not quite the end of the story yet when I look at how much there's still left to explore
A story as a punishment, lol! That's honestly funny
Though I suppose that the story is going to entail a lesson of sorts, let's dig into it!
Ah, and there's out tv-series reference
I'm quite amazed what you did with this (if I remember correctly, crappy episode), turning it into something interesting and giving that totally random character there a backstory. Kudos for that
And that ending so sweet, honestly
I wonder how life for the Gang would be like in the Great Valley when they're the parents who have to keep their children together
In summary: Excellent story, can't wait for next month, yep, yep, yep!
