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The Land Before Time C: The Last Adventure

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Chapter 1:

Narrator: Years had past in the Great Valley, hatchlings had been born and our old friends Littlefoot, Cera, Ducky, Petrie and Spike are about to enter ®teenhood®.

(Setting changes from Galaxy to the Great Valley)

(The Gang; except Cera, were sitting by the Thundering Falls)
(Cera walks in)

Cera: UGH! I AM SO MAD!
Littlefoot: What is it this time Cera?
*Petrie, Spike and Ducky laugh*
Cera: Okay! You know how Tricia is always getting into my stuff? Like my crystals?
Ducky: Yes, yes we know; you tell us about it everyday Cera.
*Cera gets frustrated*
Cera: THIS TIME SHE HAS GONE TO FAR!
*Everyone gets quiet*
Cera: Okay, I get it she is like 6 but its annoying..
Littlefoot: What did she do?
Cera: She........she.... SHE LITERALLY TOOK ALL MY CRYSTALS AND THREW THEM INTO THE SINKING SAND!!!!
*Cera goes and runs her full grown horn and her newly growing horns into a tree stump*
Cera: It's not fair! Tria just tells me she doesn't know better and my Dad just stays out of it!
Littlefoot: Oh, I'm sorry Cera...
*Spike makes a noise*
Petrie: Yes, me sorry too!
Ducky: Yes, yes I am also sorry..
Littlefoot: Is their anything we can do? Maybe get you some new crystals?
Cera: It's harder then it seems..
Littlefoot: Cera do your remember what we were like as kids? We can handle anything.
*Petrie, Ducky and Spike get excited*
Cera: I had those crystals.. since I was a hatchling..
*everyone pauses for a moment*
Cera: My Mom gave them to me....
*Cera looked down sadly*
Littlefoot: Well, yes they hold a special place in your heart... but we can get some more? Your Mom would understand..
Cera: It would be way to hard..
Ducky: How Cera?
Petrie: Nothing is to hard for Petrie!
Cera: My Mom use to love to explore....... one day she came upon an empty abandoned Sharptooth cave with lots of crystals..... my crystals...
Littlefoot: So... we have to find an abandoned Sharptooth cave? Okay!
Cera: Littlefoot, we'd be killed... I somewhat don't want to replace them anyway... it would never be the same as the ones my Mom gave me.
*Cera shed a tear and revealed a red piece*
Cera: This is all I have from my favorite crystal...
Cera: I miss my Mom so much...
*Cera started crying softly*
*Littlefoot understood Cera's pain*
*The Gang hugged her with love*
Littlefoot: We'll find a way to make you feel better Cera.. I promise..
Cera: Thanks Guys!

(To be continued in Chapter 2)
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Thank you! More will be coming soon.
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Interesting first chapter :)

This story seems to focus on Cera's relation to her mother (and puberty? :DD Time will tell...). I think the idea of her mother giving Cera special crystals (which Tricia throws into the Sinking Sand LOL :lol) is pretty cool. I have no idea how Cera carried them during the journey to the Great Valley though, haha :D
Anyway, seems like an interesting story :yes

Only make sure that you stay true to either present or past and don't mix it. Sometimes you write "he said" and sometimes you write "he says"... Since this is written in Script Style, present works better here :yes
Also make sure to proofread again. I've caught a few misspelled words (it's "too" not "to" and "there" instead of "their" :)

Looking forward to the next chapter :)
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Thank you for your suggestions and your support! :)
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Chapter 2:

*Cera is dreaming:

(scene: back at the huge earthshake before they lived in the Great Valley)

Cera is dreaming about when she was separated from her parents, at the time she didn't know what happened to her Mom..

(scene: when she reaches the Great Valley)

Cera is dreaming of when she found her Father.... he told her that, her Mother was severely injured from the earthshake, and that she didn't make it out alive. Cera was dreaming of the tears she cried that day when she found her Father, because she didn't know she had a limited time with her Mother. She was dreaming of when her Father stopped her crying and revealed her crystals. She was dreaming of remembering that her Mother gave her those crystals before the big earthshake, her Father held onto them and kept them during the trip to the Great Valley, hoping Cera would return. -- Cera woke up*

*Cera breathes heavily*

Cera: It was just a dream..

*Cera looks over at Tricia*

*It was very early in the morning, but Cera got up*

*Cera remembers her Mother again*

Cera: I have to do something....

*Cera waits until her Father wakes up*

*Topsy gets up, and gets a drink at the Thundering Falls*

*Cera follows him*

Cera: Dad... Daddy?

Topsy: Yes, Cera?

*Cera plays at the ground nervously*

Cera: I was wondering.... if you remembered anything about Mom's crystals?

*Topsy's eyes widen*

Topsy: Oh yes Cera, how could I forget; collecting crystals was her hobby!

*Cera gets excited*

Topsy: Well, your Mom would go everywhere to look for crystals. Once she found crystals, she'd bring them all the way home and put them in her "Crystal Cave". She had crystals from all over the world!

*Cera got an idea*

Cera: Oh, where was her Crystal Cave Daddy?

Topsy: Oh, far, far away Cera; back where we lived when you were first born. Their probably all gone, I only found the ones your Mom gave you. I'm sure the cave got destroyed during the earthshake.

Cera: Oh, thanks Daddy...

Topsy: Oh, your welcome..

*Cera runs to go tell Littlefoot*

(scene changes to Littlefoot's sleeping place)

*Littlefoot is eating from his Treestar tree*

*Cera runs in*

*Cera tried to talk, but had to catch her breath*

Cera: Littlefoot!

Littlefoot: Yes, Cera?

Cera: We have to get the others!

*Littlefoot and Cera run to get Petrie, Ducky and Spike*

*Littlefoot and Cera come upon Petrie's sleeping cave*

Littlefoot and Cera: Petrie! Petrie!

*Petrie flies down*

Petrie: Yes, friends?

Cera: We have to get the others, come on!!

*Littlefoot, Cera and Petrie run to get Ducky and Spike*

*Littlefoot, Cera and Petrie come upon Ducky and Spike's sleeping place*

Littlefoot, Cera and Petrie: Spike!! Ducky!!

*Spike and Ducky had been eating berries*

*They hear their friends shouting*

*Spike and Ducky come towards their friends*

*Spike makes a noise*

Ducky: Yes?

Cera: We have to talk! Let's go!

*The Gang runs up lots of hills in the Great Valley to find a place where no one can hear them*

*They finally find a spot and sit down*

(To Be Continued In Chapter 3)
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Chapter 3:

Cera: Okay, I have exciting things to tell you!

*All eyes widen*

Cera: So my Dad told me that my Mom had a cave of crystals called her “Crystal Cave”.

Ducky: Where is it Cera?

Cera: Back all the way where I was first born…

Littlefoot: Well, Cera; I hate saying this but… it’s probably long gone by now from the earthshake. Also, none of us remember the way back; it might be hard if we go back because so many bad things happened there.

Cera: I guess your right

*Cera starts getting teary-eyed*

Cera: I just miss my Mom so much...... what if her cave isn't all gone?

Littlefoot: I know, I want to go I just don't know if it will work out well.

Cera: Yeah, but the Sharptooth is dead..

Ducky: Yes, Cera; but do remember that the Sharptooth could have been a Mommy.

Petrie: Petrie scared, Sharptooth most scary Sharptooth we ever saw.

*Spike makes a noise*

*Cera starts getting frustrated*

Cera: I don't care anymore! I'm going!

*Cera starts walking up the exit of the Great Valley*

Littlefoot: Cera! Wait!

Cera: No!

*Littlefoot, Ducky, Petrie and Spike run after Cera*

*Cera is outside of the Great Valley*

*She stops*

Cera: I don't know where to go!

*Littlefoot, Petrie, Ducky and Spike catch up to Cera*

*They all catch their breath*

Littlefoot: Cera, we will go with you!

Cera: You will?

*Cera gets excited*

Littlefoot: Yeah, where to first?

Cera: Don't we have to go through the mountain where we saw the Great Valley?

Littlefoot: Yeah! Cera before we go, I just want to remind you when we made this journey as kids, it was very scary and hard..

Cera: I know, but we did it once; we can do it again.

Ducky: Yes, but Cera we'll be going there and back to the Great Valley.... we might be stronger, now that we are older but I do not think this is a good idea, no no no!

Cera: If we keep thinking about it we will never do it! We have to leave before the grown-ups go looking!

*Spike makes a noise*

Littlefoot: Your right Cera...

*The Gang starts walking towards the mountain*

Ducky: Hey Petrie, remember when you almost died?

*Ducky giggles*

Petrie: Ducky, Petrie always close to dying.

Ducky: Yes yes yes! You are!

*Spike makes a noise*

*The Gang comes close to the inside of the mountain*

Cera: I mean, it's a good time to be doing this; it's not the dry seasons.

Littlefoot: Yeah... and theirs more food that grew through the years.

(To Be Continued In Chapter 4)



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What do you all think? Is this story one to continue? :)
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As Ducky would say; yep, yep, yep. This story is great so far. Can't wait for the next chapter.



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Wow, this is a really neat story! Your writing is fast-paced and emotional, and I love the concept of exploring Cera's feelings about her mother. I also like the script format too. Can't wait for the next chapter! Also, great job of staying within character too.  :D


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Thanks so much! It means a lot!! Chapter 4 should be up Monday! :) that made my day!
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Just so everyone knows, Chapter 4 will be up either Monday or Tuesday :)
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So sorry about the delay on Chater 4 everyone, last week was a big week for me. Chapter 4 should be up within the next 2 days.
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Hello everyone! So a lot of people have been telling me, that they have lots of fanfics to catch up on (including TLBT C) so I'm going to give Chapter 4 another week hiatus in case anyone has to catch up.
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Chapter 4:

*The gang walks through the mountain and arrives by the lava*

Littlefoot: Not much has changed...

Cera: Yeah..

Ducky: Maybe we should go back...

*Cera sighs*

Cera: Why?

Ducky: I really don't want to be scared when we get to our first sleeping places... I miss my Daddy..

*Just then, the whole gang looked at each other and realized; all of them were missing at least one parent*

Littlefoot: Yeah.. I miss my Mom too..

*Cera grunts*

*Cera starts leaping onto the rocks to cross over the lava*

*The gang follows her pattern, and they all safely cross in panic; trying not to fall*

Littlefoot: Cera.. are you sure... you want to do this?

Cera: What's the worse that can happen?

Littlefoot: You get there and can't find anything.. Because of the earthquake.

*Thats when Cera started realizing, she was being foolish*

*Cera started to get ready eyed*

Cera: Your right..

*Cera sobbed*

Cera: I miss my Mom, I miss my siblings..

*Cera turned around and started walking back to The Great Valley*

*The Gang followed her*

*Cera walked all the way home, and just went to sleep at noon*

*Littlefoot sighed*

Littlefoot: I'm going to go home too..

*Ducky, Petrie and Spike all went home as well*

*Littlefoot approached his sleeping place*

Littlefoot: Grandma, Grandpa?

Grandma & Grandpa: Yes Littlefoot?

Littlefoot: I was wondering if you knew anything about Cera's Mom's crystals?

(to be continued)

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Yay! I was looking forward to this! :D  Poor Cera  :( ... this is one of the most heartbreaking scenes I've ever seen her in! I'd feel like hugging her, that is if she'd let me of course :lol:. Great follow-up, especially that moment where the gang realizes that they all have at least one missing parent.


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I'm so happy to hear your enjoying the story! Lots more is ahead! (p.s. I felt like hugging Cera too).   :!
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