The Accention Of Rahl Fanfic Charactors...

TITANOSAUR · **on:** August 22, 2010, 02:41:34 PM

hey everybody. I am currently working on my next fanfic intitled, "The Accention Of Rahl" wich will be set 1 year after the Events of The Bite Of Tornetar. (unlike most fanfics. mine are all set in one fanfic continuety I will call the Titan Series) The Accention Of Rahl will feature Ali (from The Journey To The Land Of Mists and The Brave Longneck Scheme) as the main charactor. Ali is set to be around Nine Years Old (she always struck me to be around 7 or 8 in the movie and the TV series) and she will also have a sister (around 8 years old) who's charactor is still under develoupment.

the main Antagonist in this Fanfic will be a species of Galionus (a species I created on spore. it holds up to 8 subspecies and factions) called Rahl. a female Komodogalionus who is the last of her kind. Rahl is an Anciant Creature whom lived on earth before the Cambrian age. she is awakened when a Meteorite falls on earth that frees her from an Iceberg. she is intelegent to the point to where she can use the bones of dead dinosaurs (mainly only bones from Dinosaurs who died years ago. not any that she actualy killed) to make a type of Armored clothing for herself (Mainly for style to fit her 'Bad Girl' attitude). she takes command of two Velociraptors named Slash and Scyth (Both of wich she named herself) and learns there is a special type of crystal within the meteor called Carloneum Crystals wich she percieves that can be used as a weapon so she can take over the planet and revive her species.

Ali and her sister are being persuded because Ali saw where the Meteor fell, (Rahl was still in the Iceberg and didn't awaken till a day or so after the Meteor crashed) Ali and her sister find out about Rahls plans to stop her. but can the two longnecks be able to stop Rahl from destroying the dinosaur race and revitalize her species? or will they die trying? we'll find out soon. Part one will be writen later tonight.

anyways here are the charactor's Design sheets and charactor Bios.

Rahl:

Species: Galionus

Sub-Species: Komodogalionus

Homeworld: Earth (Pre-Camprian age)

Diet: Carnivore

Species statistic: Insectiod, Biomechanoid, Saurian hybrid

Blood type: glowing Blue

Hight: 16ft (standing upright)

Weight: 650 lbs

Strength: 8/10

Intelegence: 7/10

Speed: 40MPH

Bio: although, how she was trapped in a block of ice is unknown. and her past is undetermined. she is believed to had gottin trapped in ice when she was 12 (By human years. to Galionus standards its considered to be an age of a sub-adult). she will grow the spines on her back form after killing prey. when she first emerges from the Iceberg, she has no spines.

Rahls Intelegence is typical for her species. she is capable of crafting armor clothing for herself and is able to make primitive weapons. her Personality, dispite being evil, she is Clever, Humble, and is a perfect Tactition. she considers herself a savior of her species that is now long lost. she wishes to bring her Species back from extinction and rule the planet. the only problem with this good deed, is that she wants to kill off the entire dinosaur species, to do so. she considers herself above the dinosaurs, and finds them to be primitive and worthless as a species. with no usefull future. and considers them as mear insects to be stomped out of existance.

her two pets/arrand boys, where found after their pack was killed. she took them in primarely so she wouldn't have to do everything herself. she plans to do away with them like the rest of the Dinosaurs. Rahl treat them like they are dogs. she is not afraid to beat them sensless if they fail. but when they do right. she'll let them eat whomever they where asigned to bring to her. or she would give them a treat herself (mainly that of scraps from her own meal).

had her species still be alive, she would be a commander of a grand Trigalious army. and even with her species now gone, she still plans to lead that army. even if they are dinosaurs themselfs. untill her species is brought back to like, then she will kill her dinosaur army off with her own army.

Rahls Love Interests?: Rahl has no Love Interest nor a mate. atleast not now. she may have had a mate before her imprisonment.

UPDATE: I colored this pic, now you can see the colors I have chosen for it. the sketch of Anthro Rahl will have diffrent coloring I do believe, however.

atleast now you can see the small red lights on its body.

more charactors to come.

Caustizer · **Reply #1 on:** August 22, 2010, 04:06:40 PM

Very good drawing. You seem to favour a more realistic art style as opposed to a cartoon one.

Interesting character too.

Caustizer

TITANOSAUR · **Reply #2 on:** August 22, 2010, 06:30:31 PM

thanks Cautizer.

btw heres Ali's Sister's Charactor sheet...

Meet Reign!

Reign's Bio:

Species: Dinosaur

Sub species: Apatosaurus

Age: 8 yrs old.

Hight: 4ft tall

Diet: Herbivore

Gender: Female

Info: Reign is Ali's sister, although she wasn't seen in LBT IV or The Brave Longneck Schame episode. the reason was because her and Ali's father where in a diffrent herd at the time. she reunited with her sister after her father's herd was killed by something big (Tornetar?). she loves to help the herd's leader out as much as she can. she also likes to chew on sticks (a habit her father had himself) much like a hillbilly would chew on a hay straw. Reign's Personality is like that of a Farmgirl/Tomboy. she also has a tendancy to play rough and at times would bite while playing. and dispite the fact that she says she's just playin, she still bites quite hard. she also has a southern accent (also aquired by her father) wich to her sister gets rather aggervating. Reign is unique in her skin pattern as she has strips along her back. she has blue eyes, Purple Stripes, Pink sides. and grey underbelly.

Reign also likes to tease her sister about her and littlefoot at times. wich often ends with Ali biting Reign's tail to shut her up. Reign likes blue Berries and finds them to be just like candy. she hates having to hear Ali talk about other species of dinosaurs being there friends (she retains the racial feelings twards other dinosaurs as most dinosaurs do) as she prefers to keep things the way they always been. she also prefers to eat with her mom then with Ali.

dispite there diffrences. Reign has an Intence feeling of loyalty to her sister. if her sis is in trouble shes ready to risk her own existance to help her. she is also very protective of Ali's reputation among the herd. if anybody questions Ali's desisions then they will face a fierce amount of scoulding by Reign. Reign also thinks Ali should be the herds leader after the Old One retires.

Reign's intelegence is pretty typical for most dinosaurs of her age. but she isn't an moron. Reign is also good at making small rock forts to play in (She once tried it with mud, but that didn't work out too well for her). although she isn't an arcatech, her building skills are seen as an artistic trait.

Reign's Love Interests: Reign considers herself too good for any male. she believes when she gets older, a male will prove himself to her and be her mate.

she still likes to tease Ali about littlefoot however.

Colored picture of reign without stick in her mouth. looks better now I think.

TITANOSAUR · **Reply #3 on:** August 26, 2010, 07:46:32 PM

hey everybody, I usualy hate to double post, but I feel this should be marked as a bump. as well as a new post of a new pic.

the next pic is of Rahl made on spore, to help give me an idea of how her armor will look in my next sketch of her. mind you, this is mainly a prototype design. the real sketch will invalve mainly bone and other primitive materials.

Rahl will also look similar to a human female. but her Galionus species is always been known to look humanoid. Rahl's aarmor and clothing will also consist of dinosaur skin (in the fasion of fur coats and clothing, only dinosaur skin).

Slash and Scyth's charactors are still in develoupment.

Campion1 · **Reply #4 on:** August 26, 2010, 07:55:13 PM

This is going to be awesome.

TITANOSAUR · **Reply #5 on:** August 26, 2010, 08:02:00 PM

was gonna put a pencer at the end of her tail. but scrapped that idea.

btw the next sketch Rahl will have more of an hour-glass figure. but still be quite muscular.

Pangaea · **Reply #6 on:** August 27, 2010, 12:28:23 AM

That drawing in the first post is great! Rahl reminds me a little of the Alien creatures (I thought she looked biomechanical even before I saw the profile). I especially like the design of the head. Are those things on the sides of her face flexible like tentacles, or are they more like horns?

Really interesting idea to make her a Precambrian creature. :! It's a shame she's so militaristic and thinks so little of dinosaurs; it would be interesting to see her get along with them. Although I suppose that might be difficult considering she's a carnivore. Speaking of which, what does she plan for her kind to eat once they take over? Wouldn't it make sense for her to keep some dinosaurs around as a food source, rather than wiping them out entirely?

The Spore version of Rahl is great, too,

but the humanoid…um…chest looks very, very strange (Do Galionus suckle their young like mammals? If not, then that feature doesn't make a whole lot of sense, unless it serves some other purpose that is specific to female Galionus). While it goes without saying that she's your creature and you have the right to design her as you please, I don't think you need to give her humanoid characteristics such as an hourglass figure (or even eyelashes, like the LBT dinosaurs) to show that she's female. The way I see it, she's a very alien creature, being a species that dates from even before the ancestors of modern animals evolved shells, eyes, jaws, and bones. Even if her kind developed a body plan that parallels that of later creatures, it would seem very unlikely that the features distinguishing males from females would be the same. Perhaps the spikes of male Galionus could differ in shape, arrangement, length, and/or number from the females'. Or the males could differ in overall size. Personally, I think something like that would make more sense.

In any case, I didn't think she looked very humanoid, especially in the first picture. She has a body plan like a bipedal dinosaur, with a long tail to counterbalance her upper body. That's not the body plan of a creature that spends a lot of time standing completely upright like a human (Even in the Spore picture her spine is clearly at a diagonal angle). And I don't know where her vital organs are located, but if they're inside her upper torso, then she should probably have some form of armor protecting her chest (unless she has natural armor there, in which case she shouldn't have a female-human-like chest).

By the way, the title of this fanfic is meant to be "The Ascension of Rahl", right? You'll want to make sure to spell it right.

On to the other character, Reign (What's the reason for the name, just out of curiosity?). I like the striped pattern you gave her; I assume she inherits that from her father as well? That's an interesting pose you drew her in, too. I like the idea of the stick-chewing habit.

And Ali's method of getting her to shut up:

Reign's lips look rather strange in the picture, though; even if she's holding a stick in her mouth, I think the visible edges of her mouth should extend farther. (Did you try that and not like how it looked? I see eraser marks.)

Whoa, if she builds rock forts, then they must be pretty big.

Did her herd migrate like Ali's? (I'm imagining her continually trying to build rock forts, but having to leave them unfinished because her herd has to move on.) I like her attitude about love interests, too.

I hope she gets over those racist feelings, though. It's interesting that this time, Ali will be the one who's accepting of other species as friends, and her companion is the one who doesn't like the idea.

TITANOSAUR · **Reply #7 on:** August 27, 2010, 12:13:31 PM

Quote from: Pangaea,Aug 26 2010 on 10:28 PM

That drawing in the first post is great! Rahl reminds me a little of the Alien creatures (I thought she looked biomechanical even before I saw the profile). I especially like the design of the head. Are those things on the sides of her face flexible like tentacles, or are they more like horns?

Really interesting idea to make her a Precambrian creature. :! It's a shame she's so militaristic and thinks so little of dinosaurs; it would be interesting to see her get along with them. Although I suppose that might be difficult considering she's a carnivore. Speaking of which, what does she plan for her kind to eat once they take over? Wouldn't it make sense for her to keep some dinosaurs around as a food source, rather than wiping them out entirely?

The Spore version of Rahl is great, too, but the humanoid…um…chest looks very, very strange (Do Galionus suckle their young like mammals? If not, then that feature doesn't make a whole lot of sense, unless it serves some other purpose that is specific to female Galionus). While it goes without saying that she's your creature and you have the right to design her as you please, I don't think you need to give her humanoid characteristics such as an hourglass figure (or even eyelashes, like the LBT dinosaurs) to show that she's female. The way I see it, she's a very alien creature, being a species that dates from even before the ancestors of modern animals evolved shells, eyes, jaws, and bones. Even if her kind developed a body plan that parallels that of later creatures, it would seem very unlikely that the features distinguishing males from females would be the same. Perhaps the spikes of male Galionus could differ in shape, arrangement, length, and/or number from the females'. Or the males could differ in overall size. Personally, I think something like that would make more sense.

In any case, I didn't think she looked very humanoid, especially in the first picture. She has a body plan like a bipedal dinosaur, with a long tail to counterbalance her upper body. That's not the body plan of a creature that spends a lot of time standing completely upright like a human (Even in the Spore picture her spine is clearly at a diagonal angle). And I don't know where her vital organs are located, but if they're inside her upper torso, then she should probably have some form of armor protecting her chest (unless she has natural armor there, in which case she shouldn't have a female-human-like chest).

By the way, the title of this fanfic is meant to be "The Ascension of Rahl", right? You'll want to make sure to spell it right.

On to the other character, Reign (What's the reason for the name, just out of curiosity?). I like the striped pattern you gave her; I assume she inherits that from her father as well? That's an interesting pose you drew her in, too. I like the idea of the stick-chewing habit. And Ali's method of getting her to shut up: Reign's lips look rather strange in the picture, though; even if she's holding a stick in her mouth, I think the visible edges of her mouth should extend farther. (Did you try that and not like how it looked? I see eraser marks.)

Whoa, if she builds rock forts, then they must be pretty big. Did her herd migrate like Ali's? (I'm imagining her continually trying to build rock forts, but having to leave them unfinished because her herd has to move on.) I like her attitude about love interests, too. I hope she gets over those racist feelings, though. It's interesting that this time, Ali will be the one who's accepting of other species as friends, and her companion is the one who doesn't like the idea.

lol Okay, I think I should defenantly straiten out some things about the Galionus species.

in the case of the Galionus species, they are reptilic in shape (looking like that of a theropod in most species. reptilic humanoid anthropromorphic in other species) in this instance we are talking about a Komodogalionus.

Komodogalionus are human like. females DO have breasts because dispite their young hatching from eggs, they suckle untill they are old enough to eat meat (after hatching they are like a human baby, they have no teeth). as well as being reptilian they are also insectoid in nature. having charactoristics such as Antenna, insectoid eyes (Multiple in most subspecies), and some are capeble of spitting a venom (Carchagalionus and Profounigalionus are the only two known so far). female Komodogalionus have Five sets of spines on its back. males have three sets of spines. Males are also much more robust, and are much more bulkier. they are also way bigger then females. while Rahl is 16ft a male would be 21ft. males are also much more aggressive while females are like lions. all galionus species have a set of three tenticals on the sides of their head. these tenticals help hold food near the creatures mouth while the beast's hands are free for other uses. Galionus species have two tusks, patruding from the side of its head (well behind the tenticals) and a horn ontop of its head. giving it a triangular look. the tusks where inspired by the mammoth and one species (Brachiogalionus) uses its tusks in the same manner.

the Galionus's stance posture are like my sketch shows. Rahl will only be standing upright to make herself much more taller (Mostly used for intimidation and as a threat and defence display). but will be keeping her body low and parellel to the ground (Like in my sketch) when walking and running. she will also keep her tail elevated for balance.

I don't even know where the creature's vital organs are myself. I am treating my creations like a real creature. untill I plan everything out I'll draw a skeletal structure with organs. the only Galionus that has been observed with its skin removed is Brachiogalionus. wich has a stiff and heavy tail because the bones are more dense. as to weather or not this species shares the same aspect is unknown.

Galionus species sight is also diffrent then most. for Komodogalionus, they have two sets of eyes. one set is for thermal vision, the second is through normal vision (But everything show up in a greenish blue spectrum). Carchagalionus sees in a red spectrum and Profounigalionus sees in a normal vision like we do. others like Tyrannogalionus, and Unagalionus are colorblind. Brachiogalionus have a vision that is similar to the now discredited vision method as Tyrannosaurus Rex. in wich it is mainly motion sence based and will loose you easily in the dark or if you stay perfectly still. Megagalionus sees in a spectrum much like that of a fisheyed lense.

as for the title yeah, I mean The ASCENTION Of Rahl, my spelling is awful, I know. its a shame though, because I can't fix the title of this topic like I can on the Galaxy forums. I may need to ask Petrie or Malte if they can fix that for me.

Reign was named after the word Reign. in actuality, I wanted to spell her name to where it sounded like Rain. but didn't want to risk spelling it to the point to where you can't figure it out. so I settled on Reign. and it sounds cute for her too so yeah.

and yeah, I tried so hard to get her to look like she was chewing on that twig/stick, but after I got it like that I just gave up on it. and yeah she gets the stripes from her father. Ali got her looks more from her mother I believe.

Reign's herd didn't move around as much as Ali's did. so Reign made alot of rock forts because when she finished them, she would miscalculate the size of them and end up making them too small. however, she always left them around. cuz a small creature would always use them themselfs. she'll probley end up loosing the habit when she gets bigger. there are some that where unfinished for some reason or another. I was originaly going to have it that she makes a small burrial mound for somebody in the fanfic. but I may scrap that idea.

Reign's feelings about racial segragation was kept because in the story, Ali will be trying to teach her to abondon them. infact I got a full chaptor in store wich will look upon that as well.

Ali's method of shutting Reign up is ACTUALY based on how a girl at school used to shut me up when I was poking fun at her about a similar situation. Reign's charactor is also based on that same girl.

TITANOSAUR · **Reply #8 on:** August 27, 2010, 09:32:40 PM

Hey everybody. I hate to double post. but I DO have a valid reason.

I created the poster for my fanfic. this poster has three of the five main charactors from the story on it. now before I show it I want to let everybody here know, that the Bone Armor Rahl is wearing is NOT finalised. infact this is just another design test. I am verry unhappy with it. but feel this is a good enough pic to show. Ali's design was based after the show. Reign is messed up because she looks way too big. shes supposed to be smaller then her sister.

this will mark the second time the Carloneum Crystals will be shown the first are seen in Rahl's Charactor sketch.

the meteor in this pic is also not finalised.

if anybody here likes to help me color these sketchs please do.

the Poster will be one of many. I also got plans to make seporate Posters for each of the five charactors.

TITANOSAUR · **Reply #9 on:** August 29, 2010, 11:57:19 AM

Okay guys, I'm not gonna worry about double posting so long as it has a new sketch or new info about the fanfic.

I just finished Slash's sketch and profile here it is...

Slash's Bio:

Species: Velociraptor

Height: 6ft

weight: 380lbs

Diet: Carnivore

Gender: Male

Bio: Slash is one of two Velociraptor shock troopers. under Rahl's command, Slash (along with his brother Scyth) was gravely injured by Ali's herd after a failed attack. his pack dead and he and Scyth the only survivors, Rahl took him and healed them back to health, she then gave them a higher intelegence and named them. Slash was named after an old military general of the Galionus Empire.

Slash is still scarred from the encounter with Ali's herd and has a deep hatred for Reign as she broke off his right toe claw during the fight.

Slash is also the most rebelious of the two Raptors. he always have to be reminded that he "Belongs To" Rahl.

Slash's intelegence was altered after Rahl gave the wounded Velociraptor a chemical compound Rahl created when she found the ingrediants in the local flora and fauna. Giving the half dead Velociraptor an intelegence that reflects her own. Slash mainly stands in the role of Military stratigist and combat foot souldier. he always likes to use close combat brutality whever possible. he is also good at espionoge, when he feels hes got the infomation he needs he'll bring the info back to Rahl. and relay the infomation.

Slash has no love interests. he did have a mate before she was killed however. he has a love/hate interspecies relationship with Rahl however. but he doesn't know that he too will be killed after Rahl rebuilds the Galionus Empire.

Pangaea · **Reply #10 on:** September 01, 2010, 01:50:07 AM

You really have thought these Galionus creatures through quite thoroughly. :blink: Have they genetically engineered themselves or something? It’s strange that all of the subspecies would be so different.

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as for the title yeah, I mean The ASCENTION Of Rahl, my spelling is awful, I know. its a shame though, because I can't fix the title of this topic like I can on the Galaxy forums. I may need to ask Petrie or Malte if they can fix that for me.

I hate to tell you this, but that "t" should actually be an "s".

"Ascension".

I could help you with spelling, if you’d like. In your story, I mean. Maybe you've seen already, but I help a lot of other fanfiction writers on the GOF by pointing out spelling and grammar errors in their stories. I could do the same for you. Every time you post a chapter, I could give you a rundown of all the misspelled words, so that you can fix them, or at least know the correct spelling for the future (For instance, "tenticals" should be spelled "tentacles", and in your signature, "thoughs" should be "those").

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and yeah, I tried so hard to get her to look like she was chewing on that twig/stick, but after I got it like that I just gave up on it. and yeah she gets the stripes from her father. Ali got her looks more from her mother I believe.

Her mouth does look better, although I miss the stick.

Her color's a little bright, though. :blink: The pink especially. Personally, I think she should be a slightly duller pink, like Ali, not only because I think it would look better, but because, even if she mainly takes after her father, I think there should be some family resemblance between her and Ali. At the moment she looks so different from Ali that I would never guess that they have the same parents. :huh:

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Ali's method of shutting Reign up is ACTUALY based on how a girl at school used to shut me up when I was poking fun at her about a similar situation. Reign's charactor is also based on that same girl.

You mean she bit you to shut you up? :blink: Where, on your hand or something? (I assume you don’t have a tail.

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The new pictures are really good, by the way.

That’s a nice poster, and Rahl looks quite scary in it (Are those dinosaur skulls and jawbones she’s wearing? :blink:). I like the way Ali and Reign look, too. What exactly are the Carloneum crystals?

Slash is very neat-looking.

Is he based on the LBT III raptors or some other sharptooth species that’s appeared in the series, or is he your own design? I particularly like the way you drew his head and arms, and his pattern is interesting, too. The toes on his left foot look a little stubby, though.

Admittedly, I don’t really like the idea of Rahl chemically altering a sharptooth’s brain to make it intelligent enough to serve her. Not only does it sound a little too far-fetched, but I’d think that at least some of the sharpteeth in LBT would be smart enough to cooperate and communicate with Rahl, and control their hunting instincts enough to perform espionage missions as well as simply killing.

By the way, how is Scyth’s name pronounced?

TITANOSAUR · **Reply #11 on:** September 01, 2010, 03:51:57 PM

Quote from: Pangaea,Aug 31 2010 on 11:50 PM

You really have thought these Galionus creatures through quite thoroughly. :blink: Have they genetically engineered themselves or something? It’s strange that all of the subspecies would be so different.

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as for the title yeah, I mean The ASCENTION Of Rahl, my spelling is awful, I know. its a shame though, because I can't fix the title of this topic like I can on the Galaxy forums. I may need to ask Petrie or Malte if they can fix that for me.
I hate to tell you this, but that "t" should actually be an "s". "Ascension".

I could help you with spelling, if you’d like. In your story, I mean. Maybe you've seen already, but I help a lot of other fanfiction writers on the GOF by pointing out spelling and grammar errors in their stories. I could do the same for you. Every time you post a chapter, I could give you a rundown of all the misspelled words, so that you can fix them, or at least know the correct spelling for the future (For instance, "tenticals" should be spelled "tentacles", and in your signature, "thoughs" should be "those").

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and yeah, I tried so hard to get her to look like she was chewing on that twig/stick, but after I got it like that I just gave up on it. and yeah she gets the stripes from her father. Ali got her looks more from her mother I believe.
Her mouth does look better, although I miss the stick. Her color's a little bright, though. :blink: The pink especially. Personally, I think she should be a slightly duller pink, like Ali, not only because I think it would look better, but because, even if she mainly takes after her father, I think there should be some family resemblance between her and Ali. At the moment she looks so different from Ali that I would never guess that they have the same parents. :huh:

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Ali's method of shutting Reign up is ACTUALY based on how a girl at school used to shut me up when I was poking fun at her about a similar situation. Reign's charactor is also based on that same girl.
You mean she bit you to shut you up? :blink: Where, on your hand or something? (I assume you don’t have a tail. )

The new pictures are really good, by the way. That’s a nice poster, and Rahl looks quite scary in it (Are those dinosaur skulls and jawbones she’s wearing? :blink:). I like the way Ali and Reign look, too. What exactly are the Carloneum crystals?

Slash is very neat-looking. Is he based on the LBT III raptors or some other sharptooth species that’s appeared in the series, or is he your own design? I particularly like the way you drew his head and arms, and his pattern is interesting, too. The toes on his left foot look a little stubby, though.

Admittedly, I don’t really like the idea of Rahl chemically altering a sharptooth’s brain to make it intelligent enough to serve her. Not only does it sound a little too far-fetched, but I’d think that at least some of the sharpteeth in LBT would be smart enough to cooperate and communicate with Rahl, and control their hunting instincts enough to perform espionage missions as well as simply killing.

By the way, how is Scyth’s name pronounced?

The girl bit me on the shoulder. it didn't hurt too bad. but it was enough to yelp.

and yeah, I got somebody helping me with the fanfic now. hes serving as Story and Writing Assistant. though I appreciate you wanting to help. if I can find something I need help on I'll ask ya.

the Galionus species come in many diffrent verietys and shapes (Like the dinosaurs, or like diffrent veriety of lizards insect birds etc.) there are many diffrent subspecies. but all of wich goes under one catagory.

as for my spelling, yeah as I said its awful. everytime I think I got something spelt it turns out I still spelled it wrong in some way or another. I usualy just go with what ever sounds right. but it never realy helps to give me high marks in my spelling. plus I can't fix the title of the thread cuz the edit function won't allow it (Something for Petrie or the other Admins to fix perhaps?).

as for Reign, I wanted her colors to look like that cuz I felt they would look nice. and my intepretation of Ali will be a bit diffrent. infact shes supposed to stand 8 feet tall now. and Reign is only 4 feet tall (Ali drown increadibly. also dinosaurs are thought to grow big quite fast).

about the poster; yes, thoughs are skulls and jawbones on Rahl. its an idea of where I will be going with the design.

as for Carloneum Crystals, they are the most powerful as well as the most dangerous Crystals in the galaxy. they can destroy electronic circuitry on the slightest contact, and cut through flesh like hot knife through butter. when properly utilized and a proper frame is made. they can become a powerfull weapon ranging from, Lazer Cannons, handguns, and in some cases can be put in warheads of missiles and rockets. they can also be converted into swords, blades, knives, and even used for surgical uses as well. Carloneum is also highly unstable in its raw natural form. they can ignite like that of three nuclear bombs if so much as a fire cracker pops next to them. a large crystal is considered the most dangerous. and must be segmented before it can be used properly.

Carloneum Crystals can usualy only be found in space. but there are some vains of Carloneum on earth. in my story this will be kept unknown. Carloneum Crystals are quants like, and are covered with multi colored rods. meaning, they have a sphere-like body, with muliple rods growing from them. looking similar to a undersea mine.

Scyth's name is pronounced "S-EY-TH" like what the Grim Reeper holds.

Rahl as I said is smart. she is capable of using chymestry. but still, I guess your right. but I will still keep some of the mind alteration in. I think it'll be good for the story.

Slash is actualy a mixture of LBT III and Screach and Thud. as well as the JP raptors. and yeah. his claws came out a bit too stubby. but on his right foot his killing claw is broken off. so yeah. also, slash (Dispite not being a bird or a vulture) is based a bit around Lazorbeak. although he isn't a coward when it comes to getting shot at, and he doesn't turn into a cassette. the relaying messeges and spying was supposed to go to scyth, but I felt it should be shared by both of them.

Pangaea · **Reply #12 on:** September 02, 2010, 11:35:22 PM

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and yeah, I got somebody helping me with the fanfic now. hes serving as Story and Writing Assistant. though I appreciate you wanting to help. if I can find something I need help on I'll ask ya.

Good for you!

And sure, I'll be glad to give you help whenever you need it.

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the Galionus species come in many diffrent verietys and shapes (Like the dinosaurs, or like diffrent veriety of lizards insect birds etc.) there are many diffrent subspecies. but all of wich goes under one catagory.

Mind you, the different types of dinosaurs are not just separate species, but are grouped in different families and orders. For instance, Tyrannosaurus rex was a species in the genus Tyrannosaurus, the family Tyrannosauridae, the suborder Theropoda, the order Saurischia, and the superorder Dinosauria. It was about as closely related to a Triceratops as a cat is related to a horse, or a human to a rabbit.

It's actually a little difficult to define a "species", but one commonly accepted definition is that a species is a population of organisms that can breed with one another and consistently produce healthy, fertile offspring. Subspecies are two or more populations of a species that are capable of interbreeding, but generally live apart from one another and have developed distinct characteristics. The different kinds of tigers, for instance (Siberian, Bengal, Sumatran, etc.) are all subspecies of the species Panthera tigris. So basically, if the different types of Galionus can interbreed, they're different subspecies. If not, then they would probably be classified as different species (If they all differ greatly in physical appearance, they'd probably also be separate species). Or they could have started out as one species whose members separated into different groups, who changed themselves so much through selective breeding or genetic engineering that they effectively became separate species, but still regard each other as the same species.

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as for Reign, I wanted her colors to look like that cuz I felt they would look nice. and my intepretation of Ali will be a bit diffrent. infact shes supposed to stand 8 feet tall now. and Reign is only 4 feet tall (Ali drown increadibly. also dinosaurs are thought to grow big quite fast).

They look about the same size in the poster. :huh: By the way, sorry, but what does that last sentence mean?

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Scyth's name is pronounced "S-EY-TH" like what the Grim Reeper holds.

Just so you know, the word "scythe" has an 'e' on the end, though it probably doesn't matter if you spell the character's name without it.

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Slash is actualy a mixture of LBT III and Screach and Thud. as well as the JP raptors. and yeah. his claws came out a bit too stubby. but on his right foot his killing claw is broken off. so yeah.

Specifically, I thought the two walking toes (not the sickle claw) on his left foot (the foot on the right of the image) looked shorter than those on his other foot.

You're making a picture for Scyth, too, right? I'm excited to see it.

TITANOSAUR · **Reply #13 on:** September 04, 2010, 07:50:19 PM

well, its hard to explain then.

trust me this fanfic will be unlike any fanfic you ever read!

btw, I am still working on Scyth's charactor. I am thinking of changing HIM to a HER... Scyth will exibit JP stripes and will be branded the Galionus Empire insignia. its barely visible on Slash's leg.

I may also make some story boards for the fanfic. it will be posted in a seporate thread.

TITANOSAUR · **Reply #14 on:** September 04, 2010, 11:41:05 PM

hey everybody! I hate to double post. BUT! I do have something new to post. a new sketch!

here is Rahl as she will look in the Fanfic. here I went with a humanoid look. mainly because I want her to look sexy and attractive (shes a woman after all) tell me what you guys think?

basicly what I've Done is, I mostly gave her a humanoid look. basicly shes Anthropromorphic now. and here you can see her as she should be seen. she sports armor made of dinosaur bones, as well as armor she made herself using primitive materials. she even figured out how to make metal by melting down rocks to make her shoulder pads and the spikes on them are made from dinosaur ribs. the skull on her left arm is a juvinile Giganotosaurus skull with hand crafted blades attached to it.

the skull on her mid chest is of that of a Deinonychus. the skull on her left hip is from a Compsognathus, the loin cloth she has on is actualy made from Dinosaur skin. she was originaly gonna have a tooth-lined belt (made from dinosaur teeth and skulls) but I felt it be way too much stuff. shes originaly supposed to have skulls of longnecks (Apatosaurs mainly) on her shoulder pads. but I felt the only way to draw them is if they where small and people will think she killed young dinosaurs (Though, this wouldn't be out of her charactor, but I would be afraid people think it was Ali's and Reign's skulls. so I dropped the idea). so I just settled with the ribs.

one of the greatest features this sketch shows is Rahl's Pecks. wich you can clearly see are translucent and you can almost see something inside. originaly, in the verry first draft of the story, when I first thought of the idea. Rahl was supposed to be A-sexual (She is now B-sexual). and when Ali and Reign(at that time her sister was being called Sage) looked at her stomach, and looked through the translucent windows on her belly, they could see six Baby Komodogalionus forming. this was actualy inspired by the Alien Queen, Original Alien, and Optimus Prime (his Windshield Chest). the idea was also thought of when I watched Grimilens.

Rahl's Over All Anthro Design was inspired by Species Sil, as well as Demona from Gargoyels. as well as another charactor. Rahl can FINALY be seen with her Antenne, which she was lacking in my first sketch. I also wanted to do something about her Tentacles. for one, not only do they pull in food to her mouth. but here, they work as lips. also, they can be used to freak the hell out of somebody by having them work as fingures. I also wanted her to look attractive. I got tired of people seeing her as a monster (though, I can never prove that anybody DID think of her as a monster). I also wanted to give the viewer a good look at her tail. here you can almost see it is triangle shapped at the end. infact I got a scene in mind where she is half aquatic as well.

anyways, I hope you guys enjoy this. cuz its getting a colored version soon.

Pangaea · **Reply #15 on:** September 08, 2010, 08:19:20 AM

Sorry for the delayed response.

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here I went with a humanoid look. mainly because I want her to look sexy and attractive

Ummm…Why? None of the dinosaurs or other contemporary species are going to find her attractive. I doubt that most of your readers are going to find her especially appealing (and the story will be all in text anyway, won't it? This and other pictures are going to be the only actual looks they'll get of Rahl). And unless Rahl succeeds in reviving other Komodogalionus, she won't have any members of her own species to be attracted to her. I really don't see the point in giving her female humanoid characteristics. I immensely preferred your original design, which was not only far more interesting and alien-looking (more befitting a creature from the Precambrian), but much scarier as well, in my opinion. Plus, in all honesty, I don't care for the clichÈ that every intelligent, technology-using non-human species, no matter what planet or time it comes from, will evolve the same body plan as humans, right down to a narrow waist and prominent chest in females.

It may not be intentional on the part of the creators of such creatures, but to me, these designs just reflect anthropocentrism: the idea that the human body plan is the best design, and that it represents some kind of evolutionary goal or pinnacle.

Rahl's earlier "monster"-like design was also more original; something I'd never seen before (even if it reminded me a tiny bit of Alien), whereas to me the new version just looks like a combination of other alien/creature/monster designs I've seen in the past. Plus, I felt that the more dinosaur-looking version of Rahl better suited her as a villain in a story about dinosaurs.

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(shes a woman after all)

Technically, so are Littlefoot's, Ducky's and Petrie's mothers, Tria, Sue, Grandma longneck, and every other adult female character in LBT, and none of them have anthropomorphic female characteristics unless you count long eyelashes. The LBT dinosaurs (and indeed probably every real-life species other the very close extinct relatives of humans) wouldn't view the traits that humans find sexually attractive any more than the average human woman would be enamored of the bushy tufts of hair on the front legs of a male wolf spider (the primary visual attractiveness cue for that species).

Don't get me wrong; the artwork looks very good (I like the skull armor, though I thought having her attach small skulls to her tusks looked good, too); it's just that I thought your original design was much, much better. I'm sorry if I disappointed you. If you're offended in any way, I assure you that I didn't intend it.

TITANOSAUR · **Reply #16 on:** September 08, 2010, 08:26:13 PM

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here I went with a humanoid look. mainly because I want her to look sexy and attractive

Ummm…Why? None of the dinosaurs or other contemporary species are going to find her attractive. I doubt that most of your readers are going to find her especially appealing (and the story will be all in text anyway, won't it? This and other pictures are going to be the only actual looks they'll get of Rahl). And unless Rahl succeeds in reviving other Komodogalionus, she won't have any members of her own species to be attracted to her. I really don't see the point in giving her female humanoid characteristics. I immensely preferred your original design, which was not only far more interesting and alien-looking (more befitting a creature from the Precambrian), but much scarier as well, in my opinion. Plus, in all honesty, I don't care for the clichÈ that every intelligent, technology-using non-human species, no matter what planet or time it comes from, will evolve the same body plan as humans, right down to a narrow waist and prominent chest in females. It may not be intentional on the part of the creators of such creatures, but to me, these designs just reflect anthropocentrism: the idea that the human body plan is the best design, and that it represents some kind of evolutionary goal or pinnacle. Rahl's earlier "monster"-like design was also more original; something I'd never seen before (even if it reminded me a tiny bit of Alien), whereas to me the new version just looks like a combination of other alien/creature/monster designs I've seen in the past. Plus, I felt that the more dinosaur-looking version of Rahl better suited her as a villain in a story about dinosaurs.

I am actualy still working on the story with my Co-Writer, I am thinking of implying Rahl's origins are a mystery. I may go along with that she is from space. but I am still working on the story. it IS coming along however. its just going over whats called "Develoupment Hell". anyways, I always wanted her to look more humanoid. mainly because I think it looks much better. also because shes not a dinosaur. shes not human. shes a Galionus. as I said. many Galionus species looks humanoid. their species spans to many worlds. Earth being one of them at one point. anyways I wanted to make Rahl like this because I felt it should help make her much more capable as an enemy. for one the old design would have limited her arm movements. here she has a full motion of her arms as we have. I also wanted to execute on the windowed pecks on her stomack. the creature form you would not have been able to see it as well. also not everything is fully humanoid on Rahl. she still posses the look of a saurian. she just stands more upright and has better more feminine curves and looks and is thinner is all.

Rahl's species have actualy been around longer then earth has first formed. as I said. her origins remain a mystery. the most acceptible theory as to why she is on earth is that her species, sometime before the Precambrian age colonized earth, and some odd turn of events caused the Galionus Empire to fall and the species as well as the vast citys and other stuff from its empire where mostly destroyed or lost. others such as labs and war-rooms have been burried so far into the ground finding them is like finding a needle in a heystack. infact one would be lucky just to find one accidently (Rahl being lucky herself to find a lab).

anyways they can and will look humanoid. its not about having a similar body structure millions of years apart then our own. its a mear fact that our body design is mainly a shared one. (like how cats and dogs look similar in the fact that they have near the same body structure. while their bones and organs are arranged and look completely diffrent)

another reason I went with the feminine design is because I actualy wanted to ditch the monster design. I actualy didn't like it. also, the only Dinosaur in the story that actualy considers her as attractive (mind it being one sided) is Slash. also the design as I said, hasn't realy changed much escept that it looks more feminine. I also wanted to pay trubute to H.R. Giger in her design. so yeah.

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(shes a woman after all)

Technically, so are Littlefoot's, Ducky's and Petrie's mothers, Tria, Sue, Grandma longneck, and every other adult female character in LBT, and none of them have anthropomorphic female characteristics unless you count long eyelashes. The LBT dinosaurs (and indeed probably every real-life species other the very close extinct relatives of humans) wouldn't view the traits that humans find sexually attractive any more than the average human woman would be enamored of the bushy tufts of hair on the front legs of a male wolf spider (the primary visual attractiveness cue for that species).

yeah but like I been saying alot. shes not a dinosaur. shes a Galionus. a species that as I said alot before, has humanoid atributes but only in form, everything else as you said, is Alien.

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Don't get me wrong; the artwork looks very good (I like the skull armor, though I thought having her attach small skulls to her tusks looked good, too); it's just that I thought your original design was much, much better. I'm sorry if I disappointed you. If you're offended in any way, I assure you that I didn't intend it.

not at all, your mearly trying to get infomation. and I respect that.

btw, you asked if All verietys of Galionus are capable of reproducing with the others, I originaly avoided the question cuz I have yet to expand on that. now I have expanded on it. and to help make the species much more stronger. they will and they can, its rare but its possible. they can also if situations are extreme reproduce with diffrent species. but this will usualy end with the result of the male partner being killed by the female Galionus (as females are only compatable with this ability) the result will be extremely diffrent. infact it works the same way as the Xenomorph's adaptibility. say, a Female Komodogalionus (Like Rahl) mated with a human. then you get a humanoid version of Galionus, the hybrid will exibit humanoid face with small tentacles, two eyes and tusks and horns. okay, now lets say a female Komodogalionus mated with a Dinosaur (any kind that has the sufficiant genes for survival of the Galionus hybrid) like a Raptor. you would get a raptor version of a Galionus. in all these cases. the hybrid will exibit the same biomechoid appearance, Six Tentacles, body lengthed tail. and two tusks and one horn. other aspects will also be shown depending on the Galionus type. sence we're talking about a Komodogalionus, the hybrid will exibit glowing biolumence, the spikes (five sets if female, three sets if male). as well as the head design. will be mixed with what ever the male species was.

In Rahl's case, she is verry stubbern about using the Hybrid mating ability. mainly because, as already been established, Rahl finds Dinosaurs as a species that has no future but to be exterminated. they may also serve as cattle, to be brought to the slaughter houses. Slash is the only one who is interested but not to that extent.

I am thinking of making a prequil to TAOR. it will be set in the year of 20301 PFGE. it will show what happened to the Galionus Empire, how it worked as well as how they got to earth. they will also be all Komodogalionus and be a star faring species (well they have to be).

Pangaea · **Reply #17 on:** September 09, 2010, 01:38:46 AM

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Rahl's species have actualy been around longer then earth has first formed. as I said. her origins remain a mystery. the most acceptible theory as to why she is on earth is that her species, sometime before the Precambrian age colonized earth, and some odd turn of events caused the Galionus Empire to fall and the species as well as the vast citys and other stuff from its empire where mostly destroyed or lost. others such as labs and war-rooms have been burried so far into the ground finding them is like finding a needle in a heystack. infact one would be lucky just to find one accidently (Rahl being lucky herself to find a lab).

Just so you know, the Galionus couldn't have colonized Earth before the Precambrian; there WAS no Earth before Precambrian. So it would have to have been sometime during the Precambrian, probably during the Archaean eon (3.8 to 2.5 billion years ago) or early Proterozoic eon. Here's an idea for the collapse of the Komodogalionus' civilization on Earth: the global ice ages ("Snowball Earths") that took place during the later part of the Precambrian (starting at around 2.2 billion years ago). Maybe what could have happened is that the Komodogalionus knew the ice age was coming, and planned on surviving it by putting themselves in a sort of cryostasis, freezing themselves until the ice had melted and they could rebuild their civilization. However, whatever system they installed to wake them up failed to work, so they remained in stasis for hundreds of millions of years longer than planned, until Rahl wakes up during the age of the dinosaurs. Perhaps some curious dinosaur finds her stasis pod or whatever it is she is frozen in, and accidentally activates it, causing her to be thawed out. A major advantage of this over having Rahl simply thaw out of an iceberg is she wouldn't have to start out in the Arctic or Antarctic or some other place with ice, and travel all the way down to the warmer latitudes where the Great Valley is located. Anyway, once she is awake, she seeks to locate all the other frozen Komodogalionus and awaken them as well.

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anyways they can and will look humanoid. its not about having a similar body structure millions of years apart then our own. its a mear fact that our body design is mainly a shared one. (like how cats and dogs look similar in the fact that they have near the same body structure. while their bones and organs are arranged and look completely diffrent)

Yes, but cats and dogs are quite closely relating, sharing a common ancestor within the last 65 million years or so. The Galionus didn't even evolve from animals on Earth; genetically, humans are more closely related to bacteria than to Galionus. If your argument is convergent evolutionóthe Galionus simply evolved a similar body plan to humans by coincidenceóthen that's fine; I just don't really care for that design that much.

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another reason I went with the feminine design is because I actualy wanted to ditch the monster design. I actualy didn't like it.

Well, if that's the case, then I can't argue with that. I'll miss the original design myself, though.

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also, the only Dinosaur in the story that actualy considers her as attractive (mind it being one sided) is Slash.

It's still pretty strange that a dinosaur would find her attractive; Slash must have very atypical tastes.

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btw, you asked if All verietys of Galionus are capable of reproducing with the others, I originaly avoided the question cuz I have yet to expand on that. now I have expanded on it. and to help make the species much more stronger. they will and they can, its rare but its possible. they can also if situations are extreme reproduce with diffrent species. but this will usualy end with the result of the male partner being killed by the female Galionus (as females are only compatable with this ability) the result will be extremely diffrent. infact it works the same way as the Xenomorph's adaptibility. say, a Female Komodogalionus (Like Rahl) mated with a human. then you get a humanoid version of Galionus, the hybrid will exibit humanoid face with small tentacles, two eyes and tusks and horns. okay, now lets say a female Komodogalionus mated with a Dinosaur (any kind that has the sufficiant genes for survival of the Galionus hybrid) like a Raptor. you would get a raptor version of a Galionus. in all these cases. the hybrid will exibit the same biomechoid appearance, Six Tentacles, body lengthed tail. and two tusks and one horn. other aspects will also be shown depending on the Galionus type. sence we're talking about a Komodogalionus, the hybrid will exibit glowing biolumence, the spikes (five sets if female, three sets if male). as well as the head design. will be mixed with what ever the male species was.

I'm guessing you're probably not going for realism here, so don't let this bother you, but just so you know, that pattern of reproduction (offspring taking on the characteristics of the host/parent species) is EXTREMELY unrealistic. Humans can't interbreed with chimpanzees, even though we're ~97% identical genetically. An alien wouldn't share ANY of the same genes, and could never mate with a human, dinosaur, or any other Earth species and produce viable offspring. Nor is it likely that a parasitic alien could extract genes from a Terran host and insert them into its own genome; it would be like upgrading your computer's hard drive with LEGO bricks. I do know it is possible for bacteria to integrate genes from other kinds of bacteria into their own genomes, but these are single-celled organisms whose genetic material is free-floating in their cytoplasm, not contained within organelles such as nuclei (as in all known multicellular organisms).

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it will be set in the year of 20301 PFGE.

What does that mean? (The initials, that is.)

TITANOSAUR · **Reply #18 on:** September 09, 2010, 07:49:45 PM

PFGE stands for Pre-Fall Of Galionius Empire.

anyways Scyth is finaly getting his/her charactor sheet drawn up now. I am still thinking of making Scyth into a female. if so she will be Slash's Sister.

I am thinking of sketching Tosk and Thailog. I felt they where likable charactors and do need a sketch done for them.

anyways the way I made the Galionus species in this way to make them capable of reproducing with anything around their size to make them much more dangerous. it seems unrealistic but its how I want it.

TITANOSAUR · **Reply #19 on:** September 10, 2010, 09:07:22 PM

heres Scyth's charactor Sheet. desided to make her a female.

Bio:

Species: Velociraptor

Hight: 7' 3"

weight: 632lbs

Gender: Female

Rank/Possition: subbornant second officer.

Specialitys: Gaurilla Warfare tactics.

Background Infomation: once apart of a pack. Scyth along with her Brother Slash where gravely injured when their pack was killed by Ali and her herd. Rahl found the two dying Raptors and revived them in a burried Galionus Empire Lab. Scyth along with her brother reluctedly swore Alegiance to Rahl in dept to her saving their lives.

Scyth has a deep love for her brother. she is always by his side and will always be seen fighting next to him. she even goes far as taking the rap from her brother when he fails. she also sypathises with her brother for his attraction twards Rahl in that she knows she will hill him and her once she has her Galionus Empire back.

although Scyth has no hatred more for any of the Longnecks in the herd then Ali. she blames Ali for her Mate's death wich was an accident. she shares this hatred twards the young longneck with Rahl.

Scyth has had a deep interests in black magic sence she was a hatchling. having seen a demon in one time she believed she can be a Witchraptoress. indeed the best she can do however is for a short time hypnotise dinosaurs and make them go to sleep. she has a Transilvanian accent.

Love Interests: Scyth had a mate but was accidently killed on accident.

*Artist's Note*

Scyth was originaly going to be a male but this was changed to make the population of female charactors outnumber the male members. I wanted this to basicly be a big girlfight basicly. mainly cuz I believe nothing is more entertaining then two girls fighting. her stripes are what I call V stripes. and the placement of the stripes are similar to Raptor Jesus Tan created by Splash in 2002. Scyth was inspired by the Decepticon Headmaster Mindwipe.

Scyth's body model is a mix of LBTIII raptors as well as the JPIII female raptor.

I'm pretty much done now. these are all the charactors featured in the story that I need to draw and that needs their charactors develouped.