The Gang of Five
The Land Before Time => LBT Fanfiction => Topic started by: Littlefoot1616 on November 07, 2004, 08:24:28 AM
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Hey gang!
Who amongst us have, or is, writing a LBT fanfic? *hand shoots in the air* I'm one! I know Malte is in the process of writing another which I cant wait to read! I'd recommend his other stories as well. I loved 'em! Great plot and very well translated! Im currently writing a LBT fanfic (bin working on it for over 2 years now!). It's not the sorta thing that would fit a LBT movie coz it's more on the fantasy side. I've also included a mish-mash of lots of different elements from other games and movies I like. It's called "Battle of the Sacred Essences" and it's in the LBT section of Fanfiction.net. Check it out if you so wish but don't expect it to be a LBT movie... coz it's not!
Who else has got a fanfic?
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I'll be honest I do have one, but it's not serious at all. I combined it with another show I had once watched on tv called Captain Planet and the dinos all have magic powers. :lol:
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I am working on one as well and I haven't posted it yet on Fanfic since it still a working progress. "The Mysteriours World"
Can't say much because I might ruin it for yous. have a talk about the title. I don't mind at all.
-Threehorn
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Right now I'm attempting a story about Ali and Chomper.
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that sounds cool, hope it works out
-Threehorn
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I hope, but I also have other things to write, sadly.
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We all have something else to do... like uni or college work. I had Uni work to deal with so my fanfic is slowed down.
-Threehorn
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Well, for me, its college work and the fact that I have other stories to write.
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what type of other stories?
-THreehorn
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By the way, did you receive the story I sent you WeirdRaptor?
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Probably, but I sometimes forget to check my E-Mails.
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There a few on Fanfiction.net that been taken off. I have seen some great ones disappear from the site. :cry
I wish they didn't remove them I like reading back on them.
-Threehorn
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The moderators of FF.Net are WAY too tight in their moderating and their rules are WAY too strict. Hello, creativity being held back here.
I'd still like to know why script formats aren't allowed. (cusses fanfiction.net out.)
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I am annoyed at them as well. I wish I knew another website that does fanfiction stories of all types.
-Threehorn
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Me,too. If I had the resources to do something like that, I'd allow script format. I like to write cinematically, sometimes.
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How many severs are there in Fanfiction.net? to make that site at least. (plus Fictionpress.net)
-Threehorn
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Enough to delete me all three times I tried to use a script format. What pisses me off is I see older fanfics get away with script format, but mine don't.
I will reframe from saying how I feel about that, as it would not be pretty.
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I bet it not pretty what your thinking about fanfiction.net
-Threehorn
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NOt too many bad thoughts. I have stories on there.
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I had hard work at stories on there... but been removed by ff.net because of some jurk in college when I went there put silly bad reviews saying curse words on it.
I took action removing them and then one day ff.net removed it. I haven't even bothered trying to repost those stories back up
-Threehorn
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Sounds like a bad guy. He must be a real jerk.
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He was, I hated him alot and I had to break up a fight between him and another in the class I was in about 6 weeks before the end of the second year in college. A real sad endding to my college life in Harlow College.
-Threehorn
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Ouch.
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It the past and I am glad to just go on with life. With all these events of my past I still go on with life like that never happened. It might be a little cold in some eyes but it part of the disablity I got. (includes spelling, grammar)
Plus I am not afaird to tell ppl about it
-Threehorn
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That's brave. Most think its tough to keep stuff like that secret, but to say what you feel and what your problems are is a leap of faith.
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I guess I could say about things that some would find it hard to say.
-Threehorn
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I guess for stories, the best way to deliver them online is through e-mail or set up your own website so you don't have to follow someone else's restrictions. ;)
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goodpoint
-Threehorn
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What was the trigger of that fight Threehorn? It must've been something really bad considering the consequences. Did the one you had this fight with suffer from the consequences too?
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I have a couple on Fanfiction.net and two more on the way: Land Before Time: The Bounty Hunter and What If.
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I got in trouble with Fanfiction.net because they don't allow lists and other nonstories. Here is the unfair part though. It was a story. In it, one of the characters was listing things like first this then that. Some tattletale ratted me out and I got suspended for a week. FF.net's guidlines state that you can't have entries that are only lists, polls, joke, ect, not stories where the character names a list of things. Those jerks removed the story and I feel that I was unfairly punished for something I didn't do wrong. I even sent them an email but they won't let me off the hook until 12-7-05. :cry2 :( :angry:
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I have revised my story about what I think would have happened if Littlefoot's mother had survived. I have made some edits and combined chapters. The story is on Fanfiction.net. Please chect it out and tell me what you think. I will accept constructive criticizm. AAs a matter of fact, if you have any suguestions, please let me know either in a review for the story or here. Now, I just discovered that the story still has some typos.
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I have been posting a story on FF.net for the past four months titiled "Time Gate X", I already know F-14, Littlefoot1616, and Threehorn are reading it. But for those who don't know, it's a pretty good story, I got some of the ideas from "Halo", "Doom 3", "Dino Crisis" and "Jurassic Park". It's an intensly violent story, a lot of cursing, bullets and gore in it. There isn't much of the original gang in this story, mainly Hyp, Nod and Mutt. It also stars a fellow author's fan character. I'm still working on chapter 15.
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I've been reading it as well. It is good. I agree with the M rating for it. It seems that only you and one other person are brave enough to post a M rated story there. I won't go into the other story's content here (only in after midnight), but let's say that the gang faces a lot of losses and hard choices.
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It's true! I have been reading Time Gate X. A fic definitely not reccommended for the weak of stomach or the easy-queasies. It's rated M for it's bloody violence and strong language but that's merely a categoric warning...I reckon Time Gate X is an awesome fic. Some of the scientific descriptions are well explained as well as the foot-to-butt action! LOL :DD A good read if you're after in-your-face thrills and action :yes ;)
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Could you imagine to write an LBT story which is not violent and not a crossing over with elements of other stories? Could you imagine writing a land before time story which could actually be made a movie?
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I thought you'd say something like that Malte. I know how much you feel the necessity to stick to the rules of LBT without the need to incorporate other aspects of other elements. But at the end of the day, it's all down to the writer's preference. As a reader, you're under no obligation to read it if you feel it doesn't apply to you...Not having a dig at you or anything ;) That last statement was generic, not pinpointing anyone in particular
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But at the end of the day, it's all down to the writer's preference. As a reader, you're under no obligation to read it if you feel it doesn't apply to you.
I'm fully aware of that (and also of the fact that you are not having a dig at me mate) and I pointed out in the main thread on the topic (http://www.gangoffive.net/index.php?showtopic=103) that I know I don't have any right to tell people what to write and what not to. I would be a hypocrite if I told people not to get themselves in a state about people messing with LBT and then get myself in a state over the kind of stories we are talking about. On the other hand I would be a liar if I claimed not to get some belly ache from these stories written by actual fans of the land before time. I have to confess they are bothering me more than all that anti-LBT stuff does as it is harder for me to shrug off what LBT fans write about LBT than what some LBT hating nut writes about LBT. So maybe that makes me a lying hypocrite? :unsure:
The least I can do is to try to encourage people to write stories true to the land before time as we know it from the movies. Success is unlikely I'm afraid :cry
I find it surprising how very few land before time stories there are that don't include crossing overs and excessive violence and how very few fans seem to feel uneasy about this.
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At least the sharpteeth are taking the most casualties. I can't really write an action/adenture story without blood and violence.
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Hmm...I'd say the factor was arguable. You can use violence without it being bloody and gory. It all depends on the amount of detail you put into the description of the extent of damage. I try not to overdo the gore TOO much coz I know too much can offend some people and I try to cater for as many people as possible coz that's you're goal after all. To get as many people reading your fanfic as you can. ;)
As for your point Malte, I've always said I understand your cause for concern and I still do. But I think the main reason why people choose to include non-LBT elements into LBT fanfics is because they don't like the idea of being restricted to some customs that we'd class as normal. The idea of no weapons, vehicles, technology etc. It's a lot easier with modern conveniences being accessible than it is to imagine a world without them. That and it's a lot easier to create an antagonist (i.e. to generate tension and the feel of an action/adventure plot) if there is something out of place that doesn't naturally belong to the characters' world. I.e the introduction of humans is an easy one coz they're normally 65 millions years apart yet we've always pondered the idea of time-travel so it makes it all the more "plausible" to get them to interact. I say plausible in inverted commas coz it seems like the most logical reason to have just as a crossed element. Again, no digs or fiery comments intended if they happen to sound that way. :^.^:
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Come on Jason, you know I'm not interpreting your post as any whatsoever kind of attack same as you don't interpret mine as such mate. No need for any reassurance on this. If I ever mean to offend you I'll tell you in the message. Till then we can presuppose that neither of us is attacking the other one. :lol:
I understand the "entertaining value" of blood and gore (or rather than understand I should say that I know it myself. All my peacetalk should not mislead people to think that I'm unaffected by this). What I find somewhat disquieting though is the apparent inability to go without an excessive amount of blood and gore (there is violence in LBT, but certainly not the amount that is to be found in many fanfictions) and non-LBT elements at all. I find it surprising how very different our views on LBT seem to be and just how large the majority is that favours crossing overs and blood and gore in LBT. Apart from myself I think there are only two or three people in the GOF who prefer strictly LBT stories. I know of a few more people who are however not posting here. I do think that there are really land before time stories beyond the line of good taste.
Some people think that including however unusual elements in their stories proves their great imagination. I would rather say that the ability to write within the borders set by the movies is a proof of imagination. There are so very, very few land before time fanfictions without non-LBT elements and much less people trying to write such stories.
It does not always take a blood-bath to make a story interesting (if I want to learn about that I just need to switch on the television news).
Again, I know I don't have the right to tell anyone what to write and what not to. I have to admit though that it is much harder for me to shrug off an LBT story written by an LBT fan which consists to a good deal of the process of dismembering dinosaurs than it is for me to shrug off some LBT haters offenses against LBT and us. Sometimes the line between so called LBT fanfictions and anti LBT hate mail seems rather blurred to me. There are stories and even images created by fans which include pretty much what LBT haters write they would like to do to the LBT characters.
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Chapter 15 is up. Of course, no good guys will die. I just rated the story M because of the high body count in "sharpteeth". There may be some human casualties like in Halo. But, unlike the other M rated story on FF.net, I won't kill off any of the original gang. I like to write stories with a lot of realism in them. Sometimes it's ok to think outside the box. :^.^:
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I am currently writing a Land Before Time story, called Out of the Shadows. It's also at FF.Net but it is rated M, and dark and violent. Not something you should let kids read. It's about Chomper betraying the gang and trying to take over the valley with other sharpteeth, but something else is controlling everything. There's a lot of twists and turns in the fanfic, and appearances of not only official, but fanmade characters.
Yes, my story is the other M rated story that Cyberlizard mentioned. So yeah I do have major character deaths, however, I do plan on a special ending that'll fix all that. ^^
Afterwards, if I don't decide to write my first book (yes I'm considering it), then there's a couple LBT fanfics I may write, the main ones being Cursed and The Dream Effect.
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I never post a story on ff.net cause of the rules and I dont plan to I use the word pad on my computer to write storys Im working on CARNAVORE II right now then I'll work on my LBT story its in its pre-production stage right now but I will say its going to be a series of spin-offs.
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I don't mind the rules at FF.Net. I can live with them. I'm not too happy about the no official lyrics thing, but oh well. I'm completely fine with the other rules, especially no script-formatting. I hate stories written in script-format. o_O
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CHAPTERS 22, 23 AND 24 OF TIME GATE X ARE FINALLY UP! :DD :DD :DD
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You're very happy aren't you? XD
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Yeah, very, VERY happy. ^^ ^^ ^^ ^^ ^^
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Yay! XD :lol
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big news ya'll I got a new story up on FF.net its the one I've been talking about for a while now and I'm finaly writing it.
The Land Before Time: Rise of the Triceron Empire is finaly being posted. the entire story will be a long and interesting story of two alien races at war and takes there war to earth. The Tricerons (the good guys. resemble bipedial triceratops with armor and laser weapons) destroys the comit that was to kill the dinosaurs 37 years later and goes to earth and helps the Dinosaurs (mainly the herbivores) to become the domenant species of the planet. the Tricerons also teach them to build there first civilisation and teachs them to farm.
all the original concept is there too. the Carnotons (bad guys. also resemble Carnotorus with armor also has Laser weapon teck) goes to earth to destroy the Tricerons and enslave all beings. also the Dinomechs and Carnobots are still in this story as before especualy Littlefoots turned Cyborg mom Brontus AA01 will be in the series.
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Chapter 3 is up on Rise of the triceron Empire. it gets sad at the end of Chapter three though. a Triceron charactor dies.
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you don't tell anyone that get them to read it and find out for themsevles. they will most likly read the whole thing, best not to spolie the ending.
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workin on first lbt story ali's return :wow lbt characters and 3 of my own
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I am working on my own one called Land Before Time: The Cave of Mystic sounds.
It has my new charcater Thunder in it but the story going to be a lot different to the rpg we doing called Thunder.
Since this one is not going to have all these charcaters in the rpg it going to be more tone down compared to this. I am writing it out and plan to post it later on in the year after I get back to the UK.
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Hey guys my story is really forming well and it seem to be going perfectly fine at the moment done 4 chapters already of my Land Before Time story called Lane Before Time: The Cave of Msytic Sounds. it been working out better then I thought it would be bring in stages of events very well. I plan toget it completed so I can even put it up on Fanfiction when I finished it and back in the UK! once I done my website for my photos that I taking out here.
-Threehorn
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chapter 2 complete working on chapter 3
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need help with my fanfic! :( i already know howto getchomper off the island but how do get his parents off?
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the entire story will be a long and interesting story of two alien races at war and takes there war to earth. The Tricerons (the good guys. resemble bipedial triceratops with armor and laser weapons)
You know, the Teenage Mutant Ninja Turtles once fought with a race of aliens called "Triceratons" that looked exactly like these Tricerons you describe.
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Ah, yes, the Triceratons. They were some of my fav characters.
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Talking about that, I have checked a Star Trek Fanfiction story that has a Triceratops captain humaniod of course. to know more about it, you've have to read my story Fanfiction- Threehorn (http://www.fanfiction.net/~threehorn)
you will will find called Star Trek: Cretaceous: Saurian Conflict Part 1, I think. not sure lol
On that URL I have a selection of Land Before Time stories on it, not sure if everyone here read it so just letting you know :)
But as the each seriesly like stories go by, there is going to be one story in the near furture with the captain in a shuttle craft getting throw into the Land Before Time dimension through a Dimensional Void that he detects on his travels back to the ship. (that as far I am going to say. leaving it all quiet till I write it up)
-Threheorn
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I haven't worked on my story for a while. been too bussy on my board. and bussy in my real life too. might work on it tomarrow though. if I get the chance that is.
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Short descriptions of upcoming LBT fanfics.
Betrayal
Rating: G
Description: Very short fanfic. Ever wondered why Topsy hated Pterano? Is it only because of Pterano's lies, or is it something more?
Learning to Cope
Rating: PG
Description: Very short fanfic. Takes place right after Out of the Shadows, and before the epilouge. Just how did Littlefoot and his pals cope with the loss of their best friend?
Decade
Rating: PG-13
Description: When Pterano discovers the real Stone of Cold Fire, the entire planet is plunged into a terrible Flyer Reign. A resistance group is the Earth's only chance of salvation.
Out of the Shadows 2
Rating: R
Description: Takes place 5 years after Out of the Shadows. Life has continued normally in the Great Valley, but with the sudden reappearance of Rex, Littlefoot soon discovers an evil long thought defeated has returned, and the target is his son, Brook.
OOTS2 will defintely not be posted here. Neither will be LoC, since it's part of the OOTS universe. I might consider posting Decade and Betrayal, whenever I get around to writing them.
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Short descriptions of upcoming LBT fanfics.
Betrayal
Rating: G
Description: Very short fanfic. Ever wondered why Topsy hated Pterano? Is it only because of Pterano's lies, or is it something more?
Learning to Cope
Rating: PG
Description: Very short fanfic. Takes place right after Out of the Shadows, and before the epilouge. Just how did Littlefoot and his pals cope with the loss of their best friend?
Decade
Rating: PG-13
Description: When Pterano discovers the real Stone of Cold Fire, the entire planet is plunged into a terrible Flyer Reign. A resistance group is the Earth's only chance of salvation.
Out of the Shadows 2
Rating: R
Description: Takes place 5 years after Out of the Shadows. Life has continued normally in the Great Valley, but with the sudden reappearance of Rex, Littlefoot soon discovers an evil long thought defeated has returned, and the target is his son, Brook.
OOTS2 will defintely not be posted here. Neither will be LoC, since it's part of the OOTS universe. I might consider posting Decade and Betrayal, whenever I get around to writing them.
I read the last chapter of Out of the Shadows and when Rex gave his life at the end, I found it very heartbreaking. Though I was very surprised at the very end when Rex came back.
I hope in it's sequal you cover exactly how he was able to come back.
Betrayal sounds very interesting. I wonder what he did that was so terrible.
Learning to Cope sounds like an in-between-quel that I would like to read. I'll wait paitently for it.
Hmm, why did you call the third one Decade? Does it possibly mean 10 years after Pterano was exiled from The Great Valley or something like that?
Anyways, I'll wait paitently for your up coming stories. I really enjoyed reading Out of the Shadows. You are a great author, you know that?
Well, I'll see ya later. :^.^:
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For those of you who have been reading my story "Battle of the Sacred Essences" on FF.net, I'd like to formally annouce that I have finally finished it! The last few chapters have been posted up and I've officially labelled it as "complete". Although, saying that, I will be making minor adjustments to the text just to scan for errors and tpyos (<-- :P: ) but apart from that, nothing else will be added to it. There are a few surprises on there for anyone who's interested but I just wanna thank all those who took the time out to read my first ever fanfic. My story was a success thanks to you all. :^.^:
(DarkHououmon) Loved the ending to Out of Shadows and it sounds like you've got plenty more lined up.
(Cyberlizard) Time Gate X is coming along nicely. I've been reading it when I get the chance. Looking sharp all the same mate! ;) Look forward to an update soon!
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"reads story" hmmm you know. I realy don't feel the tension in my story. the title is awfull theres not enough action and destruction and the war just isn't erupting like I want it. I'm goin to rewrite it and give it more of a War of The Wolds feel to it. cause no story of mine is going to be slow paced. I hate it when that happens. thats why Carnivore worked so well, it was normal paced it had lots of actoin and destrucion and the fight scenes where more exciting. so I'm goin' to rewrite the story rename the title. give it a more of a War of The Worlds feel to it. more destruction and faster pace. hopefully it would be the way that I dream't it. actoin packed and one of a kind.
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Yeah, it's called Decade because much of the story takes place 10 years after Pterano's discovery of the real Stone of Cold Fire.
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Hi there LF1616. :DD I am al little stuck on chapter 27. I have an idea, but no dialogue. :blink:
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alreadythough of idea for fanfic working on chapter 4
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any one want to read part of my story? if so i'll send a portion of it for you to read. btw i'm now on chapter 5 of my story.
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Rise my hand.
This is the story about Chomper, isn't it? I would like to read what you would like to send.
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i'll post a portion of it here tonight. gonna get back to work on my story now.
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here is chapter 1 of my fan fic.
What do you want to do littlefoot? i don't know cera what do you want to do? i don't know. meanwhile 3 miles from the great valley. Mother is it true that we are going to the great valley? Yes it is ali. at that moment 10 raptors attacked. Then another raptor appeared but instead of attacking ali's herd. it defended it. it swiftly defeated the other raptors then after defeating the raptors it left ali's herd alone. What just happened? i don't know ali. 3 hours later . Look the entrance to the valley. well it looks like you made it said voice of mystery. the herd turned around and there was the raptor that saved them. Who are you? asked one of the elders. Well you can call by my nickname it is "kid". Where do you come from? asked ali. i come from a place called laven valley. i have never herd of it i have the older one said i have been there. have we met before? asked the raptor. the older one said we a long time ago. the raptor responded oh yea i remember now. We were the first one's there. What happened to it? asked ali. i'd rather not talk about it the raptor said. is the question indiscreet? no the question isn't indiscreet but the answer might be. uh kid we have to enter the valley now. i understand tell littlefoots grandpa i said hi for me ok? all right the old one said. Me see ali she back! she is petrie? yes me see her! hello littlefoot said ali. hello ali said littlefoot . hey ali me no see you for a long while. Good to see you to petrie. Oh there you are littlefoot grand ma and i were wondering where you were. Hello again ali. Good to see you to grandpa longneck. Oh by the way the old one needs to talk to you. Ok i'll go talk to her.
(this is part of chapter one. what do you think?) (i'l post the rest of chapter 1 later)
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I think you should work this one out a bit more. No offense meant, but reading it the way it is, one feels kind of at a loss. For example it is sometimes difficult to figure out if someone is talking and who is talking without any use of quotation marks. You use too short and incomplete sentences. The change of place (from Great Valley to Ali's herd) can easily be missed.
I think it would be very exciting if you had some more details, thoughts, emotions etc. put into the story. What are the first three sentences supposed to tell us? The attack of the raptors (an event which could be really exciting) is dealt with in only four telegram style sentences. It doesn't quite read like a story in that style.
This is not meant to be an attack or some arrogant patronizing, it really isn't. But I think this could really be improved if it was written in complete sentences, with quotation marks, and some more details to get rid of the telegram style.
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you're right i should edit my story a bit. i'll edit my story tonight and post the edited piece
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my story is turning out good i'll post an edited piece of it tommorrow. i'll work on it some more now.
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working on chapter 6. I'll part of another chapter later tonight.
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I need to start working on chapter 28 of my story. God I hate writer's block. :angry:
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I did a whole complete story my self but it on wait. Cause of some new outside interest away from fanfcition.net.
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(ok here is what i have done with chapter 6 of my story.)
Hey littlefoot! Yea ali? What are you doing? Thinking ali. What are you thinking about? Nothing. I think we'll see cera soon. What makes you say that? I just have a feeling we will. My mom gets those feelings sometimes. What's that over there? Over where littlefoot? Just ahead of us. The large flyer and rinkus fly overhead. What was that all about? i don't know ali. we see another flyer going after rinkus pteranno flies overhead. Pteranno flies after the other two fliers and manages to knock rinkus out of the sky. They struggle on the ground for a moment the other flyer lands to help pteranno. They manage to knock rinkus out. Pteranno: "well that was easy." Large flyer: "yep serria went after vond after he jumped off my back with a young threehorn clinnging to his tail." Pteranno: "do you know what happened after that?" large flyer: "No because i was trying to out fly rinkus." Oh. Littlefoot: "so it's been five cold times already?" Pteranno looks around to see ali and littlefoot standing there. "I guess it has liittlefoot." Ali: "littlefoot who is this?" Pteranno: "i was just about to ask the same thing." Littlefoot: "Ali this is petrie's uncle pteranno." "Pteranno this is my friend ali." "It is nice to meet you pteranno." "It is nice to meet you ali."
(so what do you think?) (i'm working on my story right now.) (I'm thinking of ideas for my story.)
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i for one beleive i have done a very good job on my fanfic. i've been getting writers block from all writing i've been doing in school. i would like some reviews for this bit of my story.
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I have writer's block too. o_O That's why it took me two months to post chapter 25 and 26. And a few weeks to post 27, and my computer died so I had to do chapter 28 at school. o_O;;
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so what do you think of my recent bit of my story i'm writing? i liked your recent up date of your story. gonna get back to work on my story now.
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It's good. I like it. :DD
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No offense meant, but with quotation marks " it would be much easier to tell who is talking, when another character starts talking, when a character stops talking, when talking stops altogether etc.
There is room for improvement. :yes
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Well, yeah. I forgot about that part that Malte just mentioned.. ^^;
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i've done a bit of editing to the bit of the 6th chapter of my story.
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Hello there! I also have a few LBT Fanfictions to show! I know DarkHououmon, Cyberlizard and the new member, KingdomKey23, are familiar with them. :P:
I'll be posting the threads with them shortly.
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I am also interested in typing some fanfiction, displaying A Land Before Time fanfiction which ironically is a crossover between Kingdom Hearts 2. A Time Before Twilight, look out for it in the future. :lol
Hello there! I also have a few LBT Fanfictions to show! I know DarkHououmon, Cyberlizard and the new member, KingdomKey23, are familiar with them
Can't wait to see your's Keni, or as I know you better as Sora W.T.K. XD
And to Threehorn I want to say you're my personal hero. I too have a bit of a disbility, but I was always scared that people would think of me differently. But you had no fear to show it. You're one cool guy and that shows a lot of inspiration! B)
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i'll post a full chapter of my story tommorrow. i've gotta work on homework now later! The story i'm working on now has a few references to my next story.
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i've just started chapter 7 i'm gonna get back to work on it.
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Chapter 8 I'am workin on.
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curently editing my story will post edited chapter tomorrow. My story's turning out good.
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I shall post an edited chapter tonight. (note this story has breif references to my next story.)(Yea first chapter posted!)
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(Before I start I will point out this is an edited version of chapter 1.) (Without further adue I'll get started with my fanfic)
The Land Before Time Ali's Return
Chapter 1
What do you want to do littlefoot? I don't know cera. What do you want to do? I don't know. What do you want to do ducky? I do not know. What do you want to do petrie? Me no know. What do you want to do spike? I don't know. Meanwhile 3 miles from the great valley. Mother is it true that we're going to the great valley? Yes it is ali. Suddenly 10 extermely hungry raptors attacked. Then another raptor appeared but instead of attcaking ali's herd it defended it. It swiftly defeated the other raptors after defeating them the raptor left ali's herd alone. 'What just happened," asked ali. "I don't know," replied ali's mom. 3 hours later. "Look the entrance to the valley," said ali's mom. "Well it look like you made it," a voice of mystery said. The herd turned around and there was the raptor that saved them. "Who are you," asked ali's mom. "Well you can just call me by my nickname kid is what they call me," the raptor responded. "Where do you come from," asked ali. "I come from a place called laven valley," the raptor responded. I have never heard of such a place. The older one said "I have been there." "Have we met before," asked the raptor. "We have a long time ago," replied the older one. "Oh yea I remember now we were the first one's there," replied the raptor. "What happened to it," asked ali. "I'd rather not talk about it," replied the raptor. "Is the question insdescreet," asked ali. "No the question isn't insdescreet but the answer might be," replied kid. "Uh kid we have to enter the valley now," said ali's mom. I understand tell littlefoots grandpa I said hi for me ok,"said the raptor. "Alright i will," replied the oldone. Me see ali she back! "She is petrie,"asked littlefoot. Yes me see her! "Hello littlefoot, said ali. Hello ali, replied littlefoot. "Oh there you are littlefoot Come eat your breakfast," said grandpa. Oh it's good to see you again ali. "It's good to see you again grandpa longneck, oh by the way the old one wants to talk to you," said ali Ok I'll go talk to her. Meanwhile in the land of mists. "Hey kid you there," asked pops. "Yes sir I am here," replied kid "I need to talk to you," said pops. Why do you need to talk to me? How long have we known each other? 70 years why do you ask?Well I just want to talk as we haven't talked in a long time. I know but... "Well if it isn't the raptor duo" said itchy. "Oh no not those two again," said kid. "We have had enough suprises today," said pops. It looks like we'll be full for a while dill. "Really I don't see anything," replied dill. The two raptors attacked taking them both out. Meanwhile miles away. "So we're going to the great valley bron, asked shorty. "Yes we are," replied bron. "Well let's get going, replied one of the other longnecks. Four days later. "Are we there yet bron," asked shorty. "No we are not there yet shorty," said bron. At that moment 20 hungry raptors struck. Two more raptors appeared and they attacked the other raptors defeating them. "We mean you no harm longnecks," said pops. "Are we suppose to beleive that," asked bron. "Can you just trust us," replied kid. Why... roaring in distance. Great twenty large sharpteeth. "They only hunt in two's and three's," said bron. "These are not your typical sharpteeth," replied pops. "Yea right," replied shorty. "Look you can either come with us or we can leave you to the other sharpteeth," said kid. "Ok we'll come with you," said bron. so they run from the area with the larger sharpteeth hot in pursuit. (What do you think?)(expect reference to next story in next chapter.)
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You may want to tell who is talking. I had some difficulty understanding who was saying what. Other than that, it looks good.
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It's more clear on who's talking. Now for chapter 2 which I will post tonight.
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(Here's chapter 2.)
"Hey ali what up," asked petrie. "Nothing much petrie," replied ali. "What do you want to do," asked petrie. "Why don't we play tag," suggested ali. "Me no it," said petrie. "Not it," said littlefoot. "Not it," said ducky. "Well I'm not it," said cera. "I'm not it," said ali. "spike's it, said everyone. Just then a old swimmer entered the valley. "So this seems like a good place to take control of, this is where my campain will begin," said Havanaman. Oh man locals I'd better play it cool. "Hello I am Havanaman what is your name threehorn," asked havanaman. "I'm known as M.R. threehorn aroud here got that," said mr threehorn. Can you be quiet! Why you... uh notices littles grandpa. Sorry about that starnger. "It is alright I don't mind, where I come from if your friend said that he would be banished. Oh well I don't know what to say. "You needn't say a word kind sir," replied havanaman. "I come from elka," said havaman. "Elka oh yes I fought in that war," said grandpa. "What side did you fight on," asked havanaman. "The ostein side of course, replied grandpa. "What side did you fight on," asked grandpa. I did not fight in that war. "Really," asked grandpa. "Yep," replied havanaman. "Now I'll be getting some rest since I've had a long and tiring journy so if you'll excuse me," said havanaman. Of course. Hmm I shall soon take control of this great valley. Then I'll take control of the world with my sharptooth army. Meanwhile else where. "Are they still following us," asked bron. kid looks back to see the larger sharpteeth burst through a large bunch of trees. Yes they are still following us! "We need to stop them," yelled pops. "Yes but we need some help now," replied kid. At that moment 4 more raptors appeared. The six raptors with some help from some of bron's herd defeated the larger sharpteeth. "Hey kid is that you," asked frank. "Sir," commented kid. "It's been a long while," replied frank. "Yes it has sir," replied kid. "Stop calling me that," Shouted frank. "Ok," replied kid. What's in that area over there kid? I don't know frank. Let's find out what is over there. "Uh kid pops who are they," asked bron. "Oh this is frank joe smith and charles,' replied kid. Nice to meet you all. Likewise. So are we going to see what's over there? Right let's get to that now. as they walk away. "It's been twenty years since we've talked," said frank. "Yea it has been twenty years, replied kid. A few feet behind. "Can we trust them bron," asked shorty. "We haven't given them a chance let's give them one," replied bron. Ok we will. A few feet ahead. "Kid get down," said frank. "We'll have a better view from that ridge," said kid. "What do you see down there," asked frank. Sharpteeth hundreds, no thousands. "Looks like someone wants to take over the world," said frank. Yes but who? There is only one that I can think of who could arrange this havanaman. "But he's dead," said kid. "Or so we're ment to think," said frank. Do you think he's already at the great valley? If he is we're going to need a lot of help. They walk quickly back. "So what was there," asked bron. Oh nothing was there. Pops joe smith charles I need to talk to you, and speaks to them in sharptooth language. "Havanaman is not dead he has rallied a sharptooth army, get a hold of everyone else kid and I will escort the longnecks to the valley," said frank. "Right away," replied pops. (That's chapter 2!) (I'll post chapter 3 later.)
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Anyone esle want to review what I have so far?
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I think I'm going to do one that has Petrie's teen cousin, Ptyra. Poor girl doesn't have a mom (she died before she hatched), has no siblings (taken by "eggstealers") and she was seperated from her dad in the Great Earthshake (guess who her dad is :lol: ?)
She's been looking for him ever since, migrating from herd to herd, even meeting the one he was with before he was banished! When she gets to the valley (torn up from a fight she got into with some sharpteeth) all she can say and think is "Where's dad!?" When she finds out where her dad is, she's devastated. She is soon reunited with her cousin Petrie, and proposes they go to the Mysterous Beyond to find him. It is a mad idea, but the gang all agree that her father should know that she is alive. So, they embark on an adventure to the Mysterous Beyond. Can they find Ptyra's father or is he really gone (dead gone)?
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I am working on a lbt fanfic. Unfortunately, it always get's pushed to the back burner since I am now working on 3 lbt backwards videos, a realistic LBT comic, and am now attempting to participate in Action9000's singing of 'bestest friends". I will get around to finishing it though. It's just not on my highest of priorities right now. I am about 12% finished with it and it is about 22 pages.
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I believe everyone here has a very valid and unique points....oh who am I kidding...I'm just happy to be here. :DD
And I do have a fan-fic of my own staring my OC, Longtail....called One Long Tail....please check it out, and review either here, or on ff.net, whichever is easiest for you!
Thanx!!!!! :^.^:
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Mine is still a work in progress. I have major editing to do.
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Mine is still a work in progress. I have major editing to do.
I look forward to it's completion! :)
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This hasn't been posted on since 2007? Really?
Well, I have recently started a fanfiction trilogy about Rinkus and Sierra. It's called Reign. The plot is the same as pretty much every R&S fanfic out there...it's about them getting revenge on the Great Valley.
The first book is out now. It's titled Survival. As the suggestion, the first book mainly focuses on Rinkus and Sierra trying to survive in the Mysterious Beyond. I can't say too much about what happens because I'd be spoiling a LOT of the story.
Just wanted to say, for anyone who's interested in reading. The Reign trilogy won't be posted on ff.net, as I am having technical issues on that site.
EDIT
I don't intend for the trilogy to be a crossover. I'm trying to stick to pure LBT. And yes, there will definitely be action, and probably a little violence later on, but there won't be total gorefests. I am not the type for things like that, and I usually think bloodbaths are dumb and not helpful to a storyline.
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Everyone knows about mine: Twilight Valley.
One of the few LBT war fics in existence and according to LettuceBaconandTomato, one of the best and the only LBT war fic on the GOF.
Genre: Action/Adventure/War story with some slight supernatural things.
Synopsis: Excidium, and leader of a sharptooth paradise (Claw Valley) decides to conquer the Great Valley so his herd can have more territory. He teams up with Styracus, an evil Styracosaurus who leads a large herd of assorted herbivores and they proceed to wage war upon the Great Valley dinosaurs. It is up to the Great Valley dinosaurs and their allies to stop them.
Notes:
Rated PG-13 (T) for use of profanity (a decent amount, nowhere as much as Time Gate X) and violence (can't have a war without violence :p). The violence is fairly intense at times and the body count is fairly high (and will get higher!) but it is not enough to warrant a R (M) rating.
It's also on FF.net.
It does not crossover with anything but it severely breaks the canon (to the point that it appears in TV Tropes under the category Canon Defilement).
It is not finished.
It is also the only LBT fic that I know of that includes technology in a non crossover fan fiction (Stone Age technology but still technology).
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Wow, I'm surprised not a lot of people have posted on this since 2007 either!
Well I have one story completed called LBT Revenge, and it is posted on ff.net. It's pretty much about Rinkus and Sierra returning to the Great Valley to get revenge on Littlefoot and his friends for thwarting their plot to get the Stone of Cold Fire in the 7th movie.
I am currently working on the sequel, Revenge II, which is not the most creative title but oh well :D Midterms and other school work had me boggled up, but now I am hoping to keep continuing it.
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I only have a one-shot fanfic published on FF.net and it's titled "A Day of Remembrance." I'm too busy to write a longer fanfic, so the one I'm currently working on is coming along slower than a slug :p. It is sort of like LBT IV in the sense that Cera's father becomes seriously ill, and none of the Valley elders know of a cure. Even the nightflowers are not powerful enough this time. However, at the same time, Cera gets in a fight with Littlefoot, and Ducky is the only one to not ignore her afterwards. Ducky then brings up a mystic geriatric fastbiter by the name of Darius who has not been seen in years and dwells in a cave. The two team up to locate him and then head out to find the cure in time. Along the way, they encounter a teen female threehorn (name undecided) who has no family and knows the Mysterious Beyond like the back of her paw. This character will be a total screwball who is not always so serious; something Cera finds annoying as threehorns should not be goofballs. At the same time, the threehorn proves to be a great help and a loyal friend who has a rage problem whenever she sees sharpteeth, as her family had been killed by them. I'm not giving away the fate of Mr. Threehorn, but I will say the threehorn readily becomes an accepted resident of the Great Valley, and Cera will have the big sister she never had :). I dunno when this will be done, but I'll keep trying to work on it :yes.
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This is a short preview of my next fan fic The Velkan War
Fanfic not yet rated
May 23 1995 near a disputed border
No wings: "Oh them? Yeah I know'em it's going to take a while it happened years ago'
Glaical Skies begins playing in background while scenes of air combat take place in background while music's playing
Pilot:"All units prepare to intercept target"
No wings: "Be ready to start the game we'll be back before you know it'
Mechanic: "That's only if you all make it through this alive'
Interviewer: "10 years ago there was a war that engulfed two nations'
Flight lead: "alright guys engage!"
Ostian pilot: 'Velkan bombers approaching!'
Interviewer: "The roots of the war lay in the Velkan Federal law review that took place in 1978'
AWACS: "60% of our airforces are already lost'
Pilot: "Reinforcements?'
No wings: "It's time to dive into the danger zone!'
Interviewer: Adminst the economic panic an extreme right wing party took power in Velka,and on March 27th 1985 Velka began it's invade it's neighbors,'
No wings: "We will survive y'all'
Interviewer: "It was the begining of the Velkan War"
Scene shows 5 black planes with the 5th having both wing painted red split apart from formation before showing the title which has some parts of the title break off as it hit the background.
Scene switches to a bright object comming from the sky
No wings: "Hey y'all still alive?'
The curtian rises June 2009
So what do you think?
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I haven't gotten permission from the author to do this yet but i have bedd coming up with a "Prequel" to the fic Time Gate X
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I haven't gotten permission from the author to do this yet but i have bedd coming up with a "Prequel" to the fic Time Gate X
Did you write Time Gate LBT (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4965556/1/Time_Gate_LBT)?
That seems like either a prequel or perhaps a "spin off" or an "inspired by" fic.
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I'm actually working on a LBT/Dragon Tales cross-over fic right now. I should have the prologue posted soon.
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Well I started one and I'm starting another one even though I didn't get any ratings or comments. This is the first one. http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5248770/1/Marols_Story (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5248770/1/Marols_Story)
It's basically about how one of the characters, a female joined a large group of dinosaur she had killed the leader of one during a battle and many previous leader as well. :rolleyes: The second one well I'm almost done with the first chapter! I also started a forum too. Here's a link to the forum. http://www.fanfiction.net/forum/Enter_The_Decon/62725/ (http://www.fanfiction.net/forum/Enter_The_Decon/62725/)
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I'm rewritting my first LBT story(which actually was my first story) and the 5th sequel to it.(the original was pretty good)
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Wait, your first story? Uh, are you kidding me? The enitre thing was my exact dialogue, which was used in the exact same order and wording as it appeared in my story, mixed in with Spartans. I know I can't really claim plagerism, but the first in your series was irrefutable plagerism.
If you weren't talking about that story, please disregard everything I just said.
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^Belmont doesn't have a fanfic on this forum. Is it over on fanfiction.net?
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Yeah, his stuff is mostly on ff.net. The whole reason he's doing the rewrite is because another reviewer, and shortly thereafter myself, called him out on it.
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well maybe when I finish my rewrite I'll post it on GOF maybe I'll post the sequel afterwords.
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I'm working on one at the minute, and I have it all planned out, but I need to actually start writing. It's the story of my RP character, Hooter (His bio, as well as others are in the RP Section (http://www.gangoffive.net/index.php?topic=176.60) ), in two parts, telling how he came to the great valley, and several years later when he found his family. It may also include an odd little epilogue about what happened afterwards, but I may drop that.
(This might sound odd, but if I roleplay as the character, it'll be during the middle of the story. The first part is a prequel, and the second part a sequel, showing what will eventually happen to him. So the middle is the present time, during the GOF, or around that time)
Finding names for characters was the hardest part, I think. I've got so many names made out of the entire Parasaurolophus genus (Ambeo, Rina, Drosa, Rolo, Parry, Nitho, Crista, Sor, Phus, Ischia). Five points to anyone who can guess what all the names come from. An additional five points to anyone who can make a dreadful pun of sorts by putting several of the names together.
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As you know, I've written Sharptooth Valley and Total Drama Valley, as well as their sequels (Actually, Great Valley Guardian is co-writing TDV season2 and he's a great and fun writer to work with.)
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My story "Rise of Storm Tide" is kinda like a LBT movie, but it's got a lot of stronger messages in it too, as well as answering some of the questions about Ruby and Chomper.
The second story "Far Away Home" is a sequel, but its also an outstanding story on it's own. For it I borrowed the OCs Sky and Star, who have an extensive bank of art courtisy of Sky.
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Well, I'm currently writing a fanfiction about a journey that Shorty undertakes, which inadvertently turns into something much bigger.
I recently had to re-tool the whole thing, so progress is a bit slow...
I'm planning on having it be a pure LBT fic, though with tone and level of violence more similar to that seen in the first film.
I'm, um, kind of wavering about posting it publicly. I don't want to call myself a poor writer, but as far as fictional stories go, I'm not exactly the best :lol
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Finding names for characters was the hardest part, I think. I've got so many names made out of the entire Parasaurolophus genus (Ambeo, Rina, Drosa, Rolo, Parry, Nitho, Crista, Sor, Phus, Ischia). Five points to anyone who can guess what all the names come from. An additional five points to anyone who can make a dreadful pun of sorts by putting several of the names together.
Hmm...lemme see now...
Ambeo – Lambeosaurine
Rina – Lambeosaurine
Drosa – Hadrosaur
Rolo – Parasaurolophus
Parry – Parasaurolophus
Nitho – Ornithopod or Ornithischia
Crista – Parasaurolophus cyrtocristatus
Sor – Parasaurolophus
Phus – Parasaurolophus
Ischia – Ornithischia
Parry + Sor + Rolo + Phus = Parrysorolophus (Parasaurolophus) :p
So? Do I get all ten points? :P:
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Yep! Good job! (I actually used Hadrosaurinae for Rina, but that's good enough. Virtual cookie for you!)
Parry + Sor + Rolo + Phus = Parrysorolophus (Parasaurolophus)
Now imagine those four causing a havoc and being told to stop, and you have the worst pun occuring in the movie! (Parry! Sor! Rolo! Phus! Stop that at once!)
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Hmm...was playing a flash game involving dinosaurs and extinction and got the idea for a fic taking place WAY in the future, at the K-T event. (Bear with me, it's not what you think. Most of this is based off the game events.)
Basically, at this point in time, countless land shifts have made the world a very different place. Spiketails are gone, Longnecks are rare, and new strange species have sprung up everywhere. The Great Valley itself was ruined in an earthshake that split the land in two, raised some of the land. and destroyed part of the protective wall surrounding it. However, parts remained safe, and colonies still live in these mini-valleys. The eastern lands have become smaller, as big water encroaches, and the parts no longer covered have become fertile again.
(Right, that's out of the way, now for the storyline) We follow several different characters (A loner, a whole herd, someone living in one of the valley remnants, and someone out east; the main character). Basically, what starts out as a calm and simple day is interrupted by a large rock falling from the sky, which crashes to the south, with an explosion that is so bright it almost hides the sun. Many background characters perish, but the main character flees and makes it to a cavern in the western mountains, where several other herds have survived; courtesy of an underground spring and some food.
And there I ran out of ideas. Having them all perish would be a downer, but it's not like they would all survive. Unless they did, but underground, and ultimately dying out. Or, returning to the land, but not to breed.
Or, to be even more bizarre, end with the exact same Rainbowfaces from 7 returning, noting how bad the situation is, and offering to save them (Said in a strange way). They then beam them in a light, to a strange cold place, then beamed again, to what appears to be the lands before the falling rock. Thus, the dinosaur race flourishes, unknowing that the earth is no longer ruled by them. The rainbowfaces survey their work, and then leave a "Animal Reserve" Beacon near the planet, as well as a surveying sattelite.
Any thoughts? A bit too sci-fi for LBT, methinks, but I still like where this could go.
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Lemme guess...the game you're talking about is Dino Run, right? (I had an addiction to that game for some time a while ago. :p)
I think it's an interesting idea, but as an LBT story, it's bit too depressing for my tastes, personally. Especially the part about spiketails being extinct (even though they probably were by the the time of the K-T extinction). I do have to say I like the second idea for an ending better, because although I'm not too big on the prospect of the rainbow faces being aliens (I prefer Chronicler's theory that they represent a population of civilized dinosaurs that abandoned Earth), it shouldn't make much difference to the story, seeing as the whole concept itself isn't really fit for LBT. Plus, it offers the hope that non-avian dinosaurs still exist somewhere in the universe. :p
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Lemme guess...the game you're talking about is Dino Run, right? (I had an addiction to that game for some time a while ago. )
Yep! Finally beat the blasted game on Insane, although it took me a day of angrily making my way through it after losing for the umpteenth time.
I think it's an interesting idea, but as an LBT story, it's bit too depressing for my tastes, personally. Especially the part about spiketails being extinct (even though they probably were by the the time of the K-T extinction).
I agree, I wouldn't want it to be a sad story, although it would certainly start out sad. I really just wanted an excuse to rescue the dinos from the K-T event, in a way similar to the sanctuaries in Dino Run.
I do have to say I like the second idea for an ending better, because although I'm not too big on the prospect of the rainbow faces being aliens (I prefer Chronicler's theory that they represent a population of civilized dinosaurs that abandoned Earth), it shouldn't make much difference to the story, seeing as the whole concept itself isn't really fit for LBT. Plus, it offers the hope that non-avian dinosaurs still exist somewhere in the universe.
Personally, I never liked the idea of aliens either; I always thought they were time-travellers from the future with cloaking devices on. I suppose the story written like this sort of does make the rainbowfaces aliens. Oh well. I'll figure something out.
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I'm currently thinking about a sequel to Far Away Home.
I am considering calling it Into Black Sun, but it's just a working title.
No plot details yet, but it's an adventure for the gang's kids.
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Lemme guess...the game you're talking about is Dino Run, right? (I had an addiction to that game for some time a while ago. )
Yep! Finally beat the blasted game on Insane, although it took me a day of angrily making my way through it after losing for the umpteenth time.
I actually wrote a story based on Dino Run, chronicling my small experience with the game. (It's a true story, and pretty interesting.) I could email it to you if you like, Almaron or Pangaea or anyone else.
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Post it in the written word! It sounds interesting.
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I'd like to see it. :) You can send it to me by PM or e-mail, or do what Almaron said and post it on the GOF.
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Almagron reminded me of this. :) So yeah, I'll send it via email, because it's got a picture in the word doc, and I don't know how to embed pictures from my computer into forum pages. Anyone else wants, they can ask I guess. It's more of a look at the game from a newbie's perspective, and one who doesn't particuarly understand the game's point that well.
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I'm currently writing a sequel to What have we done? that actually will have a hatchling. It shouldn't take me too long to write.
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I'm working on a short story that involves the Gang (with Ruby and Chomper, plus Guido) going into the Mysterious Beyond to safe Tricia, and run into Pterano there, who ends up having to help them get home. It even has a "No One Has to Be Alone" reprise!
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*Double post*
I've got one that might be relatively long, and I might even offer co-authors to go along with it. It even has some ties to one of my fan-episodes
The Great Valley Rebellion
A great gathering comes to the Great Valley. Ali and Bron's herds combine on their journey. Countless groups pour in from the Mysterious Beyond-including some of the smallest Sharpteeth. Flocks of fliers numbering to the thousands inhabit the mountains. Mo leads his group to the Valley's water. Strange dinosaurs appear, new types of swimmers and longnecks and threehorns, and spiketails all file into the Great Valley.
The reason for this mass gathering is to go to war against Red Claw and his army.
I'm...trying to make it as "epic" as possible.
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Another war story?
Why have LBT war stories been popping up so frequently? First, it was just Twilight Valley, then Heinous and now The Great Valley Rebellion.
In any case, I wish you luck!
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I second that one Serris.
Perhaps we "love" war too much to think that the land before time could do without it's splendor (dripping with sarcasm) :rolleyes
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I second that one Serris.
Perhaps we "love" war too much to think that the land before time could do without it's splendor (dripping with sarcasm) :rolleyes
I myself wouldn't like it if the majority of LBT Fanfics were war-based, but a few never hurt anybody...
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I'm taking care not to let Heinous end up as graphic and violent as Out of the Shadows did; I want to keep the rating at least PG or T at worst. So far I haven't gotten to the war part of the story too much. I'm coming up with ideas as I write each chapter, so there's still some aspects that I haven't figured out, but likely will as I continue writing more chapters.
I apologize for not having continued my story in quite a while, but with my sisters home, I haven't been inspired to write any further chapters. Even when they leave, though, I might not continue unless I get some inspiration.
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I have no problem with a few LBT fan fics being war stories but if there are too many, then the concept is no longer unique and it gets boring.
Personally, I feel that Heinous should stay a T rating... a PG rated war story just sounds...weird. Of course, it is your call.
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Currently Heinous only has a K+/PG rating due to there not being enough material in it yet to warrant a T/PG-13 rating.
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I guess there's no harm in placing the link to my latest work-in-progress on this thread.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5642499/1/The_Tale_of_Blackclaw (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5642499/1/The_Tale_of_Blackclaw)
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I have an idea for a one shot, or possibly a short-long (lol) story.
I noticed that there are few to NO Mary-Sues in the LBT fandom. So, why not make up for it?
Strange things are happening in the Great Valley. A BOOTIFUL sharptooth girl comes into the Valley. BUT WAIT! She's a vegetarian! And Chomper falls in love with her! A BOOOTIFUL flier from the Mysterious Beyond begs the leaders of the Valley to let Pterano return to the Valley early (much to their refusal...and Pterano's). And THEN Ali's herd comes the Valley...and Bron's herd! There's another girl longneck in Ali's herd and she is SO much more bootiful than Ali! BUT WAIT! Littlefoot, Rhett, AND Shorty all fall in love with this mysterious and beautiful newcomer. Ali gets jealous and wants Littlefoot's love back, but he's MUCH too infatuated with the new girl.
And...other Mary-Sue events happen. It's pretty much making fun of the Mary-Sue phenomenon, but I'd like to write it so it's actually FUNNY. The female flier is loosely based of of Ptyra's very first concept. Ugh.
The Land Before Time: Invasion of the Mary Sues! *creepy music*
I had another idea where a young rainbow face accidentally warps the entire Great Valley into present-day New York. And hilarity insues. Cera and Tricia get stuck at Macy's and Mr. Threehorn tries to save them, the birds think Guido is their legendary patriarch, Mo becomes the new Flipper, and the longnecks find a construction site (Flintstones, anyone?), Ozzy and Strut end up in a grocery store and Ozzy raids the egg department...and so much more. It's up to the young rainbow face to sort it all out...after his teachers punish his mistake by forcing him to scrub the ship's command deck from ceiling to floor with a toothbrush.
The hard part is actually making both of them to be funny for the fans and make it seem fan-written...especially the second one. It was a result of talking to my brother about LBT in the present day world
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I like the second concept better.
So far, The Great Valley Rebellion and the LBT in NYC stories are the ones I want to see.
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I haven't made much chapter since the earthquake in Haiti got me and everyone else worried. Plus I have exams for the next three days, but I'm still working on Chapter 17 and soon move onto 18. I'm also updated chapters as well including the first one.
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I have an idea for a one shot, or possibly a short-long (lol) story.
I noticed that there are few to NO Mary-Sues in the LBT fandom. So, why not make up for it?
Strange things are happening in the Great Valley. A BOOTIFUL sharptooth girl comes into the Valley. BUT WAIT! She's a vegetarian! And Chomper falls in love with her! A BOOOTIFUL flier from the Mysterious Beyond begs the leaders of the Valley to let Pterano return to the Valley early (much to their refusal...and Pterano's). And THEN Ali's herd comes the Valley...and Bron's herd! There's another girl longneck in Ali's herd and she is SO much more bootiful than Ali! BUT WAIT! Littlefoot, Rhett, AND Shorty all fall in love with this mysterious and beautiful newcomer. Ali gets jealous and wants Littlefoot's love back, but he's MUCH too infatuated with the new girl.
And...other Mary-Sue events happen. It's pretty much making fun of the Mary-Sue phenomenon, but I'd like to write it so it's actually FUNNY. The female flier is loosely based of of Ptyra's very first concept. Ugh.
The Land Before Time: Invasion of the Mary Sues! *creepy music*
I had another idea where a young rainbow face accidentally warps the entire Great Valley into present-day New York. And hilarity insues. Cera and Tricia get stuck at Macy's and Mr. Threehorn tries to save them, the birds think Guido is their legendary patriarch, Mo becomes the new Flipper, and the longnecks find a construction site (Flintstones, anyone?), Ozzy and Strut end up in a grocery store and Ozzy raids the egg department...and so much more. It's up to the young rainbow face to sort it all out...after his teachers punish his mistake by forcing him to scrub the ship's command deck from ceiling to floor with a toothbrush.
The hard part is actually making both of them to be funny for the fans and make it seem fan-written...especially the second one. It was a result of talking to my brother about LBT in the present day world
Ptyra, you've got my attention.
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Does Mary Sue mean a flawless character without vices who solves all the troubles easily which the others cannot? In that case I must admit I think there is a good reason why such superheros are not present in the land before time. There is a high risk of such stories ending up as either a litany of worship to such characters or else the other characters getting jealous about the perfect one.
However I think the main problem is the idea of a vegetarian sharptooth. I think that it is not by choice that sharpteeth eat meat just because they didn't like green food but because they really don't have the physics to digest green food properly. I reckon if it was possible for a sharptooth to make a real choice there wouldn't be much of a problem with Chomper in the Great Valley and all of the Sharpteeth would be somewhat evil for being meateaters while having an alternative. I suppose if Chomper or any sharptooth was forced to eat nothing but plants he would die.
There are the kind of omnivores (like Ruby, Ozzy, and Strut) who may be able to eat both. Did you consider one of such a species for the vegetarian?
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Forgive me for stepping in... :p
Malte, I assume that the fact that those two ideas are utterly ridiculous is the main idea. Ptyra stated that the story is parodying "Mary-Sues" and the stories they feature in. Therefore it is perfectly reasonable to insert Mary-Sues and unrealistic vegetarian sharpteeth into the story, as strange as they sound, because they are there for comedic purposes. :)
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Oh, okay. Sorry, never mind then. Sometimes I really take everything serious :lol
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Not directly a fanfic, but I was thinking of doing a comic instead (again! XP).
But this time, I plan the story ahead before I start drawing it. That was the big mistake and the reason why I canceled my older ones. =/
It may be called "The Land Before Time - A Wingtails Quest" or something. :lol:
But I'm not so sure yet... :unsure:
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Malte, I assume that the fact that those two ideas are utterly ridiculous is the main idea. Ptyra stated that the story is parodying "Mary-Sues" and the stories they feature in. Therefore it is perfectly reasonable to insert Mary-Sues and unrealistic vegetarian sharpteeth into the story, as strange as they sound, because they are there for comedic purposes. :)
Exactly that. I've been thinking some of my most recent fanfiction ideas have been on the serious light, so I decided to do something silly.
It actually all started with a joke picture. By an LBT standpoint, Pterano has quite a few fangirls. It is relatively common for a popular male character (Sora, Shadow, Sonic, Roxas, Sephroth, Draco, Harry, Edward Elric, Roy Mustang etc. etc) to have a Mary Sue thrown at them. Pterano is one of the VERY lucky few NOT to have that pitiful fate...since his large-for-an-LBT-standard-fanbase are usually more "mature". The joke picture depicted his "original punishment": Stuck with a Mary-Sue for a week.
And then I had more ideas which turned into my fanfiction. And nothing seemed sillier than an extremely cute, extremely smart vegetarian sharptooth girl.
Mary Sues tend to be the result of coming up with the so-called "perfect" girlfriends for a pre-existing character (Harry Potter, Draco Malfoy, Edward Elric, and so on). One VERY famous Mary Sue is Ebony Dark'ness Dementia Raven Way (ugh) from the ever-so-famous-and-horrible Harry Potter fanfiction "My Immortal". Or Bella Swan, who is a "self-insert Sue". I'd go on, but that would take WAY too long. Here's a "to put it short" example (http://windfalcon.deviantart.com/art/Mary-Sue-How-to-Tell-5470853). The male variety is Gary-Stu.
If anyone would like to volunteer some ideas, since I just have the three (vegetarian sharptooth girl, over-the-top-flier-who-is-insanely-in-love-with-Pterano, and the new Longneck girl).
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I have an idea for a "what if" story, following my Ptyra storylines. I'm not HUGE on it, since I'm pulling one, big epic "Gandalf meets Bambi and Littlefoot's Mom"...if you know what I mean. I do think it's interesting. It's just a small tweak to everything else until I decide if it's good for the story entirely. What I'm concerned with is making the character's personalities a little OOC.
I do plan to add a few Three Musketeer elements, with two characters based on Milady deWinter and Count Rochefort (which I can't pronounce worth a dang-nabbit) and some little fight scenes based off them. I'm not really sure how I'll work the rug-tearing in, though XD .
I love the rug tearing :lol
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Has anyone given some thought to writing alternate history fanfictions?I thought that the movies offer a lot of opportunities to create diverging scenarios.
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Well I've read some alternate history books but I haven't given thought on writing any alternate history fanfics.
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I'm not sure if this counts as alternate history, but I'm doing an alternate version of Stone of Cold Fire. This version focuses on Petrie as the main character and the development of his relationship with Pterano. I've stated before that Littlefoot gets far too much spotlight, and I've wondered what the heck would have happened if Petrie had seen the Stone?
I'm also thinking about making the Rainbow Faces a lot different, but I'm still keeping them in the story.
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I'm writing a Bill and Ted and LBT crossover, the story is basically Bill and Ted are in collage and are on the brink of failing science,not history this time, but science and Rufus come along and using the ever-so-great phonebooth takes Bill and Ted to the Great Valley.
The title of this story will be called Bill & Ted Before Time.
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There's gonna be a separate topic for this fanfic. Thanks for everyone's reviews and suggestions. I'm halfway done chapter 1, and thanks to your reviews and advise, I finally got the encouragement needed to start the fanfic. :)
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Well, there already is time travel LBT story Land Before Time: Voyage Through Time (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4005976/1/Land_Before_Time_Voyage_through_time).
But this story is quite interesting. An alternate history technothriller meets LBT.
One problem, how will the Great Valley dinosaurs play a role in the story?
Also, was this inspired by Caustizer's Future Wars topic?
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Hey guys, I'm trying to make a new fanfic right now. Can you tell me what you think?
Short description: When a US Navy experiment goes horribly wrong, the Great Valley finds itself visited by strange creatures who plummet the valley into a war like no other.
Plot summary:
During the infamous Project Rainbow, the USS Eldridge is sent to the Bermuda Triangle to test out new breakthrough version of the Unified Field Theory, which states that an object can form its own space-time continuum using electromagnetic radiation and gravity. However, when the experiment goes horribly wrong, the ship creates a time tunnel in the middle of the Bermuda triangle. The time tunnel, in its own space-time continuum, randomly travel to different time periods, causing the disappearance of Flight 19 and the USS Cyclops. The experiment is kept secret by the US government and is kept top-secret.
Meanwhile in the Great Valley, the Gang of Seven finds a wreck of a PT boat as well as a DC-3 in the secret caverns. They keep it as a form a "clubhouse". However, when the famous TBF Avengers of Flight 19 enters the valley, Littlefoot believes that this is a sign of more things to come.
In 2016, a nuclear exchange between Israel and Arabs countries of the Middle East rockets the price of oil to 900 dollars a barrel. With world-wide fuel shortages, the US and UN is forced to consider drilling in prehistoric earth. Ships are then secretly sent to the Bermuda Triangle, sent to the past, and unload "green" oil-drilling equipment. However, when a Cuban vessel also discovers the time tunnel, Cuba, along with Communist North Korea, also send vessels to drill for oil. The stage for war is set.
When the Americans and UN soldiers first arrive in the Great Valley, they are friendly and respectful towards the dinosaurs, helping them fight off disease while taking good care of the land. However, when the communists strip-mine most of the Mysterious Beyond, they target the Great Valley. The Great Valley and its inhabitants and plunged into a war like no other.
Yes, I know that it's not the most original story, but I was just wondering if you guys had any suggestions or comments. Constructive criticism is appreciated, but praise is prefered.
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First of all, I congratulate you for coming up with an idea for a fanfic. I really like the idea of having the Bermuda Triangle as a portal to the Great Valley. The Bermuda Triangle has always been a place of mystery, so I found that was really interesting.
Here's where you want to be careful. Most fanfic writers fall into a trap where they like to just put anything they can think of into a different universe. Most of the time these are crossovers, but other times it's the idea of introducing unfamiliar things into a universe. You want to make sure that whatever you introduce into the LBT universe doesn't drastically change the way it is structured.
If you still want to do a "war" story within LBT, I suggest you read Twilight Valley by Serris. It is a LBT War story, however all of the "technology" per-say is created with things found in the LBT universe. Reading that, or even asking Serris, could give you a better insight as to how a "war" could be done in LBT.
Here's a possible idea you could think of. Maybe when the humans arrive in the Great Valley and want to start a war, have them use primitive weapons rather than modern weapons. Have them make spears and whatnot. That would make it really dynamic because they would have to use their surroundings in order to survive.
I think you have a very interesting starting concept, and just remember that in the end this is YOUR story. I'm not telling you how to write it, I'm just offering suggestions. You can choose to take these into account, or you could dismiss everything in this post and go about it however you please. When you finally write your story, write how you feel best. Don't let anybody else try to tell you how to write your story. As long as you are committed to your idea, it will turn out great.
I hope this helps, and I hope it doesn't come off the wrong way.
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I would say that modern weapons are pretty much mandatory due to the technothriller slant.
However, I would assume that the dinosaurs will have Human allies. That is not to say that they would be dependent on their allies to do the fighting. I can think of PLENTY of ways for the LBT dinosaurs to stand a chance against them.
Also, will these dinosaurs be using weapons (slings, stone tipped spears, knives, clubs etc.) like they do in Twilight Valley?
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On a side note, Dima, maybe you should make another topic about this so we can brainstorm without clogging this topic up.
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I am barely to be seen in fanfiction threads anymore and writers have taken offense in my refusal to read fanfictions but frankly there isn't too much to be found without so much gore that we must call for human intervention in order to provide the weapons of mass destruction to make the massacre look "plausible" :x
Once upon this same earth
beneath the same sun
long before you
before the axe and the Elephant (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Elefant) as well
before the Wolf (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wolf_Armoured_Vehicle), the Bison (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Avro_Bison), the Whale (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/USS_Whale_%28SSN-638%29),
before the Mammoth (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Junkers_Ju_322), and the Metal Storm (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Metal_Storm)
in the time of the dinosaurs...
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Once upon this same earth
beneath the same sun
long before you
before the axe and the Elephant (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Elefant) as well
before the Wolf (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wolf_Armoured_Vehicle), the Bison (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Avro_Bison), the Whale (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/USS_Whale_%28SSN-638%29),
before the Mammoth (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Junkers_Ju_322), and the Metal Storm (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Metal_Storm)
in the time of the dinosaurs...
What was the purpose of writing that?
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Ruby, using her hands and fast speed, throws grenades. Etc.
One thing that should be kept in mind is that some dinosaurs may not want to handle modern weapons because they have never seen them before.
When you mentioned traditional weapons, do you mean things like rocks, sticks, dirt and the like or are you thinking of Twilight Valley styled weapons?
I ask because Twilight Valley weapons are designed to kill, not stun. Thought the blowguns that are used by some of the dinosaurs carry poison darts that are more or less designed to leave the target asleep or paralyzed when hit. But then again, a fair number of dart poisons are designed to kill even in small doses.
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On the topic of modern weapons, it would make sense for the LBT dinosaurs to use them in a war type setting, but only if they design them themselves. In my mind the brand of society that a group of intelligent leaf-eaters can create is far different from the human one.
A few things we don't know:
- Would leaf-eaters have the same perpensity towards greed and dominance humans do?
- Killing comes somewhat natural to humans because we are omnivores, and have for thousands of years hunted to eat. Would it be that in a leaf-eater society, offenses such as murder and violence would be uncommon because it is against their nature?
- The first sign of danger often causes leaf-eaters to run, or if they are cornered fight as best they can. Would this mean that a futuristic leaf-eater society tends more towards defense in it's policies and military applications?
A lot of these factors came into play when I was designing the VDF for my fanfiction LBT: Future Wars.
It's an interesting thing to note that the VDF (Valley Defense Force, the primary leaf-eater army) is Communism at it's best ideologically, where every race is assigned a place within society and nobody is left behind.
Claw on the other hand (the Sharptooth faction) is Capitialism at it's worst, where it is a sharptooth-eat-sharptooth world and only the strong survive to prosper. Claw will use the most hienous and horrible weapons in battle as long as it means they win in the end, and often it's soldiers are in it purely to be fed from day to day.
An interesting way to view things for sure.
Caustizer.
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I am barely to be seen in fanfiction threads anymore and writers have taken offense in my refusal to read fanfictions but frankly there isn't too much to be found without so much gore that we must call for human intervention in order to provide the weapons of mass destruction to make the massacre look "plausible" :x
Once upon this same earth
beneath the same sun
long before you
before the axe and the Elephant (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Elefant) as well
before the Wolf (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Wolf_Armoured_Vehicle), the Bison (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Avro_Bison), the Whale (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/USS_Whale_%28SSN-638%29),
before the Mammoth (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Junkers_Ju_322), and the Metal Storm (http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Metal_Storm)
in the time of the dinosaurs...
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Malte, I never used to agree with you when it came to LBT fanfics, but honestly I'm really starting to see your point. Pretty much every single LBT fic I've seen written in the last year or so, with one or two exceptions, is at least partially based in straight-up warfare. I understand conflict is essential to the very nature of storytelling, but things are just getting ridiculous. I'm not going to name names or anything, mostly because the same criticism could no doubt be used against me, but I think this still needs to be said.
I want to start by saying that I don't believe LBT war fics are an inherently bad idea (hence the Star Wars crossover in my sig :lol: ) The gore levels have been getting extreme as of late, but this factor alone would not be enough for me to just dismiss these stories without a second thought. The real problem I've noticed is one that has been steadily plaguing the fanfiction world ever since it's creation: the utter lack of character development and dynamics.
We've all seen it: the OCs that just pop up out of nowhere and completely run the story off the rails, varying levels of uncharacteristic actions by the Gang of Five, ect. The characters are no longer portrayed as people, but as mere objects, being used as personality-less weapons of continual destruction. The GOF are no longer treasured, dynamic individuals; instead, they appear as rage-filled berserkers with a Terminator-like drive to kill anyone designated as "the enemy", often in the most gruesome fashion possible.
The situation of the war fic is one that draws in many a fanfic writer; it provides a conflict that appears to have wide-spread consequences, making it an instant gravity generator for the story. It is indeed a very fun and exciting tool in a writer's arsenal, but the gravity of the scenario can also, without guidance, act as a black hole, swallowing the characters, plot, and anything else that truly drives the story. People are failing to realize that, while the situation might create a story, it's the characters who react to it, and the characters alone who can bring it to it's final conclusion.
My point is that character development is often kicked to the curb, and this is why many stories out there are really suffering quality-wise. I realize this issue applies to me as well, which was one of the reasons I began attempting to rewrite my story. I just felt like this needed to be said.
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^ I definitely understand what both of you are saying, and I agree with you guys. However, there's not going to be any gruesome scenes or anything like that. It's mainly a techno-thriller, and the war aspect of it is very light. Also, please take note of the fact that this story is being written by a 13-year-old. It's that age where you get all sorts of crazy ideas and try them out. <_<
I'm sorry if I offended any of you guys. I'm removing all my previous posts to save space. Once again, sorry if I offended any of you guys. :(
There will be a separate topic for my fanfiction. Malte, if you can delete my previous posts, please do so in order to save space.
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^ I definitely understand what both of you are saying, and I agree with you guys. However, there's not going to be any gruesome scenes or anything like that. It's mainly a techno-thriller, and the war aspect of it is very light. Also, please take note of the fact that this story is being written by a 13-year-old. It's that age where you get all sorts of crazy ideas and try them out. <_<
I'm sorry if I offended any of you guys. I'm removing all my previous posts to save space. Once again, sorry if I offended any of you guys. :(
No, wait! Dima02, you've done nothing wrong. I was simply stating my opinion. I haven't even READ your fic, anyways, so how do I know it's bad? Don't worry about it; I started writing when I was thirteen, too! :D The best thing to do is to put your stuff out there, trust me!
Dammit, I really screwed this up, didn't I? :(
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^ I definitely understand what both of you are saying, and I agree with you guys. However, there's not going to be any gruesome scenes or anything like that. It's mainly a techno-thriller, and the war aspect of it is very light. Also, please take note of the fact that this story is being written by a 13-year-old. It's that age where you get all sorts of crazy ideas and try them out. <_<
I'm sorry if I offended any of you guys. I'm removing all my previous posts to save space. Once again, sorry if I offended any of you guys. :(
No, wait! Dima02, you've done nothing wrong. I was simply stating my opinion. I haven't even READ your fic, anyways, so how do I know it's bad? Don't worry about it; I started writing when I was thirteen, too! :D The best thing to do is to put your stuff out there, trust me!
A little late, but it was mostly done in order to save space. Thanks for the encouragement though. I'm already halfway done chapter 1. I'll start a new topic for this.
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Why would you need to save space?
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My point is that character development is often kicked to the curb, and this is why many stories out there are really suffering quality-wise. I realize this issue applies to me as well, which was one of the reasons I began attempting to rewrite my story. I just felt like this needed to be said.
That is the reason why so many characters appear (and disappear/die) in Twilight Valley; I need to keep their numbers down so I can do some character development and I am attempting to give each character their own personality. So far, it is working but the characters, even in a war story have their own thoughts, emotions and feelings.
That is why I am taking care to make each character as unique as possible. But there are snags but no writer is perfect.
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My point is that character development is often kicked to the curb, and this is why many stories out there are really suffering quality-wise. I realize this issue applies to me as well, which was one of the reasons I began attempting to rewrite my story. I just felt like this needed to be said.
That is the reason why so many characters appear (and disappear/die) in Twilight Valley; I need to keep their numbers down so I can do some character development and I am attempting to give each character their own personality. So far, it is working but the characters, even in a war story have their own thoughts, emotions and feelings.
That is why I am taking care to make each character as unique as possible. But there are snags but no writer is perfect.
It should be noted, however, that in the process of killing off all those characters, you diminish the amount of empathy the audience has for the cast as a whole. In my opinion, killings of major or minor characters should be done sparingly in order to increase the emotional contrast and impact of the event. Just a thought.
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Bear in mind that most of the casualties are actually nameless background "redshirts". Some named characters do die, though but not very often.
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True, but I've noticed you still have the issue of tons and tons of characters. My advice would be to use lots of perspectives, with each character getting a scene or two to shine.
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There will be a separate topic for my fanfiction. Malte, if you can delete my previous posts, please do so in order to save space.
I have never said anything to that effect nor am I going to delete any posts or stories.
My main point, which I think jedi472 understood, is the ever increasing amount of a kind of violence in LBT stories that just doesn't belong into the setting of the land before time. In ever more stories (or rather it would be correct to say that in ever less stories this was not the case as the ever more ones are the absolute rule rather than the exception) there is not much left of a plot because the only idea seems to be to get the characters as quickly as possible onto some battleground where they can kill, and maim, and slaughter, and butcher. Not much thought is given to any reasons for or consequences of all this bloodshed because bloodshed in itself seems to provide sufficient entertainment to make any further questions unnecessary.
But things are not so simple and while violence is an integral part of many stories and, mostly in the context of the natural hunter and prey kind of relationship between herbivores and sharpteeth it has been part of LBT since the first movie. But the degree it took where there are no reasons needed but where the dinosaurs start killing each other even on the large scale which require human weapons of mass destruction it is getting odd.
The consequences of violence, except for the lustful depiction of blood and gore, do not usually take much room in such stories. The focus in the media in general (not just in LBT fanfiction) is on the day of a battle and nobody bothers about the clearing up on the day after or about the scars which wars and violence cause which will never ever heal.
Judith Barsi was shot by her father. This is a tragedy that will never end because a new chapter starts or anything to that effect. None of those who knew her will ever have this loss made up for in any way. If then one reads about cute little Ducky being send on a killing spree with whatever human weapons she is thought to be able to carry, I do admit it sickens me a bit. It is why I usually stay clear of fanfiction threads. My stand on this is known and I do not believe that there will ever be a change in this view of mine's being that of a tiny minority. But sometimes I guess I have to let of steam to just remind people that there may be a different land before time, that is much closer to the ideals of the original movie and also the sequels than the kind that is based to so extreme a degree on violence.
I really think that too few are really thinking about the consequences and the aftermath of violence whether they are acts of war (of which my grandparents have told me a lot. I think I need to pick up that thread in the AM section soon) or individual acts of violence (like the murder of Judith Barsi to name just one out of millions). When I watch the land before time movies there seems to be a kind of innocent goodness about the characters (not to say that they couldn't have their vicious moments and their share of roughness at times) which I just cannot combine with the idea of them being equipped with human weapons and send out to kill as many as they can.
I am not ignorant of the fascination that weapons may hold and my shelves are bending under the weight of books many of which are dealing with human warfare. But the heartfelt appreciation for war as solely entertaining and suitable to be mixed with something that was really not made for it is something that I will probably never be able to adopt (nor try to adopt).
PS: I could not let this stand and hope not to sound like a hypocrite if I didn't mention my own story "Old Threehorns" in this context. It is true that there are elements in it which border so close to human attitudes that I would probably not write them again the way I did when I wrote them. It is true that there is something that cannot be labeled anything but a battle. But unlike most of the fanfictions I took a very long part of the story for the buildup and the explanation of how what happens later on could possibly happen. Also there are no artificial weapons of any sort (except for some stones being hurled). There are cases of dead in the story many of which are references to events preceding the main story like the Pterano incident I tried to include the consequences as well. The story has strong weaknesses and I appreciate the fact that it weakens my justification to sound the bell about this matter here, but it still is a long way from the warfare based LBT stories which make up for... almost every land before time story that is out there :(
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While I am working on a war story myself, I gotta say that I HATE seeing human-based weapons in it. I'm much more of a "tooth vs claw" war story person when it comes to LBT.
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I'm much more of a "tooth vs claw" war story person when it comes to LBT.
I am not. I restrict the dinosaurs to Paleolithic tech (no metal weapons/tools, no siege engines, no armor, no fortresses etc) though.
Rationale: Chimpanzees have been seen using weapons, so it was not too far of a stretch for me to give the dinosaurs Paleolithic technology.
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On the subject of violent fan fiction...
Latias' Journey (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2053520/1/Latias_Journey) is a fan fiction that takes the lighthearted PokÈmon anime and turns it into an intensely violent, gory and nightmarish but yet thrilling story.
Is it against the "spirit" of the PokÈmon anime? Hell yeah. But yet, it still works. The point I am getting at is even the most outlandish plots and ideas for a story can work if they are written well.
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I'm more interested in "tooth and claw" battles myself. While I might decide to add primitive weapons in Heinous (still not sure if I will nor not) it will likely be severely limited as I think it's better to have dinosaurs fighting with what they have (their size, their tails, their claws, their teeth, etc) rather than having to make weapons. In a way I don't really see too much of a purpose to have dinosaurs make weapons when they can just use their size, tails, teeth, whatever they have to fight back. I understand that smaller dinosaurs may have greater difficulty but in larger numbers they could be a devastating force. Ants are an example. Tiny little animals and not much when there's only one, but united as a large mass, they can bring down much larger animals, and they don't resort to made-weapons, just their built-in weapons (jaws and stingers I think).
I'm not saying it's a bad idea overall; just that I prefer the dinosaurs to not use weapons most of the time.
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I started on a fanfic yesterday I've edited a lot of the details since then. I still have some stuff to edit before I'll post it.
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The point I am getting at is even the most outlandish plots and ideas for a story can work if they are written well.
I understand your reasoning Serris; my only real point was that without good characters and plots, stories are essentially meaningless. Weapons and tactics are pretty cool, but without real, dynamic characters behind them, who really cares?
I also agree with Malte on the violence issue, at least to a point. Violence without purpose, consequence, or meaning is fine for cheap summer flicks, but is just pointless in text format. In addition, there are just some forms of violence that I don't think mix with LBT. I know that sounds hypocritical due to the fact that I am writing a Star Wars/LBT crossover, which automatically has a certain level of violence in it (hence the Wars :lol: ), but there's even a violence boundary in the world of Star Wars. I can't really describe it well, but it's there, and I know it is because at times it has been crossed. The New Jedi Order books and Dark Empire comics are proof of that.
I guess why I'm posting this is to try and explain how I really feel about the fanfiction being produced these days. I'm not trying to anger anyone; it's just my opinion. Nobody takes it seriously, and in a way that's good, mostly because I'll end up saying something moronic sooner or later. :rolleyes: I really feel like I'm on the fence here: I don't really prefer the "pure" LBT stuff that much, and yet some of the war fics really don't strike my fancy. I'm not trying to discourage anyone. I'm just trying to explain how I feel about the whole thing.
Am I making any sense?
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Violence without purpose, consequence, or meaning is fine for cheap summer flicks, but is just pointless in text format.
I agree with you...to a point.
I am okay with LBT fics containing levels of violence equal to Latias' Journey BUT with the stipulation that it makes sense in context of the story. Thus war stories (unless they are badly written) are pretty much exempt. But "slasher stories" (two rather infamous LBT slasher stories exist, one written by a member on the forum) are not really inline with LBT.
I don't really prefer the "pure" LBT stuff that much, and yet some of the war fics really don't strike my fancy.
Which war fics? There are only 7 LBT war stories in existence:
Twilight Valley
Heinous
The Great Valley Rebellion
Shadows of the Future - the LBT technothriller that was mentioned on this very topic.
War of the Worlds
Remnants
LBT Future Wars - Twilight Valley spin off with science fiction slant.
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I'm not going to name any fic in particular, though I'll admit I was mistaken about how many existed. I really don't see what you mean with the violence thing, though. Did you mean the war stories are exempt from violence limits, or did you mean that, because they are war fics, all violence therefore makes sense?
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I really don't see what you mean with the violence thing, though. Did you mean the war stories are exempt from violence limits, or did you mean that, because they are war fics, all violence therefore makes sense?
War stories are pretty much exempt from violence limits for obvious reasons.
Also, pretty much ANY form of violence goes as war tends to bring out the worst in the fighters.
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Which war fics? There are only 7 LBT war stories in existence:
Twilight Valley
Heinous
The Great Valley Rebellion
Shadows of the Future - the LBT technothriller that was mentioned on this very topic.
War of the Worlds
Remnants
LBT Future Wars - Twilight Valley spin off with science fiction slant.
There's anotherórelatively newóLBT war story on FanFiction.net, titled Silver, in which Ichy is one of the main protagonists. :blink: Some might consider Out of the Shadows a war fic as well, though Darkhououmon herself doesn't.
I also seem to remember some other stories on FanFiction.net involving wars in LBT, though I can’t remember their names, and most of them have either been removed or were so poorly written that I didn’t bother to read them.
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There are many LBT war fanfics out there, but there are even more non-violent LBT fanfics too. Personally, I believe that every fanfic, expect for the ones bashing LBT, deserve to be praised. The writers spend their own valuable time trying to keep us entertained with whatever stories they conceive, and we should always be thankful for their efforts. Also, to the critics out there, no one is making you read these stories, and we're not charging you money or anything. Appreciate whatever fanfic is out there. Since you can not change what the authors wrote, you might as well learn to appreciate it. :lol
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Silver is actually a rather cool story. Strangely enough, I only found out that it was a war story recently.
To me, Out of the Shadows is not quite a war story.
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To me, Out of the Shadows is not quite a war story.
When I wrote it and even after I finished it, it never crossed my mind to think of Out of the Shadows as a war fic. It was on TV Tropes that someone had referred to it as a war fic, and in some ways, I agree, since the story involves a massive battle with distinct factions with the Great Valley as the battlefield. So it could be classified as a war fic. But I personally would label it as a dark fic more than a war fic.
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There are many LBT war fanfics out there, but there are even more non-violent LBT fanfics too. Personally, I believe that every fanfic, expect for the ones bashing LBT, deserve to be praised. The writers spend their own valuable time trying to keep us entertained with whatever stories they conceive, and we should always be thankful for their efforts. Also, to the critics out there, no one is making you read these stories, and we're not charging you money or anything. Appreciate whatever fanfic is out there. Since you can not change what the authors wrote, you might as well learn to appreciate it. :lol
Dima02, I may not be spending money when I read someone's fanfic, but I am spending something which some consider even more valuable: time. If I spend my time reading someone's work, I should have the right to form my own opinion about it, whether that opinion is positive or negative. I am thankful that people write fanfiction, but not to the point that I praise anything they type out. Appreciation and praise must be earned, not expected. Criticism is the only thing that should be expected, but the important thing to remember is that the criticisms are only given by others so that one may improve his or her work.
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^ :exactly I completely agree. Feedback should always be appreciated. Criticism, as long as it's constructive and helpful, will help out the writer. Sorry for the confusing and misleading wording, but all that I was trying to say was that we should appreciate all the great fanfics out there.
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Gotcha. For a second there I was like, "Wait, what?". :lol:
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UPDATE ON THE GREAT VALLEY REBELLION
This is no longer a "war fanfiction" necessarily. It became to complicated for me. So I did something completely different, with some themes staying the same.
Ruby learns that her family has been taken hostage by Red Claw. She leaves with Chomper to find the place called The Place of Great Winds, where her family is being kept. Littlefoot and the original Gang go after them. On the way, they meet a group of dinosaurs who are on their way to the Valley...and remind the Gang VERY much of themselves. They are just about the same age as the Gang in the original film, and are even similar types of dinosaurs (Though, all I have so far is Tapejara, Styracosaurus, and Amargasaurus). The youngsters join the Gang on their way to finding Ruby and Chomper, as they have passed through The Place of Great Winds.
Meanwhile, Ali leads Shorty, Rhett, Tricia, Guido, and the former bullies to go after the Gang and meet Mo along the way. And Mo has news of what Red Claw is up to and exactly where the Gang is.
Several adults of the Valley come to their senses and go after the children, realizing that they must take action when the Valley is under threat, rather than stand around while their own children act more adult than they do.
Wiiillllld goose chase ahoy! I have some themes of the original version, such as Ptyra and her herd arriving and overthrowing Red Claw. But there's still going to be a ton that's different from the original.
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I should have the next "Blackclaw" chapter up by Friday or else by the weekend. I'm hoping to make this one longer than the other chaps thus far.
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I'm working on my next story right now. It should be done in a couple of days.
It's time for Petrie and Ducky to have a hatchling.
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Revenge III is progressing, if not slowly, because of school work and such. I'll feel proud of myself once I've finished this story, because I'll have written out my first trilogy of fanfics :D
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My next story is now under construction. In this one, Chomper goes on a journey to discover what he is, and of course he'll bring along his sister Terana and her friend Bambo.
I'll try to have the prologue done by the end of the week.
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Is it just me or is this section of the site getting more and more abandoned with each passing month? There are a lot of good stories that haven't been updated or shown decent progress.
On that note though I have been thinking about continuing my Future Wars story lately, and once Far Away Home is done I may start adding too it again.
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Hopefully, I'll get more of Chapter one done by the summer. Right now, I can't seem to think of anything else for that chapter.
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I haven't been working on Heinous recently, partly because of the online course I took and soon I'll be taking another. The other reason is lack of ideas of how to continue the story. I'll try to continue soon.
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Is it just me or is this section of the site getting more and more abandoned with each passing month? There are a lot of good stories that haven't been updated or shown decent progress.
Yeah, I am revamping the chapters of TVW. I want to get chapter 3 revamped before I put them all up.
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I've been trying to make some progress, but the only progress I'm making is updated chapters. I've made two other chapters that I have not touched in months. This is due to the fact I'm graduating from high school in two weeks. My last school day is this Friday with semester exams on Wednesday-Friday. So I'm going to try and squeeze time into updating more chapters as I only have five more left.
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As those of you awaiting updates for BOSE II already know, I'm notorious for long breaks between chapter updates. :oops Beside my job likes to mess me about with shifts and working hours, sometimes I come home and just don't wanna do anything hence why my updates can be few and far between. I haven't started chp 26 yet but it should be up soon. My "adventuring" act of BOSE II is coming to a close to make way for some new developments ;)
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I wrote LBT fics on FF.net, but I gave up as I got no replies.
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Well I¥ve been in Argentina for 10 days now, so I¥ve been without a computer (I¥m currently using the hotel computer). I promise that I have not forgotten Revenge III and will continue to work on it once I return tomorrow.
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Well I¥ve been in Argentina for 10 days now, so I¥ve been without a computer (I¥m currently using the hotel computer). I promise that I have not forgotten Revenge III and will continue to work on it once I return tomorrow.
^Which I highly anticipate :smile. That's one big honkin' cliffhanger fans have been left with.
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I am now converting another one of the insane crossovers into a real story.
I wonder how Buddy and his siblings will react when they see the valley?
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Huh, no posts since june. Allow me to help keep this alive.
I'm working on one. I don't know what I'll call it yet, but I have some Ideas. It's basically where the original sharptooth from the first movie returns to get revenge on Littlefoot and Cera for ruining his reputation. His reputation? Jeez, that guy has some issues he need to take care of. :lol: I don't think it's very good but what can you do? <_< It's the best idea I could come up with anyways. I'm slowly working on it and I write a few pages every night but I'm getting nowhere fast. Grrr. Curse you writers block!!!!!!
Strangely I've never read Time Gate X before coz it probably got taken down. Littlefoot1616 what can I say? You've given me an awesome read with BOSE 1 and 2 I couldn't stop for days. Your just that good. All this talk about Twilight Valley, seriously has me wanting to go to FF.net and read it. I sure hope you do finish Revenge III LBTfan13 because you've got my attention.
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^ Wow! I've gotta say I'm flattered LBTDiclonius! :D Didn't realise there were people out there still reading BOSE. Thought it was been and gone since I finished it. Nice to hear it's still reaping in a little interest from some. Thanx! Means a lot ;)
There are other great LBT fanfics out there from guys and gals of this forum. And with so many different ideas and writing styles, you'll never be bored! :DD If yuo can, check them out!
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Thanks Littlefoot1616! I've actually read a lot of fanfics on here. They're all great. And since I'm not on FF.net yet, I can review them too. But let's try not to get too off topic. So I'll say this and let's get back to it. Thanks again!
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Never posted on this thread before, but I'll do it!
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Just kidding! :DD
Currently working on the next chapter of my insane domehead story and sprouting a few new ideas for other stories:
-One in consideration is about a Therizinosaurus. I recently asked IsisMasshiro on deviantart if I can use her LBT OC (link: http://browse.deviantart.com/?qh=§ion=...osaurus#/dc5ulz (http://browse.deviantart.com/?qh=§ion=&global=1&q=therizinosaurus#/dc5ulz) ) and she happily agreed. Having been given permission to be entirely creative with his info and history, I gave him the name of Zin and awarded him an almost Doc-like personality (being a traveling loner with the awesome skill to kick a sharptooth's butt!). I'm planning on writing a fic of his journey out of his home territory, his rescuing of a young Onehorn child, and his mission to return her safely to her herd.
- Another is of my OC gang: Tiki (Rainbowface), Tero (Domehead), Cookie (Twocrest Swimmer), Clubbie (Clubtail), And Teryx (........Any idea what an Archaeopteryx might be called in the LBT world?). Basically their quest to be friends forever in a species-segregated world.
- And lastly, a story of Sierra's early life from hatching to present that might show why he is the way he is.
Only question is what to write first and when to write them.... Would it be better to write them now and risk being overwhelmed with making multiple progressing stories at once? Or wait till I'm finished with my other 2 LBT stories (both of which might not be guaranteed to finish) and risk losing interest altogether? :unsure:
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Some time back I had an idea for a fic that would take place at the K-T event, when the Dinosaurs became extinct. I'd been reading the TvTropes entry for Land Before Time, and the Wild Mass Guessing page listed the frequently debunked theory that all the characters were dead to begin with, and that the Great Valley was Heaven. The difference here was that this person interpreted each event as having a deeper significance - each of the GOF represented some form of a follower of religion, Sharptooth represented Sin, Rooter was an angel trying to get Littlefoot to let go of his self-guilt surrounding his mother's death, etc.
While not particularly interested in the religous aspect of it (if done badly, it becomes a preachy mess), I thought the concept of dead characters not realising they're dead wandering through a metaphorical wasteland until they overcome their failings and make it to their afterlife. At the same time, I thought I could make it a darker fic, and have it so that characters got killed off along the way, creating suspense as to who would last the longest.
The basic story I figured out involved a group of five friends - Kylo, a Clubtail, Alta, a Longneck, Parry, a Hollowhorn, Bambo, a Triceratops, and Zal, a Flyer. The story would allude to the original LBT films in several places - the opening would have an elder telling the story of the first film, and Kylo would wonder what a Spiketail was, as none had been seen for many years. Another would have Kylo remembering another of the stories..."Big Water. Something about it seemed familar - something to do with a friendly sharptooth...or was it a swimmer?" The Great Valley would be a myth by this point, but would later be found over the course of the story - perhaps even where they had started from - but earthquakes would have changed it so that it was several smaller valleys. The characters would even roleplay as the characters of LBT, although some of them would hate their roles - eg Kylo playing Spike, who has considerably less intelligence than him.
The story would open with the meteor hitting far to the south, and a large shockwave following up the land. An earthquake would hit and destroy their home, killing many. The survivors would then head for safety, but their numbers would be whittled down over time through various disasters (Any adult characters would be quickly killed off, perhaps from injury or disaster. Zal would have perished by scouting a mountain route, and being hit by a blast from a volcano. Bambo's pride and confidence that he was right about which way to go would have led him to his downfall in a landslide (alternatively, he turns out to be right, and turns up towards the end of the story). Parry goes mad and/or falls off a cliff. Kylo and Alta survive thus far...each of these ends would be sort of ironic, to do with each character's major faults). Ultimately, the story would end with all the characters dead, but together in a "Great Valley", and watching as the world begins to change below them.
Only problem with this whole thing is that I kept running into parts where the story got confusing or contradicted earlier parts. One one hand, I wanted to write a darker story where characters got killed off as time went on, but how could an already dead character die? I toyed with the idea of them all dying halfway through, and the deceased characters appearing as "ghosts" to guide them on, but again I got stuck. I also toyed with the idea of having them rescue a character, perhaps a mammal, and have that character live on to become a creature that would later evolve into the mammals of today. By this point, I was getting confused by all the possible ideas, and I didn't want to do a fic that was just "Kill Everybody", cause not only would that be kind of pointless, but it'd be pretty darn depressing. I mean, what's written here is already pretty dark, but I was going to add some happy bits to it!
If I'd finished it, I'd have called it "The Rite Of Spring", as a nod to the Fantasia cartoon involving the dinosaurs. I do think there were some interesting ideas here, but I couldn't think of enough to write a story on, so it'll have to remain this way for a while. Perhaps it would have worked better if I'd split this idea into two concepts. Any thoughts on this?
If you think it looks interesting, feel free to use it as a base for a fic, just let me know when you write it, cause I'd love to see what others come up with.
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Funny; writing this up got me interested in the story again, and I managed to find a solution to the problem I had with the old story.
As a result of the major landslide/earthquake caused when the meteor hit, every character is dead. Not realising this, they all set out to find a new safe place, and avoid a Sharptooth that appears to be on their trails. Over time, their group loses numbers, as characters "perish" in various disasters; each of which are linked to a major fault of the character (eg, a prideful character falling from a cliff or being buried in a rockfall - Pride Comes With A Fall). As the others are forced to move on, the Sharptooth continues to follow, stopping by the site of each disaster and eating the bodies of the fallen members.
With three members left, their herd continues on, and rest at an oasis, where Kylo (the lead character) converses with an elderly dinosaur who has seemingly just arrived. The dinosaur is interested in their progress, and makes subtle hints towards Kylo avoiding a fate similar to the others by recognising his faults and overcoming them. The next morning, the elderly dinosaur has disappeared (although this isn't revealed until far later on, this character is one of the original Land Before Time characters, attempting to guide them on). Not long afterwards, Kylo realises that he and the others are all dead - he has no reflection in the water, one of many mysteries that plagued their group from the start, such as an injury to one character that disappeared, and a general lack of noticeable hunger. Unsure of what to do, the characters continue on.
Eventually, the Sharptooth catches up with them in a mountain range, and a chaotic struggle ensues, another member perishing in the process. It turns out in the end that the Sharptooth is not real - it is something along the lines of a representation of their fear or perhaps a malevolent force, that has been seeking to tempt them to destruction by exploiting their own faults. Realising this, Kylo and Alta (the only other 'surviving' character by this point) manage to destroy the Sharptooth - recognising and overcoming their faults in the process- but collapse on a peak overlooking a sheltered valley, exhausted from their efforts.
Kylo and Alta awake in a green valley, and are greeted by their relations, as well as their friends who perished along the way - destroying the Sharptooth freed them - and the cast of the original LBT films, who inform them that they indeed perished when the meteor hit, and that the world they walked through was a test to free them of the faults that were ensnaring them. And then...something. The characters all 'live' happily ever after in a timeless version of the Great Valley.
Hmm...still needs work, but it's more coherent now! Any thoughts or suggestions?
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Is that fanfictin based on the rumor that the Great Valley in the first movie was originally supposed to be heaven? Either way, it sounds really depressing. I tend to not read the fanfictions where lot of characters die, just too much for me :cry
About my fanfiction, I'm actually thinking about starting it back up this weekend. Since I know I have a job now, I can worry about writing some more for it.