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Saurus Rock: Member Hall of Fame / Fanfiction voting 2016
« on: December 01, 2016, 04:31:26 PM »
Name of fanfiction: Shorty's Dark Past
Rating: 8.5/10
Review: It was a very good idea to recover the highly wasted potential of LBT 10. The premise of the film (and thus the story) is a great one but whereas the film went only for a decent direction, this story shows the film mostly as it should have been. This version of the film's story is supreme in every way, greatly deepening its conflicts and characters.
I really like the depth of the character interactions in this fic. Actually, the plot isn't all that complex but the relationships between the characters carry the story nicely. The writer has caught their emotions, pasts and thoughts spot-on and their motivations and conflicts are clear. Shorty's handling is probably my favorite thing here as even with Cho's beating and aftermath, I couldn't really blame him even if the deed was inexcusable. I always admire scenes where the writer doesn't really tell the reader to hate the "villain" even when things aren't going that well.
This story is excellent as a whole but there isn't any single scenes or characters that really stand out. The fic is a solid, very enjoyable story but there aren't any single aspects to this story that really help the fic take the final step to being truly awesome. Also, I'm still not sure whether I think that the Littlefoot/Ali pairing is truly needed.
Shorty's Dark Past shows that what the LBT films could be with reasonable changes. It is a great fic on its own right but it also shows that the plots in themselves don't have to be that dramatic or complex to create a solid, enjoyable story. I'll look forward to seeing how Shorty will begin to redeem himself and how you plan to fix the film's ending.
Rating: 8.5/10
Review: It was a very good idea to recover the highly wasted potential of LBT 10. The premise of the film (and thus the story) is a great one but whereas the film went only for a decent direction, this story shows the film mostly as it should have been. This version of the film's story is supreme in every way, greatly deepening its conflicts and characters.
I really like the depth of the character interactions in this fic. Actually, the plot isn't all that complex but the relationships between the characters carry the story nicely. The writer has caught their emotions, pasts and thoughts spot-on and their motivations and conflicts are clear. Shorty's handling is probably my favorite thing here as even with Cho's beating and aftermath, I couldn't really blame him even if the deed was inexcusable. I always admire scenes where the writer doesn't really tell the reader to hate the "villain" even when things aren't going that well.
This story is excellent as a whole but there isn't any single scenes or characters that really stand out. The fic is a solid, very enjoyable story but there aren't any single aspects to this story that really help the fic take the final step to being truly awesome. Also, I'm still not sure whether I think that the Littlefoot/Ali pairing is truly needed.
Shorty's Dark Past shows that what the LBT films could be with reasonable changes. It is a great fic on its own right but it also shows that the plots in themselves don't have to be that dramatic or complex to create a solid, enjoyable story. I'll look forward to seeing how Shorty will begin to redeem himself and how you plan to fix the film's ending.