Hi there^^
I really like this so far, especially the flashbacks. Pterano's dream sequence was very well described and not to mention quite dark and terrifying
A couple things. First, I notice you mention spears and javelins. I am just a little confused, since I'm sure terms like those didn't exist back then
they might have used sharp ropcks or something (makes for more dramatic reading if someone is bashed in with a sharp pointy rock...
bleh lol) while using spears or mentioning that terminology makes them sound... evolved, like civilized, and they aren't really supposed to be. they are giant lizards after all
Also, Pterno says 'yeah' a lot
may be a pet peeve of mine, but high-spoken British characters like Pterano, eloquent and dramatic as he is, would not say something like 'yeah'... It kinda makes him sound like he's not really being serious when he says that.
Ugh, sorry! I hate leaving corrective feedback cuz I always sound like such a know-it-all, and bossy-pants! sorrysorrysorry if I offended you, and please don't think i don't like the story cuz I do!
*blushes and hides self away*
