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Friendship is Magic fanfics by Daddytops2009

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Please rate and review.

I gave a first try at a Friendship is Magic fic.

They dream about what will happen in season 2.

http://www.equestriaforums.com/index.php/topic,2177.0.html




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Part 3

The Ponies had saved the world from Discord, and there was a celebration for the heroes that day.

At night there was a gala again, and double as many guests showed up while the place looked like something from a New Years Eve party.

Pinkie Pie and her friends was DJ that night, as the party ended early in the morning.

Few days after, was Applejack and her friends visiting Appleloosa again.

Applejack showed her friends around in Appleloosa, while she told the history of Appleloosa.

The next day were they visting the buffalos, and Little Strongheart.

It was a vacation without tasks, until diamond robberies happened in Appleloosa.

"That can only be the Diamond Dogs again!" was Spike saying.

"I thought they would not return!" did Pinkie Pie say.

"Noibody messes with Appleloosa!" were Applejack saying.

Then they returned to Appleloosa, and both stores and homes was robbed for things like diamonds.

"There was not ony few dogs, but a lot!" was Braeburn saying to the heroes.

The ponies visited the bank, and they told that there was a flock of Diamond Dogs.

"They hide somewhere in a mine underground, but it's huge!" were Brareburn telling his friends.

So that made Applejack and her friends gather all bisons and citizens of Appleloosa, and take the fight.

That next day, was Applejack and her army gathering, as an army of Diamond Dogs showed up in Appleloosa.

"Appleloosa will be ours!" did a Diamond Dog shout.

"Not yours!" was Applejack shouting.

"Prepare for battle!" did Rainbow Dash shout.

"Us too!" were the dogs shouting.

Then bisons, ponies and dogs clashed together.

Some fet in holes the dogs had digged, as Applejack and her friends defeated Appleloosa.

A dog had captured Little Strongheart, and Rainbow Dash had to do something.

"Let Little Strongheart go!" was Rainbow Dash shouting to the dog.

"Not until Applelooosa ius ours!" were the dog shouting.

Then the leader of the buffalos knocked the dog out, and saved Little Strongheart.

"The leader is down! Retreat to the mines!" was a dog shouting.

Some of the dogs got hit by the ponies magic, as they tried to run away.

So later that evening, was Appleloosa having a party for the ponies.

That made the Diamond dogs find mines longer out in the west, and did not return to Appleloosa again.



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I'm a newbie to MLP FiM, but here i go again.

A Bird in the Hoof sequel.

It was a hot summernight in Ponyville, and the ponies had celebrated Summer Sun Celebration.

The sun went early up, and it was still hot.

Then Fluttershy asked Princess Celestia under the party how she got Philomena, and she told about a journey in the past.

"I was on a Summer Sun Celebration holiday, as I were in a foreign land" was the princess telling.

"My visit was in a place called Persia, and I had not been there before." did Princess Celestia tell.

"What's Persia like?" was Fluttershy asking.

"It's a place far away to the East, and hotter climate than here." was Princess Celestia saying.

"There in a market by a city near a desert, were I buying a strange bird who I called Philomena." did the pricess tell further.

Celestia she had read fairytales about the East, and the princess thought a phoenix was just imaginary.

Fluttershy had read many books about birds, but she did not meet a phoenix until she met Philomena.

After that story about the phoenix, was they going back to the party.


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Your stories are really short and lack description but the grammar is pretty good.

Keep writing and you'll improve.

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Rather short than loosing loads of parts where nobody replies

FiM meets Narnia

Based upon the 1979 Narnia cartoon.

Enjoy!

Part 1

It was after Fall Weather Friends, and summer was ending while nothing special happened on those cold days.

Winter came, and the ponies was busy with preparing for Christmas.

Twilight and her friends spend a day in the Canterlot maze, as they played hide and seek.

It was a sunny day, and the ponies waited for a White Christmas.

But then Applejack found a gate in that maze, and she opened it.

"What the hay?" was Applejack asking while she stood in another world with snow beneath her.

It was even colder, as Applejack wandered around in a forest covered by snow.

As Applejack finally found back to the magic gate, were she back in Canterlot.

But nobody believed Applejack, as Rainbow Dash she made it worse.

"Far out! Did your imagination really run that high?" was Rainbow Dash asking Applejack.

Both Rainbow Dash and Applejack was going to argue again, so the other ponies went to Princess Celestia.

"A magic gate? Another World?" were Princess Celestia asking the ponies.

"I swear! Applejack she ran to us as never before!" did Twilight say.

"There must be something out there, and even I do not know all the secrets of the maze!" were Princess Celestia saying.

So the next day was Rainbow Dash spying Applejack, and followed her to the gate.


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The Longest Journey PC game ponified

Intro

Twilight she were dreaming, as she was up in the mountains by a place she haven't seen before.

It was a deserted landscape, and she was high up in the mountains while thunder and lightning was on the way.

"Is it all a dream again?" was Twilight asking.

As she walked up in the sunny mountains, were she meeting someone she knew.

It was Princses Celestia, and she was wounded after a fight.

"Princess Celestia! Is that you?" was Twilight shouting.

"Tthat's me! I tried to hold him back" were Princess Celestia saying.

"Who?" did Twllight ask.

"Discord!" was Princess Celestia saying.

Clouds covered the sun, as the thunder and lightning came.

Suddenly was Discord showing up, as Twilight fell down the mountain.

Part 1

It's the future long out in Ponyville, and the ponies lives in modern buildings.

Twilight she awoke in her apartment, as she wondered why that dream came again.

Then was Twilight going downstairs to her neighbour Rainboiw Dash, and she sat by her TV.

"Good morning!" was Twilight saying to Rainbow Dash.

"Good morning!" did Rainbow Dash say.

"Slept well?" were Rainbow Dash asking Twliight.

"No, I had a nightmare again!" was Twilight saying.

"Strange, Applejack she had too."

Then Rainbow Dash explained that strange noises was heard in Ponyville, as there seemed to be a city beneath the lake.


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LOL Alright I will somehow find time and read parts one through three,


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Sleepless Night:

It was Halloween night under Luna Eclipse, and Applejack she went home after the party at sunrise but she was not tired.

The streets in Ponyville was deserted, as few ponies was out.

Applejack she met Twilight on the moonlit street, as she was on the way back to the farm.

"Hey, suffering from sleep deprivation again Applejack?" was Twilight asking Applejack.

"Yeah, I better get some sleep now." were Applejack saying.

But Applejack could not again, as she had a nightmare.

What if they never saw Twilight again after Lesson Zero?

What if Princess Celestia did not come in time under the fight for the doll?

Those questions came up in Applejack's mind under her nightmare.

So Applejack fell asleep again by the apple trees, as she had to buck apples again two days later with Twilight.

Pinkie Pie came by for a visit to help Twilight with Applejack, so she used her Pinkie Sense.

"Applejack has nightmares about what happened while you was in panic." was Pinkie Pie saying to Twilight.

"I know how that feels! Those panic attacks gave me nightmares for week too!" was Twilight saying.

But the problems was not over in Applejack's family., as Apple Bloom got her cutie mark on the farm.

"She got her cutie mark, but she does not feel well!" was Applejack saying to Twilight while Apple Bloom slept.

"That's strange!" was Twilight saying.

"Let's wait and see how it goes!" were Applejack saying.