The Gang of Five
The Land Before Time => LBT Fanfiction => Topic started by: LBTFan13 on January 21, 2008, 04:20:43 PM
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I'm starting my own fanfic. It's a work in progress, so it's short at the moment.
Land Before Time - Revenge (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4020072/1/The_Land_Before_Time_Revenge)
UPDATE: Chapter 14 is up!
EDIT:My fanfic story is now FINISHED!!!!!!! You can follow the link above to the completed story.
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Moved to the Fanart and fanfic forum.
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It does seem like a very good start to an story that may well be very interesting.
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I read the first chapter last night...now I gotta face this story!
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Nice cliffhanger ending.
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Hello:
It looks like another cool story is beggining to unfold, keep it up! I look forward to see more.
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thanks for reading what i have at the moment. i will work on it later tonight, so it will be updated.
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I'm sure many will be very happy when it is uploaded.
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UPDATE: Chapter 2 is up!
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I've already left my review and I look foward to the rest!
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Interesting development. I guess with Shorty there Bron must be around somewhere.
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The story is getting more interesting, those two are really into something bad and it appears everything is going as they planned >:) , keep it up!
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UPDATE: Chapter 3 is up. I created a more emotional side to Littlefoot. Hope you guys like it.
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I'm reading it right now! It is good...wow...I am now offically scared of Littlefoot now...I would NOT want to get in his way!
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I must agree, that was very surprising!
This is going to get very good.
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It seems on in fanfiction does Littlefoot notice the adults do nothing but stand around and argue while he usually does what needs to be done, with only a few exceptions. & he acted in a manner most folks likely would.
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good start :lol: and that is a sign of quality! haha
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UPDATE: Chapter 4 is up
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Oh no! Not Petrie too! Rinkus and Seirra have to pay now!
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Oh wow! someone is going to really get mad :blink: .
Keep it coming, you are doing great!
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UPDATE: Chapter 5 is up!
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I like it. Keep up the good work.
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This is turning much more interesting, I think something big is coming B) .
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UPDATE: Chapter 6 is up!
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Awesome, and a little twist I didn't expected ;) .
Keep it up!
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Oh boy Rinkus and Sierra had better watch out...they are in for some trouble now! I can't wait to see what Pterano does to those two! :lol
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i don't want to give away too much, but you can bet there will be some fighting later on. between whom i won't say :lol
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UPDATE: Chapter 7 is up. Here, we see something start to develop between two of the characters, and Rinkus has a surprise for Littlefoot and the others! :lol Hope you enjoy!
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UPDATE: Chapter 7 is up. Here, we see something start to develop between two of the characters, and Rinkus has a surprise for Littlefoot and the others! :lol Hope you enjoy!
This is a cool fanfic.
By chapter 7, do you mean the chapters as fanfiction.net counts it or the prologue is not a chapter?
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Seirra is crazy, and Rinkus leading? Has the world gone mad?
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By chapter 7, do you mean the chapters as fanfiction.net counts it or the prologue is not a chapter?[/QUOTE]
the prologue doesn't count as a chapter, and thank you for your interest,
@GVG: there's a reason why rinkus is leading, and you'll find out in the next chapter or two
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Now this is really getting serious here. I like this story. :) :) :)
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After a long break due to technical problems and school work, Chapter 8 is finally up!
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Hiya LBTfan13 :wave! Name's Cancerian Tiger, and I saw the post indicating ya should be back on tonight at the latest. If ya have the energy (believe me, I know a choir trip can really wear one out. I was in a choir for six years :P:), could ya possibly post the next chap on your fanfic? I'm lovin' what I'm reading and ya left readers at a cliffhanger :mad! It's so suspenseful. BTW, love the moderate profanity. It's not too harsh and really adds emotional appeal to the fanfic :yes.
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Is it just me or are these chapters REALY short? I make chapter 1 just under 1000 words, whilst what in I'm currently writing (which, I'll admit, isn't fanfiction) chapter 1 is just over 4000 words. Is all fanfiction like this?
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Chapter sizes vary depending on the author. Some are short, some are long, some are in the middle.
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After an extremely long break due to too many trips, Chapter 9 is finally up!
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Keep it up, LBTFan13 ;) :yes!
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Sorry, I forgot to add this in my last post :slap. I love how Littlefoot and Cera, and Shorty and Ali sang to each other(coincidentally the same song :huh:). It really adds emotion to the story. BTW, did ya come up with those lyrics yourself? That's so awesome!
*Eagerly awaits next chap :^.^:
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:yes It's good I like it! I still have a lot of work to do on my Fanfic.
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Unfortunately, I did not make the lyrics. I will add the disclaimer for it, but Almost Paradise is a song most noticeably from the musical Footloose, but when I envisioned this scene, I had to use it.
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With school done and being back from vacation, Chapter 10 is FINALLY FINALLY FINALLY FINALLY UP!!!!!!!!
No, I did not completely forget about my story!
I'm sorry if this chapter is not as well thought of as the others. This is what happens when I have writers block for a few months. I hope to regain my touch later on through the story. Otherwise, please bear with me :unsure:
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Chapter 11 is up! There are quite a few surprises in this chapter, especially the one at the very end! Hope you guys enjoy it, and don't fret about the end!
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Looking good, LBTFan13 :yes! I cannot wait to find out what happens with Littlefoot and the fastbiters. Man, this fanfic is pretty suspensful indeed :). BTW, the part about Mr. Threehorn crying made my heart wrench :cry. I don't know how I'd react to such a scene in a sequel. Poor guy. It sheds a different light on his internal self :(. Anyhoo, keep up the great work there :^.^:.
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Here it is! Chapter 12 is up!!!!!!!!!!! Please read it when you guys get the chance, and let me know what you think!
LBT Revenge - Chapter 12 (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4020072/13/The_Land_Before_Time_Revenge)
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Nice cliffhanger and battle scene.
I especially like your rendition of Sierra... he's even more of a bastard in this story than he is in the movie.
The only thing that's a little strange is the use of the word "god".
On a side note, how old is the gang?
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Yaaay! The update I've been waiting for :D! Aw, man! The upcoming Pterano vs. Sierra battle. That'll be a good read. I sure hope the Gang gets out of that mess well and in one piece :unsure:. Keep it coming :yes!
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That chapter was great! I enjoyed that the gang finally were reunited, but Sierra just had to ruin the moment.
I knew Sierra was a coward, but to use Littlefoots friends as hostages...that's low...even for him!
I can't wait for the next chapter....the Pterano vs. Sierra battle is going to RULE!!!!
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Well, here it is. The moment you've all been waiting for, or at least most of you have. Chapter 13 is up, and it is the fight to the death between Pterano and Sierra. Hopefully I have written it to your likings and have met your expectations and wishes. This fight was very hard for me to come up with, especially since I kind of wanted to make it a little epic. Anyway, read the chapter, comment on it, and hopefully you guys like it,
I think the next chapter will be the last, as I have been working on this story for a long time now. Once I finish posting it, then I will start coming up with ideas for another story, so I'll keep you guys posted. Besides that, enjoy:
Chapter 13 (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4020072/14/The_Land_Before_Time_Revenge)
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Loved it, LBTFan13 :yes! I can't wait to see the ending of the story. Too bad Pterano's in bad shape :(. Phew! He really kicked some flyer tail in that chapter. Go Pterano :^.^:!
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That was most interesting to read, sadly I missed some episodes so I'll have to re-read maybe the whole plot :blink: . But I liked what I saw. Keep it up!
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Cliffhanger ending! SO the question is does pterano survive?
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NOOOOOOOOOOOO! Pterano can't die! He's Pterano the Great! He just beat Seirra...and looked AWESOME doing it too.
Well in any case I look forward to the ending. I do hope Pterano survives...it would make me very sad to see Petrie lose his uncle like this.
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I also hope Pterano survives too, in the last chapter. But there's one thing that I didn't bring up in my other review? And that is during the Sierra vs Pterano fight, I noticed that you didn't have Pterano and Sierra going for any cheap shot's like to each others groin area. Which I kind of found a little disappointing, I mean you have two flyers, that have a real major hatred for one another! But the newest chapter's still turned out to be really good though.
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THAT was an AWESOME fight scene. For some reason Navras from the Matrix Revolutions Soundtrack kept playing in my head.
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Well, here it is. The last chapter in my fanfic. I decided to mix two songs in the end, and hopefully it creates a nice effect. I am so happy with this story, and I can't wait to start another one. Hopefully you guys like it, and thanks for sticking through with it til the end.
Chapter 14/The End (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4020072/15/The_Land_Before_Time_Revenge)
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Loved it! A heartwarming end to an otherwise dark and high tension story.
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I love how ya ended it, LBTFan13 :yes! It is a sweet ending to a suspenseful fanfic. Thanks for sharing it with us :yes.
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For anybody who hasn't gotten the chance to travel over to fanfiction.net, I have decided to post my fanfic on the forum here so everybody can read it right here! Those of you who have already read it, you don't have to read it again, but if you feel like it then great!
I'm going to post the story slowly by chapter so you guys can have time to comment or just to take a breather. Also, if you guys want to help give me suggestions for any future projects, I would be more than happy to listen to them!
Anyway, here is the prologue of the story:
The Land Before Time
Revenge
Prologue
It was a stormy night in the Mysterious Beyond. Many sharpteeth were running about, looking for their families and trying to get out of the down pouring rain. Lightning lit the sky as two fliers desperately flew to the safety of Hanging Rock. The wind fought them for what seemed like hours even though it only took them two minutes to reach the cavern. Once underneath the rock, they shook their wings dry and looked at each other. Although both the same size, one was a light brown color while the other a somewhat dark pink.
“I’m getting sick and tired of this weather,” the pink flier complained. “Why can’t we find a place with no sky water?”
“Quit your whining,” the other flier scolded. “We only have to deal with this just a little bit longer. It won’t be long now until we return back to the Great Valley.”
“Yeah, and then we can get our revenge on those bratty children once and for all!” The pink flier began to laugh maniacally a little. “What’s the plan anyway?” The brown flier stared at him.
“You forgot already Rinkus?”
“No I didn’t Sierra!” Rinkus objected. “I’m just too excited, that’s all.”
“Well, it can’t hurt,” Sierra agreed. “Ok then. Why are we here?” Rinkus thought for a moment.
“We were forced here, by those pesky little hatchlings.” Sierra nodded
“That’s right. There was one spiketail, that annoying big mouth we kidnapped before, one threehorn, Pterano’s nephew, and that longneck. It’s because they foiled our plot to get the Stone of Cold Fire that we ended up here. Now then, what are we going to do to them?”
“We’re gonna hurt them!” Rinkus exclaimed. “We’re gonna make them suffer!”
“Especially the longneck,” Sierra pointed out. “I will personally take great pride in toying with him.” Sierra began an evil laugh, and then Rinkus joined