The Gang of Five
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Just now got to this. been so busy this week.

This was really touching. It had a sort of funny bit in there, and a little action Over the top action, but I already knew it would be like that XD), but it was mostly just touching. You wrote it out pretty well, how the last scene was drawn out so Pterano and Petrie could get out everything they needed to get out.

I noticed a few typo's and errors like that in here, but it wasn't that bad.

It was really good overall. I liked it more than your other oneshot's.

And I keep telling you this, but be patient with feedback, girl! I know school's back in session, so me, you, and tons of other members here are back in school and have less time to get on. The site seems to be dieing down a bit from all the hustle and bustle of the summer, so it'll probably take even longer to get feedback now. :lol
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Yeah it was a pretty good story so far.


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FINALLY!!! I thought I would NEVER get this done! Sheesh! How hard is it to write just five paragraphs?

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Fatherly Affection

I still remember the night I was banished to the Mysterious Beyond. I remember it like it was only yesterday. The emotions that raged up inside me, the reality hitting me. It was all one big tropical storm that gave me a headache. Just the thought of leaving my family scared and that I would be lost and lonely scared me half to death...but then you came along.

Let me tell you something right now, boy. When I first met you, when I first looked deep into those amazing saphire blue eyes of yours, I felt a strong connection. A connection that I couldn't escape. I didn't know what it was, but I had a feeling that it was going to be big.

I remember the days in which we would be bumping into eachother from time to time. Hey, I remember the day we first met and how I saved you from that dreaded sharptooth. And you know what? That was the best thing that's ever happened to me out in the Mysterious Beyond. You know why? Because you have never failed to make me smile.

When I first met you, I felt a spark in me. One that I haven't felt in a long time. And for some reason, I had this strange feeling that I was supposed to meet you. Now I know why. Because we were meant to be together as father and son. We did almost everything together; fishing, traveling, watching the stars, and off course, kicking your tail at almost every race. Everyone of those things would pull us together in a bond so strong, death itself cannot break it.

Words cannot describe how proud I am to call you my son. There are times when I would watch you sleep and I'd think to myself, "Wow! I can't believe that I, Pterano, am the father of this outstanding, amazing kid." You always know how to make me feel so young. I love you, Devon. Thank you so much for being such a big part in my life and if I hadn't met you, I'd would have spent my years in the Mysterious Beyond alone and defenseless. So thank you, my precious son.

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DAAAAAAAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!!! PTERANO REALLY LOVES DEVON!!!! AAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWWW!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE THE BOND BETWEEN THOSE TWO!!!!! THE HOTTEST FATHER AND SON EVER!!!!!!  :smile  :wub  :wub  :wub  :wub

Enjoy.  :wub
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Awwwwhh! That was beautiful, trulyfantasticme! VERY well written! That's JUST what Pterano would say to Devon! He's loved him SO much since they first met! :D

I can totally picture Pterano saying that with his warm British accent and everything! :) Great Job! :) :)  I LOVE "Fatherly Affection".. Pterano and Devon are the PERFECT father and son. DAWWWWWWWHHH!!  :D  :D


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Listen to Your Heart

On one rainy night, safe in the Great Valley, a certain blue flyer watched as the rain poured hard on the landscape. Devon sighed, as he hoped and prayed that his beloved father would be okay. The last few weeks have been hard on them both, as Pterano came down with a sickness that very few dinosaurs survive. He couldn't believe that its been seventeen years. Seventeen years since they first met, twelve years ago that they became father and son. He couldn't believe at how far he and Pterano have gotten since then. They first started as acquaintences, friends, best friends, and finally, father and son. And it has changed Devon's life, as if some miracle had happened.

He remembered when his biological father, the one who he doesn't even consider a father anymore, had killed his girlfriend and he thought he'd never find anyone like her. But then he met Meg, who quickly became the new girl of his dreams. Eventually they ended up marrying and had a couple of daughters, with a son that have yet to hatch. Yeah, he started a new family, but there was absolutely NO way that he could have done it without Pterano by his side. He literally felt as if he couldn't have done ANYTHING without Pterano by his side.

Even though he has started a family of his own, and found his own cave to raise his family in, Devon felt like he could never live up to his father. Ever. Even after Pterano had told him many times that he already has. He absolutely loved Pterano with all of his heart, more than his own life, his own soul, more than anything in general. Pterano was his first and greatest love and it hurt him so much that there was a high chance that Pterano could be gone forever from his life.

"Devon?"

That raspy British accent of his father snapped him out of his thoughts. He immediately rushed to his side. "Hey Dad." he said, smiling softly down at him.

"Devon...I need you to promise me one last thing." Pterano requested, coughing a little.

Devon winced, as he didn't like the sound of that at all. "One last thing" those words from Pterano sent a few tears to his eyes, but he wiped them away. "Anything, Dad."

"Promise me...that you'll let me go." Pterano coughed again.

"No...no. Pterano, don't say that! I could never let you go." Devon pleaded, taking his hand to emphasize his point.

"Devon, I'll only hold you back if you don't."

"No. Dad, stop saying that! You've been MORE than a blessing to me. You've helped me through thick and thin! How could I let you go!?"

"Devon...listen to me. You have to let go, I know it's tough. Believe me, I know." Pterano gripped his hand a little tighter. "But you have your whole life ahead of you. You have a beautiful wife and such amazing children that I'm proud to call my own grandchildren."

"And I also have you! I couldn't have had my family without you! I just couldn't! I would've still ended up like Sierra if it wasn't for you!"

"Devon, I didn't find you a mate and got you children. You did. I only got in the way."

"Dad, that's not true! That's NOT true! You have to give yourself credit sometime!" Devon protested, tears spilling out of his eyes now.

"And so do you, Devon. I'm not the one who magically created her for you. You are the one who found her, and won her heart. And I couldn't be even more proud of you for it." Pterano rubbed Devon's hand gently, and the blue flyer only sighed in response, looking down. "Devon, look at me." The blue flyer obeyed and gazed directly into Pterano's dying eyes. "If you can't let me go, then do this. I want you to live a full, happy, stress free life. Go have adventures, fly around the world. Fight off sharpteeth, anything that'll make your life long and interesting. Don't let my death stop you from that."

"That's easier said than done. My life would be miserable if it weren't for you. I'm nothing without you, Dad."

"Devon, that is not true. You are my son and the most amazing son I would ever ask for in my life." Pterano told him, giving him a serious look to indicate that he meant what he was saying. "Just please promise me this."

Devon shifted his look to the ground and Pterano's eyes twice before he sighed. "I...I promise."

"Good. Now let me see that beautiful smile of yours." Pterano smiled now, rubbing his hand once again.

"I'm not sure if I can do that with you dying, Dad." Devon let a few more tears run down his cheeks.

"Well think of the memories we've shared. How about the time when we knocked down that sharptooth?"

Devon let out a chuckle through his tears. "Yeah those were the days weren't they?"

"Yes, that's my boy." The red flyer reached up and touched his son's cheek for the last time and Devon immediately rubbed his cheek against Pterano's hand, wiping away some of the flowing tears. "I love you, Devon. You have no idea what it has been like before I met you. I was miserable, and I didn't know the right path. But then you came along and turned such a crusty old lump of coal like me into a diamond. You make me proud to be your father everyday and you've never failed to make me smile. You've always made me feel like I was young again, and you still do. You have no idea just how happy I was when you called me Dad for the first time." At this point, Pterano couldn't hold his arm up any longer and his hand ended up slipping back into Devon's hand. Also, Devon noticed that Pterano's voice was growing weaker and weaker, indicating that his time was very near. His smile turned back into a frown. "Oh Devon...my sweet, sweet baby boy. I love you, Devon."

Devon closed his eyes and as soon as he did, he felt Pterano's hand loosen and slip onto the floor. He heard a quiet sigh coming from the dying flyer, and things went silent. He opened his eyes again to see his beloved father laying there; body limp, eyes closed, skin already growing cold. And this meant only one thing.

Realization washed over the sad young flyer and he gasped and his eye went wide. "No!" he exclaimed as more tears poured down his cheeks. "Dad...Dad?" by now his voice was cracking. "DAAAAAD!!!!!!" He lost it. He completely lost it. He clung to the red flyer tightly, sobbing, bawling, wailing hard into Pterano's dorment chest. He wailed so loud, that his crying seemed to echo throughout the valley. He kissed him, pounded on his chest, anything that would bring his beloved father back. But it all proved to be worthless. Pterano was dead, and there was nothing he could do about it.
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Gosh...THAT WAS SOOOOOO SAD!!!! I CANNOT BELIEVE I WROTE THIS WITHOUT CRYING MY EYES OUT!!! POOR DEVON!!!!!!! HE REALLY REALLY LOVES PTERANO!!!

Enjoy. :smile
Petra is a variant of the Greek name "Petros" meaning "strong" or "rock." Andi is a variant of the Greek name "Andy" meaning "masculine" or "brave." Therefore, I am tremendously brave and strong! :lol