It doesn’t really take all that much to get me interested in reading an LBT story.
Provided it is not a hatefic (I shun those on sight), is reasonably well-written, and not too depressing or R-rated, I’ll usually take it. That’s not to say I’m not picky about which fanfics I like (and like most things about me, there is not really any predictable logic behind my preferences for LBT stories,
: besides those few guidelines I already mentioned).
While I can’t say I like the concept of wars in LBT, your fanfic is a very organized and well thought-out story. I like fanfics that put the gang into new and interesting situations (while stillócriticallyókeeping them in character), and yours abounds with examples of this. Also, while this doesn’t have to do with the story exactly, I particularly like the footnotes you post along with each new chapter, describing where you got your inspiration for certain details and elements of that chapter. (If I ever complete any of my own LBT fanfics and post them here, I think I may do the same thingóassuming that’s okay with you.
)
As for feedback, one thing I would suggest is perhaps a guide to the named characters of
Twilight Valley. You have so many OCs in your story that I have had difficulty keeping track of who’s who. Something like a list of character names, with brief descriptions telling what species they are, whose side they are on, which chapter they were introduced in, and what role they play in the war, would be extremely helpful. (PM me if you want me to go into greater detail.) Perhaps a guide to the different herbs and their properties would also be helpful.
I also have a small nitpick for the beginning of Chapter 20. When Archie appears, Cera reacts as if she’s never seen him before, when the entire gang (along with Ali) met him in LBT IV. (If your intention was that Cera doesn’t recognize or remember him, maybe you should explain that.)
