(Nah, it's fine, just ignore that one for now, I'll just put the same event up here. And oh my goodness Nahla, I'm so sorry to hear that. If you ever need to someone to talk to, feel free to PM me. I'm usually there if you need me. )

Bron had gone to look for the kids, as Grandma was concerned for Littlefoot and Shorty when she noticed that they both had feelings for Nahla.
"Littlefoot! Shorty!" he called, hoping that they would find at least one of them. Actually, he would have preferred it if he found them separately. Eventually, he found the cave, and was horrified by what he saw there.

Wow! It's strange how one finds these places. Not too long ago another recent member, Nahla, found some pictures of a Great Valley school and bank.
I guess it just gets stranger and stranger...

EDIT: Right, if anyone's reading this, ignore this post. It doesn't contribute to the story at all and it won't make sense once you carry on reading, so don't bother taking this one into account.

Bron had followed Shorty, and was shocked by what he saw.
"Shorty!" he cried. Running up to his son. "Now, what just happened?"

Right, first review in a looooooong time. I'll try and do a few episodes in one post (I think I already said this), and perhaps shorten it down a little bit, mostly so that I can get through this a little quicker, so here goes:
 
Episode 2 (read on fanfiction.net):
My first reaction: “HOLY WHOA CHOMPER PROFESSOR WHAT ARE YOU DOING?!” This really surprised me, but the good thing about this is that it's all explained later in the series, so it wasn't completely out of the blue. It was also nice to see some brotherly talk between Littlefoot and Shorty, and of course his opinion of the Great Valley and what's it's like to be there. I've probably said this before, but I really like your unique writing style here. Ah, and that's a good explanation for Ruby and Chomper's absence in the first episode.
Just watch out for a few typos here and there (most of them are just common things like accidentally pressing the key next to the one intended. These things happen, so I'm going to go on too much about it, but if you want I'll point out the ones I spotted), and some capital letters are either not there or not in the right place, but since I'm reading the fanfiction version here, it may have been updated already here. All in all, this episode surprised me and it shows the characters and their personalities a bit more (especially Shorty).

Episode 3:
Okay, I'll get this out quickly now: I just love some of the words the professor uses! They're so... brilliant!
Moving on... I was saying about how I liked the growing brotherly relationship between Littlefoot and Shorty, and I'll say it again, only this time with Littlefoot and Chomper. I noticed that there are a lot of differences in Littlefoot's “brotherly relationships” with Shorty and Chomper, and I think that adds a lot of character development, which is something I really like. I'm also enjoying the added mystery of the professor with him lying about being a vegetarian and such. I can also see that Chomper sees right through him there, so we can see he doesn't like him at all, but of course you're halting the explanation as to why he attacked the professor in the first place. I quite like series where a lot of things seem to be separate and surprising, but everything pulls together in the end and makes sense. I haven't read this in a while, but I'm reviewing as I'm reading it again. Anyway, I'm liking this! Again, a few capital letters in wrong places, but aside from that, much improvement in the grammar since episode 1!

Episode 4:
Aw... good to see Grandpa Longneck... well, hear him, rather.
Loving the comical moments in this episode, like when the professor took his shirt off. It was funny, but it was also a very realistic reaction from the dinosaurs, giving that dinosaurs haven't seen clothes before. Dang it, stop making the professor more mysterious! Well, I guess he taught Chomper that ground crawlers don't have to be the only thing on the menu. I liked the ending too. What did Chomper eat?
Well, not much else to say about this one, other than it was quite a heartwarming episode on Littlefoot's end. The grammar is much better in this episode, so good job with that! The only thing I found that was misspelt was clothes.

Anyway, hope you don't mind me reviewing every single episode here, but since they all have different plots, I thought it would be nice to share my views on each of them.

"Exactly," Bron used his excuse to give his reason. "She was born into a world of cruelty and hate, but she got a taste of love and happiness from her mother. If she was given a bit more of that... anyone can change, Mr Threehorn. She has already helped a lot of people, and she has every right to live a normal life, but you lot are stopping her."

"Oh no..." Bron breathed, running towards Nahla quickly, the older longnecks following him.
"Now what are you doing?!" Grandpa shouted at Mr Threehorn. He was already getting tired of this now.

Grandma was struggling to see Nahla in such a mess, and eventually had to start licking her clean again.
"That's better," she said. Of course Nahla's injuries were still clearly there, but she already looked a lot better. She lay down next to her mate, ready for a short nap. She still needed to recover some of her energy that was drained by the illness, after all.

Petrie decided to answer the question. "Me not too sure about Shadowlanders, and me no know what they doing..."

"She... she not here," Petrie answered. "She... not like Nahla very much." He said the second sentence so fast it was hard to make out the words.

Grandma Longneck saw Nahla returning with Bron and smiled. Her smile turned into a look of confusion and a little bit of concern when she saw what Littlefoot and Nahla were doing.
"Even I didn't think of that when we were that young," Grandpa joked, obviously noticing the same thing. Grandma shot him a friendly glare before chuckling.

"I'll go and get her," said Bron, getting up a walking after her. He knew well that it wasn't a good idea for her to go wandering around the Great Valley alone, in case a different resident saw her.

Grandpa nodded slightly. "Put them next to him, he'll eat them once he's ready," he told them. He couldn't force these down his neck when the gagging was just going to force them back up again. Now they could only wait until it stopped.

Bron made his way into the Great Valley with the two little ones, hoping nothing else bad was going to happen.