Turning Traitor

JBJB1029 · **on:** April 27, 2009, 12:54:56 AM

Do you think there should be a traitor in The Land Before Time, like Dennis T. Nedry who was a grossly overweight, sloppy man who was very much disliked by his co-workers and is Jurassic Park's chief computer programmer. But in The Land Before Time instead of him agreeing to smuggle embryos of all 15 dinosaur species off of Isla Nublar for Dodgson, instead he would make the guards leave there post so Ozzy and Strut could go inside the cave and kidnap Littlefoot as Red Claws hostage, to use as bait for the others. Do you think it's a good idea or not?

crazedwriter · **Reply #1 on:** April 27, 2009, 04:01:45 PM

Sounds plausible, but to make someone, particularly a LBT regular, to turn on his friends, the reason had better be good. Don't forget Dennis was up to his eyeballs in debt, so the big bucks promised to him was reason enough to steal dino embryos. On the other hand, what is gained by the LBT turncoat? Can't be money. So what will your traitor character get in return for deceiving his friends.

BTW why not write up a few short scenes of your fan fiction and let us read them. The ideas are there but please get them in print for others to see. And don't worry about if it's too "weird". My stuff is pretty left of center, and somehow people actually like it. Go figure.

JBJB1029 · **Reply #2 on:** April 27, 2009, 10:56:28 PM

Here's the answer to this quote:

Quote from: crazedwriter,Apr 27 2009 on 03:01 PM

So what will your traitor character get in return for deceiving his friends.

Actually, the character is part of the "Flattooth Herd Defenders," the leader asked to take care of the kids. He turned traitor, so he could get food, because it would be a dry season outside the Great Valley, during the 18th-20th movies.

Serris · **Reply #3 on:** April 28, 2009, 12:10:20 AM

Crazedwriter has a point, try posting some drafts and we'll look them over.

Don't worry about it being too weird. My LBT story breaks the canon and it's quite popular.

JBJB1029 · **Reply #4 on:** April 28, 2009, 09:46:59 AM

Quote from: Serris,Apr 27 2009 on 11:10 PM

Crazedwriter has a point, try posting some drafts and we'll look them over.

Don't worry about it being too weird. My LBT story breaks the canon and it's quite popular.

You mean post some topics, that might help me create my movie ideas, and you'll look them over?

crazedwriter · **Reply #5 on:** April 28, 2009, 01:29:36 PM

Quote from: JBJB1029,Apr 28 2009 on 08:46 AM

You mean post some topics, that might help me create my movie ideas, and you'll look them over?

Not just topics but whole paragraphs. Maybe the opening scene of your story. Post them so we can read and comment on it. Just start it, "Once upon a time" or something on those lines then take it from there.

Malte279 · **Reply #6 on:** April 28, 2009, 01:57:09 PM

Also I think that with whatever ideas you may have, and no matter whether those ideas have been there in another story before, you should not try too much to look at other stories for your own. I think a "traitor plot" can work out in a land before time story. I do not think however that any good can come out of a story with ideas being copy pasted from other stories with not much more than the names being changed. One can always tell which story it is from then and there is a huge difference between ideas being "inspired by" or ideas being "ripped off from" in my opinion.

JBJB1029 · **Reply #7 on:** April 28, 2009, 11:03:40 PM

Quote from: Malte279,Apr 28 2009 on 12:57 PM

Also I think that with whatever ideas you may have, and no matter whether those ideas have been there in another story before, you should not try too much to look at other stories for your own. I think a "traitor plot" can work out in a land before time story. I do not think however that any good can come out of a story with ideas being copy pasted from other stories with not much more than the names being changed. One can always tell which story it is from then and there is a huge difference between ideas being "inspired by" or ideas being "ripped off from" in my opinion.

But I have trouble trying to type up a story, without coping and pasting it from other stories, into mine and editing it. It's one of my few flaws, which I'm not very happy of :cry2 .

Malte279 · **Reply #8 on:** April 29, 2009, 03:42:53 AM

But if one is aware of a flaw, and perceives the flaw as such, one can try to work on it.
I think a "traitor plot" can work out in LBT but the "Jurassic Park traitor plot" can not be pasted into LBT just like that. Perhaps you are looking a bit too much at what others have already written when thinking about what to write yourself? :unsure:

Myrkin · **Reply #9 on:** April 29, 2009, 08:04:58 AM

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But I have trouble trying to type up a story, without coping and pasting it from other stories, into mine and editing it.

Then I suggest you to work through basics by (for example) joining some RP here. It should teach you to use more your own imagination and experience in that may help you when you will be writting a story.

JBJB1029 · **Reply #10 on:** April 29, 2009, 09:50:42 AM

Quote from: Malte279,Apr 29 2009 on 02:42 AM

But if one is aware of a flaw, and perceives the flaw as such, one can try to work on it.
I think a "traitor plot" can work out in LBT but the "Jurassic Park traitor plot" can not be pasted into LBT just like that. Perhaps you are looking a bit too much at what others have already written when thinking about what to write yourself? :unsure:

The Land Before Time Traitor Plot would be Different compared to the "Jurassic Park traitor plot," except the Traitor in both polts, dies from the same dinosaur.

Quote from: Myrkin,Apr 29 2009 on 07:04 AM

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But I have trouble trying to type up a story, without coping and pasting it from other stories, into mine and editing it.

Then I suggest you to work through basics by (for example) joining some RP here. It should teach you to use more your own imagination and experience in that may help you when you will be writting a story.

What does RP stand for?

Myrkin · **Reply #11 on:** April 29, 2009, 11:06:47 AM

It stand for Role Playing - the type of game where you are playing as one (or few) characters with other people who lead their own characters.

Mumbling · **Reply #12 on:** April 29, 2009, 11:09:32 AM

Quote from: Myrkin,Apr 29 2009 on 05:06 PM

It stand for Role Playing.

That's basically.. You get a role, a certain character you have to act for. Others control other characters. This might lead a story into a whole different direction then you might have thought it went, and your character just plays along

It's a nice way of creating a story, since it might become really good thanks to everyone's imagination.

Myrkin · **Reply #13 on:** April 29, 2009, 11:11:41 AM

Heh. I edited my post to explain this matter more, in the same moment you posted your own explenation, Mumbling. Nice timing.

Mumbling · **Reply #14 on:** April 29, 2009, 11:22:15 AM

Haha sorry about that. Thought it'd be nice to clear up some thing for him.

Myrkin · **Reply #15 on:** April 29, 2009, 11:25:49 AM

I am not mad at all. Its good that you posted, because even my edited post still doesnt tell so much about RP as yours.

Mumbling · **Reply #16 on:** April 29, 2009, 02:10:48 PM

Heh, and that while I'm not so much into RPs.

I'll stop spamming this topic now

JBJB1029 · **Reply #17 on:** April 30, 2009, 01:30:22 AM

Quote from: Mumbling,Apr 29 2009 on 01:10 PM

Heh, and that while I'm not so much into RPs.

I'll stop spamming this topic now

Good idea, because I was afraid you were going to give my computer a virus

(It's a joke).