I have to apologize yet again for the scarcity of reviews this year! I meant to do these in several sets including one for each author, but time really got away from me. Hopefully I can do better at keeping up with reviews in the future, as I really appreciate all of the wonderful reviews I’ve received on my modest attempts at writing
Name of fanfiction: First Impressions
Author: Rhombus
Rating: 8.5/10
Review:
A cute little tale with good comedic timing! This felt almost like a script for a potential show episode, and I found it very enjoyable to read. Unfortunately the reveal of Dalmar covered in sweetbubble juice didn't feel like it was quite equal in impact to the way the situation was built up, though I understand what the author was going for. But that's really a minor complaint, and on the whole I think this piece works very well as a funny slice-of-life tale.
Name of fanfiction: (Legends and) Adventures of Sucky
Author: Ducky123
Rating: 8.5/10
Review:
Aaaah, Sucky. I’m so glad this spelling mistake turned into a full-fledged story. And there's something kind of cathartic in reading about a character who tries so hard and fails anyway, haha. On to the review- I loved it, of course! The storytelling format with the gang worked well, and I thought each “Sucky tale” succeeded in its own way. The diarrhea scene might have been a bit excessive for me, but that’s a minor complaint. As a whole this story really works as the quirky, funny, weirdly tragic tale that it is.
Name of fanfiction: Our Past and Our Future
Author: LBTlover247
Rating: 7.0/10
Review: A simple but effective story. It’s kind of refreshing to see an optimistic take on Chomper getting older and hungrier in the Great Valley, and I love how you handled his worries and eventual acceptance of eating the scaled swimmers. The heavy reliance on the voice of the ‘narrator’ to explain characters feelings was a bit cumbersome in the beginning, but it eased up by the end and the pace became much more enjoyable.
Name of fanfiction: Five Stages of Grief
Author: OwlsCantRead
Rating: 10/10
Review: Wow! This tale was incredibly emotional, and an exciting new twist on an old story. I love how you portrayed Ducky’s breakdown, and the consequences of her actions. The five stages of grief setup was also a creative and functional way to frame the story. Great job with this!
Name of fanfiction: A Swim of Silence
Author: DiddyKF1
Rating: 9.5/10
Review: A truly powerful tale. I thought the pacing worked well with interspersed with the scenes of Ducky going on her night swim, and these really helped to add to the somber atmosphere. The characters were well-written, and I loved the idea behind the fic. My one criticism is that I didn’t really like that you named the character Judy- it was a bit too on-the-nose for me, and I think the allegory would have come across fine without having to use her name. Other than that, this was a stirring and emotional piece.
Name of fanfiction: The Perils of the Deep
Author: Sovereign
Rating: 9.0/10
Review: I enjoyed this one a lot! I love Mo’s species and it was really cool to see their culture and one of their stories explored more here! You did a great job building tension, and I was drawn in all the way to the end. Really makes me want to see more LBT stories set underwater.