Land Before Time Abridged Series

Lillefot · **Reply #20 on:** August 10, 2008, 04:44:58 PM

The second version of the script was better!

Yes, it made me laugh!

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I would like you to continue with it, good luck!

Kjeldo, that was unneccesary...

LBTFan13 · **Reply #21 on:** August 10, 2008, 08:12:02 PM

Quote from: kjeldo,Aug 10 2008 on 01:44 PM

crap,

First of all that was a little harsh for a comment. Secondly would you like to give me reasons as to why you don't like it? If you don't find this funny then I understand that, but leave a reasonible and respectful comment next time. This isn't as easy as it looks, so I'd like to see you try making a script of your own. <_<

Anyway, thanks for everybody else's comments. I had hoped this would come out better than the last one, and I do plan on continuing the script. I guess I was influenced a little too much by certain Abridged Series which was why my first script turned out the way it did.

action9000 · **Reply #22 on:** August 10, 2008, 10:49:28 PM

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I like how you're very constructive about his excerpt by giving such intelligent reasons. I should probably let the admins know about how rude your comment is for helping someone.

It's been handled.

Amaranthine · **Reply #23 on:** August 10, 2008, 11:18:14 PM

I like the revised one.

That was funny for me. :^.^:

Cancerian Tiger · **Reply #24 on:** August 10, 2008, 11:22:27 PM

Yeah, the revised version is way better and funnier

B).

Kor · **Reply #25 on:** August 10, 2008, 11:26:27 PM

I think it is even funnier now that it is g rated.

LBTFan13 · **Reply #26 on:** August 11, 2008, 10:45:49 AM

Thanks for the comments guys, and I'm sorry we had to get admins involved in this.

Anyway, here's more from the script. I hope you guys enjoy it as much as I did. The Dragon's Lair reference is from an episode of Megaman Abridged, so I do plan on giving credit to the creator of that for the line. Hopefully you guys don't take the conversation between Ducky and Ruby too seriously, because I stopped it before it could get any worse.

Petrie: We there yet? We there yet? We there yet? We there yet? We there yet? We

Cera: NO!!!!

Petrie: Me sorry.

Spike: Ooh Fooooooooooooood!

Pulls vine showing light

Littlefoot: Spike, you just gave us light to explore the caves! Nice job!

Spike: Oh, I guess that’s good also.

Shows sharpteeth in water, Redclaw chasing them out.

Redclaw: Out of my hot tub! Smells others Must…..stalk…..children…..

Littlefoot: sees four paths Umm ok, who’s idea was it to put a Dragon’s Lair joke in here?

Ruby: This cave is too small.

Ducky: This cave is too big.

Petrie: This cave just right.

Littlefoot: Really?

Petrie: No. Me just wanted Goldeylocks joke.

Spike: I can’t smell any foooooooooooooood, and who’s Goldeylocks?

Chomper: Hey guys! Come see this!

Petrie: Ahh! Sharptooth!

Cera: It’s only Chomper you baby.

Petrie: How you know? Chomper turns around Oh, hi Chomper.

Cera: Ok, what is it you want to show us so badly? Inside cave Don’t tell me you’re going to attempt some Evil Kenivel stunt.

Chomper: No, this cave has a talk back.

Ducky: Ooh let me try. AUGA! Auga. Auga. Auga.

Cera: Wow it actually worked. My turn. Bologna! Bologna! Bologna…….Umm, where’s the fourth one?

Littlefoot: Let me try. Tree stars! Tree stars! Tree stars! Bologna.

Ruby: Umm, does anybody else think that someone might hear us screaming?

Ducky: Why do you ask?

Ruby: I just have a bad feeling that we shouldn’t just be screaming random stuff when we’re right next to the Mysterious Beyond.

Littlefoot: Ok time to go.

Back in valley

Chomper: Wow, those buzzers were very spicy. Thanks Petrie.

Petrie: Ok that just gross

Littlefoot: Hey Chomper, since none of us feel like stopping our lunch, why don’t you go on ahead.

Chomper: Ok!

Cera: Was that really a good idea? Sending him out alone?

Petrie: It Chomper. What the worst that happen?

Cera: I could name a couple.

Switches to Ruby and Ducky

Ducky: Umm, Ruby, there’s been something I’ve wanted to ask someone for a long time.

Ruby: Ok then. It can’t be too bad. What do you want to know?

Ducky: Well, I was just curious. How are we born?

Ruby: confused Uhh, we are hatched from eggs. Is this going where I think it’s going?

Ducky: Well, I know that, but I mean what happens before-

Ruby: Ok this is going exactly where I think its going. This conversation is over.

Ducky: But I-

Ruby: No Ducky, I am not going to tell you.

Ducky: Fine, I’ll just go eat. Jumps for tree stars

Cera: Sorry, but you have to be 9 inches or higher to reach this tree. Laughs

Littlefoot: That was mean.

Cera: It was only a joke.

Littlefoot: That was a mean joke. We don’t do that here.

Cera: Come on I was ju-

Littlefoot: DAMNIT CERA WE DON’T DO THAT HERE!!!!!!!!!!

Ducky: Did you just curse?

Cera: I thought we were all G-rated characters? Why does he get to curse? I’m complaining!

f-22 "raptor" ace · **Reply #27 on:** August 11, 2008, 11:18:14 AM

kjeldo · **Reply #28 on:** August 11, 2008, 01:09:57 PM

eh, eh, i'm sorry, okay? -_-

Mumbling · **Reply #29 on:** August 11, 2008, 01:40:51 PM

hehe! :^.^:

Serris · **Reply #30 on:** August 11, 2008, 02:33:51 PM

LBT violation! But still funny!

I liked how in one of the early ones you broke the 4th wall.

ingster · **Reply #31 on:** August 11, 2008, 04:10:18 PM

I liked it with when there was more swearing in it and such, but its still good

Lillefot · **Reply #32 on:** August 11, 2008, 04:22:43 PM

Both thumbs up!
Laughing out load here!

Ptyra · **Reply #33 on:** August 11, 2008, 05:01:46 PM

Bologna! Balogna! Balogna!= LOLZ!

That's pretty funny

. A REAL abridged LBT there.

LBTFan13 · **Reply #34 on:** August 11, 2008, 05:21:02 PM

I'm really having fun with this. I guess I'm trying to stay away from cursing especially since the characters would never EVER curse in the LBT reality.

Cancerian Tiger · **Reply #35 on:** August 11, 2008, 11:59:38 PM

Quote from: LBTFan13,Aug 11 2008 on 09:45 AM

Littlefoot: DAMNIT CERA WE DON’T DO THAT HERE!!!!!!!!!!

Ducky: Did you just curse?

Cera: I thought we were all G-rated characters? Why does he get to curse? I’m complaining!

Love that one! The cleaner ones are hilarious! The swears are alright but not any more extensive than in your fanfic(of which I'm anxious to see the next chapter, but take your time

). Sexual comments and vulgarities should really be left out, though. It almost sounds like character bashing, which upsets fans of a series. All in all, I really like the two clean versions better. Ya need to give yourself more credit on being a comedian

B).

LBTFan13 · **Reply #36 on:** August 12, 2008, 01:24:03 AM

I guess I just never imagined myself to be a comedian. I am never the one coming up with jokes on the spot, and all my friends at school agree that I am not the funniest person around. Thanks for your support!

I do plan on continuing the fanfic, so don't you worry

Kor · **Reply #37 on:** August 12, 2008, 01:40:06 AM

I enjoyed reading this. G rated comedy can be very funny, a thing many comedians seem to know now, some normal folks also I guess. It is also natural that at least some of the gang would be curious where hatchlings& such come from and such. Some kids are curious now and then, to at least a little degree.

lbt/cty_lover · **Reply #38 on:** August 12, 2008, 02:37:32 PM

I find that extensive swearing isn't funny at all. Sparce swearing is funny, though. By the way, can you give a voice sample.

LBTFan13 · **Reply #39 on:** August 12, 2008, 06:18:12 PM

I could certainly do that, although I can't promise anything spectacular since I have never done voiceovers before, and I would also have to change voice pitch maybe a thousand times.

Is there any particular section you guys want me to sample voicing?