The Gang of Five
The Land Before Time => LBT Fanfiction => Topic started by: Keni on September 17, 2006, 12:44:02 PM
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A Sharptooth's Heart II (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/2855527/1/)
One year after the events of A Sharptooth's Heart. A rebellion begins a conspiracy that will devastate the Great Valley, and doing something about it will answer Rex's question about what he is and more...
IN-PROGRESS
13 Chapters
Rated T for Teen for violence and blood
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Chapter 8: An amazing creature...A forgotten species
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I say it once and I'll say it again: Best Chapter Ever! XD
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Thanks! ^^
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Chapter 9: A new mystery unfolds
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Im reading the first one now seems quite good so far. I just hate reading books stories etc on a computer. Would much prefer to flop on the couch witha little reading lite over my shoulder.
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Wish there was a easy way to download these
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Well now im totaly hooked on the story. Your writeing style reminds me of robert bakkers when he wrote raptor rread in some ways. While he did no have the charectors talking exactly he put you in to the minds of his charectors in much the same manner.
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well just finished reading A Sharptooth's Heart awesome stuff. guess ill start on A Sharptooth's Heart II tomorow or i may wait till its finished just depends i suppose.
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Well just finished number 2. Awesome stuff other than a couple small things.
The reference to humanoids. I think you used it a bit to much with the chars them seles refering ot it. I think it would have been better to enclose those references in ( ) example (his humanoid paws) vs his humanoid paws. Remember they have no point of reference of their own as per humans. Again same deal with chemicals encloseign in ( ) would be better It gives us the reference and knowlage of why such and such works but to them its just something they figured out. Having them refer to the juices in the leaves and refering even to things like the same juices that make the leaves bitter seems to help in keeping wounds clean and lets them heal faster.
With that said you started one heck of a story here and can't wait for the rest so get to writing it heheh :)
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Thanks for the positive feedback, novaflare! Also great to hear comments and suggestions from the readers to improve the story. I'll take your suggestions in consideration, I just figured the dinosaurs knew a bit of the chemicals of the leaves and most of the mentions of humanoid and the chemicals were in non-quotable parts of the story, not directed told from them and therefore not known to them.
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Thanks for the positive feedback, novaflare! Also great to hear comments and suggestions from the readers to improve the story. I'll take your suggestions in consideration, I just figured the dinosaurs knew a bit of the chemicals of the leaves and most of the mentions of humanoid and the chemicals were in non-quotable parts of the story, not directed told from them and therefore not known to them.
Yeh not a story breaking thing by any means. I still cant wait to read the rest hehe.
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Chapter 10: The adventure starts, Threehorn Region
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Chapter 11: Discoveries, revenge and a hot place
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I just finished reading this chapter last night.....great work! I can't wait for the next chapter! And now Chomper needs to be saved....will this adventure ever get easy? :lol:
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Oh my gosh, Finally an...
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Chapter 12: Hard and dire times
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Yeah! Update! Great job, man!
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I don't have time to read this now, but I will when I get the chance.
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Chapter 13: Shock from the Past