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The Land Before Time => LBT Fanfiction => Topic started by: Nahla on March 10, 2013, 10:13:19 PM

Title: Slipped Away
Post by: Nahla on March 10, 2013, 10:13:19 PM

I cried and cried and cried your name.
Nothing will ever be the same.
The thunder roared and the lightning cracked.
"Come on mother we must get back".
You looked at me with those trusting eyes.
Tried to tell me it'll be alright.
You said you' be there even if I can't see you.
Don't leave mother I need you!
As the night took your spirit away.
For my own end I did pray.
But I found my way home.
Many miles I did roam.
But remember Mother each and every day.
I still think of how you slipped away.




I am not a poet ok,yes the poem is about Littlefoot reflecting on his Mother's death.

Title: Slipped Away
Post by: StrutEggStealer on March 11, 2013, 09:03:04 AM

OMG, this is wonderful! :o
brimming with emotion, you've really captured that moment....
AGH! It's making me tear up! Must find something happy to read...

Title: Slipped Away
Post by: Mr Wonk on March 11, 2013, 12:55:26 PM

This is really good. And I think your really good poet! :DD

Title: Slipped Away
Post by: Ducky123 on March 11, 2013, 01:01:18 PM

Well done, Nahla! :wow
In general I hate poems since we have to work with them in school, which is terribly boring :DD
But Lbt poems are great!  :exactly

This is a very emotional one indeed :) Maybe the next one is about Nahla?;)

Title: Slipped Away
Post by: Nahla on March 11, 2013, 01:07:01 PM

Aww thanks guys nice thing to wake up to.

Despire it being 4am in the morining grr


I will kill these roosters if they don't stop this...well not really but if they go missing it was not me taking them far far away...., :angel

Title: Slipped Away
Post by: somerandomfangirl on March 11, 2013, 01:23:10 PM

Gah, I would HATE it if a rooster woke me up at 4am!

Darn, stop making me tear up! Seriously! This is so beautiful... and full of emotion, too, as Strut said. :cry Well done, Nahla!

Title: Slipped Away
Post by: Nahla on March 11, 2013, 01:35:42 PM

Thanks :)

Yes it not fun...,



I am working on one about my character Nahla

it called "Escape The Shadowlands"

Title: Slipped Away
Post by: Mr Wonk on March 11, 2013, 01:37:55 PM

Where all looking forward to it! :DD

Title: Slipped Away
Post by: Littlefoot1616 on March 11, 2013, 03:43:34 PM

Wow! A wonderful piece made there Nahla! A real tear-jerker chocked with emotional pain and reflection. For someone who claims not to be much of a poet, you sure do have a knack for it! Nicely done! ;)

Title: Slipped Away
Post by: Nahla on March 11, 2013, 03:51:51 PM

Thank you everyone.

Since everyone likes it I guess I'll write more poems.

Better then my drawings,I tried to draw a dinosaur,ended up  a horse which ended up a cow....

Title: Slipped Away
Post by: Ducky123 on March 11, 2013, 04:02:36 PM

haha :DD
my drawing skill are even worse :lol: the end wouldn't even look like a cow ;)

I look forward to read more of your LBT- poetry :)

Title: Slipped Away
Post by: StrutEggStealer on March 11, 2013, 06:37:24 PM

Agreed, I think we all do Nahla^^
And don't get discouraged about drawing. It takes a lot of ptience and practice, and if it's something you want to stick with, by golly you'll stick with it, lol. My advice, look for references online or from illustrated books, they yield the best inspiration :)
Good luck!

Title: Slipped Away
Post by: Nahla on March 11, 2013, 06:40:04 PM

Please do not ask how I got a horse out of a dinosaur and a cow out of a horse.

I honestly do not know.