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Title: Webcomic: The Winged Fox II
Post by: AvestheForumFox on September 01, 2008, 03:50:21 AM

One of the strips I'll be updating over the week. This one specifically on Mondays. Comments are greatly appreciated!
Episode 1
(http://i207.photobucket.com/albums/bb195/bellcountycomics/episode1-1.jpg)

Title: Webcomic: The Winged Fox II
Post by: Petrie. on September 01, 2008, 07:42:18 AM

Hmm....for an online comic, at least when compared to other online comics, that is a lot of text for one strip.  Have you considered doing it maybe twice a week and removing some dialogue?  You are limiting what you can do with so much space devoted to dialogue in this manner.

That's my take.

Title: Webcomic: The Winged Fox II
Post by: Mumbling on September 01, 2008, 08:43:09 AM

I think there is a bit too much text in it as well, but that might be because it's the first episode? Maybe later on they'll get shorter?

Looks interesting.

Title: Webcomic: The Winged Fox II
Post by: AvestheForumFox on September 01, 2008, 10:34:07 AM

I see what you mean about too much dialog. This strip I tried to cut down on the dialog I had in the original script. Its not as easy as I thought it would be. After hearing your opinions I decided to go look at other cartoons to try and figure out how they did it. I've noticed from this research that large paragraphs are often separated into smaller word balloons and joined with branches. Perhaps that's how I should had done this strip or at least attempted to write a much shorter version.

The next strip wont have as much dialog, me thinks.

Title: Webcomic: The Winged Fox II
Post by: Mumbling on September 01, 2008, 10:43:37 AM

Cool

Title: Webcomic: The Winged Fox II
Post by: AvestheForumFox on September 01, 2008, 11:14:25 AM

Alright, I have a job position for anybody wants to take it. I need an editor for the scripts before I turn them into strips. This is a volunteer position (sorry, no pay) and you must have uber grammar skilz. You will get credit for your help.

You also must have any of the following messengers:
- AIM
- Yahoo
- MSN
- ICQ
- MIRC

So who wants it?

Title: Webcomic: The Winged Fox II
Post by: Mumbling on September 01, 2008, 11:28:20 AM

uber grammar skills huh? I know Aaron is a grammar freak :p

Title: Webcomic: The Winged Fox II
Post by: Kor on September 01, 2008, 11:56:02 AM

YOu can ask him, whoever he is.  I guess most folks, like myself, have average grammar skills.

Title: Webcomic: The Winged Fox II
Post by: Mumbling on September 01, 2008, 12:11:50 PM

Quote from: Kor,Sep 1 2008 on  05:56 PM

YOu can ask him, whoever he is.  I guess most folks, like myself, have average grammar skills.

Its neptunenavigator.

Title: Webcomic: The Winged Fox II
Post by: Kor on September 01, 2008, 06:16:48 PM

As for spellchecking that is easy with online free spellcheckers and also Firefox.

Title: Webcomic: The Winged Fox II
Post by: Chiletrek on September 01, 2008, 07:57:29 PM

Hello:
 Spellcheckings helps a lot, but it is also necessary to know lots about synonyms and antonyms, that helps give comics and stories a nicer view by avoiding repeating the same words over and over again.

Title: Webcomic: The Winged Fox II
Post by: Kor on September 01, 2008, 09:50:56 PM

also good grammar as well.