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The Land Before Time => LBT Fanfiction => Topic started by: LBTFan13 on February 25, 2010, 01:43:28 AM
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Well this is it. The final part of the Revenge trilogy! There has been a lot of feedback for the Revenge series, and I am really happy that it is as popular as it is. This starts the update thread for the story. Once the link is ready, I will post it up here and then we will go from there.
So consider this the hype post. This is hopefully going to be an amazing story, so get ready :D
EDIT: Here is the link to the story:
LBT Revenge III (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5774238/1/The_Land_Before_Time_Revenge_III)
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I cannot wait. I wish you luck!
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This is just too epic for words! I'm going to keep my eyes open for this one!
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The prologue is up! Check it out in the link below!
Prologue (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5774238/1/The_Land_Before_Time_Revenge_III)
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Damn, you're fast :o! I really can't wait, either. This is gonna kick eggstealer a** :DD!
:celebrate :cheers :celebrate :cheers
:lol
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I love your reaction :lol:
Well I had this prologue idea in my mind for a while now, and I figured I should write it out before I lose it. Glad you are as excited as I am.
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Oh, it is getting off to a good start.
Why do I have the feeling that Strut is going to be an ally in this case?
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I figured before I leave for spring break I would give you guys something.
Chapter 1 is up!
It is short I know, but it is still a fun chapter. You'll see what I mean. I know there is no "action", but I figured that the last two stories have had a frantic first chapter, or something terrible happens. This time, I wanted to change it up, make it a little more happy.
So follow the link below and tell me what you guys think!
Chapter 1 (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5774238/2/)
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Hehe, I like it :D!
A burnin' question you've left us in the author's notes at the end: What will it take for Cera to forgive her father? Why do I have a funny feeling somethin' bad is about to happen :p?
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This chapter was rather sweet. Although I'm surprised that Cera didn't even turn around to shout at her father, talk about a cold shoulder.
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Hey guys. Just as an unofficial update, I am still working on Revenge III. College has become very hectic lately so it has gotten a tad harder to actually sit down and write. Just so you know that I have not given up on this story :D
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Oh, good! I was getting worried :lol.
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OFFICIAL UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Chapter 2 is now complete and up for your reading pleasure. Again, this chapter is more to set up for future events, so no real "action" per say. I hope you guys enjoy this chapter and let me know what you think!
Chapter 2 (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5774238/3/The_Land_Before_Time_Revenge_III)
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Wow looks like Strut gets to be a hero this time.
I wonder if the fast-biters will be heroes or villains.
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The link isn't typed correctly. I had to manually change it in the address bar in order for me to get to the page.
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Whoops! No idea how that happened. Thanks for letting me know. It's fixed now.
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Nice pre-action chapter :yes.
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OFFICIAL UPDATE: Chapter 3 has been uploaded for Revenge III, and unfortunately it doesn't fare well for some of our heroes. I'm not going to spoil for whom, so you will just have to read and find out. This has much more action than the previous chapters, and I enjoyed writing it.
As always, let me know what you think here!
Chapter 3 (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5774238/4/The_Land_Before_Time_Revenge_III)
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Ooh, I can't wait to see what happens next.
My expression while reading the story: :wow
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*Tries to type with adrenaline-shaken hands*
Aw, poor Mr. Threehorn. Now I wanna see that Ozzie get ripped to shreds! MWAHAHAHAHA!
I know, I know. Several more chapters before he gets a whoopin' :lol.
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Ya know, I was wonderin' how Ozzie would manage Cera, considering she's a very strong fighter. I meant to say this in my previous post, but I really like how ya used psychology in the scene with Ozzie, Cera and her father, and the fastbiters. I would've never thought of that :wow. That made me feel really bad for both Cera and her father, and it also shows that she truly does not hate him despite what he's done. I hope this makes him think about the way he treats others (especially Littlefoot and his family) after what she said to him.
Good job, and as always, I can't wait to see where this goes :D.
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I'm glad you liked that part. I was going for that, because like you said it shows that Cera still cares for her father despite the horrible mistakes he has made in the past. Plus, in a one on one fight, despite being older, Ozzie would have lost to Cera, so I needed some leverage for her to lose.
I am continuously working on the next chapter, so when it is ready I will upload it for your reading pleasure.
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I would like to apologize for the writer's block I am in. Unfortunately, I have been really busy that I haven't found the right time to really finish this. I am still working on it, and the next chapter is close to being finished. Hopefully, I have not lost your interest in this, because I have every intention of finishing this story.
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Well, I finally uploaded Chapter 4. Again, I apologize for the writers block, but I've been so busy, even too busy for my liking. Anyway, hope you guys enjoy this chapter and let me know what you think/
Chapter 4 (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5774238/5/)
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Things are getting pretty tense now :smile. That "meeting" with Strut and Thud turned out rather nicely. Oh, and I loved how Mama Swimmer cracked a can o' whoopa** on those eggstealers :lol. No Kung Fu was involved, but it was still cool to see her use weapons of opportunity (rocks).
LOL! Pterano calling the fastbiters "dumba**es" got a laugh outta me :spit!
As always, I'm excited to see where this goes next :yes.
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Well this is it. The final part of the Revenge trilogy!
Why dose the third have to be the last? You do at least one more. I've got a plot already made up for you.
The Land Before Time: Revenge IV
Plot:
Two fast-biters, Screech and Thud, are seeking revenge against Littlefoot and his friends for always messing up their plans to get food. They are forced to leave Red-Claw when is mortally injured in a rockslide, and they blame Littlefoot's friends for Red-Claw's death, even though it's not their fault.
Rating:
T (PG-13) for action violence, language, and death.
Information:
Land Before Time - Rated: T - English - Adventure/Suspense - Chapters: ???? Words: ???? - Reviews: ???? - Updated: ???? - Published: ???? - Littlefoot & Ali
LBTFan 13, please respond and tell me what you think of this idea.
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The reason why I want this to be the last, and I have gotten this question from a lot of people, is because I want to try writing different stories. The Revenge stories have followed the same format the last two stories to the point where if I were to write a fourth story, it would get stale. I've tried to vary how the stories worked every single time, and I'm finding it harder and harder each time. I don't want to repeat anything from previous stories, so I have to make each story unique in its own way. So I feel that if I were to write a fourth story, I would lose my own interest in it, and I feel that others would too.
Having said that, I do like the idea that you came up with. Unfortunately, after Revenge III I will either write a different story that I already have plans for or just take a break from writing in general.
Thank you though for your thoughts.
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The reason why I want this to be the last, and I have gotten this question from a lot of people, is because I want to try writing different stories. The Revenge stories have followed the same format the last two stories to the point where if I were to write a fourth story, it would get stale.
I don't think that your stories are getting stale, I don't see how series like yours ever could. But after taking a break from writing your non-LBT: Revenge stories, you could start my idea. I do it with things I like to do, like drawing. I was getting tired of drawing and making fan art on the computer last year, and decided to go to writing fanfictions, now I do both. Maybe you could take a break, like you told me, and write your others stories till that gets boring, then write Revenge IV as a reboot of the trilogy, I'll even give you a example of how it could begin:
Two fasbiters, one blue and one green are searching for along with the gigantic Red-Claw, who says, "Damn it, can't you two hurry up, and find us some food. I'm starving, and thanks to those damn kids in the great valley, I can't even get back close to their valley. They just have to cause that landslide." Thud says, "Red-Claw, even you know for a fact, food is getting scarce everywhere is part of the mysterious beyond." They see a small unquillosaurus getting a drink of water, the slowly creep down to the pond to get a drink, and when it leasts expect it. Screech grabs it by the throat, and drags it back to Red-Claw, with Thud in tow. There, Screech gives a hard bite to it's throat killing it. Red-Claw hears someone yell, "Now!" He looks up, and sees Littlefoot standing on a ledge. Shorty who is on the other ledge, pushes a large boulder with the help of Cera and Strut. The rock falls down on to the rock barricade, which causes it to collapse. Screech and Thud see the rocks coming towards them. They stop eating, and they jump out of the way quickly, but Red-Claw, is too late, and he his hit by the landslide. It pushes him against a rock wall at the end of the canyon. Screech and Thud hear a loud crack that sounds like bones cracking, and they go running to the canyon, with Shorty, Cera and Littlefoot behind them. Once the five dinosaurs get there, the see a dead Red-Claw laying there, with blood dripping from his neck. As Cera, Littlefoot and Shorty back away slowly, Screech and Thud stare back at them, and Thud says, "You... you sick bas-----. Why the hell would you do someting like this?!" They see how mad Screech, and Thud are, so they start running as fast as they can back towards the entrance of the valley...
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A plot that is used over and over again, one after another, can get stale in the eyes of some people, such as myself. People want variation, different types of stories. Recycling the same idea works for only a short time before people start to get tired of it.
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A plot that is used over and over again, one after another, can get stale in the eyes of some people, such as myself. People want variation, different types of stories. Recycling the same idea works for only a short time before people start to get tired of it.
I kind of agree with you, but my story is a little different from the others. It features the reason why the villian(s) are seeking revenge in the story. Unlike the first two, Rinkus and Sierra's reason happened years ago, same thing with Blackclaw's, his dad was killed years ago too. Same with Ozzy, long time ago. All of them could've let it go by now, but they chose not to. This type of revenge is going to be different from the first three by the fact that Screech and Thud have know Red-Claw along time, and his death happens in the same time period as their possible revenge. I never get tired of the same idea, that's why I'm sookeen on LBTXIV coming. I never get tired of LBT, Ice Age or any of those movies.
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Nice!
Loved how Ms. Swimmer put up a good fight against the attackers!
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Just to keep you guys in the know, I haven't given up on the story. It's been hectic for me lately but I put as much time as I can into writing. I promise you that I will finish the story, it's just going to take me more time than I thought it would.
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Well after a break, I finally finished Chapter 5. It's unfortunately not as long as usual, but hopefully it makes up for length with the content. I'm hoping it comes off as emotional as I was trying to make it.
Chapter 5 (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5774238/6/The_Land_Before_Time_Revenge_III)
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^Aw, geez. That brought me to tears :cry. That's meant as a compliment, though, since stories seldom ever make me tearful. That means a story is emotionally intense in my opinion. Good work, and as always I look forward to seeing what happens next :yes.
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TOOOOPSYYYYY!!!!!
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TOOOOPSYYYYY!!!!!
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Well, I checked and read chapter (didn't know it was up) and now I know what your talking about. I was actually shocked when I read that he was died of his injuries, I never though he would be one of the characters that would die.
But I was wondering, why dose the first have some language, then second strong, then the last one some again?
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Aw, poor Mr. Threehorn. Now I wanna see that Ozzie get ripped to shreds!
I have a feeling that is what will happen to him. He betrays the fast-biters, and they tear him apart (hopefully on screen, the others deaths I didn't care if they were on screen or not, but for some reason, I'd want to read his death, but the gore is kept within the T-rating though).
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Chapter 5 actually brought tears to my eyes. Although Topsy has been rather rude to littlefoot and his family in the past, seeing him not only willing to apologize but to ask Littlefoot with his DYING breath to find and rescue his daughter... it just proved that even someone like Threehorn can be selfless.
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Well look at that. After several months of not being able to work on it, I FINALLY GOT CHAPTER 6 FINISHED!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
The apocalypse has finally happened. I FINALLY updated Revenge III :blink: :blink: :blink:
Follow the link below and let me know what you think.
I deeply apologize for the long wait. My life has become so crazy it's not funny.
Chapter 6 (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5774238/7/)
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Phew, it's about time :smile!
I really like how this part of the story turned out. It was better than I had envisioned ;). Glad to see that Redclaw is helping out Chomper and Strut.
Now to go face off with Ozzie :p.
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Wow! I like it.
Redclaw helping Chomper and Strut was a twist I did not expect.
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YAY!!! I FINALLY get to review this story. So, seems like Thud, Screech , and Redclaw might help the gang fight Ozzy and the fastbiters. That would be interesting to see. Hurry up and get that next chapter up as soon as you possibly can!
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So as an update, I have been absolutely crammed the last couple months, but I am still working on Revenge III. I am halfway through Chapter 7 and will have it up as soon as possible. I have not let this die, and hopefully you guys have not lost faith in me yet :blink:
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Don't worry, the last months have been hard for you, I fully understand. But, I do hope you update soon. But, I can wait, since if you write something when your stressed, it won't be up to it's full potential. All right. Good luck on the chapter. ;)
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Nope, I'm still here anxiously awaiting what happens next ;). In fact, I was just wondering to myself yesterday what has been going on, but I know school can be very time-consuming :yes.
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So after having severe writer's block (yay for that.....) I have Chapter 7 uploaded on to FF.net finally!
I will admit that this is probably one of my weaker chapters in this story, but after working on it for so long I felt like I did everything I could with it. I hope you guys aren't too disappointed with it as I plan to make up for it with later chapters.
Chapter 7 (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5774238/8/The_Land_Before_Time_Revenge_III)
As always, let me know what you guys think!
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I really hate that damn writer's block, too :bang! I'm just glad to see this has been updated and is going somewhere :yes. I hope Ozzy is really in for a whoopin' for sure :exactly!
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I realized I did not post my thoughts on the latest chapter yet :rolleyes. Ozzy must've really gotten on my nerves before, 'cuz I felt revved up after reading more of him :p.
Anyhoo, I was really surprised at how Cera found out about her father. I did not see that coming. My guess was she would've found out from Littlefoot or one of the others. How she really found out was a surprise indeed, and her reaction made me feel sad for her and pissed at Ozzy. That's a good thing though. If someone's writing can stir up such emotions in the readers, that means they're on the right track with grabbing the readers' attention and interest in what's happening ;).
Littlefoot taking off did not surprise me, though :p. Knowing him, and the others for that matter, they would not just sit around and wait for the adults to act.
As always, I'm excited to see what happens next and where this goes. Please do update sooner this time, or whenever you're feeling up to it. I know how writer's block can be :rolleyes.
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This fanfiction has been nominated by its author to be rated for the fanfiction awards 2011. To all the readers and fans of this fanfiction, please rate and review (http://www.gangoffive.net/index.php?topic=9467) it! :)
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So yeah, two years later and I actually have an update for this story. Who would have thought?
I actually had Chapter 8 up a while ago, but since I hadn't gotten around to being back here, I never had the chance to post a link.
Anyway, here's a link to Chapter 8 of this drawn out story.
Chapter 8 (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5774238/9/The-Land-Before-Time-Revenge-III)
As such, I am still working on this story and am determined to finish it.
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Cool :yes. I know how school and writer's block can be. I'm just glad to see you're still working on this.