The Gang of Five
The Land Before Time => LBT Fanfiction => Topic started by: Adder on July 16, 2010, 03:56:32 PM
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A few days ago I asked Serris is I could write a spinoff of Twilight Valley (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/4044080/1/Land_Before_Time_Twilight_Valley) called Twilight Valley: Blood Ruby (http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6135199/1/Twilight_Valley_Blood_Ruby).
Serris approved it, and I started writing July 14, 2010. It currently has three chapters, and I am planning on writing sixty chapters (yes, I am inspired to write 60 chapters after reading Out of the Shadows). But it might change to how ever many chapters Serris writes in Twilight Valley.
Blue-Scale, Raptix, Deimos and Excidium are the only characters that have appeared or been referenced in the story that belong to Serris.
The language in the story will be a little bit more higher than Twilght Valley. It's only said the F-word twice and by the end only three times.
I wont be posting the chapters here due the violence. They language could be censored, but if I take violence out, there'd be scenes missing.
Click on the link "Twilight Valley: Blood Ruby" to read the story. Your reviews are welcome but you don't have to review if you want to.
Here's the poster for the story too.
No I'm not yelling in this next sentence I just want it to be read before people just view the poster.
IF YOU DON'T WANT TO RUIN THE STORY,
THEN DON'T VIEW THE POSTER
(http://fc04.deviantart.net/fs70/f/2010/194/8/0/Blood_Ruby_Poster_by_ScratteLover2.png)
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Keep looking for a fourth chapter soon called, "The First Blood of War".
I've written about a fourth of it so far, and that's five paragrahs. It will be a long (and shocking) chapter.
I won't tell anyone what the shocking parts are, you'll have to read to find out once its uploaded.
This is the first long fight seen in the story, it gets violent and includes some blood in the last several paragrahs, that's all I can (and am gonna) say.
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In a half to maybe an hour and half be looking for Chapter 4: The First Blood of War on fanfiction.net.
If I feel like it, I'll post a link to chapter 4, read it carefully, this will the most shocking chapter yet.
Includes language not included in the first three chapters also. Its also more violent too, but you can probaly guess by the title.
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Its been uploaded, and will be about an hour till it comes up.
WARNING: CONTAINS STRONG LANGUAGE. SAYS EVERY PROFANITY THAT THE TWILIGHT VALLEY DINOSAURS KNOW. ALSO SOME BLOOD AND INTENSE VIOLENCE.
Review on what you think.
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Hmm. Descriptions and grammar could use a little work and the chapter flew by too quickly.
One thing, TWV dinosaurs swear but not to that extent. Yes, they know 4 profanities but they do not use them too often.
I can forgive Cera's "Cluster F-bomb" because of the intense emotions she felt and because in TWV canon, Cera has a rather foul mouth.
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Hmm. Descriptions and grammar could use a little work and the chapter flew by too quickly.
One thing, TWV dinosaurs swear but not to that extent. Yes, they know 4 profanities but they do not use them too often.
I can forgive Cera's "Cluster F-bomb" because of the intense emotions she felt and because in TWV canon, Cera has a rather foul mouth.
Don't worry. That will be that last F-word in the story.
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Never mind, its up now.
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I'm currenty working on Chapter 5, it'll be up in a few days. Not much exciting is planned to happen in it. It is currently titled: Time to Strike Back.
I really don't have much of a plot summary, but it will be mosty about Blue-Scale, Raptix, Deimos, Rime, Cera and Strut preparing to head into the mysterious beyond with a army of fast-biters. It might be a longer chapter, it might be a shorter chapter, it just depends on how much I feel writing. But it won't have much language.
- 5 d*****
- 2 b*******
- Maybe 1 a******
I also have chapter 6 to be the second half of chapter 5, that will explain any cliffhangers if there are any. It will have the least language and violence of all the chapters so far.