(Before I start I will point out this is an edited version of chapter 1.) (Without further adue I'll get started with my fanfic)
                   The Land Before Time Ali's Return
                      Chapter 1
    What do you want to do littlefoot?  I don't know cera. What do you want to do?  I don't know.  What do you want to do ducky?  I do not know.  What do you want to do petrie?  Me no know.  What do you want to do spike?  I don't know.  Meanwhile 3 miles from the great valley.  Mother is it true that we're going to the great valley?  Yes it is ali.  Suddenly 10 extermely hungry raptors attacked.  Then another raptor appeared but instead of attcaking ali's herd it defended it.  It swiftly defeated the other raptors after defeating them the raptor left ali's herd alone.  'What just happened," asked ali.  "I don't know," replied ali's mom.  3 hours later.  "Look the entrance to the valley," said ali's mom.  "Well it look like you made it," a voice of mystery said.  The herd turned around and there was the raptor that saved them.  "Who are you," asked ali's mom.  "Well you can just call me by my nickname kid is what they call me," the raptor responded. "Where do you come from," asked ali.  "I come from a place called laven valley," the raptor responded. I have never heard of such a place.  The older one said "I have been there." "Have we met before," asked the raptor. "We have a long time ago," replied the older one. "Oh yea I remember now we were the first one's there," replied the raptor.  "What happened to it," asked ali.  "I'd rather not talk about it," replied the raptor. "Is the question insdescreet," asked ali. "No the question isn't insdescreet but the answer might be," replied kid.  "Uh kid we have to enter the valley now," said ali's mom.  I understand tell littlefoots grandpa I said hi for me ok,"said the raptor. "Alright i will," replied the oldone.  Me see ali she back! "She is petrie,"asked littlefoot. Yes me see her! "Hello littlefoot, said ali.  Hello ali, replied littlefoot. "Oh there you are littlefoot Come eat your breakfast," said grandpa.   Oh it's good to see you again ali.  "It's good to see you again grandpa longneck, oh by the way the old one wants to talk to you," said ali  Ok I'll go talk to her.  Meanwhile in the land of mists.  "Hey kid you there," asked pops.  "Yes sir I am here," replied kid  "I need to talk to you," said pops.  Why do you need to talk to me? How long have we known each other?  70 years why do you ask?Well I just want to talk as we haven't talked in a long time.  I know but... "Well if it isn't the raptor duo" said itchy.  "Oh no not those two again," said kid.  "We have had enough suprises today," said pops.  It looks like we'll be full for a while dill.  "Really I don't see anything," replied dill.  The two raptors attacked taking them both out.  Meanwhile miles away.  "So we're going to the great valley bron, asked shorty.  "Yes we are,"  replied bron.  "Well let's get going, replied one of the other longnecks.  Four days later.  "Are we there yet bron," asked shorty.  "No we are not there yet shorty," said bron.  At that moment 20 hungry raptors struck.  Two more raptors appeared and they attacked the other raptors defeating them.  "We mean you no harm longnecks," said pops.  "Are we suppose to beleive that," asked bron.  "Can you just trust us," replied kid.  Why... roaring in distance.  Great twenty large sharpteeth.  "They only hunt in two's and three's," said bron.  "These are not your typical sharpteeth," replied pops.  "Yea right," replied shorty.  "Look you can either come with us or we can leave you to the other sharpteeth," said kid.  "Ok we'll come with you," said bron. so they run from the area with the larger sharpteeth hot in pursuit. (What do you think?)(expect reference to next story in next chapter.)

"I used to hold tournmants like this before elka destroyed itself they were called air tournmants," said frank.  Basicly air sports use aircraft to play football, soccer, rugby all of the sports earth played in the 20 century.  frank takes a drink of his coffee.  sighs.  "I miss those days," said frank. We don't have them anymore.

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The technology on my ships are years ahead of anyone. I designed all of my vessels when I was younger. I have had some vessels be destroyed. My ships can travel through time it self.  They can also jam power suplies to sheilds and engines, I only do that in war. Many of my vessels are no longer military. I've made most of them into sicence vessles. "There are days when I get on these sicence vessels," said frank. "Even though I have vessels that are miles in length, there'll always be a place for me in the galexy," said frank. Where I come from my ship the OSV Amala is the most advanced vessel ever built.

Are these creatures friendly?

welcome to the gang of five!

"I'll also have some more coffee". said frank I remember when I first played poker I lost. I'm a lot better at poker now.

(sorry) " I can be kind at times" said frank. Yes I know it can be fun having zero gravity in space I sometimes even have zero gravity on my quators on my starships."  replied frank.  takes out deck of cards. "You know anycard games Lt.?" asked frank.

Chapter 8 I'am workin on.