Chapter four.

ëMother, Bryan and Ryan are going east, while Rose and me are going west. It is unfair. Can’t we go east too? And Rose too? Please...’ Flora Looked at Tony and thought very hard about how she was going to make this clear to him. ëLook, Tony, we can’t go there. The Master has made us part of the upper class. Maybe they will come to the west side eventually. If they can prove they are loyal enough.’ She saw Tony’s sad face. ëDon’t be upset Tony. We will move soon, I will try to move together with Rose, so you have got someone to play with.’ He looked at her with teary eyes. ëDon’t cry, everything will be alright. You are still young and everything can change in time, you have no choice but accepting it.’ She sighted. Tony took a good look at his mother, she looked all mixed up. He felt sorry for her. Everyone thought the same about this new rule, and Tony knew that. ëYou should rest some Tony, you didn’t get much sleep last night. Just think everything will be alright.’ Tony walked to his sleeping place and lay down. Once more he looked at his mother, who smiled at him. He closed his eyes. Flora watched him. ëI don’t want to miss my friends mother.’ He has his eyes open again. ëI know my son, and I understand it very well. We should get some rest now, we will talk about it later.’ Tony closed his eyes again. He was so tired that he fell asleep in less than 10 minutes. Flora watched him sleeping and closed her eyes herself. At once everything was lightened up again, she opened her eyes. In front of her she saw something big. Scared she stood up and walked backwards. She now saw it was a big wall of logs and branches. it stretched out for a long distance. She looked around her, the only thing she saw was a nice landscape. All green and full of nice trees. In the end there was a big, clean drinking place. ëWhere am I?’ She whispered. Noticing there was no one there to answer she started to walk around to look if there were any others. Then, somewhere are the end of the large wall, she saw Tony. He looked concentrated at the wall, as if he saw something bad. She walked towards him, wondering where he was looking at. ëTony?’ she asked when she was near. He looked at her, and back to the wall again. She came and stood next to him, to see where he was looking at. In this part of the wall, there was a small hole. ëIt’s the other side, mother’ said Tony. She walked a bit more towards the wall, stooped, and tried to look through the hole. This was nothing like she was used to. The only thing she saw was dirt, and dead trees. A little muddy place must have been the place where everyone should drink. She worried, where were all the others? At once Tony ran away. She turned around to look where he was going. At once a big cracking sound behind her. Her head turned again, she saw the wall. It was falling.
A scream. Darkness. Tony woke up because he heard something, it sounded like a scream. He opened his eyes quickly and saw his mother lying on the ground, sweating, with big open eyes. ëMother? What happened, is there something wrong?’ The eyes of his mother showed fear, but she didn’t respond. After a few seconds her eyes turned normal again. ëI just had a bad dream, Tony. Get back to sleep please.’ Tony turned around and closed his eyes again. He didn’t just see black, he also saw his mother, in fear, like he has never seen her before.

A bit longer. :unsure:  Hope you can still follow it.
Is stooped a correct word/verb? xD

Edit: I've changed the end, you'd better read it again.

Plavoet is another Dutch person (but inactive now).

And kjeldo, he is active.

Quote from: Mumbling,Mar 8 2008 on  01:32 PM

I am always afraid of spelling nummers incorrect...

Heh... numbers not nummers...
Joking!

ow ow very bad xD  ok ok nummers is dutch xD

Chapter 3

Last night Tony’s mum told him about the new rule. He was worried about his friends. He hoped they would be in the same class as he. His mother told him they would move in 3 days, and that they would go west with the upper class. When he asked why they weren’t in the lower class, she said she couldn’t tell. Tony really hoped that his friends would come with him. He didn’t sleep well that night, and waited until the big circle rose above the trees again. When it did he walked to the place where he normally met his friends. Sleepy he sat down and looked at the leaves on the ground. He was not hungry at all. He felt a bit sad. ëHey!’ Someone behind him talked to him. It was Rose, his best friend.  ëHi…’ Rose got in front of him. ëHave your parents told you about the new rule?’ asked Tony quietly. Tony looked up to Rose, directly in her eyes, she looked back. He could see in her eyes that she was tired. ëYes’, she replied, ëWe have to move to the west.’ At once Tony felt a bit happier. ëHey! Me too! That’s great!’ ëYes it is, wow!’ She went sitting next to him and happily they talked about the reasons why they went to the upper class and made plans of traveling together. They didn’t notice the twins Ryan and Bryan stood behind them. ëCan we interrupt you two or are you too busy talking?’ Tony and Rose looked startled behind them. ëO, sorry, we were talking about traveling together as we have to move our stuff to the west.’ ëWe won’t go west’, Bryan said, ëour mum told us we were moving east…’ Tory looked shocked, he liked playing with the twins. ëNo, that can’t be, please tell me you are joking.’. The twins shook their heads, ëOur mum told us we were in the lower class, because we weren’t loyal enough. But it is unfair. We have only lived here for one year. We cried all night.’, said Ryan. ëYes we did indeed…’ said Bryan. Tears started to fill Tony’s eyes. He couldn’t speak, it felt like something blocked his throat. He felt very empty inside. He saw the twins in front of him, and he and the others did too, knew they won’t be able to play with or even see them in 9 days.

Please let me know if there are any spelling or grammar mistakes.  :unsure:

Edit: is = his.. thanks ClawandFang

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Hmm Chapter 2

Tony’s mother, Flora, saw her son playing with his friends. She smiled while watching them. Slowly she walked in the direction of the waterplace. She was about to drink something, when she saw a large group of dinosaurs in a big circle. They were busy arguing. She made her way through the crowd and listened what they were talking about. ëI am sorry for those of you who have no choice, I do not have one either.’ Flora said: ëI’m sorry to interrupt, but I must have missed something. What are you talking about?’ ëI will repeat it’ ,the messenger said, ëThe master has told me to let everyone know that different classes are not allowed to speak, see or do anything with each other. The master wants to divide the whole canyon in two classes, the upper and the lower class. The upper class will be living in the west, and the lower class will be living in the east. Everyone has got 10 days to move to the right place. If you don’t know where you belong you can ask me or if you want to the master.’ Flora slowly walked forward to the messenger. ëO, messenger, can you tell me in which class I and my son belong to?’ She waited as the messenger observed her. ëAre you Flora, the mother of Tony, widow and once married to Archilles?’ ëYes I am.’ she answered. He thought very hard. After a few seconds he replied: ëYou and your son belong to the upper class, don’t be afraid, it will be ok. Go, and travel to the west.’ Flora looked disappointed, probably because she was not satisfied with this new rule. ëWhat is the difference between someone from the upper and lower class?’ Flora asked. ëIt is loyalty miss, your husband gave his life while defending our master. You are part of the upper class.’ She walked back to her home while thinking about a lot of things. Once she was back she saw her son playing again, in tears she wondered how long it would last.

I'll be back in 8 hours, hope you guys have fun with reading. :unsure:
(ok it took me 12 not 20 hours to post a new one..  : )

That is true indeed. Any comment or edit is welcome, because my spelling/grammar could be VERY bad. And of course I am a human so I am used to making a lot of mistakes  : Well thanks for showing interest guys, I am think of posting the second chapter in 20 hours or so  : ..

Hehe I always make long chapters too, but I think of switching my style of writing. Just so it would be easier for the forum. And for my friend who, I think, always needed 1 hour to read one chapter of mine. Though she likes a lot to read my stories .

Thanks for the idea Chile. I'm really bad in think of those things. =P and Claw that why i didnt post it all at once  think it is too much.

Thanks for the warning.