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« on: July 03, 2012, 07:16:58 PM »
Really? No others? I'll help you on that.
FanFiction: PAST-O-RAMA
Rating: 5.2/10
Because:
Well, it wasn't what I thought it was going to be. The idea was nice of having a new creature live in the Great Valley, but it didn't have the same effect as other stories had. The characters had a different personality (especially Cera who was given a more cheery...which is a too strong of a word than what I'm looking for...disposition.).
Some of the stories were predictable like Episode 11. Yes, no one was there to explore so they go together...which was noticeable in the title, and when they explore the caves which you knew would turn out wrong like Cera slipping from a rock or the insta-death situation. (Although I did like the Cave -in idea.).
The story also lagged a bit especially in Episode 9. The whole story was basically asking the adults to find out why their kids are sleepy. The ending was great, but you can't see it until you finish the beginning.
Also, some of the episodes contained similar tropes that weren't unique to the series. For example, episode 4 contained a considerable amount of pauses in between the dialogues. Also the introductory in the first episode was another common one (except the ending of the introduction).
I liked how you reintroduced characters from previous sequels which was a major factor into influencing me to continue reading. The scripted idea is very original (in my opinion). Also, the fact you created a new plot and have new ideas must have taken some thought. A+ on that. However, I don't like how the plot is not fluent over the episodes.
I know I said a lot of negative, but I'm sure it will get better as you write. Keep up the good work.
So there you go...