Will there be another part of the story?
If so I suggest it might be easier to read when you use capital letters(either by pressing shift or caps lock, I knew people who didn't know that
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), full stops, commas and maybe you could write names with a capital letter too. This makes it easier for all of us to read
I mean, a sentence like 'do you want to meet bron shorty ruby chomper spike cera ducky petrie ' can really use some commas.