Revenge II

LBTFan13 · **on:** December 02, 2008, 12:06:58 AM

Well here it is! The start of Revenge II!!!!!!!!!!!!

Please view the prologue and give me your opinion/suggestions to make this story great!

Revenge II

The Great Valley Guardian · **Reply #1 on:** December 02, 2008, 01:55:05 AM

I gotta admit..that was intense! Short, but oh so very intense...especially considering the fact that Sierra is now dead! I wonder who this evil new sharptooth his, and what he wants with Littlefoot?

Lillefot · **Reply #2 on:** December 02, 2008, 02:54:02 AM

Quote from: The Great Valley Guardian,Dec 2 2008 on 12:55 AM

I gotta admit..that was intense! Short, but oh so very intense...especially considering the fact that Sierra is now dead! I wonder who this evil new sharptooth his, and what he wants with Littlefoot?

Top that! Short, but waaay to caught my attention! I want to read more!

Vilstrup · **Reply #3 on:** December 02, 2008, 11:43:02 AM

Interesting, very interesting...

Good start on a story, and I do especially look forward to the next chapter

Chiletrek · **Reply #4 on:** December 02, 2008, 11:43:18 AM

Hello:
That was very cool, and it looks that a kind of dark story may be coming.
Keep it up! it looks very interesting indeed.

Serris · **Reply #5 on:** December 02, 2008, 11:08:54 PM

Mmm. Nice high tension opening. Can't wait to see more!

Keep up the suspenseful storyweaving!

LBTFan13 · **Reply #6 on:** December 10, 2008, 11:51:36 PM

Chapter 1 is up! It's short, and it's not the best I've written, but at 11pm, I'm proud with it!

Tell me what you guys think! Use the link in the first post to get to the link.

Serris · **Reply #7 on:** December 10, 2008, 11:56:36 PM

Nice opening.

Hmm. Sharpteeth attacking the Great Valley. Is this a "war fic"?

Lillefot · **Reply #8 on:** December 11, 2008, 02:06:59 AM

We read, we reflect, we love this!

More more more!

Cancerian Tiger · **Reply #9 on:** December 11, 2008, 02:28:49 AM

Keep 'em coming

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LBTFan13 · **Reply #10 on:** December 11, 2008, 08:12:42 AM

@ Serris: Nope, no war here

You'll see what the attack truly means later!

@ Others: Thanks for reading! I assure you the next chapter will be much more interesting.

Chiletrek · **Reply #11 on:** December 11, 2008, 08:32:35 PM

Hello:
It was a good chapter, with a bit of a cliffhanger too. Keep it up!

LBTFan13 · **Reply #12 on:** December 16, 2008, 11:49:19 PM

Chapter 2 up! It's definitely much more interesting than the last chapter so hope you guys like it!

Read it and tell me what you think!

Serris · **Reply #13 on:** December 17, 2008, 04:17:09 PM

Oh yeah! It's heating up!

f-22 "raptor" ace · **Reply #14 on:** December 17, 2008, 04:20:13 PM

That was a good chapter!

Lillefot · **Reply #15 on:** December 17, 2008, 04:35:00 PM

The only I didn't like about this chapter is the fact that it ended to fast!

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Getting thrilling! Can't wait for more!

Great job!

The Great Valley Guardian · **Reply #16 on:** December 17, 2008, 06:29:35 PM

Things just keep getting worse, but then there's more action involved! Overall great chapter, but now I'm worried about Ruby, who is in much more danger now. I wonder what Chomper will do...oh the humanity!!!

Chiletrek · **Reply #17 on:** December 17, 2008, 10:02:38 PM

Hello:
This is getting very interesting, I look forward to read more!

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Cancerian Tiger · **Reply #18 on:** December 17, 2008, 11:00:55 PM

Very suspenseful, indeed. I wonder what happens next

. Keep 'em coming!

tempestwheel · **Reply #19 on:** December 24, 2008, 11:53:24 AM

I'll agree, this will be even more suspenseful than the original!

I wonder if the villian is one of the fast biters from 3 or the foreign sharptooth from V.