Revenge II

LBTFan13 · **Reply #60 on:** October 09, 2009, 11:24:49 AM

As I promised, here is the next chapter of Revenge II. This one certainly seems more emotional than the last few chapters so far, and Littlefoot makes a decision at the end that shocks everybody, of course it might not shock you guys though. Anyway, please follow the link below, please read and enjoy, and please let me know what you think.

Chapter 9

Cancerian Tiger · **Reply #61 on:** October 09, 2009, 12:00:49 PM

Hey, nice update! I gotta admit, Cera slapping Littlefoot was both hilarious and cute. That longneck does need some sense knocked into him now and then

. Can't wait to see where this journey goes...

Serris · **Reply #62 on:** October 12, 2009, 11:05:17 AM

Nice.

Grandma Longneck cursing out Mr. Threehorn was a bit...jarring to say the least.

Caustizer · **Reply #63 on:** October 12, 2009, 12:10:30 PM

Why does Blacktail want to get even with only Littlefoot? Didn't the entire gang particpate in Sharptooth's death?

Also, if Blacktail is the adopted son of Sharptooth, how come people recognize him on sight as a relative of the feared killer? Wouldn't he look different because he came from different parents?

Just a few questions, though I am enjoying the story.

LBTFan13 · **Reply #64 on:** October 15, 2009, 02:28:38 AM

Surprise! I managed to write another chapter for Revenge II! Here we kind of get some cleaning up around Blacktail's history. To make up for the fact that I messed up his character. Also, one of the characters makes a very important decision that......... well I'm not going to spoil it. You know what to do. Follow the link and enjoy!

Chapter 10

@ Cancerian Tiger - I thought it would be really funny if she did that. I could always picture her slapping Littlefoot like that.

@ Serris - Yes I realize Grandma Longneck would never do something like that, but at this point she is so fed up with Threehorn's stubborness. In fact, everybody is.

@ Caustizer - The answer to your first question is explained in this new chapter. It might not be worded as best as I would have liked it to be, so if you are still confused then just let me know.

As an answer to your second question, I am going to explain that later also. Unfortunately, it might be a continuation problem but I was going to put how he is recognized in an earlier chapter.

Otherwise, stories could have easily spread around the Mysterious Beyond. Also, Blacktail is so ruthless that the only dinosaur he could be related to is Sharptooth. I know that doesn't make a whole lot of sense, but your question actually caught me by surprise

Cancerian Tiger · **Reply #65 on:** October 15, 2009, 11:03:13 AM

Oh, no! Not Cera! I really hope she comes out okay

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Belmont2500 · **Reply #66 on:** October 15, 2009, 06:23:04 PM

good point Serris I don't think I could ever imagine Grandma Longneck cursing out Mr. Threehorn, Grandpa Longneck would have a better chance of doing so, but it was kind of funny.

LBTFan13 · **Reply #67 on:** October 15, 2009, 08:46:31 PM

Well at first I was going to have Grandpa Longneck cursing at Threehorn and then have Grandma stand up for him. However, like you said, Grandpa is more likely to such thing, so I wanted to do Grandma because it would have been a first for her. Like I said, she is so fed up with Threehorn at this point that it caused her to do something she wouldn't normally do.

The Great Valley Guardian · **Reply #68 on:** October 15, 2009, 10:19:32 PM

...wow. And so Cera makes the ultimate sacrifice...she really did care for Littlefoot. And it seems Chomper has quite a rebellious streak...at least while he's being held hostage anyway.

A great chapter and I can only guess at what's going to happen next.

Cancerian Tiger · **Reply #69 on:** November 06, 2009, 11:50:53 AM

Will we be seeing an update anytime soon? This cliffhanger continues to bug me

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LBTFan13 · **Reply #70 on:** November 06, 2009, 07:19:13 PM

Yes you will. Forgive me but college life here is very busy. I am working on the chapter as we speak so I hope to have it for you very soon. Thank you for sticking with me

LBTFan13 · **Reply #71 on:** November 24, 2009, 04:12:04 AM

As promised, here is an update for Revenge II. I am nearing the end of the story so the next two or three chapters will be the last. Anyway, this isn't as long as the last two chapters and I'm not sure why that is so bear with me. I hope you guys enjoy this and please let me know what you think.

Chapter 11

Cancerian Tiger · **Reply #72 on:** November 24, 2009, 08:43:28 AM

Aw, man! I despise cliffhangers. This has got me so far on edge

. I really hope Littlefoot and his pals will be okay, and hopefully so will Cera

. Thanks for the much anticipated update, and I really hope we see the next update very soon

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Oh, and I could've busted my spleen at the part where Tria gets the final word

! You've gotta love scenes where Tria tells Mr. Threehorn off

. He really should be ashamed of himself now for still acting like a total jerk. I really hope Tria changed his tune after that one

:. She should give him the silent treatment 'til he finally breaks and realizes it's not cool to be an arrogant hothead

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The Great Valley Guardian · **Reply #73 on:** November 24, 2009, 07:40:50 PM

Ohhh a cliffhanger! I like where this is going, and it seems Littlefoot has no fear, which is good as he'll need to focus in order to fight Sharptooths son. However I am rather worried that one of Littlefoots friends is going to try to interfere and get hurt. But I suppose I'l have to wait and see won't I?

SouthPawRacer · **Reply #74 on:** November 26, 2009, 09:24:29 AM

I've been reading this fic from the start, and it's absolutely excellent. I love the way you introduce more mature elements while keeping the story somewhat true to LBT conventions. Not to mention the fight scenes and dialogue are works of art.

Still, there are a couple of things that I find a little... I dunno... weird.

-Are the characters the same age as in the films? I ask this because I'm hard pressed to believe that a few juvenile dinosaurs could take on an entire group of sharpteeth and win, stomping on their heads etcetera...

-I can see the reasons behind the gang wanting to kill Blacktail (he is a rather mean dinosaur), but I feel that the backstory you have provided for him is a little too sentimental and sad. I don't know about other readers, but reading Blacktail's father-son experiences with Sharptooth, and the latter's death scene from Blacktail's point of view, actually made me feel kind of sorry for him. Of course there's no excuse for kidnapping Littlefoot's friends and threatening to kill them, but the backstory makes me feel as if he doesn't deserve to die, and the gang's animosity towards him is misplaced.
Again, what Blacktail's doing is very evil, but as a villain I don't hate him, no matter how hard I try. Rinkus and Sierra were credible bad guys, but Blacktail... Hmmm.

Anyways... I like where the story is going. Can't wait for the next chapter, keep writing...

LBTFan13 · **Reply #75 on:** November 26, 2009, 08:49:18 PM

Thanks a lot for the feedback^^! I'm having a lot of fun writing this fanfic and I'm glad you are enjoying it.

I understand why you think some of the things are a little bit weird so maybe I can shed some light on it for you.

1. I'm pretty sure the characters are a year older than from the first movie. I do realize that it would still be unlikely for them to take on sharpteeth, but like you said I wanted to add some more mature elements into LBT while keeping it true to the original material. One of the things I had visioned was that the gang was sick and tired of always running away from sharpteeth. This time when they see sharpteeth, mostly fast biters, they feel some uncontrollable adrenaline which causes them to feel able to fight them. Of course, if they were to encounter a larger sharptooth like Red Claw they would still run away, like they did in the first Revenge, but since the fast biters are closer to their size they feel more able to fight them. Hopefully that makes some sense, but if you're still a little odd I can understand.

2. With Blacktail, I wanted to make him more than just another standard villain. With Rinkus and Sierra, they are more credible as villains because you know virtually nothing about them but you hate what they do or attempt to do to Littlefoot and his friends. On the other hand, you know why Blacktail hates Littlefoot and his friends, so he's a much deeper and more developed villain. It causes the reader to be torn with whether or not to sympathize him or disregard his history with his father and hate him based on what he is doing in the present. Also, Blacktail still has some evil left in him that he hasn't shown yet, so when the next chapter comes around hopefully you will see what I mean.

Anyway, I hope this explains my reasoning behind why everything is the way it is in my story. You have any other questions you can ask me.

SouthPawRacer · **Reply #76 on:** November 27, 2009, 04:54:38 AM

Ah, I see. Thank you very much.

Cancerian Tiger · **Reply #77 on:** November 28, 2009, 01:51:02 AM

Quote from: LBTFan13,Nov 26 2009 on 07:49 PM

Also, Blacktail still has some evil left in him that he hasn't shown yet, so when the next chapter comes around hopefully you will see what I mean.

GAHHHH!

*Tosses popcorn and Pepsi meant to be munched on during the battle, makes a mad dash like this:

, and hides under the blankets*

Now I'm really officially scared for Littlefoot and the others. Baaaad Blacktail :!!

Serris · **Reply #78 on:** November 28, 2009, 01:53:14 AM

Just when Blacktail cannot get worse...

Serris · **Reply #79 on:** November 30, 2009, 03:53:58 AM

Oh yeah, can you add in another "Charizard-style seismic toss" with a flyer? Like what Sierra did to Pterano in the first story.