I know it sounds like I'm repeating myself here, but I just have to be frank, Rocky.
This story is not about Damon.
I'm not trying to be mean, but you've given Damon way too big of a role and shifted the focus of the story entirely. With Damon, you haven't made a character that fits into the plot, but a plot that fits into the character.
Damon is supposed to be a cub. A mere cub. Yet every lion in the nearby pride of Yuna is obsessed with killing him. That's just ridiculous.
And another thing: We already had an established antagonist, yet you haven't addressed that at all in your posts.
And finally, you had an entire plot planned ahead, that seems. It was entirely-Damon based, and gave no room for any of the canon chars (besides Simba) or other OCs to do anything. Really, Damon is diving into "Mary Sue" territory.
Like nick said in the all dogs topic, I believe you are a good rper, but you need to rethink how big your characters' roles are and how the plot should go.