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Chapter LXXVII

The sun disappeared faster behind the horizon than Petrie had expected. The shadows became longer and longer and even, or maybe even especially from above this was a pretty uncanny view. Petrie felt uncomfortable by the thought to have to fly back in the darkness and so he hurried and didn’t waste any time to look out for the eggeaters again. Fortunately the distance they had covered today was as the Pterosaurs flew comparatively short and so not much time had passed when Petrienfinally hovered over the slope on which still a gap yawned in the blanket of snow where the avalanche had gone down. Yet the bright circle was out of sight now, the moon stood at the darkening sky and numerable stars twinkled already there, but a slight bright shine, where the bright circle had disappeared lighted up the slope the slope still a bit so Petrie could recognize the landscape below. No new snow had fallen this day thus their tracks from the morning were still distinctively visible. He flew over the point where the traces of Cera, Ali and Chomper disjoined from those of Littlefoot and Spike and followed them further down the slope. Petrie noted that he flew instinctively lower, for the more the light diminished, the more difficult it became to recognize the tracks from above. When he reached the place where Ali’s and Chomper’s tracks turned left only the moonlight shone on the slope. But the ride Cera had left behind during her fall was broad, like those of a small avalanche, and impossible to miss, even in the darkness. Petrie followed the ride. It ended by the nearly dried up bed of a river where no snow lay anymore. Only a small stream rippled still in the middle of the riverbed and glistened in the silver moonlight. “Probably…”, thought Petrie, “…this is the same stream where the others wait for me now.” He sighed relieved. If he followed the stream, then he could at least not fly wrong in the darkness. But at the point where Cera must have landed was nobody. Petrie looked around in every direction and when he was sure that nobody else was nearby he landed. At the end of the ride was a deepening in the stony ground. There Cera must have landed, but where was she now? “Ce… Cera?” called Petrie as quietly as he could. He didn’t want that whatever might lurk in the darkness heard him. Petrie listened, but he didn’t get an answer and he had to admit that Cera, even if she was nearby could have hardly heard him. The much it displeased him, he had to call louder. Taking all his courage together Petrie fetched deep breath and called then as loud as he could: “Cera are you here anywhere?” He listened again, but again he didn’t get an answer. Instead he heard suddenly a strange scraping and rustling. Petrie didn’t ponder long. With an outcry he swung himself up into the air and flew away as fast as he could, following the glittering band of the stream.

It lasted for some minutes until the little rat at the riverbed dared to put her trembling whiskers out of her hiding place again and to sniff. Whatever had just made this row, it seemed to have disappeared.

Chapter LXXVIII

Cera was displeased. Since she had met Chomper’s parents they had hardly progressed. On the one hand it might be because many of the narrow gorges were simply impassable for the huge sharpteeth, but on the other hand Cera had to admit that her leg caused her very much trouble, even after the treatment of the sharpteeth. It would certainly last for a while until she would really be able to walk normal again. Till then she had problems to keep up with the sharpteeth’s pace and that although the sharpteeth went regardful slowly. Cera did not like just this regard anyhow. Probably these sharpteeth would take her, a threehorn for weak; a thought she could hardly bear. Shortly before dusk they had finally found the traces of Chomper, Ali and one eggeater again. Yet the sharpteeth had seemed to be overjoyed about the sight of Chomper’s track, but the eggeater’s traces had put them into sheer agitation. Cera had again earned a lot of bewildered looks when she had tried to tell the sharpteeth about the eggeaters. Cera had again begun to draw pictures into the snow and had by this occasion not confined to the eggeaters. Instead she had drawn nearly everything they had experienced since their meeting with Chomper neatly into the snow. By that she had tried to teach the sharpteeth at least the names of her friends and some important terms by pointing at the fitting pictures into the snow and say the words loudly several times. The sharpteeth at least seemed to have understood it. It was obvious that the sharpteeth were worried about Chomper as well as Cera worried about him and the others. Cera tried not to give up the hope, but all she knew was that the others had been hunted by the eggeaters. Anything must have happened, for otherwise the others would have surely send Petrie to search for her, but she hadn’t seen him during the whole day. Cera did not even know if Chomper and Ali had made to find back to the others again. They had finally when it became dark stopped at a point where the gorge through which they followed the tracks of Chomper, Ali and the eggeater broadened a bit. Cera felt very uneasy when the sharpteeth lay down on both sides around her. Maybe the sharpteeth only wanted to protect her from possible dangers and the cold wind that whistled through the gorges, but nevertheless Cera had the impression that the sharpteeth’s main intention was to prevent her from sneaking away unnoticed during the night.

Chapter LXXIX

Littlefoot looked up when he heard a quiet flapping and cracking in the branches above him. A small shadow swooped down at him from the darkness. Littlefoot uttered a quiet, surprised cry and ducked. But the shadow bounced against his nose, slid down it to the neck and clung to it so firmly that Littlefoot could hardly breathe. Some moments passed until Littlefoot understood that it was Petrie. He trembled all over and his beak chattered with fear. “My goodness Petrie!” gasped Littlefoot. “Stop it! You’re chocking me!” Petrie let go immediately and fell down; but he jumped up again at once and clung to one of Littlefoot’s legs. “What’s the matter Petrie?” asked Littlefoot alarmed and prepared for all terrible news Petrie might bring. The little flyer stopped trembling and Littlefoot stripped him with gentle force off from his leg. Then he bent his head down to him and said: “Calm down Petrie! What have you seen?” Petrie looked up to him, opened his beak but closed it again immediately without having said anything. Suddenly, in Littlefoot’s presence Petrie felt very silly, as he had, when he thought about it now, seen or heard nothing that would have founded his panic. “Nothing”, admitted Petrie low-spirited and lowered his look. Littlefoot looked at him bewildered. “What?” “Nothing at all. Petrie has seen nothing at all.” “I see”, said Littlefoot and nodded while he didn’t understand anything. “Petrie is coward!” wailed the little flyer suddenly and covered his eyes with his wings. “Me have not even seen anything. Only a noise was there in the darkness and me have flown away!” Littlefoot understood only the half, but that was enough. “You are not a coward Petrie he sad sternly. And with a more gentle voice he continued: “I guess all of us would be afraid so alone there in the darkness.” Petrie was very grateful to Littlefoot for this words, but mournful he asked: “Cera too?” Littlefoot ignored Petrie’s question and asked instead himself: “You have not seen her?” “No”, he sobbed. “Me have already said that.” “Alright  Petrie”, said Littlefoot very gentle. “Then we’ve to look for Cera tomorrow.” Littlefoot made to conceal his worries about Cera and his disappointment that Petrie had found nothing. Petrie had done really enough during the last hours. “Have you seen the eggeaters?” Petrie shook only his head and Littlefoot nodded slightly. A coughing could be heard in the darkness. Petrie, who obviously still didn’t feel completely safety jerked. “Ducky”, murmured Littlefoot quietly not to arouse the others while he lifted Petrie up on his back and carried him over to the others. “She had jumped into the stream yet and seems to have caught a bad cold.” Littlefoot took it for unnecessary to worry Petrie by telling him that Ducky had nearly drowned. “Oh, poor Ducky!” croaked Petrie while he climbed down from Littlefoot’s back and groped over to the others. “Now sleep Petrie! It was a hard day and maybe it will be similar tomorrow.” Petrie moaned and prattled anything unintelligible while he lay down aside Ducky, Spike, Ali and Chomper. Littlefoot smiled slightly and began to walk in circles to keep himself at least a bit warmer. Now and then he cast a look up to the moon to look if it was already time to wake Ali whose turn it was to keep watching next. Usually it would have been Cera’s turn. How might she be? Littlefoot was very worried about Cera although he tried to appear calm not to worry the others unnecessarily. The night was very quiet. Only now and then a cracking could be heard in the branches when a gentle breeze swept through it. It was anyhow uncanny. All beings seemed to have left this valley when it had become to cold for them. Littlefoot was glad that Ducky’s coughing interrupted the silence now and then. There it was again, a quiet whooping and rustling coughing. Littlefoot startled. This time the coughing had sounded completely different than before and it had been quieter as if Ducky had withdrawn. Littlefoot held his breath and listened into the darkness. There was the coughing again and it had become louder. The originator of the coughing, and Littlefoot was sure that it was not Ducky, approached. Littlefoot shuddered and he got a cold perspiration when he sneaked over to the others hasty and shook Ali out of her sleep. She blinked sleepy and wanted to say something, probably she wanted to protest that it was not her time to keep watching already, but Littlefoot hissed quietly, shook his head and was about to stop her mouth. Ali shove Littlefoot’s arm aside, stood up quietly and whispered into his ear: “What’s the matter?” Littlefoot didn’t need to answer, for just that moment the coughing could be heard a third time and it was distinctly more rustling than Ducky’s. It sounded really creepy. The next moment they heard somebody speak. Yet they couldn’t understand his words, but they recognized Ozzy’s voice immediately. He seemed to scold Strut. Ali cast her eyes open and bit herself on the lower lip. “It’s them!” aspirated Littlefoot. “Help me to wake the others, but quiet!” Ali nodded hasty. It was already usually difficult to wake Spike, but without making any noise it was nearly impossible. Moreover Spike snorted so loudly that Littlefoot was astonished that the eggeaters and whatever else might lurk in the dark hadn’t become aware of them for long. But when Spike finally blinked sleepy he became promptly wide-awake when he heard the voices of the eggeaters and kept completely quiet. To wake Ducky, Petrie and Chomper was far easier. Ducky clung frantically to the fern-leaf she had still wrapped around herself and Petrie clasped his own beak to prevent to from chattering and causing a noise the eggeaters could have heard. When they were finally ready to sneak away as quiet as possible they could already understand what the eggeaters said. “…needed hours until we were through that damned chasm”, coursed Ozzy. “And that although we had already reached its end. The brats have a huge lead we have to close up if they shall not escape us and there you think of sleeping?” “Sorry Ozzy”, mumbled Strut sleepy. “But don’t we have closed up their lead far enough?” “We will have closed up far enough only when we will have caught them. Remember that!” hissed Ozzy furiously and Strut fell silent not to enrage his brother even more. Littlefoot and the others made hasty steps to get on quickly, but they took care not to step on a branch or anything similar that could have betrayed them. The eggeaters kept quiet now for the big displease of Littlefoot and the others for now the two could of course concentrate to other noises, while they themselves could hear only the breathing and the steps of the eggeaters as well as the occasionally coughing of Strut. They deviated from their usual direction to avoid the eggeaters and for their big relief it seemed to work as they heard the eggeaters quieter and quieter. Littlefoot already wanted to smile confidently when he suddenly heard a noise that let his breath stop. Ducky fetched deep breath and that not voluntarily. Her face became a vexed grimace and she pressed both hands against her nose, but neither that nor Petrie and Chomper who jumped along to stop her mouth and nose could prevent it anymore. Ducky sneezed loud and audible.
Everybody held the breath and Ducky whispered hardly audible with a face conscious of guilt: “I’m sorry! I couldn’t suppress it.” They listened for the eggeaters and hoped urgently that that they hadn’t heard it. But just that moment Ozzy growled: “Damned Strut! Can’t you stop coughing and sneezing? When they’re nearby they’ll hear you!” “It wasn’t me Ozzy!” said Strut hurt. “Certainly not Strut!” snorted Ozzy angry. “Now stop it. You only want to…”, Ozzy hesitated. “It was not you? Really not?” Apparently Strut had shaken his head or otherwise assured that he hadn’t been the originator of the sneezing for Ozzy called, and he didn’t bother to be quiet anymore: “Then it was one of them! Forward Strut! We snap them!” Ozzy’s call was like a signal to all of them to run off as fast as they could. Behind themselves they heard the steps and the panting of the eggeaters. Ducky noted that she lagged behind the others and she wished to be on Spike’s, Littlefoot’s or Ali’s back. Usually she could despite her little size keep the others pace to a certain extend, but her cold made it difficult for her to breathe. Her neck throat itched terribly because of the fast breathing and several times she got fits of coughing during which she nearly had to stop. Soon her breath came only by jerks, irregular and rustling. She had the feeling to choke and felt how her legs trembled. The others had such a bug lead that they were recognizable only as shadowy figures in the darkness ahead. Ducky didn’t dare to call them. They would surely return to get her but by that they would expose themselves to big danger. Moreover she would draw the eggeater’s attention on herself if she called now loudly. But Ducky couldn’t go on anymore. Panting she stopped and looked back. Panic came over her when she recognized the figure of one eggeater in the dim light that fell through the bare branches, not far behind her. Ducky staggered some more steps and pulled the fern-leaf around herself so firmly that it impeded the breathing additionally. And very suddenly an idea struck her that could, maybe, mean the rescue. With some more steps she had arrived at the base of a big tree. There she cowered up, striped the fern-leaf from her shoulders and held it over herself so she was completely covered by the leaf. Actually she had to gasp for breath, but she forced herself to breath very calmly although a fierce stitching in the side vexed her. And when the steps of the eggeater came nearer and nearer she even made to stop breathing completely. She trembled all over and made hardly to hold the leaf still. Now everything depended on whether the eggeater had already seen her before or not. The steps became louder and louder. The eggeater came so close to her that she felt the ground vibrating below his feet. And just when Ducky wanted to jump up and run away as she was sure that eggeater had seen her and came now directly towards her hiding place, she heard how the steps retired and felt how the vibration of the ground diminished. For some more seconds Ducky held her breath until the steps of the eggeaters had died away, then she sucked in the cool night air greedy. Finally Ducky shoved the leaf aside and looked around. She was all alone. She looked around into every direction. Nowhere the figure of anybody could be seen, but for Ducky could see here in the dark forest only a few meters anyway this didn’t have to mean much. Ducky’s big relief not to know one of the eggeaters nearby gave already after a few moments room for an increasing fear. Ducky didn’t know herself what she was actually afraid of but suddenly the gloomy forest around seemed to be hostile and threatening and the longer she stood there the more creepy sounds reached her ear. Cracking and rustling as if whole hordes of eggeaters and other enemies would lurk in the darkness around. Moreover it seemed to her as if something would move in the darkness and as if this something would come nearer. With a yell she ran off, roughly in the direction in which they all had run before. While she ran she had the feeling of being pursued and she strained to run even faster. Already soon it itched again in her throat and breathing became harder for her. Ducky struggled for a while through a dense brushwood whereby she ran so fast that again and again thin branches whipped into her face and when she held her arms protecting in front of her face she got a painful scratch at one forearm. Finally she came out of the brushwood and ran on through the dark forest. Running she looked back to see if her pursuer had come nearer. But she saw nobody. Suddenly she tripped over something and fell down lengthwise. Ducky could barely soften her fall with her hands. Exhausted and breathing heavily she remained lying on the ground, rolled on her back and looked back. She had fallen over the long root of a tree that stood nearby, but she couldn’t see a pursuer. Suddenly the big disenchantment came for Ducky. Actually she hadn’t seen or heard anything she really needed to be afraid of. The being alone in this dark forest had along with the usual sounds of the night and the wind already been enough to put her in panic. Ducky was a little bit ashamed, but when she looked around in every direction she couldn’t deny yet that everything here appeared to be very uncanny. Not to make herself crazy again she didn’t attend to it anymore. The cold night air let her shiver and she wanted to wrap the leaf around her shoulders again. It was not there anymore. She must have lost it during the flight. With a sigh Ducky looked around and tried to orientate, but she had not the slightest idea where she was and in which direction she had to go. As she had no better idea and didn’t want to stand still like being paralyzed she simply went on into the direction in which she had run at last. Ducky had gone only a few steps when a well-known let her bloods freeze in her veins. “Strut where are you?” It was the voice of Ozzy the eggeater and it came not only from the direction in which she ran, but seemed also to be very near. Ducky cast her mouth open as if she wanted to cry out but she didn’t do that. One second she was motionless, then she jerked round on the spot and rushed into the opposite direction than before. “I’m here Ozzy!” Ducky’s heart stopped. Strut’s answer came also directly from ahead and from the nearest nearness. She was exactly between the two eggeaters who approached from both sides. Sometimes when the danger is the biggest you rescue yourself without pondering. Still thinking of the leaf she had lost and that would have concealed her now her feet carried Ducky already with long steps to the trunk of a low tree that stood nearby and between whose roots some of the broad leafed plants grew that were not harmed by the coldness. With one leap Ducky had disappeared behind them. There she heard already the steps of one of the eggeaters. Once more an icy fright stroke Ducky when it came to her mind that the eggeaters could find her tracks. But she became soon aware that this worry was nonsensically for firstly there lay snow only so isolated on the ground of the forest below the dense branches of the trees that she couldn’t have left a track especially as she had avoided the snowy spots not to get so cold feet, and secondly her traces would have hardly been recognizable at night in the darkness of this forest. “Ah Strut there you are!” Ozzy’s voice sounded from a short distance. Ducky dared very carefully to peek out between the leaves. In front of her, only a short distance away stood Strut and a moment later Ducky discovered Ozzy who approached with hasty steps. “You haven’t gotten them?” asked Ozzy and Ducky could recognize that Strut shook his head. For an instant it looked as if Ozzy would get a fit of rage, but then he nodded only. “Well, we won’t find them again soon.”
He sighed. Ducky would have liked to utter a sigh of relief, but she was too afraid to betray herself by doing that. So the others had escaped the eggeaters. “I had hoped to surprise them sleeping”, Ozzy continued oppressed. “But at least we’ve covered their lead and they can’t walk on during the whole night. Any time they’ve to sleep too. Tomorrow Strut we’ll catch up with them and then…” Even in the darkness Ducky believed to see Ozzy’s teeth flashing in a malicious grinning. “But now we make a break. You keep watching first!” Ducky believed to hear Strut moaning quietly, but he didn’t dare to complain. Ozzy lay down on the ground and already after a few instants he began to snort audibly. Ducky’s interior seemed to contract. The eggeaters would spend the whole night here and one of them would always watch. She had no chance to come away undiscovered. But if the stayed here during the whole night, would she be able to catch up with the others, who probably rested too anywhere now, tomorrow? Or did they try to walk all through the night? Maybe they still fled. If they had already noted her missing at all? Of what would happen if the eggeaters would discover her in her hiding place Ducky preferred not to think. Suddenly she had the feeling of having to sneeze again. She pressed both hands in front of her nose and didn’t know if she should breathe deeply or stop her breath. If she sneezed now, then she could be sure to be discovered. But this time Ducky was lucky. The tickling in her nose passed and moreover Strut coughed several times so loudly that it was questionable if he would have heard Ducky’s sneezing at all. She stopped watching the eggeater and creped deeper below the leaves to be saver from discovery.


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Yay the next chapter is up :)

I sure hope Ducky will be okay. -Offers Ducky a cough drop-

I cant wait to read the next chapter :)


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Here comes the next chapter with another picture (excuse if the chapter is a bit corny and Ducky is undersized in that picture ;)):


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Chapter LXXX

Strut began to walk in circles not to fall simply asleep with weariness. Soon he didn’t know anymore how many circles he had already walked, but at all events he had become dizzy of it. He was very hungry and nearly regretted that he had let the leafeaters escape today. If Ozzy would ever learn of that, then Strut didn’t want to know what he would do with him. By the memory of the leafeaters a thought struck Strut suddenly. He had already noticed that there was still green stuff here in the valley. Yet it was very sparsely sown, but he was so hungry that he was glad about every bite he could get. Ozzy slept and wouldn’t notice it. But on the other hand, what if Ozzy would wake up while he would seek for green stuff in the surroundings? He would get huge aggravation if he wouldn’t continue watching. And then Strut suddenly discovered some broadleaved plants between the roots of a nearby tree. “Great!” he thought. “Then I don’t even have to go away at all.” And he went with long steps over to the plant whose leaves trembled in the wind. Strut thought that this was a bit strange for there was no wind blowing at all, but he didn’t want to loose time with so useless thoughts. So he went simply over, bent down and plucked off some of the leaves. Something jumped up with a huge leap, as soon as he had touched the leaves and tried to escape. But although Strut didn’t dislike green stuff he had still preserved the swift reflexes of an eggeater and with a quick as lightning snatch he had caught the tiny, fiercely struggling something and clasped it so firmly in his fist that it could neither stir nor cry. Carefully Strut loosed his grip a bit to take a look at what he had caught. Dismayed he recognized that it was Ducky, the tiny swimmer he had caught once before. She fetched deep breath, for she hadn’t gotten breath in his firm grip and then she cast her mouth open to cry. Hasty Strut closed his grip again so only a suffocated sound was audible that had surely not reached Ozzy’s ears. Strut loosened his grip again not to squeeze Ducky to death, but still pressed his hand so firmly against her mouth that Ducky couldn’t utter a sound. Strut pondered feverishly. Ducky was surely a delicious mouthful and he was very hungry. If he would wake Ozzy and presented him his prey, then he would maybe be placated a bit for he was in a markedly miserable mood and pretty displeased with him. But it was Ducky, not any saurian. Oh, if only it would have been any of the other leafeaterkids, he would have had no scruple. But Ducky…
He had spoken with her and it had been her who had saved him when he had nearly fallen down the canyon. The others of the leafeaters would have maybe simply gone on. But hadn’t he let her and the others escape already once before? They were quits! But still…
Strut moaned, not only because of his conscientious doubt, but also because Ducky had made to bit firmly into his hand. He clinched his fist firmly. Her bite slackened and she stopped struggling in his hand. Tomorrow Ozzy and he would catch up with the leafeater children anyway, so what difference did it make what he would do now? At the latest tomorrow Ducky would be caught again anyway and if he would let her go again now, then he really wouldn’t have to have a bad conscience tomorrow. With a swift turn he turned away from the resting place and ran with wide steps some distance into the forest, in the direction Ozzy and he had run before until they had stopped. When he was sure to be out of earshot of the resting place he stopped and slackened his grip again. Internally he had prepared for one of Ducky’s shrill screams, but she kept silent. Amazed Strut looked at her. Ducky didn’t stir and her head had dropped forward. Strut’s hand began to tremble and Ducky’s head oscillated unsteady to and fro. Should he have closed his fist too firmly? Strut lay Ducky on the ground hoping that Ducky simulated to flee then as soon as he let her loose. But Ducky didn’t jump up and tried to run away. She simply remained lying; her eyes were closed. And suddenly something came over Strut he had never felt before. He wouldn’t have eaten Ducky, neither today, nor tomorrow nor at any other time and he would have tried to protect her from his brother. Ducky simply didn’t deserve to die; she was too good therefore. And now he had killed her himself. He nearly hadn’t known Ducky, exchanged only a few words with her but still he had liked her more than he had known so far. Strut liked his brother Ozzy very much although he scolded him nearly uninterrupted, gave him the fault for everything and simply despised him for his inclination to eat green stuff now and then. Still not even Ozzy could conceal always that he liked Strut anyhow too, and although Strut bewared of directing Ozzy to that, Ozzy made now and then notes in which he betrayed that. But Ducky had been completely different. He couldn’t express in words himself why he liked Ducky so much. What should he do? He had to hide Ducky, otherwise Ozzy would find and eat her tomorrow. But why actually not? He had caught and killed Ducky himself. She was his pray and now where she was already dead anyway it made no difference anymore whether he would eat her or not, apart from that he would finally once be full again if he did it.
He couldn’t do it. Vainly the instincts of a raptor tried to carry through by him. The thought of eating Ducky made him sick. He wanted to bring her in safety, hide her from Ozzy and might it be ever so senseless. Carefully he took Ducky in both hands. When he saw her face, her eyes closed as if to sleep and also the mouth completely expressionless, there the sight blurred suddenly in front of his eyes. Now he could weep. Ozzy was not nearby to reprove him therefore. A big tear ran down Strut’s nose and dropped on Ducky’s face since he had bent over her. Ducky twitched when the tear hit her and she mumbled without opening her eyes: “Ah, the water is not cold anymore. No, no, no! How lovely, then I can go swimming! Yep, yep, yep!” Strut could barely suppress a shout of joy that would have maybe reached Ozzy’s ears. He shook Ducky carefully and stroked her cheek gently with one finger. Ducky opened her eyes and looked around disconcerted, apparently she had dreamed anything nice so the waking up was a pretty disillusion for her. When she saw Strut’s face above herself she cast her mouth open as if she wanted to cry, but uttered nothing and seemed to be about to faint again. Strut shook Ducky slightly to keep her awake, so she became pretty dizzy and he said again and again enthusiastically: “You life! You life! You still life!” And with a sudden grinning he added: “Yep, yep, yep!” Now Ducky was far to amazed to faint. The eggeater’s behavior was a single big riddle to her, but it also took away nearly all of her fear. Nevertheless she didn’t dear to speak until the eggeater himself addressed her and answered her most important question immediately: “I won’t hurt you! You don’t have to be afraid!” “Where is your brother?”
“Over there.” Strut pointed back over his shoulder. “He’s sleeping. Are you alright? I thought already that you would be…” Ducky shook her head. Not only that this eggeater wasn’t going to hurt her, he even seemed to be sincerely worried about her. “It was only the fright”, she said. “Your brother”, said Ducky. “If he finds me…” “You must flee!” Strut interrupted her determinedly. The imagination that Ozzy could find her, maybe even find out that he helped her was terrible. “Where are the others?” asked Ducky to know in which direction she should flee. Strut didn’t answer and didn’t look at her. “I mean my friends”, insisted Ducky, who didn’t understand what was the matter with the eggeater. “In which direction should they be?” Strut didn’t answer. “You have not caught them!?” cried Ducky suddenly. “Oh no, no, no, no, no!” And she seemed to be about to burst into tears. Strut calmed her hasty: “We haven’t caught them! Haven’t you heard us talking before?” Ducky remembered too now that she had eavesdropped herself that the eggeaters hadn’t caught her friends. “They should be anywhere this way”, said Strut and made a far-reaching movement in one direction with his arm. “At least that’s what I think. But Ducky…”, Strut hesitated for a moment and Ducky looked at him asking. “…don’t go to them!” Strut finished his sentence with a nearly imploring voice. “What?!” asked Ducky, for who Strut’s request was probably the most impossible on the world, frightened. It was visibly unpleasant for Strut to speak on, but he continued nevertheless without looking at Ducky: “Tomorrow we’ll catch up with your friends. They can’t escape us any longer. Tonight we nearly caught them, but even if they escaped us once more, tomorrow we’ll catch up with them. We are faster than you are, and there is no labyrinth of rocks in front of us anymore in which you can hide.” Ducky looked at Strut with big, dark eyes but she didn’t answer. He said the truth. “If you are with your friends tomorrow, then neither I nor anybody else can rescue you once more.” Strut gulped. “Ozzy is very furious.” Ducky breathed deeply. This eggeater, she felt that, was really sincere about her. But what he requested was completely impossible. Ducky shook her head. “No!” she said and shook her head again. “Oh no, no, no, no, no! I will go to them! I must go to them! Oh yes I must!” “Why?” asked Strut with deeply grieved voice. “They can’t escape us! If you go to them, then you are lost too!” Ducky kept quiet.
“Do you want to die?” asked Strut and he sounded nearly angry. How should he save this swimmer if she seemed so keen on not being saved. Ducky shook her head. “Of course not, no, no, no! But they are my friends, they are! And if you catch them and I would have to life knowing I did not do anything that might have saved them, to survive myself… Oh no, no, no!” Ducky fell silent and looked down. Strut fell silent too and for a long while nothing could be heard apart from the usual sounds of the nightly forest which had frightened Ducky so much before but that were in a strange way calming now. At last Strut sighed and shook his head slightly, but when he spoke then his voice sounded not only sad, but almost reverently. There was a kind of melancholy enthusiasm in his voice. “You want to scarify yourself for your friends? Die together with them?” Ducky shook her head again. “No I do not want that. But what makes you actually so sure that you’ll really catch us tomorrow? So far we have always outwitted you!" Strut looked at Ducky, who managed something like a sardonic grin, disconcerted. He didn’t really know if he should laugh about Ducky’s words and finally he tried to look offended, but he didn’t make that either. From where the little swimmer took her optimism was beyond him.


“Why are you doing that?” asked Strut again sadly, but this time she didn’t answer but only smiled slightly tired and shrugged her shoulders. “Do you never do anything without really knowing why?” Strut shook his head. “Then tell me why you help me!” Strut opened his mouth, but he couldn’t think of an answer. He shrugged only with his shoulders and when he noticed how similar his “answer” was to Ducky’s he put on a broad grinning that had certainly only few likeness with Ducky’s smiling. Ducky cast a look up and recognized for her relief through the sparsely leafy branches of the trees that the sky was still completely dark. Nevertheless she had to hurry to reach her friends before dawn. “I have to go now, oh yes, I have to!” said Ducky and looked up to Strut. He answered with gloomy mine: “Good luck!” “For you too!” answered Ducky and she felt pretty silly. Sure enough Strut was not the one in need of luck at the moment. “Thanks for everything said Ducky, and with that she turned round and disappeared in the darkness in the direction in which Strut supposed her friends to be. Strut sighed deeply, turned round then too and returned to the resting place where Ozzy still slept sound and profound.


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It not cheesy, nope nope nope! Again, i cant wait to read more :)


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Chapter LXXXI

Ali startled when she perceived a quiet cracking and rustling in the undergrowth and she made ready to wake the others immediately if the originator of the noises should turn out to be dangerous. Since their flight, that had led them up to the nearness of the edge of the forest at the end of the valley Ali had kept watching while the others had fallen into and outermost unsound sleep. Their spirits were very low for, yet they had escaped the eggeaters, but first here they had noted tat Ducky was missing. After Cera of whom they still had no idea what had happened to her, Ducky was now already the second of them to be lost. They had all been pretty exhausted and have had no idea what they could do. If they would have run back they wouldn’t have maybe run directly into the eggeaters and moreover such a search would have had a very low chance to succeed since they would have not even been able to call Ducky in the dense forest without calling the attention of the eggeaters on themselves so they had decided to rest, on the one hand as they really needed a brake urgently and on the other hand not to distance to far from Ducky so she wouldn’t be able to beat her way to them easier in the case that the eggeaters hadn’t caught her and of that they didn’t want to think at all. Ali uttered a sigh of relief when she heard the well known coughing. So it was Ducky who made her way through the undergrowth, pretty exhausted and breathing heavily. Probably the others had only dozed or at least they had slept very unsound, for the actually not very loud coughing of Ducky was enough to startle all of them, even Spike. Ducky sighed relieved when she stepped forth from the undergrowth and saw her friends. Exhausted she sat down on the ground where she just stood to stop for breath. But the others didn’t let her any time for that anymore. Immediately they surrounded Ducky and snowed her under with welcomes and questions. With a tired movement of her hand Ducky made to make them silent for a moment and when they started to ask again they didn’t talk all at the same time at least. “My goodness Ducky, am I glad that you are here!” called Littlefoot. “How have you escaped the eggeaters?” Ducky shook her head and made a disparaging movement with her hand. “I am not! Oh no, no, no! We are not!” The others looked pretty bewildered. “What do you mean Ducky?” asked Ali frowning. “Strut has caught me, yes, he has!” “What?” Chomper looked at Ducky with bulging eyes. “And he has let you escape again?” Ali and Chomper had meanwhile learned from the others what had happened during the flight at the canyon. Chomper had hardly been able to believe that an eggeater had let his prey escape. Ducky nodded. “Yes, he has, he has!” “What about the other one; those with the scratched nose? What was his name?” asked Ali. “Ozzy!” Littlefoot answered Ali’s second question and then he repeated the first: “What about him?” Ducky fetched deep breath, for so far she had hardly found an occasion to regain her breath; the she answered: “He knows nothing of that of course, no, no. He has slept while Strut had to watch. He has! I don’t want to know what he would do with poor Strut if he would ever find that out.” “I can hardly believe it!” said Littlefoot shaking his head. “The eggeater had really caught you and has let you go again?” Ducky nodded and began to tell more detailed what she had experienced. She also repeated the talk she had had with Strut partly literally and tried to make plain to the others by that in what a danger they were. Littlefoot bit on his lower lip when Ducky had finished. For a while he kept quiet just like everybody else, then he said: “When the eggeaters start their pursuit again tomorrow, then we have to be as far away as possible! Down here we have no chance to escape them anyhow. We must come out of the valley and into the mountains. Maybe we can shake them off there again.” “You do really think so Littlefoot?” Petrie inquired doubting and resigned. “At least we have to try it or do you have a better idea?” the little flyer shook his head. “And moreover, who knows…” Littlefoot looked suddenly very thoughtful. “What do you mean?” asked Ducky. “Maybe…”, began Littlefoot, “…we have still a chance even when the eggeaters catch up with us.” “What of do you think?” asked Ali. “You have heard what Ducky has said. If Ozzy would find out that Strut has helped us and if we would say it to him just when the two have caught up with us, then…” “Oh no, no, no, no, no!” Ducky jumped up and shook her forefinger angrily against Littlefoot. “Strut has helped me, helped us very much. He has! And we won’t betray him to his brother! No, no, no!” Ducky sounded really indignant. “But if it is the only possibility for us to divert the eggeaters to escape them?” asked Ali, but before Ducky could reply anything Littlefoot shook his head himself and said: “No, Ducky is right! It wouldn’t be fair to do that!” “Alright ”, said Chomper. “But then we should hurry now and go on to get a bigger lead before the eggeaters.” Everybody nodded agreeing although they all felt far too tired to walk on now. “And Cera?” asked Petrie sadly. Littlefoot bit himself on the lower lip again and said then: “ We haven’t heard or seen anything of her since she has fallen down the slope. But you have not found her there. So Cera must have gotten over the precipice.” Littlefoot gulped. “We can’t go back now to search for her, otherwise we’ll run directly into the eggeaters, but…”, he hesitated for a moment, “…as it looks I could imagine that she is better then we are.” “I hope so!” said Ali nodding. “I fear at the moment we really can’t do the slightest for her”, said Littlefoot and everybody had to see that it was really as he said. “We have to hurry!” said Chomper with a look to the sky at whose eastern horizon a bright stripe announced the impending dawn. Littlefoot nodded. “Let’s go!” And he set in motion.

Chapter LXXXII

A gentle push woke Cera far too early for her taste and she kept her eyes closed. But the moment after she was pushed anew, yet still gentle, but already with a perceptible impatience. Cera opened her eyes and startled back with an outcry. She had remembered to everything that had happened yesterday, also to Chomper’s parents while she had kept her eyes closed, but even if you were prepared for it the sight of a sharptooth was enough to give a dreadful scare. And Cera had at least not been prepared to have the huge eye of one of the two sharpteeth so close in front of herself. It was still pitch dark and in the darkness the huge silhouette of the sharptooth-head with the two eyes that seemed to glow in the darkness appeared to be even uncannier. Cera moaned painfully, for by the instinctively startling back from the sharptooth she had forgotten her injured leg and burdened it so much that a burning pain flashed up from her knee. Cera closed her eyes firmly and fought against the tears as good as she could, and that she couldn’t stop them completely made her furious. “What are you doing?” she bawled out at the sharptooth angrily and in the same moment she was frightened about her own boldness. Yet the sharptooth could not understand her words, but her tone had been unmistakable. For Cera’s relief the sharptooth seemed to take her outburst with humour. He grinned broad, just like Chomper did some times whereby the sight of the teeth flashing in the moonlight sent a cold shudder down Cera’s back. Cera cast a doubting look up to the star-sky, but the second sharptooth came along and snarled anything. The other sharptooth roared an answer and Cera understood that the first sharptooth urged to march off. While she set in motion, taking very much care to burden her injured leg as less as possible, she wondered if sharpteeth always got up so early and slept always so short. But then she remembered Chomper. He didn’t sleep more or less than any of them. Probably the worry about Chomper was the only reason for the sudden haste of the sharpteeth and that remembered Cera anyhow very much to her own father. Moreover she wanted to know herself, the tired she was what has happened with the others, eventually she knew nothing but that the eggeaters had pursued them and that was reason enough to be worried. So Cera followed Ali’s and Chomper’s tracks and the sharpteeth followed her. They hadn’t gone far when they came to a place where a deep crack gapped to their left. On the other side of the crack Cera could recognize a rocky ledge that looked similar to those on which she herself and the sharpteeth walked at the moment, indistinctly in the moonlight. The sharpteeth didn’t seem to like the way and Cera couldn’t take it amiss, for the way was hardly broad enough to offer their feet abreast enough room and the crack to their left was so deep that a fall down there would have been fatal, even for a grownup sharptooth. But for the relief of the sharpteeth the crack became more and more narrow and finally ended whereby the rocky ledges from both sides of the crack ran together to one single broader way to whose sides high rocky walls rose. Cera’s relief when they reached the point where the ways ran together became the bigger as that from the other ledge the tracks of Littlefoot and Spike joined Ali’s and Chomper’s. There were no traces of Ducky and Petrie, but the both had probably ridden on the back of Littlefoot and Spike or, concerning Petrie, flown. Apparently Ali and Chomper had really met the others here for the tracks led criss-cross at the point where the rocky ledges ran together as if they had stayed here for a longer time. But what worried Cera and Chomper’s parents were not only the tracks of the eggeaters, that traversed the point too, coming from the ledge they had used as a way themselves, but above all the fact that the tracks of Chomper, Ali, Littlefoot and Spike looked as if they had run. Their footprints lay wide apart from each other as if they had run with swift and long steps. Also from the tracks of the eggeaters you could conclude that the both had run, but not first from the point where the rocky ledges united, but already for a longer time. Had the eggeaters caught up with the others and had a race for life and death started here? Cera ignored the pains in her leg as well as she could and ran on as fast as possible and the sharpteeth followed her hasty. Cera could read the highest apprehension in their faces as distinctly as from a leafeater’s face. For the first time Cera thought of what would be if really something had befallen the others. This imagination in itself was already horrible enough, but Cera realized that her own life would depend completely on the temper of Chomper’s parents if the eggeaters should have caught him. Suddenly Cera stopped abruptly and uttered a surprised shout. When the sharpteeth approached hasty and bent down to her to see the reason for her surprise Cera’s heart was in her mouth and she was sure that her life was not worth a fig anymore. The tracks of Littlefoot, Ali and Spike led into a very narrow side chasm, far to narrow for Chomper’s parents as Cera recognized with one look. For a moment she thought of fleeing into the side chasm with some quick leaps not to have to feel the wrath of Chomper’s parents. But firstly one of Chomper’s parents was between Cera and the side chasm and secondly she would have hardly been able to make some quick leaps with her injured leg. What terrified Cera so much and what had to cause the rage of Chomper’s parents was the fact that Chomper’s tracks didn’t disappear in the side chasm but led straight on. Had Littlefoot, Ali, Spike, Ducky and Petrie quarrelled, so he had continued his way alone? Or had they send him in another direction since they knew that the eggeater with the scratched nose, who was a kind of leader, was especially after him? One possibility sounded more unlikely than the other. Littlefoot and also the others would have never allowed that Chomper exposed himself to such a danger. Cera wouldn’t have believed it if she wouldn’t have seen it with her own eyes. She became really sick with angst. And the wild snarling and growling that had begun between Chomper’s parents let Cera’s worst fears become nearly certainty. The longer Cera looked on the snow that was only slightly enlightened by the moonlight the more details she recognized and these details meant nothing good. The tracks of the eggeaters led past the side chasm, thus followed Chomper’s traces, what had to intensify the impression of Chomper’s parents that their son had been send in a different direction as a bait by the leafeaters. But what worried Cera even more was the fact that the tracks of the eggeaters returned from the direction where Chomper’s traces led and disappeared in the chasm. That could only mean that the eggeaters had gotten Chomper and started the pursuit of the others after that. Cera stopped resigned to think over her chances of survival in view of the sharpteeth. Suddenly one of the sharpteeth bent forward and Cera avoided it as well as she could. But the sharptooth didn’t seem to be interested in Cera, but eyed the footprints sceptically and growled anything. After that the other sharptooth bent down to the traces too. Cera pondered for an instant if she should flee in the side chasm while the sharpteeth were engaged with the traces. But anything kept her back. The sharpteeth seemed to debate intensively about the traces and one of them gesticulated fiercely with his tow short arms. Instinctively Cera approached and tried to understand what they were talking about. The one sharptooth seemed to measure the distance between Chomper’s footprints. Cera looked carefully and suddenly she believed to understand. The distance between the two footprints was unusually long. Even if Chomper would have jumped Cera could hardly imagine that he was able to make such a long leap. Also the snow would have had to be especially stamped down in the next footprint if Chomper would have jumped, but the contrary seemed to take place. Cera got new hope suddenly, for she had recognized too what Chomper’s parents seemed to talk about. The track of Chomper looked convincing at the first sight, but the longer Cera looked the surer she became that the track was not real. It was a fraud, a wrong track! Cera gathered all her courage and called the attention of Chomper’s parents on herself again. She went to one of the footprints of which she thought that it was not real and wiped with one of her hooves through it. The snow was loose and powdery and appeared absolutely not as if a dinosaur of Chomper’s weight had stood on it recently. After that Cera went, becoming more confident with every second pas Chomper’s parents to one of the footprints she took for real. The snow in that footprint was fast and when Cera wiped through it with one of her hooves she could scratch the snow from the ground only with some effort. The snow had pasted and it was obviously that the originator of this footprint had to be far heavier than those of the other one. For Cera’s big relief Chomper’s parents seemed to understand too what Cera wanted to say them and both bent down to the track again and sniffed at them whereupon they began again a chat consisting of snarling and growling. Cera sniffed at the tracks too. Her sense organs were probably not as developed as those of the grownup sharpteeth, but she believed to perceive a difference between the tracks. Finally Cera discovered even a print of one of Petrie’s claw armed feet in one of the footprints, so Cera believed to understand how the wrong track had been made. Petrie had lain out the track carefully and apart form some details Petrie hadn’t been able to imitate, the trace was perfect. Apart from the first footprint after Chomper’s real track the distances between the footprints were correct too. They were surely real enough to deceive one or two eggeaters who pursued their victims and thus wouldn’t take the time to examine the track carefully. Cera uttered a sigh of relief for the danger of Chomper’s parents seemed to be turned away for the moment. The both continued talking with roaring, hissing and growling and it were above all their looks that let Cera realize that the matter was the question in which direction they should go on. The side chasm through which all, including Chomper, had obviously gone, was far too narrow for Chomper’s parents. So they could only either follow the wrong track, in a direction where Chomper and the others were probably not, or they could go back and seek a different way. Chomper’s parents agreed pretty fast to follow the wrong track. To go back would have apart from that it would have had probably no sense, cost too much time. Cera noted a bit affected that Chomper’s parents despite of everything didn’t seem to be completely convinced that the track was really wrong. At all events they didn’t let Cera lead the way anymore, but took her between them so every possible attempt to escape would be doomed to fail beforehand. Cera believed to notice that the sky began to enlighten when the wrong track ended. Whatever had happened here, it was impossible to conclude it completely from the tracks. The wrong track ended here and the tracks of the eggeaters turned back and led now into the opposite direction than before. Only few steps ahead gapped the exit of a narrow side chasm in the rocky wall. It had to be the exit of those side chasm through which Chomper, Littlefoot, Ali, Spike and most likely also Ducky had gone for their tracks, apart from Ducky’s led out of the chasm and further along the way on which Cera and Chomper’s parents had followed the wrong track so far. But out of the side chasm led also the tracks of the eggeaters and prints in the snow testified of that one of the eggeaters had thrown himself down here and had hammered with his fists on the ground. After that the eggeaters seemed to have resumed the pursuit. Yet Cera and Chomper’s parents couldn’t conclude everything that had happened here, but now they had a real track again to follow and especially the reappear of Chomper’s real track seemed to dispel the mistrust Chomper’s parents seemed to have had against Cera temporary. At all events she might go ahead again and one of the sharpteeth nudged Cera with his nose what was surely meant friendly but let Cera shiver a bit. They went straight on and the way began to slope steeper and steeper what was pretty troublesome for Cera with her injured leg. But already after a short time they had reached the highest point of the gap, where the labyrinth of rocks ended. An exceedingly beautiful sight presented to them. Here where the rocks dispersed they could first time see the whole sky and the sunrise had colored the sky there in innumerable red-, orange-, yellow- and violet tones while the sky was still pitch black and starry in the west and dark blue in the zenith. Also the big nearly round silver circle of the moon stood still on the sky. The snow that covered the valley and the forest in front of them glittered in the light of the beginning day. The view remembered Cera very much to the morning when they had left the Great Valley. But Cera and Chomper’s parents didn’t have the time to enjoy the sight long. They had to reach Chomper, Littlefoot, Ali, Ducky, Petrie and Spike before the eggeaters, assuming that they hadn’t already caught up with them for a long time. Cera began to hobble down the slope into the valley, but her leg caused a lot of trouble for her. She progressed only slowly. There one of the sharpteeth shook his head and snarled something to the other one. Then they rushed after Cera and before she could even react one of them had grasped her with the teeth. Cera shrieked, struggled and tried to free from the sharptooth’s bite. What had she done wrong? Why wanted Chomper’s parents eat her now? Where they simply so hungry? Cera noticed in her panic that the sharptooth hadn’t bitten really only when the sharptooth had set her down on the other sharptooth’s back. A bit dumbfounded and with tearing hard beat Cera starred at the sharptooth who had set her on the back of the other. The sharptooth grinned, but it lasted long until Cera had calmed a bit and her panic gave way for insulted pride. But in spite of everything Cera had to admit that she progressed on the back of a running sharptooth far faster than on foot with an injured leg. But she had to cling very strong not to fall down from the back of the sharptooth by the enormous speed.


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Once again, another great chapter :) Cant wait to read more :)


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A Deep and impassioned piece of work - I can't believe its been 5 years since you began writing it.


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I'm sorry I continuously forget posting the next chapters in this thread. Thanks to you Pangea for reminding me :yes
You’re very welcome. :smile
Sorry that I haven’t been posting long enough to have mentioned this earlier, but I love the concept of Cera being separated from the others and forced to travel with Chomper’s parents.
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Cera noticed in her panic that the sharptooth hadn’t bitten really only when the sharptooth had set her down on the other sharptooth’s back. A bit dumbfounded and with tearing hard beat Cera starred at the sharptooth who had set her on the back of the other. The sharptooth grinned, but it lasted long until Cera had calmed a bit and her panic gave way for insulted pride.
I can just imagine the change in Cera’s expression if this were a movie. :lol It’s such a Cera-like reaction.
One question, though:
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Had the eggeaters cauhere she heard alrears here and had a life and death pursuit begun here?
What exactly does this mean?  :confused I think a slight bit of editing may be in order, if you don’t mind me saying. (If and when you do edit it, I will obligingly delete this part of the post.)



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Had the eggeaters cauhere she heard alrears here and had a life and death pursuit begun here?
Oh my goodness :lol
Really, I always say for good reason that my English was rather... peculiar by the time I translated it, but when I actually have to look up the German original text (where by the way I found another spelling mistake) to make sure what on earth I may have meant with that translation things become really creepy ;)
If I ever was to edit the translation (which I admit I kind of lack the enthusiasm to) I suppose nine out of ten sentences would be changed.

I changed the sentence to:
"Had the eggeaters caught up with the others and had a race for life and death started here?"

But I prey you don't delete this part from your post Pangaea, it was a helpful feedback and there is no need to strike it from the history books once it was put into effect ;)
By the way, I received an email from you without any word in it, was it sent accidentally?

Here come the next two chapters:


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Chapter LXXXIII

“Wake up Strut! Today we’ll get them!” Strut blinked sleepy and looked up to the dawning sky. He could have continued sleeping for long, but he didn’t want to complain for at least Ozzy had watched voluntarily and Strut had not even had to awake him. Ozzy had woken up by himself and had explained Strut patronizing that he would watch for the rest of the night and that Strut should sleep. Strut, who had shuddered first by the thought that Ozzy could have woken up earlier and could have surprised him with Ducky, had followed this offer very willingly, the much the more as his brother had been really unusually polite. Strut had gotten a bad conscience since he had, concerning the leafeaters really deceived his brother, but the thought of Ducky had calmed his conscience. Strut got up hasty not to enrage his brother. Ozzy smiled. “Today we’ll get them!” he repeated and with a nearly dreamy look he continued: “And who knows, maybe we’ll soon have so much to eat again that we won’t need to pursue any brats anymore.” “What do you mean?” asked Strut and began to run after his brother who had set in motion during his last words. Ozzy stopped for a moment and looked back to his brother: “Haven’t you noted too yet that it becomes warmer here? The swimmer seems to have told you the truth. It is warmer in this direction. It will be nearly a bit ungrateful when we’ll eat the swimmer.” If there wouldn’t have been a distinctly ironical tone in his voice Strut would have hardly believed that it was his brother who spoke the last words. They ran swiftly, but didn’t exhaust themselves completely. Strut guessed that his brother wanted to save their strength for the last hunt. “I can’t wait to get the sharptooth in my hands. He won’t have anything to laugh about. For nothing on earth I want to be in his skin now!” That sounded far more like his brother thought Strut. They reached a bigger snowy glade, when Ozzy uttered suddenly a joyful call and pointed at the ground. “Look Strut! There are their tracks. Looks as if they have run during the whole night. Fools! They’ll be far to exhausted to flee from us when we’ll catch up with them.” Strut looked. In the snow he could distinctly recognize the tracks of the two longnecks, the spikedtail and the sharptooth. He didn’t see Ducky’s tracks and he hoped that this meant that she hadn’t reached the others, but he wasn’t in much hope, for he had seen that Ducky had the habit to ride on the back of one of her friends. Probably one of the others had carried her. Ozzy bent down to the tracks, eyed them critically and wiped with his hand through one of them. Then he erected and smiled. “This time the tracks are real.” And with a laughing he added: “Probably the flyer would have needed the whole night to draw all the tracks here.” They changed their direction a bit and followed the tracks. Ozzy seemed to be really in an extraordinary good mood for after a while he said: “I demand the sharptooth for me, but you shall not either go away empty. Which of the leafeaters do you want to have for yourself?” “Ducky!” Strut burst out immediately. Ozzy looked at him astonished and Strut blushed. “I…I mean the swimmer”, stammered Strut who was sure to have caused the suspicion of his brother, but Ozzy grinned suddenly.
“There you’ve probably chosen the best bite. The sharptooth is certainly tough, there is not much at the flyer and the others, well I fear they are already to big to be eaten. Eventually we are no sharpteeth. But it’s alright  with me. The swimmer is yours!” Strut smiled. Maybe he had found a possibility to rescue Ducky yet. The sun had meanwhile risen completely and the thin morning mists began to disappear quickly. The way on which they ran became steeper and steeper and when they finally reached the edge of the forest they were already high up on the slope of one of the mountains that bounded the valley. Ozzy frowned. “They’ve made it into the mountains.” He shook his head grimly. “Doesn’t matter. We’ll get them nevertheless!” and they ran on, following the tracks that couldn’t be overlooked here at the non-wooded and snowy slope.

Chapter LXXXIV

Littlefoot’s, Spike’s, Ali’s and Chomper’s eyes were itching. They could hardly keep them open and their movements ran off nearly mechanically. Now and then they really closed their eyes and fell into a pleasant semiconscious state that however found always an abrupt end when they tripped over a boulder or a similar obstacle they hadn’t seen with closed eyes. One time Chomper had even fallen down lengthwise. Ducky and Petrie slept sound and profound on Spike’s respectively Littlefoot’s back. Their steadily snorting contributed to lull Littlefoot, Ali, Chomper and Spike. They had overcome the first mountain chain and reached a terrain that was drawn through by gorges and rocky walls but did not nearly offer as much cover as the rocky labyrinth they had traversed the day before. They had chosen one of the gorges by chance and traversed it to its end. The gorge broadened to a small box-canyon here whose back wall rose steeply like all its other walls, but was possible to be climbed up. “Oh no!” moaned Ali when she saw the steep rocky wall. “Miserable clambering!” cursed Chomper faintly. “I can’t anymore!” “Neither can I!” admitted Littlefoot. He was absolutely not in a condition to be able to encourage his friends anyhow. Spike grumbled anything that would have had certainly a similar meaning like the words of his friends if he had been able to speak. “Maybe the eggeaters have lost our track in the meantime”, guessed Ali. Chomper smiled only tired and looked at the tracks they had left behind in the snow. They simply couldn’t be overlooked. Littlefoot nudged Petrie on his back to wage him and said: Petrie, could you fly back and look where the eggeaters are? We…”, Littlefoot yawned deeply, “…we wait here for you.” Petrie nodded wordless and flapped away. Contrary to his friends he was really dewy fresh, just like Ducky who just awoke on Spike’s back, maybe because she didn’t feel the equally swinging anymore Spike’s steps caused on his back. “What’s the mater?” asked Ducky. Why do we stop?” “We wait here for Petrie”, answered Littlefoot tired. “He flies back to check where the eggeaters are.” Ducky answered with a significant “Oh!” It was nonsense to wait for Petrie here. He would have found back to them easily if they would have gone on, but Ducky had understood that her friends were at the end. Spike simply lay down where he stood and fell asleep. Ducky climbed down from his back and went towards Littlefoot. Ali and Chomper fell asleep side-by-side even before Ducky had arrived by Littlefoot. Littlefoot smiled nearly wistfully at this sight. Few days ago the both had nearly been enemies. “Littlefoot”, said Ducky with a husky voice. “We don’t give up now, do we? No, no, no?” Littlefoot smiled, but his smile looked bitter in a way Ducky had never seen before by him like this. “No Ducky. Not really”, murmured Littlefoot feebly and lay down too. Ducky looked at the others one after another affected. Suddenly Strut’s word seemed to resound gloomy in her memory: “They can’t escape us! If you go to them, then you are lost too!” Suddenly a terrible fear came up in Ducky that let her shudder more than the coldness. Had Strut been right? Had she maybe not risked but sacrificed her life with the return to the others? But then Ducky pulled herself together and she thought of her own words: “So far we have always outwitted you! Yes, they had! And they would do again! Ducky pondered what she should do. She had to do anything! The eggeaters would certainly catch up with them; she couldn’t change that. Petrie wouldn’t tell them if, but when. Maybe they would await the eggeaters here and then she had to ponder how to welcome the eggeaters the best. Ducky looked at the surroundings and discovered at the steep slope opposite the entrance of the gulch a shelf, broad enough to offer room for all of them. Ducky climbed up there. From up there she had a great outlook over the box-canyon and the gorge that however made already after a short distance a turn and so fled from the onlooker’s view. Although Ducky still doubted that her doing had a sense she began to carry stones from the near surroundings onto the shelf and when there seemed to be only stones left that were to big to carry for Ducky she began, what seemed to be really senseless to her now, to form snowballs and to place them in preparation on the shelf. That way she had already carried a respectable amount of “ammo” together on the shelf when Petrie came flapped back. He woke Littlefoot, Ali and Chomper and together with Ducky who had climbed down from the shelf again they made to wake Spike too. Although short, the sleep seemed to have been really a comfort to Littlefoot, Ali, Spike and Chomper. “And Petrie? Where are they?” asked Littlefoot impatiently. “They already are out of the valley and over the first mountain.” “And how fast are they? When will they be here?” asked Chomper now. “Soon”, answered Petrie. “They’re pretty swift!” None of them spoke and they could have stood there for hours without saying anything, but it was Ducky who started to speak suddenly with unusual objective voice. “So we can do two things. Either we try to run on and hope that the eggeaters won’t catch up with us…” “Or?” Ali, who didn’t seem to think a lot of this possibility, just like the others, especially Spike, interrupted impatiently. “Or we wait for the eggeaters and do what we can to keep them off!” Littlefoot was probably because of Ducky’s earnest voice relieved that she added her usual "Yep, yep, yep!” to her last words. “But what can we do?” asked Chomper discouraged. “Well”, said Ali. “You can probably do at least more than we. When I think of the one eggeater’s nose.” It should be a compliment, but Chomper seemed to feel neither flattered nor calmed, for he said gloomy: “That’s just the point. I fear the eggeater will think of that too.” A cold shudder ran down not only Chomper’s but also the other’s backs, but then Littlefoot gulped and said: “However, we can’t escape them. They are to fast. Thus I think Ducky’s suggestion is better than to do nothing.” Again everybody fell silent for a while. Littlefoot pressed his lips together. Chomper clenched his hands again and again to fists and opened them again. Ali stepped nervously from one leg on the other. Petrie seemed to shiver suddenly for he landed on Littlefoot’s head and wrapped himself up in his wings and Spike uttered a sort of quiet whimpering. Ducky went over to him and caressed gently over his head what seemed to calm him a bit. “Up there is certainly the best place to wait for the eggeaters”, said Ducky and pointed at the shelf. “I have err… already prepared something.” Littlefoot and the others looked at Ducky surprised, but they followed her up to the shelf. Littlefoot smiled when he saw the stones and snowballs Ducky had brought there. “Maybe…”, he said, “…we still have a chance.”


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I cant wait to read what happens next, great chapters once again :)


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“I demand the sharptooth for me, but you shall not either go away empty. Which of the leafeaters do you want to have for yourself?” “Ducky!” Strut burst out immediately. Ozzy looked at him astonished and Strut blushed. “I…I mean the swimmer”, stammered Strut
:lol :lol :lol
Another hilarious moment that is so believably instrumented!
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I prey you don't delete this part from your post Pangaea, it was a helpful feedback and there is no need to strike it from the history books once it was put into effect ;)
If you say so, Malte. ;)
As for that (accidentally) wordless e-mail, I have re-sent it (in case you haven't found out already).



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Thanks to both of you very much for your feedback and also especially for the feedback you emailed me about "Old Threehorns" Pangea. It is really very helpful and I appreciate it a lot :yes
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Chapter LXXXV

“There they come!” whispered Chomper so loudly that everybody else heard it. Ali, Littlefoot and Spike had brought additional stones and boulders on the shelf that had been simply to big and to heavy for Ducky before. Chomper had brought more snow there together with Ducky and Petrie and meanwhile the shelf was so full of snow, stones and boulders that they found hardly enough room for themselves anymore. Littlefoot had come upon the thought if it would be possible to cause an avalanche here in the right moment, but after they had eyed the slope critically and had carelessly even cried all together on trial they had come to the conclusion that the slope was not steep and the snow here not plenty enough. Anyway it was it was impossible to start an avalanche here. Littlefoot had considered if he should ask Petrie to fly up the slope to look what was behind it, but he had decided against it, for what could be interesting there? The common work had torn Littlefoot, Ali, Chomper and even Spike out of their sleepy state and after there was just no room anymore for stones, boulders or more snow on the shelf they had lain in wait there and a nervous tension had taken possession of all of them during the waiting. But they didn’t have to wait for long and after Chomper’s announcement Littlefoot tried to calculate roughly how far they would have come if they wouldn’t have stopped here, but would have gone on straight. He couldn’t say it with certainty as he didn’t know exactly how long he, Ali, Chomper and Spike had slept. Certainly not long; but however, in their previous state they would have made it up the slope maybe a bit farer depending on what was lying beyond the slope but the eggeaters would have caught up with them soon at all events. Strangely this thought calmed Littlefoot anyhow. The next moment he and the others could hear too what Chomper’s quick ears had perceived already an instant earlier. Gasping breath and hasty steps that resounded from the opposite gorge. Ducky, Petrie and Chomper straightened and they all grasped for snowballs and smaller stones they had prepared for this moment. Whilst Spike, Ali and Littlefoot ducked instinctively a bit as if the didn’t want to be discovered by the eggeaters too early, but they made ready to push bigger boulders down on the eggeaters with their feet and tails. Some of them had their hearts in their mouths, while a strange calmness that appeared almost completely out of place came over the others. Some of them shivered while others sweated and hardly perceived the coldness anymore. But all of them felt as if the time would pass slower and as if the steps would knock unusually loud. Littlefoot thought of Cera and suddenly he regretted that he would perhaps never learn what had happened with her. And what about his grandparents and the rest of the herd? If they had reached the warmer regions, or would reach them? Probably, for they themselves seemed to have already come so near to them. He thought of his mother and if he would see her again soon. Also the looks of the others, which were fixed on the gorge on the opposite, appeared strangely empty. Surely they thought also of their parents, families and of Cera.

Chapter LXXXVI

Ozzy looked up shortly and saw pleased that the gorge Strut and he traversed ended here in a box-canyon whose back wall was a steep slope that was, unfortunately, possible to be climbed up. His look fell already on the tracks of the leafeaters and the sharptooth again when he noted something in the corner of his eyes that let him stop so abruptly that Strut couldn’t stop in time anymore and ran into his brother whereby he had nearly run his brother over. The next moment a small stone landed close in front of Ozzy in the snow and split seconds later a snowball burst asunder at his knee. Ozzy rose his look again and saw now distinctly what he had perceived only flighty in the corner of his eyes before. Directly opposite on a shelf of the steep slope were the leafeaters and the odious sharptooth and just that moment the little flyer threw and extremely little amount of snow at him that fell moreover far to early on the ground. Ozzy smiled for an instant. The leafeaters and the sharptooth stood up against them, so the pursuit, that had already started to bore him very much, came finally to an end. Ozzy heard a voice, probably those of the sharptooth: “Wait till they have approached Petrie!” That could they get thought Ozzy and grinned again about the stupidity of his victims. What were a few pebbles and snowballs to him, especially when he considered that he would finally reach his goal and get the sharptooth between his claws if he would put up with them? “Forward Strut! Let’s get them!” called Ozzy and rushed frontal towards the shelf. Merely unconscious he heard Strut crying behind him: “Ouch!” And then he felt suddenly how seemingly innumerable small stones pattered onto him and the small the stones might be, they were thrown with such vim that it hurt pretty much to be hit by them. Ozzy protected his head with his arms and ran on. A snowball that would have otherwise hit his hurt nose, burst asunder at the back of his hand. Ozzy took the hands from his face shortly to see where he was. He was at the very base of the shelf, so he only had to run past at the side of it and to climb a short distance up the slope to trap these chickens without any chance for them to escape. With a loud cracking a big boulder landed close in front of his feet and Ozzy felt how splinters, which burst of from the boulder, hit his legs and feet. Ozzy looked at the boulder frightened. It was so big that it would have hurt him seriously if it had hit. Ozzy looked up, only just in time to see how one of the longnecks shove another as big boulder over the edge of the shelf. Ozzy jumped back terrified. It was a not elegant hop, but it saved him from coming under a rock that seemed to be even bigger than the first. Ozzy forgot to with fright to cover his head with his arms and a stone hit him at the temple with such a force that he believed to see stars for a moment. Instinctively he turned round and ran back to the gorge and while he ran he felt several stones and snowballs impacting on his back. Only when he was sure to be out of range, he had already run some steps into the gorge, he stopped and took his hands from his head. His skull sounded of the stone that had hit his temple, there were at least a dozen partly bloody scratches at his legs and he would have betted that his back and his arms would be stewed with black and blue marks soon. Furiously he looked around for Strut to blame him. Strut came towards him and pressed both hands against his nose. “Where have you been?” hissed Ozzy at him. “Why haven’t you come along?” Instead of answering Strut took his hands from his nose that had obviously got a direct hit, for he had strong nose bleeding and Ozzy noted that Strut’s eyes watered. Ozzy felt his fury at Strut unwillingly cooling down, for he knew by own experience how sensitive the nose of an eggeater was. “Alright  Strut!” snarled Ozzy grimly. “You go left, I go right around. Try to stay as far away from the shelf as possible. If we come up the slope then they have no chance anymore!” Strut nodded and they stepped side by side out of the gorge. Ozzy made an impatient movement to the left and Strut ran off. Ozzy nodded pleased and ran off himself whereby he kept as far to the right as the rocky wall permitted. But Ozzy had to find out that the box-canyon narrowed towards the slope, so he and Strut had to approach the shelf inevitably. Already the hail of stones and snowballs set in again. When Ozzy reached the slope a snowball hit him directly in the face and while he still wiped the snow out of his eyes to be able to see clearly again a stone hit with huge force his hurt nose. Ozzy howled up but he staggered on up the slope. A bigger boulder hit him at the foot and made him fall with a yell. Strut who had reached the slope on the other side of the box-canyon without being hit seriously by anything saw that. Immediately he stopped climbing and ran transversal past below the shelf through the tightest hail of stones and snowballs over to his brother. “What are you doing here?” hissed Ozzy when Strut bent over him. But Strut didn’t answer but tore Ozzy not very gently on his feet and dragged him back to the way out of the box-canyon. Split seconds after he had torn him back a boulder, bigger than all previous landed at the spot where Ozzy had just lain. Ozzy starred at the boulder while his brother dragged him back. The block would have broken all of his bones. Probably at least two of the bigger leafeaters had been necessary to shove it over the edge of the shelf. Unwillingly Ozzy had to admit to himself that Strut had maybe just saved his life. Only when they were in the gorge Strut let go Ozzy who nearly lost his balance by that. Relieved Ozzy felt that he could step on the foot that had been hit by the boulder. Yet it hurt, but it worked. Strut looked at Ozzy contrite. “I’m sorry that I have not run on. But you lay there and…” Ozzy interrupted him with a fierce movement of his hand. “Strut it is alright.” And after Ozzy had bitten himself firmly on the lower lip he mumbled: “Thanks.” Strut looked at him amazed.

Chapter LXXXVII

“Did you see where I have hit him?” Chomper asked triumphing. “Right on the nose once again!” “I got his foot boasted Ali. “Yes”, mumbled Ducky and you could hear that she felt very uneasy. “Now they’ll be really mad. Very, very, very mad!” “They have already been before”, said Littlefoot shaking his head. “What worries me far more…”, he continued gloomy, “…is that we’ll soon have no stones anymore if it continues like this. Once or twice more, then we won’t have anything left to throw.” “What have you expected?” asked Ali suddenly very earnest again. “I guess we are about to miscalculate very much what we obtain with this or what we want to obtain.” Petrie gulped and Spike whimpered quietly. “However”, said Littlefoot. “I wouldn’t have thought that we can keep them in check so long. But when they return then throw only when you are sure that you can’t miss them anymore. If they make it to come up the slope, then everything is over.
“They come!” called Ducky and everybody jerked round. Obviously the eggeaters had changed their tactic for they rushed close aside directly towards the shelf and they could hear Ozzy calling with squeaking voice: “Remember Strut! Take the shortest way! The shortest way and run simply on, don’t stop at any case!” Chomper darted a flat stone that hit Strut directly on the forehead, but Strut obeyed the orders of his brother to the letter. Yet he reeled a bit, but he reeled forward. Ducky hurled a stone that bounced against one of Ozzy’s knees without being able to stop the dreadful eggeater. So far Ducky had not thrown a single stone at Strut but she had hit Ozzy many times. Petrie hurled alternately small stones and snowballs, but he couldn’t throw very far and although he tried to the best of his ability he was the only who had hit none of the eggeaters yet. Spike hurled a comparatively big stone at the eggeaters with his tail. It was nearly impossible to aim by that, but the stone hit Strut so fiercely in the stomach that he gasped for breath convulsively and his rush became distinctly slower. Ozzy had reached the slope and began to climb up hasty. By every step he slid a bit backwards together with the snow below his feet so he progressed only very slowly. That was the moment for which Littlefoot and Ali had waited. Littlefoot pushed his boulder over the edge of the shelf first. It landed close in front of Ozzy’s feet and slid down the slope, but Ozzy avoided it with a quick step. Ali’s rock impacted only a few split seconds later a tiny distance behind Ozzy. Ozzy cast a short look up and rushed on with a triumphing grinning when he saw that no further boulder lay at the edge. Littlefoot and Ali looked back frightened too and saw for their consternation that there lay no more boulders behind them anymore. Spike called their attention with an impatient grumbling on himself. He leaned with all his strength against the very last big boulder they still had. It was bigger than all others and that was probably also the reason why they hadn’t used it yet. Spike could hardly move it from the spot. Ali and Littlefoot jumped over immediately to help him, but even for the three of them it was difficult. Instinctively Littlefoot felt remembered to the rock with which they had then pushed the sharptooth who had killed his mother into a deep pond. That rock had even been considerably bigger. “Oh Cera where are you?” thought Littlefoot. “Now we could use your help very much.” Ozzy had nearly reached the level of the shelf on the slope when they threw the boulder over its edge. They hadn’t found any time to aim. “If only this one hits…”, thought Littlefoot imploring. “The block is so big. Maybe we have a tiny chance then!”
It did not hit.
Yet Ozzy had nearly lost his balance when he avoided the rock with a real jack-knife, but the rock rolled past ineffectual. Never had Ozzy grinned as evil as now when he saw the despaired faces of the two longnecks and the spikedtail. Something whizzed along and hit Ozzy in the left eye. He howled up; his face distorted to a painful grimace and he clapped both hands over the eye Chomper had hit with a little stone. There Petrie flapped along. He had given up to throw with snow and stones; he simply hit nothing and couldn’t throw far enough. But instead he pounced now with spread claws on Ozzy’s head, the beak ready to peck. Ozzy hadn’t seen Petrie coming as he still pressed both hands against the left eye and so the attack come completely surprisingly for him. Petrie pecked with his beak and slashed with his claws fiercely at Ozzy’s other eye and his suffering nose. That was too much, even for the hardened eggeater. With a yell he jerked round and rushed down the slope whereby he waved with his arms wildly around in the air and tried simultaneously not to loose his balance. When Strut, who had recovered meanwhile and climbed up the slope, saw his brother rushing past him courage left him too. He turned round and ran after his brother who stopped only deep in the gorge, although Petrie hadn’t pursued him at all. Strut didn’t even note that not a single stone or snowball was thrown after him.


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Now that was a snowball fight I would have liked to have seen in a movie. :yes I also loved the reference to the first movie in which Cera saves the day by helping the gang move the heavy boulder (it serves as a reminder of the surprisingly easy-to-forget fact that she currently is not with them). Great chapters, as usual. Now to proffer my obligatory dose of constructive (I hope) criticism:
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He was at the very base of the shelf, so he only had to run past at the side of it and to climb a short distance up the slope to trap these chickens without any chance for them to escape.
I'm almost hesitant to say this, seeing as the word "chickens" made me laugh so much, :lol but might I suggest "cowards" as a less anachronistic alternative term?
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Yet Ozzy had nearly lost his balance when he avoided the rock with a real jack-knife
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What exactly did you mean to say there? (I'm guessing that "jack-knife" wasn't the expression you would have chosen had you translated the story today.)



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Wow I can hardly believe that you have written 87 chapters to this story already - talk about commitment, its taken me nearly a week to get through the entire thing and I can say that it is quite the adventure.

One thing bothers me a bit though... are you working towards the end soon? It doesn't seem like the chapters are leading anywhere.


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Darn me! :bang
For this delay I have absolutely no better apology to offer than the admission of having messed up, been lazy... you name it.
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He was at the very base of the shelf, so he only had to run past at the side of it and to climb a short distance up the slope to trap these chickens without any chance for them to escape.
Oh my goodness! There you see what happens when someone who at that time didn't know English sufficiently consults a dictionary. It should have been "hatchling" but "chickens" is what I must have gotten when I looked up the word "K¸ken" which usually describes a recently hatched bird but could have been used with a kind of derogatory air by Ozzy in this context. In English that translation is of course absolutely off track :slap
Oh and by the way this criticism IS very constructive. I don't think I'll ever make a total remake of this story (for no less would be necessary with all it's language shortcomings), but I can get rid of some of these worst of blunders thanks to you drawing my attention to it. Thank you for that :yes
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Yet Ozzy had nearly lost his balance when he avoided the rock with a real jack-knife
Now that is another case of trying to translate something literally with a dictionary. I remember this word sounded odd to me even then (what on earth did a knife have to do here?) but I did not question the dictionary too much. The German word that was translated there was a "Hechtsprung" which describes a kind of leap where you really just try to get as far from where you are as fast as you can with little regard for such details as landing on your feet. A kind of leap where you just hurl your whole body into one direction maybe the English words "dive" or "header" would give a similar idea but I think they are both inseparably linked to swimming / leaping into water, aren't they?
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One thing bothers me a bit though... are you working towards the end soon? It doesn't seem like the chapters are leading anywhere.
Yes, the end is nigh ;)
Already they have been reaching regions where there is less snow. After this showdown fight with Ozzy and Strut there is to be one more kind of adventure and then just an end which I must admit has become too long winded (now I'm panning parts of the story I haven't even shown you yet, but alas I think I am doing so for good reason).
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