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review of chapter 52:

So Chomper is not welcomed at his parents' nest anymore... You keep amazing me with the ideas you have for the different species' forms of society and traditions. :)
The talk between Path and Seeker is very good. It just shows the never-ceising loyalty that Path has towards Seeker and the pack and also the deep, brother-like relationship between them.

Spike and Breeze... :smile Now it seems like only Ducky and Chomper need to get coupled :p

So now it's gonna start, right? The final conclusion of Act 3...

Grandpa has been convinced of Littlefoot's survival. Now Bron is entering the place. Very exciting :)
I really like the struggle of Grandpa that you describe. He is not only worried about his grandson and the reunion that is supposed to happen anytime but also about his position in the Great Valley.

Wow! Ali's world is really a dark one. Imagining alone that the friendly and playful Ali we know from LBT 4 is now ready to kill those who destroyed everything that had a value for her is just... unbelievable. She's really under constant torture in your story :o It's the way you put these emotions, these feelings into words that makes it so reasonable and... amazing.

Bron's message has been delivered - the truth has now been told. The Gang have been turned into Sharpteeth.

Hmm, now I really wonder if their leadership roles are as endangered as Mr. Clubtail thinks. I'm sure that they could convince the others of the stupidity of the kids. They couldn't have been aware of the trouble they have caused back then...

Huh? Who is watching Shorty? Did I... miss something here? :lol

Ali :o Wow, I must say that she is quite dark. The realisation of the true idendity of her former friends and the fact that they have destroyed her life, has caused something in the Longneck to snap. I'm officially worried now :p
The interaction between Seeker and Shorty was quite nice as well :yes

What a sweet reunion :smile That indeed went well for all parties involved... yet :p

Lovely chapter as always, yep, yep, yep!

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It is there way of letting us know... um... of telling us..."
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To reunited with their children.
To be reunited.
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Thanks for the review, Ducky.  :) As always I have corrected the typos that you have indicated.  I made some pretty silly ones in that chapter.

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So Chomper is not welcomed at his parents' nest anymore... You keep amazing me with the ideas you have for the different species' forms of society and traditions. smile.gif
The talk between Path and Seeker is very good. It just shows the never-ceising loyalty that Path has towards Seeker and the pack and also the deep, brother-like relationship between them.

Yeah, I needed to show the inner struggle after Chomper left his parents in the previous chapter.  Otherwise it would simply look like that Chomper just left without any distress whatsoever.  I'm glad that you like the whole Chomper/Littlefoot relationship, that is something that I have tried to stress in this story.

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Spike and Breeze... Dino_grins.gif Now it seems like only Ducky and Chomper need to get coupled dino_tongue.gif

Oh no, I have already had a few people PM on FF.net about that.  Somehow I don't think that Chomper and Ducky would be well suited to the whole coupling thing, especially after Chomper gets older...  :unsure: But at least that idea isn't as creepy as the person who recommended that I ship Calin and Ducky.  :x

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Wow! Ali's world is really a dark one. Imagining alone that the friendly and playful Ali we know from LBT 4 is now ready to kill those who destroyed everything that had a value for her is just... unbelievable. She's really under constant torture in your story ohmy.gif It's the way you put these emotions,  these feelings into words that makes it so reasonable and... amazing.

Yeah, I had to put her through hell in order for that transformation to be believable.  She has been through a change as well, but on the other side of the spectrum.  She has seen her friend be ripped apart, her herd be attacked, her herd begin to degenerate, and now she has experienced betrayal... It would be impossible to live through all of that and not be damaged.

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Ali ohmy.gif Wow, I must say that she is quite dark. The realisation of the true idendity of her former friends and the fact that they have destroyed her life, has caused something in the Longneck to snap. I'm officially worried now dino_tongue.gif

Exactly.

Thanks for the review again, and I hope that you enjoy the next two chapters.  I should have the next one (chapter 56) posted on Monday.


Go ahead and check out my fanfictions, The Seven Hunters, Songs of the Hunters, and Menders Tale.


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I finally got through this..took a zillion years.


One word can sum up all the chapters I have read,and I shall say it in a very Australian way.

Fan-bloody-tastic.

Or in normal terms 'Very very impressive'.

I don't have time to review each chapter,I will never finish typing. I'll just review the most standout parts to me,I'll give you a full chapter review next time but right now reviewing I think 4 6,000+ word chapters will take me a very long time.


Poor Ali,she had lost so much. Her herd,Rhett (not that I like him much to begin with xD),she thought she had lost Littlefoot and the others,poor girl. The truth turned out to be worse then what she believed. Her friends were the killers,the ones that ruined her life and took everything from her. I never expected Ali to want to seek revenge on the gang,it really was not their fault. They had to survive,Ali,Rhett and their herd were just in the wrong place at the wrong time-the time The Pack were starving and needed to kill.

I like how you made her come to her senses before she did something everyone will regret,she realized she never thought about how Littlefoot felt about tis,how he felt about needing to kill or die from starvation. Maybe she could knock sense into that mother of hers while she is at it?

Speaking of Ali's Mother,Utu is not on my popular list right now.  She seems to believe the Gang/Pack killed just to kill,to be murders. And whats worse,she tried to attack Grandma. What is going to happen now? If,Ali does end up forgiving Littlefoot somewhat,will Utu? Or will all this cause a hate between the two longneck families?

Also,Doc randomly comes from nowhere. But at a perfect time,though no doubt he is not the softest thing to crash head first into xD.


Aww,the reunion I had been waiting for,though that must have been a strange sight. A full grown longneck charging up to a young fastbiter and nuzzling him.

I must admit,Mr Threehorn did better then I thought. I thought he would be more weary about a fastbiter seemingly being the daughter he thought was long dead.

I do hope,Ali will be alright. Then again,knowing you anything can happen,I'll just have to wait and see what Ali's fate will be.

Wonder what will happen to the Pack after the battle,I'm presuming they'll either leave or be chased back out. Feel bad for their parents,they thought their children were dead,but they're alive. But they are seen as murders and threats to the valley. It's no better for them if their children really were killed or if they never found out they were still alive in the first place. Guess thats why theres that one saying.

"Sometimes the truth does more damage then the rumour,but you can't keep the lie forever" not sure if anyone else has heard that,but down here it's well known.

Great job,next chapter I'm doing a full proper review,because I will only have one to read. Not four.


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Thanks for the review, Nahla.  :) I hope that you enjoy the next chapter.  There is quite a bit that happens in the last installment of Act 3.


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Chapter 55   Rise of the fallen

“Rise and rise again until lambs become lions”
― Robin Hood


As the enemy retreated towards the valley entrance, Breeze allowed herself to breathe a sigh of relief.  She had allowed her anger to get the better of her and the others had to pull her off of Calin.  As a result, she was now covered with lacerations from her head down towards her toes, but the stinging pain of those injuries were tempered somewhat by the knowledge that she had inflicted equal damage on her nemesis.  She resolved to kill him one day even if it was the last thing that she ever did.

"How are you holding up?"

Somehow, the voice of Spike cut through the thundering sound of racing feet.  In response she turned towards her companion and allowed herself to sigh.

"I am fine."  She answered plainly, even though she was aware that this wouldn't satisfy Spike.  Taking a look at his sister, however, she soon realized that she was not the only injured party.  "How is Haven?"  She asked with genuine concern.

As Spike turned to tend to Ducky, the former hadrosaur answered.  "I have been better.  I have, I have!  But I think that I will get better."

Hearing this line of conversation, Littlefoot turned to Ducky as well.  "Don't move your shoulder, Haven.  That looks like a pretty bad bite.  We should probably have Mr. Thicknose take a look at it."

"Yeah.  Provided that they don't kick us out!"  Cera noted, while looking in the direction of the approaching adults.  She had a look of grave concern on her face, which caused Breeze to look as well.  The sight that greeted her filled her with fear.  She began her sprint even before Littlefoot gave the order.

"Everyone!  Run!"

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Utu broke away from the other longnecks and sprinted after the departing fast biters.

I knew that they were tricking us!  They will pay for this!

She couldn't believe that the other longnecks could side with Littlefoot and his friends.  Even if he were a good lad during his longneck days, his actions as a sharptooth proved that he was the embodiment of evil.  From attacking Rhett to stealing the herd's eggs, they had showed their true colors.  Now they were running away after obviously taking part in the assault on the valley, such an action demanded only one punishment and she would not hesitate to carry out the sentence.

"Utu, stop!"

She ignored the screams from Grandma Longneck.  As far as Utu was concerned, she had placed her misplaced trust in her grandson to the detriment of the entire valley.  She owed the other longneck much, but she was going to right an unforgivable wrong.  She was going to see to it that the sharpteeth were expelled permanently.  They had slaughtered many innocents in the valley.  Several spiketails lay dead or dying and numerous smaller dinosaurs were walking around with grievous injuries.  There even appeared to be a small child laying on the ground...  I thought all of the children were evacuated... Utu thought to herself.  Then what is...  That was when she saw it.  A most horrible sight.

"Ali!"

Utu ran with all of her might to the stricken longneck, her legs burning with exertion.  Her thoughts were now on the wellbeing of her daughter and not on the despicable sharpteeth.  If she lost Ali...  Her mind couldn't even process it.  With her parental instincts driving out all reason, she ran the distance between her and Ali in no time at all.  In a panic she nuzzled her daughter and cried for any answer.

"Ali!  Ali!  Can you hear me?!"

No answer came from the bloodied longneck.  A terrible gash was clearly visible on her back, although blood was only seeping from the wound at a slow rate.  Utu began to sob.  Was her daughter to meet the same fate as Rhett?

"Momma?"

Utu sucked in a breath as her daughter called for her ever so softly.  She wasted no time in answering.

"Yes, dear!  I am here!"  She was only tangentially aware of the other longnecks arriving at her location.  "Don't worry.  You are safe from those vile fast biters now."

Ali groaned as she attempted to stand up, but she quickly fell down again.  She seemed to look around for a few moments before speaking again.

"Where are Littlefoot and the others?"

Utu answered immediately.  "They left when they saw me coming.  Don't worry dear, I will make sure that they pay for this!"  She could almost feel the other longnecks staring at her from behind, but she did not care.  She would see to it that those fast biters paid for what they did to her Ali.  But that was when Ali shattered her view of what happened.

"No, mamma!"  Ali's voice was weak, but clear.  "Littlefoot saved me!  He saved me from the other fast biters..."  She trailed off as her strength was fast declining.

"Ali!  Ali!"  Her daughter's sudden loss of consciousness filled her with dread.  She couldn't lose her daughter!  She just couldn't.  She was all that she had left in this world.  That was when she heard Grandpa Longneck begin shouting orders behind her.

"Bron!  Grab some of the healing plants from the watering hole!"  She looked his direction just in time for him to speak to her.  "Utu?  Bring Ali to the watering hole.  We have some plants that might help."

Utu was still sobbing, but spoke before she dared to pick up her unconscious daughter.  "I'm terribly sorry... I thought..."

Grandma Longneck quickly interrupted her with a soft voice.  "Don't worry about that now.  Let my mate and son-in-law tend to Ali.  I will get my grandson and his friends back..."  Utu noted that Grandma neglected to point out that Utu was the one who chased them off.  "They may have ideas on how to help her as well."

With a nod of gratitude, Utu picked up her stricken daughter and placed her ever so gently on her back.  Then with both speed and caution, she advanced towards the watering hole.  The last thing that she heard before she left the area was the booming voice of Grandma Longneck calling for her grandson.  Utu knew that she would have to apologize to the sharpteeth one day.  She just hoped that Ali would live to see that happen.

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"I think that we are far enough away now!"  Chomper yelled at his companions.

Ruby stopped her headlong sprint and soon heard the sounds of her friends' speeding feet cease as well.  It was only then that she decided to answer her purple friend.  

"I hope that we are far enough now.  But how far is far enough when a longneck is after you?"

Littlefoot could only nod at that statement.  Taunt was a bit more vocal however.

"Yeah Seeker...  Your family reunions are a bit dangerous!"  It was meant to be humorous, but at that moment Littlefoot could only agree with Taunt's sentiments.

"I hope that Ali will talk some sense into her...  After all we did help her out."  He then looked again at Ducky.  "Ducky, you really need to lie down.  That injury looks pretty bad."

Ducky opened her mouth for a moment as if to protest, but upon Spike's urging look she acquiesced to Littlefoot's request.  As Ducky lay belly-first on the ground, Littlefoot could see how deep the wound was.  The fast biter's bite had cut through the meat of her back right behind her shoulder.  The injury continued with a laceration through the skin of the shoulder itself.  Such a wound was not untreatable, and the rate of bleeding was not particularly worrisome, but the risk of infection would be extremely high.  Littlefoot grimaced.  They would definitely need the help of not only Mr. Thicknose, but also the rainbowfaces on this one.  Ducky would need all of the help that they could get.

"Breeze?  Ruby?"  Both of the fast biter's raised their heads at this.  "I need you to get some healing plants.  I don't care if you have to run around Utu... you need to ask Mr. Thicknose where they are so that we can get them."  Seeing those two nod, he then turned to Spike.  "Spike?  You stay with your sister.  Try to keep her still."  He turned still to Cera.  "And Cera?"  But she was nowhere to be seen.  

"Cera?"

At his concerned looks, Chomper answered.  "I will go look for her, Seeker!"  But Littlefoot shook his head at this.

"No, Path.  If she gets herself into trouble then I might need to run fast and I can run faster than you.  Go ahead and..."  But he was then interrupted by an unexpected source.

"Littlefoot!"

His grandmother.

Hmmm...  Seems that Ali called her mother off the attack... Littlefoot noted to himself.  This changed the situation somewhat.

"Okay, Chomper.  You go after Cera, but be careful.  I will talk to my parents.  Stay safe."  He barely took the time to hear Chomper's quick "you too" before he sprung towards the familiar voice in the distance.

As Littlefoot sprinted off to the yells of his grandmother, he did not realize the full implications of what was going on a mere half mile away.  Cera was taking care of unfinished business and was about to get far more than she bargained for.

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Cera had finally tracked down the fast biter she had crippled earlier.  Even though it was hypocritical of her to be angry with a sharptooth for killing a threehorn when she had done the same in the past, she still felt that she had unfinished business to attend to with this dinosaur.  His blood trail had led her straight to his makeshift hiding place in the bushes by the valley entrance.  The tell-tale smell of fast biter blood and fear greeted her nostrils.  She was careful and approach her quarry cautiously, as she knew that a dinosaur with nothing left to lose was a dire threat.  A quick strike at the vegetation in front of her exposed the sharptooth to the light.  She was again face-to-face with her soon-to-be victim.

But there was something wrong.  There was no movement in this fast biter.  No breathing and no stench of fresh fear.

He was already dead.

Cera hated to admit that she felt somewhat disappointed by this, which testified to her transformed mind.  However, she realized that her mission here was done nonetheless.  The enemy fast biter was dead.  A suitable ending for the sharptooth that had hurt Ducky and threatened the rest of the pack.  As she turned away, however, she smelled something that gave her pause.

It was a scent that she had smelled before.  It was vaguely familiar.  It was like her and Tricia's scent but different.  

That was when the realization hit her.

The green fast biter in front of her had their scent on him.  Their scent.  Dana and Dinah.  Her niece and nephew.  She could smell their body odor, that she still knew from her threehorn days.  She could smell their fear.  She could smell their sadness.

She could smell their blood.

He had killed them.  Two lives with so much promise and hope quashed in an instant of terror and pain.  Cera had not even had time to reunite with them during her brief initial stay in the valley and now she never would.  They had gone to wherever the victims of sharpteeth go.  She could only hope that it was a nice place.

Much nicer than where she had sent their killer.

When Chomper discovered Cera a few minutes later, he found her sobbing beside two badly mutilated threehorn corpses.  Knowing that his words would solve nothing, he simply placed a comforting claw on her shoulder.  It seemed that the valley's losses on this day went very deep.

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Chomper had stayed with her until Petrie had arrived with word that Ducky was being cared for and the valley had reconsidered their eviction after their service in the battle.  In her despair, however, none of that mattered to her.  A part of her family had been taken from her forever.  It was only when Chomper pointed out that they should be there when the children's father arrived that she became vocal again.

"Why should I bloody leave!  They are my family too!"

Chomper looked at her sympathetically, but retorted nonetheless.  "Cera...  They were killed by a fast biter..."

Cera didn't get it.  "So?!"

Chomper gave her a sad frown.  "Argo will be upset when he sees this... He might attack you too."

Cera looked down.  Chomper's words were true.  Even with her daddy coming along as well, that was no guarantee of her safety.  In the madness that comes with grief, Argo might attack her, family or not.  All that he would see at that moment would be another fast biter.  Another killer.  It was best to let the threehorn mourn and for her to move along.  Her father and Tria would undoubtedly want to talk to her about what happened once the wounded were tended to and the defensive situation dealt with.  With that in mind, she slowly walked to her father's nest, barely registering the comforting words of her packmates.  She simply took in the smells of the family she had been away from for so long and tried to remember a happier time when they were all together.  Before she changed.  Before this terrible battle.

It was with those sad thoughts that Cera fell into a dreamless sleep.

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"This is pretty bad, Ducky."  The female rainbowface gently rubbed the gash with a bluish-green leaf, which made the green fast biter grimace in pain.  Spike grasped her claws in support.  "But if we clean it then I think you will be alright."

"What about infection?"  Came Littlefoot's concerned voice.

At this Chronos turned away from the special leaves he was mashing and looked at the brown fast biter.  "I'm afraid that with an injury like this, there will be infection."

This filled both Spike and Littlefoot with alarm, whereas Ducky closed her eyes tight due to the pain of having her injury cleaned by Logos.  Seeing that he was causing them distress, Chronos continued.

"But we can give her something for that."  He then gestured at the mixture that he was preparing on the rock slab.  "I won't lie to you, this will taste awful.  But it should fight the infection."

At this Logos spoke again.  "Yes.  You took a bite to the back, Ducky.  You will need what Chronos has prepared for you."

Ruby now spoke.  "Has this healing..."  She was unsure what to call the mashed-up plants.  "mash... has it worked before?"

Chronos gave the fast biter an expressionless look, before responding.  "It helped me when I was sick nearly a season ago.  If it saved me from dying then I am sure that it will keep your friend safe."

"Ducky!!!"

The sharpteeth turned towards the sudden scream.  The panicked form of Ura could be seen rushing to the scene.  It seemed that Ducky's mother had just been informed of her grievous injury.  

"I'm okay, momma."

Ura stopped when she saw the numerous blood-soaked leaves.  She then looked at Ducky's back and could see the massive gash.

"Oh, Ducky!"  Ura was nearly inconsolable now.  

Spike decided to speak next.  He realized that a fear-stricken mother would do no one any good.  "It looks a bit worse than it is.  The rainbowfaces are cleaning the wound... Ducky should be alright."

Ura questioned this.  "Should be?"

Logos then responded, as she took a bit of the mash that Chronos had made and placed it in Ducky's mouth.  "Nothing is certain in this world..."  She placed a comforting hand on Ducky's side as she convulsed at the horrific taste of the medicine.  "But she is getting the best treatment that we can give her."

Chomper then spoke.  "The valley is lucky to have you as healers."

"The valley is lucky to have you as defenders."  Logos responded in kind.

As Ura began to check up on her injured daughter, Littlefoot gestured for everyone but Spike and Ducky to follow him.  "I think that we should give the swimmer family some time alone."  No one disputed his logic there.  "At least Stern Claw took care of the bastard who did this..."  He then looked at Chomper with a concerned expression.  "How is Stern Claw holding up?"

Chomper sighed.  "As well as can be expected, I guess."

"That bad?"  Despite how his words may have sounded sarcastic, he had no sarcasm in his voice.  If it wasn't for Cera's insistence to be alone, he would be there right now comforting her.  As it was he was at a loss of what to do.

Littlefoot nodded.  "Stern Claw will need to talk to her family about this.  She won't open up until she is good and ready.  All we can do is be there for when she is ready to talk to us."  He then looked at the others.  "I think that we should go to our families for now to see how they are holding up.  Breeze and Taunt..."

Breeze interrupted her leader.  "I guess that we should stay near the rainbowfaces in case they need help getting healing plants.  Ducky was not the only injury, you know."

Littlefoot nodded.  "That sounds good."  He then looked at the flyer.  "Petrie?  Let us know if the rainbowfaces need anything else."

"Sure thing, Seeker!"  Petrie affirmed.

As the pack then scattered to their respective destinations, Littlefoot spared one final look in the direction of the threehorn nest.  He could only hope that Cera would open up soon.  They had been through enough pain and tragedy in their short time in the valley.  There was no reason to keep those emotions bottled up inside.

Sighing, Littlefoot walked towards the distant form of Bron, which stood out in the distance.  It was time to see how the family was holding up.

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"Cera."

The yellow fast biter woke up suddenly at the call of the familiar voice.  She opened her eyes and noted that the brightness of the day had been replaced with the coming of night.  The bright circle was about to set across the horizon.  She must have dozed off for longer than she had expected.

"Yes, daddy?"  She answered softly.

She heard a deep sigh from behind her as Topps took a deep breath.  Then, unexpectedly, the massive threehorn laid down beside her, facing the setting bright circle.

"I just got done talking to Argo..."  His face contorted into a look of discomfort.  "I had hoped that I would not be the bearer of bad news again, but here I am telling family that their son and daughter will rise no more..."  He looked down.  "Cera, you risked your life out there for the valley and you helped to save many, many children.  I know that you blame yourself for your niece and nephew, but you can't think of it that way."

Cera closed her eyes as Topps continued his conversation.

"After your mother and sisters died, I blamed myself.  Oh goodness did I blame myself..."  Cera could hear the tears in his voice, even if she had her eyes closed.  She did not want to see her father cry, so she kept them shut.  "But it was the herd that kept me going.  I couldn't let the rest of them down.  I resolved to lead them to safety never mind the cost.  I promised your mother as much."

Cera finally was brave enough to open her eyes again and look at her father.

"Eventually, I got you back.  But many others weren't so lucky.  Only the smart, strong, and hard survive in the world, the rest are often crushed by the ravages of time."  He then turned towards Cera.  His eyes were piercing in their gaze.  Cera felt in that moment as if her father were staring into her soul.  "That is the problem, isn't it?  Not just that we have lost family today...  you see that you are one of the choosers of the dead."

Cera swallowed.  Her father knew her all too well.  She finally worked up the courage to speak.

"I have killed, daddy.  Not just the fast biters today.  Not just longnecks, swimmers, and spiketails.  But I have killed other threehorns before..."  Topps closed his eyes at her admission.  "I am no better than the fast biter that I killed."

Her father was silent for a moment.  Neither dinosaur said a word and Cera was left to her morose thoughts.  Finally though, Topps spoke again.

"Did you kill for your own survival?"  At this Cera simply nodded.  "Did the fast biter who killed Dinah and Dana do it for survival?"  Cera simply shook her head at that.  "Then there is a difference, Cera."

Cera sighed.  "That doesn't make a difference to the victims."

Topps nodded.  "No.  No, it doesn't.  But it should make a difference to the killer."  He looked straight ahead, his features rigid and tense.  "Cera, you have only thought of me as your father, but until earlier today I was a leader too.  How do you think the others saw me?"

Cera could only give a slight shrug at this.  She hadn't really given it much thought.

Topps continued.  "You may think that you are a bunch of savages now, but many of us leaf-eaters are no better.  Longnecks of Doc's kind will bash one another for mates and if the rival dies, then the winner will kill the remaining children.  Spiketails will fight rivals even after they have been taken care of.  And we threehorns... We are the worst in many ways."

Cera stared at her father with a stunned expression.  What was her father talking about?  He always said that threehorns were the best at everything... so where did this discussion came from?

"I have killed other threehorns before, Cera."  She stared in silence at that admission.  "In order to become herd leader, you will face many challengers and many of them will fight to the end.  I was the end of many."  He then looked at Cera with sympathetic eyes.  "You have killed for survival, Cera.  You have killed for food, family, and your friends.  But I have killed for power.  What does that say about me?"  He sighed.  "Regardless of if it is the threehorn way or not, I have more to answer for than you do."

Cera was absolutely flabbergasted.  What could she say?  The dinosaur that she had idolized for much of her life was now bearing his heart and soul to her.  All of his insecurities, faults, and perceived failings as a dinosaur.  It was both an enlightening and disturbing experience.  It was like witnessing the death of a living god.

"You know that you did what you had to do, Topps."

Both heads turned to see the pink form of Tria approach them, with Tricia following behind.  

"If you hadn't gone for the leadership then who would?  Braston?  You know that he would have led the herd to its destruction.  You may have always wanted power, but you wanted it for the right reasons."

Cera was speechless.  Her father wanted power for the right reasons in the same way that the gang had wished for power to defeat Red Claw.  The intentions in each case were pure, but the consequences were dire to all involved.  How much blood had she shed and would continue to shed throughout her life?  How many nights did her daddy have to hide his true feelings over the hard actions that he had to take?  She and her father were more alike than she realized.  The change of species had made that far more clear to her.  With that revelation in mind, Cera spoke again.

"I guess that we aren't so different, daddy.  We each have done what we had to do.  Now we have to live with it."

Topps sighed as his mate nuzzled him and Tricia began to jump around his massive feet.  "I guess not..."  He then closed his eyes and bowed his head a little.  "But unfortunately for all of us, Whitehorn isn't so different from me either.  He wants to have a meeting in a few days to discuss where to go from here.  He wants all of your friends to be there as well."

Tria looked at her mate.  "Do you think that he plans on evacuating?"

Topps snorted.  "No.  I think that he plans on fighting and the Great Valley would be the best place to have such a battle.  But I fear that many will plan on fleeing to somewhere that Red Claw doesn't care about."

"So it is up to us to keep the herds together?"  Cera asked, which earned her a nod from her father.  "Well then!  We have just the dinosaurs for the job, don't we?"

Topps retorted.  "They don't really listen to me or the longneck anymore..."

Cera smiled.  "No, but they will listen to those who sacrificed for the valley."

Topps could only nod in response.  He hoped that she was correct.

......

"What's wrong, Shorty?"  Littlefoot noted that the longneck looked utterly devastated as he rested at the top of the hill.  Following Shorty's gaze, it was obvious why.  Ali was resting on a makeshift nest some distance away from the hill, while her mother and Mr. Thicknose kept watch.  Her injuries were far more severe than Ducky's and this deeply concerned all involved.

"I left her."  Was all Shorty said in response.

Littlefoot looked at Shorty in surprise. "You did what you had to do, Shorty.  You couldn't lead the sharpteeth to the other children.  That would have been terrible!"

Shorty closed his eyes and seemed to ignore Littlefoot's words, though this did not discourage the brown fast biter.

"Sometimes you have to make sacrifices..."

At this Shorty retorted weakly.  "Sacrifices!  My entire life has been sacrifices!  I am tired of being the one who has to watch my loved ones die!  I am tired of being the one who chooses."

Littlefoot could only nod.  "Now you know how I feel."

Shorty did not speak further, so Littlefoot remained silent for a few moments as he watched Ali sleep from a distance.  She had been through so much and despite the fact that she had made their time in the valley a difficult one, he could not find it in himself to blame her.  They had taken a lot from her, even if they had saved her this time.

Possibly saved her.  Littlefoot thought morosely.  She seems to be in pretty bad shape.

The sound of loud footsteps could then be heard.  Littlefoot did not need to turn his head to tell that Bron was approaching.  The pattern of his footsteps and his smell were unmistakable.  Littlefoot could also hear two other longnecks approaching, who were undoubtedly his grandparents.  It seemed that the conversation between the brothers was soon going to be interrupted.

"You did what you had to do, Shorty."  Bron's voice called out from the rapidly closing distance.

"You could hear me from way over there!?"  Shorty asked with surprise.

A laugh bellowed from the massive longneck.  "No, but I can tell what has you upset, Shorty.  But you can't blame yourself."

Shorty began to pace at Bron's words.  A look of confusion and disgust was on his face.  "If I did the right thing... then why does it feel so wrong?"

Littlefoot could only give a sad smile to his brother.  Despite Shorty's claims to the contrary, he was still an innocent kid at heart.  He had been required to do something that no child should ever be asked to do and he was paying the price emotionally.

"Sometimes you have to make hard choices, Shorty.  It is part of growing up.  It is part of being a leader."  Littlefoot offered.  He had been through the same horror that his brother had: the choice of who had to die.  The choice to do a harder right over an easier wrong.

"Well then, to the dung heap with being a leader!"  Shorty growled.

Bron's words then surprised both brothers.  "Not wanting leadership is one of the signs that you are fit to be leader."

"Huh?"  Both Littlefoot and Shorty asked in unison.

Bron sighed as he sat on his haunches beside the two brothers.  But the first question that he asked seemed to catch Littlefoot off guard.  "Do you remember the last part of the Big Longneck Test, Littlefoot?"

Littlefoot nodded.  "Yes, dad... but aren't we supposed to not talk about it until Shorty passes it?"

Bron chuckled.  "He already has."

"Um..."  Shorty seemed perplexed by this.  "No... No, I haven't."

Bron nodded.  "Yes.  Yes, you have.  You passed it today."  He paused for a moment as the two grandparents sat on the opposite side of the two brothers.  "When Littlefoot passed the test he had to prove three things.  By climbing up a sheer cliff in order to catch a red treestar, he showed strength.  By finding the hidden treestar by solving a riddle, he showed intelligence.  And by choosing not to go across the lava pool even though he thought that would make him fail the test, he showed judgment."  He then looked at Shorty.  "You showed all three of those qualities today, Shorty.  You showed strength by convincing the other children to fell to the upper rock wall, you showed intelligence by realizing that they would be safer there, and you showed judgment by sacrificing one member of the herd for the sake of the others.  You showed good leadership today."

Littlefoot agreed with his father's assessment.  "Yeah, Shorty.  As the leader of my pack I have had to make hard choices as well.  It is part of what comes with being a leader..."

Shorty looked down for several moments as he tried to process this.  "Does it ever get easier?"

Both Bron and Littlefoot gave him a sad, knowing smile.  Bron answered after a moment.  "It will always be hard, Shorty.  If it ever became easy to make those sacrifices then it would be time to step down as leader.  But it does get easier."

Shorty sighed as he looked in Littlefoot's direction.  "I guess that we are quite alike aren't we?"

Littlefoot chuckled a little.  "Yeah.  We both are leaders in a way.  Although I am on the enemy side."

Shorty smiled.  "Nah.  You will never be the enemy to me."

As the longnecks bonded above Ali's nest, two other dinosaurs were having their own conversation about leadership.

......

"You wanted to see me, sir?"

Topps was a bit surprised when he got the summons from another Deputy, at the beginning of nightfall no less, to come and talk with the leader of the herd.  Now the former leader was standing behind the new leader, Whitehorn.  For Topps it was one of the more awkward situations of his life.

"Yes."  Whitehorn answered plainly.  "We lost several in the battle.

Topps nodded.  "Yes...  We lost several spiketails, we have a young longneck injured, and..."  His voice broke for a split second.  "Dinah and Dana were lost."

Silence prevailed for several moments as Whitehorn continued to look towards the night sky.  When he did speak, a rough voice emerged from the brown threehorn.

"I failed them."

It was a simple statement, but one that communicated much to Topps.  He remembered his great failures.  Letting his pride get in the way of uniting the herds when the initial offer was made...  Misinterpreting the attack on his herd as a frontal assault...  Losing his first mate and three of his daughters in the process...  Yes, he knew what Whitehorn was feeling.  Breathing deeply, Topps decided to speak.

"You did the best that you could do with the information that you had.  When Volant warned us what was happening, you did not hesitate to send reinforcements..."  He tried to placate the other threehorn, but his attempt was cut off.

"You wouldn't have made that same mistake."

Topps pondered this for a moment.  "No.  But that is only because I have made that mistake before."

Whitehorn did not speak for several moments.  Topps realized what was happening here and though it would have pleased him earlier in the day, it alarmed him now.  There was only one time when an adult threehorn would show weakness like this to another adult and that was when one was preparing to allow another overtake them in rank.  It was done very rarely, as a fight would be seen as a more honorable way to be overtaken, but in cases of illness or incompetence this other method was acceptable.  But Topps was not going to have any of it.  This young male had the support of the herd and had done a commendable job in leading the defense efforts at a time when the valley was divided.  He would not allow his talent to be lost because he blamed himself for something that he could not foresee.  Without waiting for him to make the offer of submission, Topps spoke.

"You are in the time of loneliness.  The time of despair.  I have been there.  All leaders have been there.  It is a battle that we must face and triumph over.  It is a battle with ourselves."  Whitehorn did not speak, but turned his head towards the elder threehorn.  Seeing that he had his undivided attention, he spoke again.  

"Leadership is a lonely task.  Only your family will accept you as you are and even then you must not show weakness.  You must put on an act in order to motivate the herd and in turn you must rely upon them to motivate you.  Your life is no longer your own.  Despite your power, you will feel powerless."

Whitehorn took that moment to ask the obvious question.  "How did you deal with the deaths?"

Topps sighed and closed his eyes for a moment.  "When you are as old as me, tragedies pile upon tragedies.  From the time that I hatched, I saw three leaders rise and fall, two of them violently.  I suspect you will be the last leader that I will see."  This seemed to make a flash of sadness appear in Whitehorn's features, before they were subsumed into his impassive stare.  "Even more of the herd suffered a tragic end.  Many of them in order to maintain order.  Or to put down challengers."  He then looked at Whitehorn with a far-away stare.  "As leader, threehorns will come and go...  You will promote some for a time and then you will be forced to let them go when they prove unequal to the task or their task is finished.  You will find challengers will come and will have to be dealt with.  Some will be killed by you.  Others by your deputies.  All of them will be killed in your name."  He swallowed a bit as his eyes focused on Whitehorn.  "To be a leader is to be lonely.  It is a lonely journey that will only end with your death or overthrow.  It is a journey that you have only begun."

At this Topps walked closer to Whitehorn.  To the point where Topps was violating his personal space.  It was a threat, but not in the way that a threat would normally be conveyed.

"You are the best of the new generation, Whitehorn.  You are the only one that has the judgment for the task and the support of the herd.  If you are challenged, then I will stand by you until the bitter end.  But if you sacrifice the wellbeing of the herd, just because you're too weak to handle the job, then I will kill you where you stand."  Topps focused on Whitehorn with a fierce glare.  "So what is it going to be?"

Whitehorn did not move, nor did his expression change.  "I am not took weak for the job."

At this Topps noticeably relaxed and stepped back to a more respectful distance from the young adult.  He was soon surprised, however, by Whitehorn's reaction.

He laughed.

"You really have to teach me how to do that, Topps.  I think that you could make a sharptooth cry."

Despite the absurdity of the sudden change in the conversation, Topps could only join in the laughter.  It seemed that Whitehorn's crisis of confidence had been resolved.  Now they could begin to prepare for the difficult days to come.

......

At that same moment two pairs of yellow eyes were staring at a pitch-black rock.  The eyes were the only thing that shined in the pitch dark cave.  The night circle outside only gave the barest hint of light.

"So there is no way to discharge it without overloading it?"  Logos asked with a concerned expression.

Chronos nodded, though only the bobbing of his eyes could be seen.  "That is the case, I am afraid.  At least the containment field didn't fail."  His eyes then stared at his counterpart's with a haunted expression.  "A milligram of antimatter suddenly contacting matter...  The results would be too horrible to contemplate."

Logos closed her eyes for a moment as she contemplated what Chronos had just said.  "Perhaps we should leave the Repressor here so that when it finally does fail the blast will be contained."

Chronos sighed, as he too closed his eyes.  "Without overloading it I suspect it still has two more years of charge in it."

Logos deadpanned.  "You suspect?"

"Yeah."  Chronos answered.  "We might have to overload it if what Red Claw has planned comes to pass.  It would be better to lose some of us than to lose all."

Logos stared intently at the male rainbowface.  She ignored the fact that he had considered them part of the valley, as she had already begun to do the same.  However, his optimism about the Repressor stone neglected one important detail.  "Your assuming that it would overload if we activate it."  Her face noticeably contorted with a look of discomfort.  "It might have to be detonated manually."  Chronos closed his eyes when she made that connection.  "You would be willing to sacrifice yourself for the valley?"

Chronos nodded.  "I would..."

Logos closed her eyes.  "So would I."  She sucked in a breath.  But let's hope that it doesn't come to that."

The two then sat in silence for several moments as the black rock stood between them like a harbinger of doom.  Until the crisis was resolved one way or another it would haunt their thoughts.  Of that both of them were certain.

Logos finally broke the silence.  "I guess that we should tell Littlefoot about this."

Chronos's eyes stared into Logos's for several moments before he responded.  "I agree.  Though I am surprised to hear you make that suggestion."

Logos nodded.  "He already knows about the stone, so no knew damage would be done... and besides..."

"The stone isn't going to last much longer anyway?"  Chronos finished for her.

She nodded.

He did not turn his gaze away from her, but instead retained an inquisitive look in his eyes.  "What exactly are we now, Logos?"

Her eyes seemed to take on a mischievous glint.  "Well... two arms... two legs... a head... yep, it looks like we are still rainbowfaces!"

Chronos's eyes closed as an audible groan emanated from the rainbowface.  "No, that isn't what I meant."  Although he suspected that she knew that already.  His next words were said with absolute sincerity.  "You are no longer a Commander and I am no longer an officer... what do we do now?

Logos seemed to consider that for a moment before responding.  "Mr. Thicknose seems to appreciate our insights."  Chronos nodded at this as Logos continued.  "It seems the valley looks to us as their healers."

Chronos affirmed that conclusion with another observation.  "And Thicknose seems to think of us as his successors."

Logos agreed with the male's conclusion.  "Yes... though I suspect that he will be the valley's resident know-it-all for quite some time."  Her eyes then became a bit more distant as she seemed to consider something from far away.  "I do wonder what 'we' are now though."  Her eyes seemed to stare at something behind the male rainbowface, as if he were transparent.

Despite Chronos's tendency to overlook the obvious, the glint in Logos's eye conveyed her meaning quite well.  A confusing cascade of emotions from recognition, to fear, to hope seemed to play in his eyes for a split second before a calmer gaze was restored to his eyes.  His response was noticeably cautious, yet hopeful.

"I am willing to be whatever you want me to be."

Silence prevailed for several moments as the two rainbowfaces stared at one another with intense expressions.  Neither one seemed willing to break the impasse.  Then, with deliberate movement, Logos approached Chronos.  He could feel her breath against the side of his face when she finally answered.

"I will consider it, Chronos.  But not today... I need more time."

Chronos could barely breath when he gave his response.  "As much time as you need... I will be here."

Logos seemed to linger beside Chronos for a few tense moments, before she wordlessly stepped to her usual sleeping place and laid down.  With great resolve, Chronos did the same and tried to ignore the odd flurry of emotions in his chest.  She had feelings for him as well, but she just wasn't ready.  Even though they were several feet apart and intentionally facing away from one another, some part of him felt as close to her as ever.  With a determined look in his eyes he made a declaration to himself.

And I will get closer to her still!

......

Two days later:

Littlefoot walked over to the nest with a feeling of deep trepidation.  Here he was about to speak to the one longneck who had gone from loving him to becoming his worst adversary.  The longneck from who he had taken the most.  Her best friend, her innocence, her sense of security...  She was entirely justified in her feelings of disdain.  But yet, she had requested an audience with him.  No one was more surprised than him when Utu came by and requested that he speak to her daughter.  In fact, he had to talk the others into not following as they feared an ambush.  No, he would honor the request in the manner it was given.  Utu came to them alone, so he would go to Ali alone.  Upon seeing the small longneck shift from her prone position, Littlefoot decided to announce himself.

"You wanted to see me?"

With a slowness that seemed deliberate, she rose from her prone position.  Good, she can move a little now.  Littlefoot noted.  Ever so slowly, she placed all of her weight upon the left side of her body and gingerly moved her neck to look at him.  Her face seemed serene but her eyes had a haunted look to them as she finally spoke.

"Hello, Littlefoot."  She sighed softly.  "I don't know where to begin."

Littlefoot could relate to that.  Nodding, he sat down in order to be eye-level with Ali in her sitting position.  Upon realizing that she was waiting for a response from him, he spoke.

"Perhaps we should start from the beginning?"

Ali nodded.  "Yeah..."  She took another sigh now.  A far deeper one.  But she did finally work up the strength to speak.  "We used to be such good friends back when we were both longnecks.  Even when Rhett drove us apart and you showed me his lies, you were willing to let him play games with us...  You were incapable of holding a grudge."  A slight smile appeared on her face as she said these words, but her eyes were still far away in their gaze.  "Rhett changed, Littlefoot... Before you killed him he had stopped telling his tales and had tried to help around the herd.  He even followed me on my damn foolish mission to get tree sweets from the forest... "  A tear could then be seen flowing down her cheek.  "When you came for us, he slowed down to check up on me... that is why he was injured instead of me..."  Her eyes then fixed upon Littlefoot would a soul-piercing stare.  "His final words were to tell me to run.  Not to ask for help... not to scream in panic... but to tell me to get to safety...  He was selfless."

Littlefoot could only look down at Ali's admission.  It helped to not think about the lives that you took, lest you be unable to hunt again in the future.  But Ali was uncovering the true cost of Littlefoot's kill that day.  She made no doubt about what she lost and what Littlefoot took.

Ali continued.  "The taking of the herd's eggs... the grief of the mothers... it affected us deeply.  I believe that is what caused the Old One to die when she did."  Littlefoot couldn't help but to tear up at that revelation.  He hadn't meant to kill the Old One.  He simply needed to feed the pack.  But Ali continued before he could think much on that.

"The deputies competed for control.  Deputy would fight against deputy.  The old order was broken and the deputies began to think of the rest of us as their property instead of their duty... My mom and I had to flee when she killed a deputy who tried to rape one another herd member."

Littlefoot's mouth opened in shock. Could that have been the longneck corpse that we ate on the way to the valley?

"When we got here I was so looking forward to seeing you.  You were the only thing that gave me hope during all of those dark times and when I finally heard that you died..."  She couldn't finish her thought.  She simply took another breath and moved onto the obvious conclusion.  "When I found out just what you were I was enraged.  I could only see a killer.  A betrayer of my trust and destroyer of my dreams.  A sharptooth who could feel no remorse.  I decided that you were really dead and that only the sharptooth remained."

In a motion that was slow and deliberate, she slowly walked towards the brown fast biter and placed one of her legs by his jaw.  In a cautious movement, she slowly moved his head so that it was no longer facing the ground.  This action confused Littlefoot, but not as much as her next reaction.

She gave him a sad smile.

"But a remorseless sharptooth wouldn't cry."

Littlefoot placed one of his clawed hands to his face and observed that she was telling the truth.  He had been crying.  His hand was moist.

"And... remorseless sharpteeth wouldn't risk their lives to save me."

Littlefoot couldn't say anything.  Despite himself trying to will his mouth to work, nothing would come out.  What could he possibly say to this longneck from whom he had both taken so much and saved?

"You had no choice, did you?  You were hungry and we were there."

Littlefoot nodded.  "Yeah.  I didn't even see who I killed until after I made the final strike."  He grimaced at the memory.  "Chomper had to comfort me afterwards."

Ali simply nodded as Littlefoot told his tale.

"I guess that it was after that when most of us decided, whether we admitted it or not, that we were stuck this way.  After that... most of us tried to think of ourselves as sharpteeth and tried to forget our old lives."  Littlefoot sighed.  "At least sharpteeth don't have to know what it is like to be a leaf-eater.  They don't have to think about what they are taking.  They can just imagine that leaf-eaters are stupid and only good for food."

Ali gave a sad smile.  "Kind of like what leaf-eaters think about sharpteeth, only in reverse."

Littlefoot nodded.

There was silence for several moments as the two dinosaurs came to terms with what had been said.  Ali's worldview had been destroyed and Littlefoot had been forced to face the full consequences of his pack's actions.  Both had much to consider and although they now had understanding, each knew that there was no going back to what had come before.  Finally, Ali broke the silence.

"My mother will never forgive you, but I do."

Littlefoot released a shuddering breath that he had no idea that he was holding.

Ali continued.  "I forgive you for all of the things that you have done and all of the pain that you have put me through.  You are a sharptooth now and that is what sharpteeth do."  She then looked at him with sad eyes.  "Do you forgive me?"

Littlefoot spoke through his tears.  "Yes, Ali.  Of course."

Ali nodded and then turned away, facing her back towards him.  The moment had ended.  The necessary words had been exchanged.  But yet the chasm remained between them.  It now always would.

"My mother and I are leaving the valley.  Doc has agreed to help lead us to another herd."  She gave a slight sigh.  "Doc seems as protective over his kid as my mother is over me.  They both know that the valley is not safe as long as Red Claw lives"  She then sighed.  "This herd is made up of farwalkers.  I doubt that we will see one another ever again."

Littlefoot suppressed a shiver as he realized that this both saddened him and filled him with relief.  He spoke very softly.  "Perhaps that is for the best, Ali."  He then looked down.  "I want you to be happy and safe.  You will be neither around sharpteeth."

Ali nodded and then looked down as well.  "Will you tell the others what I have said?  I don't think that I can do this again..."  She cut herself off as sobs emanated from the longneck.  She obviously didn't want to have this conversation again.  The emotions were too raw and she still had much healing to do.

"I will." Littlefoot affirmed. "And they forgive you as well, Ali.  They wouldn't have risked themselves for you otherwise."

Ali nodded, before slowly regaining her composure.  Then, with a grace that Littlefoot was not aware that Ali was capable of in her condition, she turned towards the fast biter one last time.

"Best of luck to you and your pack, Littlefoot."

Littlefoot gave a sad smile as he returned the good wishes.  "Same to you, Ali.  Live a good life."

......

Later on, Littlefoot watched from the hill as Ali's mother placed her daughter on her back.  Having already said his goodbyes to Doc, he did not stir as he watched the three longnecks leave the valley for destinations unknown.  He doubted that he would ever see any of them again.

Best of luck to you all.

After a few moments, however, the stomping feet of Topps could be heard.  This was followed by several other feet, as Littlefoot realized that his pack and their parents had all made the trek to track him down.  However, it was the tell-tale voice of Cera that greeted him first.

"The meeting is about to start, Seeker."

Littlefoot rose and stretched in a lazy fashion.  Now it was time for some very important decisions.  

"Do you think that they will listen to us?  The last time we asked them to listen, they didn't listen!"  Came the welcome voice of his companion, Ruby.  

Littlefoot smiled.  "Oh, I think that they will."  He switched to leaf-eater, so that Topps could understand him.  "They are willing to listen to us, aren't they?

Topps snorted.  "There were a few holdouts but Whitehorn knocked some sense into them."  Littlefoot had to wonder how literally that Topps meant that.  "The fact that you kids risked your butts for the valley helped convince them."  He then sighed.  "Now this plan of yours that Ruby was telling me about, that may take some convincing.  Other sharpteeth helping the valley?  Chomper's parents?  Fast runners?  They will probably call you insane!"

Littlefoot smirked and then took a look at Taunt, who couldn't understand any of this leaf-eater talk.  "I get called that on a daily basis, so I should be fine.  The other sharpteeth want Red Claw out of the way as much as the valley.  We have a common enemy."

Grandpa then spoke.  "I think that you are right, Littlefoot.  But when do you think that he will try to strike?  The valley is unpopulated now and..."  That was when Littlefoot cut him off.

"Early summer."  Littlefoot affirmed.  "That is when food will be most scarce and Red Claw will have the most recruits.  He will attack then."

Ducky, whose shoulder was now looking much better, then asked the obvious question.  "Then we will need to be at the Great Valley next summer!"

Littlefoot could only nod.  That was when the fate of the valley would be settled.

......

"Calin.  You are promoted to leader of the pack."

Calin stood impassive while Red Claw declared his promotion.  It was a foregone conclusion in light of Zarc's passing.  However, he would soon have to find some other way to ensure his security.  His old injury from Skytail was still causing him trouble and any sign of weakness could invite a challenge.  If only his tail...

It was at that exact moment that a blistering hot pain rose from the tip of his tail to the base.  Despite his self-control, Calin curled into a fetal ball as waves of agony descended upon him.  After several moments had passed, he was horrified to hear Red Claw speak.

"Please note fast biters, Calin has been suffering from a tail injury for quite some time.  But you are not to harm him or challenge him.  He is my choice."

Calin could only look up at Red Claw and gasp his question.  "You knew?!"

Red Claw laughed.  A horrible laugh that shook the entire bluff.  "I knew from the beginning.  Did you honestly think that your tail ailment escaped the notice of my flyers?  I know all Calin.  The only reason that I kept you around is because you're the only fast biter ruthless enough for the job to come."  He then moved his head close to Calin's body, causing him to twitch in fear.  "If you fail me then I will make you wish that I had killed you earlier."

Calin slowly rose and gave a bow to Red Claw as a show of submission.  He was too terrified and in too much pain to even harbor thoughts of mutiny or discord.  He was at Red Claw's mercy now.  With the rest of the pack watching, they also knew his predicament as well.  With Red Claw exposing Calin's situation bare, he could no longer attempt to rule with affability or patronage.  Now he could only rule by fear, as Red Claw's support of his leadership was all that he had left.  Red Claw had effectively neutralized any thought of mutiny in a single move.  There was no doubt who the true boss was now.

"There is one other thing, Calin."  Red Claw's voice echoed in Calin's head.  "I will not tolerate any further attempts of mutiny from you."

Calin blinked.  What is Red Claw talking about?

"Don't act like you don't know.  Your conspirator, the flyer Sandstorm, told us everything before his tragic demise in the valley."

Calin was utterly confused.  Who in the heck is Sandstorm?

"Your plan was so simple..."

Calin shook his head.  It must be because I seem to have forgotten about it!

"The flyer thought that he was going to tell fast biters about your conspiracy, but there are no major packs around where Sandstorm was going, so the fast biter he was trying to find must have been an intermediary."

Calin stared at Red Claw.  Whatever you say, Big Guy.

"The only major pack of any kind up there is the hidden runners."  Red Claw then studied Calin for a moment.  "I must admit that is an ingenious choice.  Use stealth to go after your enemies in the pack...  But now that the pack is firmly under my grasp."  He then looked straight into Calin's eyes.  "Since its leader is only going to live for as long as it is."  Calin gulped at that affirmation.  "I think that it is time for you to reaffirm your loyalty to me, Calin."

Calin stood up in order to bow again, but that was when Red Claw told Calin how he was going to reaffirm his loyalty.

"Your punishment, Calin, is to go to the land of the hidden runners and to slaughter them.  You must ruin your alliance with them so that neither they, nor anyone else, will trust you."  Calin could only stare back at the behemoth as he spoke.  "I am the only reason you are alive right now and I will remain your only leader.  Is that understood?"

Calin had no idea where Red Claw got the idea of a conspiracy involving hidden runners, but he knew that denying it would only invite death.  He would have to agree to kill the hidden runners in order to prove his loyalty and to show that he had no security except that which was provided by Red Claw's word.  With all of that being known, Calin's choice was obvious.

"When do you want me to kill them, Sir?"

"Immediately."  Came Red Claw's reply.  "You will leave at once and I will follow."  It was obvious that Red Claw wanted the mission completed without any betrayal.  He was going to supervise the handiwork itself.

With a final bow, Calin turned towards his packmates.  They had hidden runners to kill, but this would only be a momentary diversion from their main goal.

The Great Valley would be next.

END OF ACT 3



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One battle has been resolved but another battle waits in the not-so-distance future. In the fourth and final act we shall see if the Pack of Nine can fulfill their destiny and liberate both the valley and the Mysterious Beyond from Red Claw's reign of terror. After nearly a year of change, despair, growth, and acceptance, the journey of the Seven Hunters is about to reach its conclusion.

I hope that you all enjoy the latest chapter! The first chapter of the final act should be posted some time on Saturday.


Go ahead and check out my fanfictions, The Seven Hunters, Songs of the Hunters, and Menders Tale.


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Ok,here is the review I said I would give.

This was a very well done chapter,a great and dramatic ending for Act 3.Looks like we are getting even closer to the 'big battle' or whatever you want to call it. What would happen after that? Will the pack/gang return to their leafeater forms when/if they do get rid of Red Claw? Or are they forever trapped as predators?

Seems,Utu still saw Littlefoot and the others as murders,not seeing they killed to survive. She just saw them as heartless,evil killers. Just too bad it took Ali nearly being killed for her to realize,the gang/pack are trying to HELP the valley not destroy it.

The talk between Ali and Littlefoot was my favourite scene,you captures both their emotions perfectly.Least Ali understands why Littlefoot did what he did,least she is no longer thinking Littlefoot purposely targeted her herd and purposely targeted and killed Rhett.

Since she has left the valley,is this the last we are going to see of her? And Doc?.

Shorty has indeed shown the skills of leadership,I admit when I first read that Shorty just left Ali I wanted to punch him in the face,then it dawned on me. He sacrificed one to save many. Sometimes in life you are going to make sacrifices,and sometimes making those sacrifices will pain us to do so.

I'm not really good at this reviewing thing,but I try to give feedback where I can. I know myself how much it helps.

Great job,looking forward to seeing the final Act and how all this ends.


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Thanks for the review, Nahla!  :)

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This was a very well done chapter,a great and dramatic ending for Act 3.Looks like we are getting even closer to the 'big battle' or whatever you want to call it. What would happen after that? Will the pack/gang return to their leafeater forms when/if they do get rid of Red Claw? Or are they forever trapped as predators?

And the questions for the fourth Act are laid bare.  Indeed, these will be some of the questions that need to be resolved in the remaining chapters.  Although what the answer to those questions are may not be as interesting as how those questions are answered.

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The talk between Ali and Littlefoot was my favourite scene,you captures both their emotions perfectly.Least Ali understands why Littlefoot did what he did,least she is no longer thinking Littlefoot purposely targeted her herd and purposely targeted and killed Rhett.

Since she has left the valley,is this the last we are going to see of her? And Doc?.

Thanks.  :) I'm glad that you enjoyed my portrayal of their resolution.  As for Ali and Doc it seems that they are walking off into the sunset, so to speak.  In the case of Ali, that is probably for the best.  Likewise, considering what happens to younglings in this story, it is probably the best outcome for Stomp as well.  He has lived through these three acts whereas Rhett, Tippy, Dinah, Dana, and countless baby flyers have not survived.  Being a leaf-eater child in this fanfic seems like an unfortunate risk.  :p

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Shorty has indeed shown the skills of leadership,I admit when I first read that Shorty just left Ali I wanted to punch him in the face,then it dawned on me. He sacrificed one to save many. Sometimes in life you are going to make sacrifices,and sometimes making those sacrifices will pain us to do so.

Yeah, Shorty has made a harsh utilitarian decision for the first time in his life.  Littlefoot has been forced to make several since his change, but for Shorty this is a new development.  Even though he knows that he did the right thing, that does not make it any easier to accept.

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Great job,looking forward to seeing the final Act and how all this ends.

Thanks again for the review.  :) I hope that you enjoy the next chapter, which I should have posted on Saturday.


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ACT 4: DESTINY

Chapter 56   Play fights and murder

“A little nonsense now and then, is cherished by the wisest men.”
― Roald Dahl, Charlie and the Great Glass Elevator


The Land of Shallow Waters, three weeks after the battle of Haven Valley:

“Sometimes I don’t understand him, you know?”

Ruby nodded at the other fast biter’s comment.  It was understandable that Breeze would have some difficulty in understanding Spike as he, like the rest of the original seven, used to be leaf-eaters.  Despite their adaptation to a new way of life, there was still a history there that Breeze and Taunt would never truly understand.  

“I mean... He listens to me and understands me, but when I try to understand him... it's like there's a wall there, you know?”

Ruby paused for a moment from her stroll with Breeze, which caused the other to stop as well.  With a ponderous expression that suited her sharptooth name, Ruby asked the obvious question.

“Have you tried talking to him about it.  Maybe if you talk to him about it then he will talk about it to you?”

Breeze sighed.  “Yeah... I’ve asked him what it was like in the valley back when he was a spiketail, but he doesn’t tell me much.  Just that he used to play games with Haven and would hang out with you guys.”  She paused for a moment.  “Well, that and he liked food.”

Ruby nodded.  “The change did not change everything.”  Spike was still quite the eater.

Breeze continued.  “But... He hasn’t told me anything of substance.  What did he fear?  What did he aspire to?  I know who he is now, but I am curious who he was before...”  She paused again.  “I mean... I told him about my past and he was there to comfort me... I want to be there to help him.  It must be hard to change from the food to the hunter.”

Ruby closed her eyes for a moment and placed her clawed hand to her head. Odd.  In trying to understand Spike she confuses herself more. Opening her eyes again she looked at the other fast biter and tried to explain the situation.

“Breeze... Growing up as a leaf-eater is different from how you or me grew up...”

Breeze looked at Ruby curiously.  “But you were also a leaf-eater, weren't you?”

Ruby shook her head.  “I was a fast runner.  I could eat both meat and leaf.  A life where you have to take life is different... very different from what my friends went through.”  She then looked intently at the other fast biter’s eyes.  “Being hunted is very different from being the hunter.  As a fast runner I experienced both and it was easier for me... but they only had one side of the story.”  With that part of her past contrasted from that of her friends, she posed a question to her counterpart.

“Finder, or Spike as he was called then, was named by his sister.  Did you know that?”

Breeze shook her head and Ruby continued.

Ruby smiled.  “Yeah... Seeker told me that Finder hatched out in an abandoned nest when the others found him.  They were half-starved and scared, but they took him in when Haven insisted.  He is about five winters younger than the rest of them.”

Breeze looked perplexed.  “But he looks the same age!  I mean...”  Even though their relationship was entirely unconsummated at this point, they were too young for it to be otherwise, she was still creeped out about being in a relationship with a male who was that much younger than her.  She was a young adolescent, but he was still a child!

“I think that the stone changed that.”  Ruby affirmed.  “Not only did it make him older, but it allowed him to talk.”

Breeze considered this overload of information for a few moments.  For her part, Ruby allowed her time to think.  What she had said must have been quite the revelation for the other fast biter.  Finally, however, Breeze spoke again.

“So he...  So he never had a family besides Haven’s?”  Ruby nodded as Breeze continued.  “He never spoke to anyone... and he had no one his age to talk to anyway?”

Ruby nodded.  “From what my friends told me, that is what they told me about Spike.”

Breeze looked away for a moment.  “He is very lucky to have you all as friends!  I lost my family, but at least I knew them.  I can’t imagine being lost in your own world like that...”  She looked in the distance for a moment.  “Is that why... you and him were the most at ease when I first met you?  The others seemed tense and unsure, like they were new at life, but you two seemed...”

Ruby gave a soft smile.  “..accepting?”

Breeze nodded.  “Yeah.”

Ruby continued.  “Finder lived a happy life in the valley, but also a lonely one I think...”  Ruby offered.  “He could understand us and Ducky could understand him, but he couldn’t express himself like us.  He kept to himself a lot.  Even though he had to kill, I think that he felt...”  Ruby nearly hesitated at the word.  “free... after he changed.”  It was at that moment that she had a sudden realization.  “Maybe that is why he doesn’t want to talk about it?  Maybe he feels guilty for feeling that way?”

Breeze blinked once before responding.  “I will need to talk to him...  There is no shame in enjoying being a sharptooth.  In any case, he has no choice now.”

Ruby sighed.  “I wish that he would have talked to us about that...”  

Breeze smiled.  “Don’t worry.  I’m sure that he is still not used to talking much...”  She chuckled a little.  “He can be snarky with me, but when the conversation gets serious he tends to listen... I guess that is what he is used to.”  She then gave a resolute nod.  “I will need to teach him to open up a little.”

Ruby could only smile at Breeze’s resolution.  Spike and her were lucky to have one another as close friends.  Their personalities seemed to complement one another quite well.  It was after that realization that Breeze spoke again.

“Oh?  Sorry, Ponder.  We got talking about Spike and I nearly forgot... What did you want to talk to me about?”

Ruby smiled.  “Well... It’s going to be Path’s star day in a few days and I wanted to give him a gift, but no gift I can find!”  She placed her clawed hand to her chin in a ponderous gesture.  “He has food.  He has a good sleeping spot.  What else can a sharptooth need?”

Breeze paused for a moment.  “Hmmm...  Let’s think about this for a moment.”

......

Elsewhere in the Land of Shallow Waters:

"So let me get this straight... you want to give Path a gift of some kind just because a star is at the right part of the sky?"

Littlefoot sighed.  He figured that Taunt was probably intentionally being obtuse, but he figured that he had better explain himself just in case Taunt was really confused and not just being an ass.

"Taunt..."  Littlefoot's use of his name clearly indicate his annoyance.  "It's how we celebrate his hatching.  He hatched several winters ago on this day."  Littlefoot had to restrain himself from rolling his eyes.  Surely even Taunt could understand this explanation.

Taunt chuckled.  "I understand what a star day is, Littlefoot."  The use of Littlefoot's leaf-eater name was intentional as Taunt still found it to be amusing.  He was being led by a leader who had the sort of name no self-respecting sharptooth parent would give their children.  Despite that he still respected the former longneck's leadership.  In some ways he reminded him of Skytail...  "But why would you want to celebrate his star day?"

Littlefoot seemed utterly confused by this question.  "Huh?"

Taunt stared at Littlefoot for a moment and sighed.  Now it seemed that they had a breakdown in understanding.  Perhaps star days were important to leaf-eaters for some reason.  "I mean... Chomper's parents mated, his mother laid an egg, Chomper came out of it, and now Chomper is here.  Do we really need to acknowledge the obvious."  Littlefoot stared at Taunt with a slightly open mouth as if Taunt's words stunned him.  Undaunted, Taunt decided to speak again.  "I mean... If he had magically came out of a threehorns behind one day then that might be an event worth commemorating, but Chomper hatched out just like anyone else."

Littlefoot closed his eyes for a moment as if he were trying to get the image of Chomper emerging into the world from a threehorn's fortuitous bowel movement out of his mind.  He sighed in exasperation as he answered the orange fast biter.

"We don't celebrate the fact that he came out of an egg.  It's a way for us to acknowledge how much we appreciate him."

Taunt seemed to ponder this for a moment as he looked slightly passed Littlefoot.  "Oh.  Well that makes sense I guess..."  He went silent again as he resumed a ponderous expression, which looked rather odd on Taunt's face.  "But why on a star day?"

Littlefoot shrugged.  "I don't really know, Taunt.  That is how leaf-eaters do it."

Taunt nodded at this.  "I know the back when... back when Skytail was my leader..."  Littlefoot immediately picked up on Taunt's nostalgic tone.  "We would sing songs to show our appreciation."

Littlefoot perked up with interest at this.  "Songs?  You mean like what Chomper's dad sings?"

Taunt laughed.  "By the stars, no!  Fast biters are capable of better songs than that!"  He then smiled at Littlefoot.  "I mean we did teach you some of our songs back when you were with us in the Lowlands."

Littlefoot nodded.  "Yeah... But weren't those children's songs?  We have sung them a few times over here."

Taunt nodded.  "For younglings, yeah.  But you are used to being sharpteeth now and you have known battle, Seeker.  I think that you are ready for actual songs.  The kind that packs sing."  He looked at Littlefoot with a sincere expression.  "It is the leader who starts such things and it is improper for the other pack members to begin a pack song."  He lowered his head a bit.  "I guess that I am being a bit improper right now."

The brown fast biter had to suppress the urge to say: when are you not improper, Taunt?  However, he knew that Taunt was truly concerned about etiquette here, so he decided to let him off the hook.

"You're fine, Taunt.  It's just we don't know any good sharptooth songs..."

Taunt smiled and nodded at his leader.  "Songs are made by a pack for the pack.  As packs grow and their children leave, the songs follow them.  It is how we fast biters keep our heritage and remember our past."  He paused for a moment as the importance of the pack songs began to resonate with Littlefoot.  "All that would be needed for us to start is for you to give the word."

Littlefoot looked perplexed.  "Like during one of our meetings?"

Taunt laughed again.  "No, at night!  We sing when the night circle lights up the night and the stars shine bright.  That way we can sing to our ancestors who are in the sky watching us."  His smile took on a sadder tone.  "I... think that my pack mates would like that.  I haven't sung with Skytail, Scarflank, or Vigilant in a long time and... although I will be the only one singing down here... at least they could hear me... you know?"

Littlefoot quickly put a comforting claw on Taunt's shoulder.  "Easy there, Taunt.  I had no idea that it meant that much to you.  We will sing tonight then."

Taunt's expression turned much more joyous.  "Thanks, Seeker!  You're a good friend."  He paused momentarily as if he were thinking of something.  "It is customary for the pack leader to select the singer for the night.  You could invite Path to sing first."

Littlefoot blinked, not getting the importance of this.  "Uh... I guess that I could."

Taunt nodded enthusiastically.  "Fast biter's show appreciation by letting one of their own tell their story and having the pack share in the song.  Tonight we can give Path the recognition he deserves, then tomorrow I can train you all in proper singing!"  Taunt was beaming at the idea.  "That's is, of course..."

Littlefoot interrupted with a good-natured chuckle.  "I will give the order tonight, Taunt.  Don't worry."  He was about to speak further when a rather irritated voice arose from behind them.

"There are you two!  Have you forgotten about the game?"

Both of them turned towards Cera.  Taunt was the first to speak.  "Oh... uh...  I kind of forgot to tell Seeker that was what you had planned... we started talking, you see..."  Littlefoot would have laughed at Taunt's sudden apologetic tone, but Cera's expression did not bode well for the orange fast biter and Littlefoot decided not to make it worse for him.

"Urgh!"  Cera grunted.  "Spotter has gotten everything ready for Capture The Head.  It is Path's favorite game, remember?"

Littlefoot smiled.  It seems that everyone in the pack was trying to honor Path's special day in their own way.  "Alright, let's not keep Path waiting!"  He then smirked at Cera.  "The ladies are going down this time!"

For her part, Cera stuck out her tongue at the leader.  "The boys lost last time and they will lose again today!  Girls rule!"

With that the three fast biters descended down the hill to where the game was being held.  If the last time they played this game was any indication, then there would be more than a few bruised egos by the time the day was through.

......

Chomper bristled with anticipation.  The game was about to begin.

Ever since they had turned into sharpteeth, it seemed that they had fundamentally changed.  Yes this still played games as they had done in the valley, but the games had taken on a far more aggressive and purposeful angle.  Swimmer and Splasher had been replaced with Hunter and Prey.  The Pinecone Game had been replaced with Hider and Tracker.  This combined with the obvious necessity of hunting for prey or carrion each morning had fundamentally changed how he and the others worked and played.  They were sharpteeth now and every aspect of their life confirmed this.

However, this game was an excellent reminder of his time in the valley, but still in keeping with their new reality.  They had gotten the idea when Taunt decided to play one of his tricks on Cera.

“Alright, you made the kill so I guess you get the first bite.  But I get the second!”

Taunt smiled at Cera’s impatience.  Ducky had just beaten her headlong rush at the spiketail and managed to make the killing blow.  Now, as they say, Ducky was enjoying the spoils of success.  Cera, being her prideful self, was not pleased with being shown up by the green fast biter.  Unfortunately for Taunt, Cera noticed his smirk.

“You think this is funny?  Perhaps I will leave you the spiketail’s ass.  You are what you eat!”

Taunt suppressed a chuckle at his companion’s snarky comment.  “Oh, Stern Claw, you slay me!”

Cera grunted and spoke under her breath.  “I wish...”

The two of them waited for Ducky to finish her portion of the meal.  She always favored the neck and chest of the spiketails, which meant that Cera’s favorite portion, the head, would be removed soon enough for her enjoyment.  Finally after a few moments, Ducky’s blood drenched head emerged from the spiketail’s neck and the spiketail’s head began to roll towards Cera.  Ducky spoke in her usual cheerful way.

“I got the head off for you, Stern Claw.  That way you don’t have to wait for me to finish.  Oh, no, no, no!”

Cera gave her friend a slight nod.  “Thanks, Haven!  Heads are my favorite.  Now come here my delicious...”

Chomp!

Cera stared in stunned silence as Taunt grabbed the spiketail head in his mouth and turned his back towards Cera.  In a swift moment, he waved his tail at her and sprinted off towards the swamp.  It was an obvious attempt to anger Cera.

And it worked perfectly.

The others watched in amusement some time later, when Taunt returned with Cera well behind and gave the head to an unsuspecting Path.  As Cera ran full force at him, Path handed the head to Seeker who continued the journey around the marshes.  The game of Capture The Head had been created.


Taunt eventually returned the head to an incredibly irate Cera, but she couldn’t stay angry at him for long.

She got even.

“You insolent sap-sucker!  That is mine!  Mine!”

Ruby watched as Cera ran off with the tail of a juvenile longneck, with Taunt in close pursuit.  If he would steal Cera’s favorite food, then she would return the favor.  Ruby had to smile at the scene.  Those two seemed made for each other, for better or worse.

Littlefoot watched the scene play out as well.  He didn’t even try to suppress his laughter when Cera passed the tail to Spike who then became Taunt’s target.  Breeze quickly moved to the nearby trees, obviously hoping to join in the fun when Spike decided to pass the tail to her.  It was at that time that he decided to speak.

“Well, this looks incredibly stupid.”  He paused for a beat.  “Shall we join in the fun?”

With a smirk, Ruby nodded and the two ran into the fray.  This game was fun.


Shortly thereafter, Taunt finally got his longneck tail and the rest of the pack emerged with only light scrapes from the experience.  From that point on, Capture The Head became one of their most common games, although they began to modify it into something resembling an orderly game.  As Spotter couldn’t directly participate and since he enjoyed watching the antics of the rest of the pack more than anything, it was decided that he would be the goal setter.  He would give each team a head of a recent kill for them to put at their designated spot.  It would be the objective of the other team to grab their opponents head and to put it in their spot.  Whoever managed to grab their opponents head while keeping or recapturing their own would be the winner.

Had Path been thinking about it deeply, he might have realized that even in play they were working on their strategies.  Even in play they were practicing to become better and more fearsome killers.  However, right now he had more pressing matters on his mind.

Alright... I need to find the enemy’s spot.  Then I can take the goal.

The rules were that no more than one person could guard the spot at one time and that if someone was bitten they had to play dead until the count of 30.  Actual injuries were to be avoided if at all possible.  This was a game of speed and strategy, not bloodshed.

Creeping carefully through the grass, the sharptooth gently peeked through an opening in the vegetation.

An old, half rotten tree stood as a testament to futility.  It had grown too fast in the soft soil and had long since fallen over and died.  Now only the smell of rotten wood greeted his nostrils.  There was nothing of any interest here.

Or is there?

Chomper decided to sneak around the opening in the grass, but to remain under the cover of the vegetation.  It could be possible for someone to use the pungent smell of rotting wood in order to hide their own scent.  It was the sort of thing that they had done in the past and would most likely do again.  Chomper was nearly ready to move onto more promising sites when he saw it.

A flash of pink in a small hole in the tree.

Gotcha Ponder!

......

Ruby peeked out of her hiding place in the tree.  Her and Breeze had come up with the idea of using the rotting tree to hide their hiding spot.  If they could secure their head long enough then they would surely have enough time to secure the other team’s head and claim victory.  As both Cera and Breeze seemed hell-bent on play fighting with their companions, Ruby agreed to stay behind.  She was still hesitant to play fight with Littlefoot after his injury at the claws of Calin many months ago.  The memories of those unhappy days still haunted her and even the thought of striking her friend in jest made her cringe.  No, she would stay here and watch her team’s head.

I am sure that we will get the boys’ head and then we will win! Ruby thought to herself.  I am surprised I haven’t seen anyone by now.  Usually by now I have seen someone.

Chomp!

“Eep!”  Ruby squealed as Chomper lightly bit down on her tail.  She knew that she was forbidden from screaming to alert the others, so she simply laid down and gave a slightly annoyed smirk at Chomper.

You have won this round, Chomper.  But you will not win!

For his part Chomper grabbed the head in his mouth and gave a mocking wave at Ruby.  Then, as swiftly as he had snuck into the tree, he sprinted out of it.

......

Nip!

“Damn it!”  Taunt hissed.

Cera could only smile as Taunt began to play dead for the obligatory 30 seconds.  However, being who she was, she couldn’t resist one final taunt at her companion.

“I can’t help it if your orange ass stands out in the open!  I hope that you enjoy losing!”

At that moment the bushes beside Cera began to rustle and she promptly bolted.  No sooner had she done so, Spike emerged from the foliage sprinting straight at Cera.  He had a determined scowl on his face.  It was obvious that he was not intent on losing to the girls again.  

The chase was on.

......

Damn it!  I wish that I was as fast as the others!

Despite his best efforts Ducky had found Chomper and given pursuit.  Even though he was still about ten body-lengths ahead of the fast biter, he knew that she was gaining fast.  He only had a few moments in order to reach the goal; otherwise the girls will have regained their head.  Then the boys would have to reclaim it as well.

“You can only run so fast, Path!  Yep, yep, yep!”

The cheerfulness of Ducky filled him with anything but joy at that moment.  There was something distinctly creepy about Ducky’s usual enthusiasm and cheerfulness during a hunt.  Especially when you were on the ëhunted’ side of the equation.  The predator who had once broken down after killing the mama flyer in her first kill had now grown to enjoy the act.  She still regretted that she had to chase down and kill others, but she still enjoyed the hunt nonetheless.  

And she seemed to be enjoying this chase in particular...

Looking back for a moment, Chomper could see that Ducky had advanced to a mere five body-lengths behind him.  She was rapidly gaining and there was nothing that he could do.

That was when he saw him.

A blur of brown was rapidly advancing on him.  With a sudden realization, he deduced that Littlefoot must be coming to his aid!  With as much speed as he could muster he redoubled his efforts and hurled himself towards his backup.  Then, as soon as Littlefoot was within a few body-lengths of him, he threw himself to the ground.

“Ahhh!”

“Grrr...”

A momentary scuffle ensued as both nipped at one another.

“Ouch!”

Looking back, Chomper could see that both of the fast biters were down.  They had both nipped one another, so now they had to wait the obligatory 30 seconds.  Considering that they both were right next to one another, Chomper assumed that they would begin nipping again as soon as that time elapsed.  Suddenly, Littlefoot spoke to his friend.

“You see, Haven.  Even though you got our head, we also got yours.  You’re not going to win this time.”

Ducky smirked back.  “We will see.  Yep, yep, yep!”

Chomper knew that he had no time to waste.  Resuming his quick pace, he sprinted towards his team’s designated spot.  He would guard the spot and its new acquisition until he was relieved.  It was up to the others now to recapture their own head.  The girls couldn’t win this time!

......

Oh crap!

Spike was rapidly gaining on her as she struggled to keep her footing in the wet vegetation.  She had opted to take a shortcut back to the girls’ spot, but this was proving to be a big mistake.

“Looks like I’ve got you now!”  Came Spike’s triumphant taunt.

Cera cringed.  Up ahead was a long row of thick vines hanging from the trees above.  She would have to go through the impenetrable wall of green if she were going to swim the small stream and make it to the spot in the time.  Her only other option at this point would be to drop the head and try to nip Spike before he could nip her.  And considering how experienced that Spike was at eating... No, getting into a biting contest with Spike was out of the question.  She would have to break through here.

Cera’s face took on a determined frown as she ran full speed at the vines.  She knew that she would have to cut through the vines with one swift and powerful attack and then immediately go into a brief swim.  With that in mind, she shifted her body to a forward position and placed all of her weight upon her hind limbs.  

Then she pounced.

Thud!

In a confused daze, Cera realized that she was not in the water, but was on the ground.  Huh?  Her confused mind questioned.  That was when she noticed them.

The vines!  I didn’t break through the vines!

Still groggy from her tumble, she looked out of the corner of her eye as Spike took the head into his mouth and, with a wink, sprinted off in the direction of the boys’ spot.  She had lost the head.  If her team still retained theirs then they still had hope to regroup and try again, but if Ruby had lost it...  She sat there in silent contemplation as the seconds counted down for her.  12, 11, 10... In some ways this was the most annoying part of the game for her.  9, 8, 7... The idea that you had to wait once you were bitten.  6, 5, 4...  When in reality the better fighter would win even if they were nipped... 3, 2, 1...

All right, everyone!  Cera’s back in the game now!  I am not going to be bested by vines this time!

That was when a sudden boisterous cheer arose from the direction of the boys’ spot.  The distinct sounds of Chomper’s victorious roar and Taunt’s laugh filled her ears.  The girls could not manage back-to-back wins.  They had lost and deep inside Cera blamed herself.  But more than that, she blamed something else.  Something that shouldn’t have stopped her from success.

Cera was overtaken by her annoyance at the vines.  I am a fast biter!  Vines should be no match for me!  

She slowly approached one of the closer vines as the celebration began to die down from behind her. Let’s see how you like this! With a sudden burst of fury she struck out at the vine.

Thud!

The vine showed little sign of damage despite her attack with her sickle claws.

Thud!

Only a small sliver of the vine was removed from her monstrous strike.  Undaunted, she reared back and charged at the vine with all of her speed and strength.

Thud!

Finally the vine was showing some signs of major wear and tear.  With a smirk she reared back and charged one more time.

Snap!

The vine fell from the tree with a slight rustling.  Despite the anticlimactic ending, she felt considerably better.  She had never liked losing games when she was a threehorn and she supposed that dislike followed her into being a fast biter.  However, just like how ramming things would make her feel better back in her leaf-eater days, slicing at prey or carrion would make her feel better in her predatory present.  She always would retreat during her times of anger in order to work it out on inanimate objects or very animate prey in order to avoid the risk of her blowing up at her friends.  For the most part, they seemed to know and recognize this part of her personality and would leave her be during these times of weakness.

“Are you alright, Stern Claw?  You seem pretty mad.  You do, you do!”

Despite herself, Cera had to smile a bit at Ducky’s cautious intrusion.  She noted that Ducky was staying a very safe distance behind her.  Perhaps it would be best for her to put Ducky’s concerns at ease.

“I am alright now, Haven.  I just wanted to attack something...”

After that admission, she could hear three pairs of feet entering the area.  As she turned to face the trio of Breeze, Ducky, and Ruby, she could see that Ruby was about to speak.

“We tried to win, but we didn’t win.  Chomper stole my head.”

Cera snorted.  “Well, the star day boy won the game for his teammates, so I suppose that is nice.”  She paused for a brief moment.  “But the boys won’t be so lucky next time, will they?!”

A chorus of enthusiastic cheers emanated from the assembled females.  Their hopes for back-to-back victories may have been dashed, but they would certainly prevent the boys from winning for a second time.

Absentmindedly, Cera picked up the vine that she had to sliced down from earlier.  As she rolled the relatively rough surface in her hands, she noted how sturdy and robust the vine seemed.  It would take a lot of force to cut through them in one blow.  This thing could even withstand outright attacks!

She barely noticed that the others had arrived and begun to gather around her until Petrie spoke up.

“Me not meaning to interrupt.  But what so interesting about vine?  It not meat.”

Before she had time to respond, Taunt spoke.

“Are you planning on strangling one of us with that?”  He asked in his usual joking manner.

Cera smirked as she turned around.  “Only you, dear!”  

She had to suppress a chuckle as Taunt carefully stepped back.  It was then that she approached Littlefoot with the vine.  He spoke as she came within a body-length of him.

“I was okay with the idea of strangling Taunt, but if you strangle me then I might have to object!”

Taunt made an obscene gesture with his hind claw at Littlefoot’s joke.  In response, Littlefoot simply stuck out his tongue at the orange fast biter.

Cera decided to intervene before the pattern of joke and counter-joke could continue.  “I am not going to strangle you, Seeker, but I do need to see your throat.”  She paused for a moment.  “That is, if I have your consent.”

......

Littlefoot stared at her for a moment as if he were trying to deduce what she had planned.  Eventually, however, he acquiesced to her request.  To bare one’s throat to another predator could either be a show of supreme submission or complete trust.  Cera’s asking for consent first made this a trust issue only and he trusted her completely.  With a firm nod, he confirmed his consent.

He was somewhat disturbed by the sensation of the vine going around his neck from his chin to the top of his chest.  The vines were not itchy, as his feathers prevented direct contact between his skin and the rough vines.  However, they did place an almost uncomfortable amount of pressure on his neck when Cera wrapped the ends of the vine underneath the wrap that she had made.

He gave Cera a curious look, as the others examined the vines on his neck with perplexed expressions.  Deciding to see what he looked like for himself, he walked over to the water’s edge and examined his reflection.  A brown fast biter’s face... his face... greeted him as he stared down at the reflection.  The only thing that seemed out of place was a distinct ring of green covering his entire neck.  It made him look odd, to put it mildly.  He looked like a fast biter who had tried to camouflage himself but decided to give up the effort as soon as he started on his neck.  What exactly was Cera planning?

“That is brilliant, Stern Claw!”

Littlefoot turned at the sudden exclamation from Ruby.  As he had not yet deduced the purpose of his neck wrapping, he made an inquisitive expression at his yellow-feathered friend.

“Don’t you see?”  Cera began.  “It took me many slashes with my claws to break through this vine.  Can you imagine how many strikes that could protect us from in a battle?!”

Littlefoot stared in shock at Cera as the other members of the pack digested this information.  If they had these vines wrapped around their most vital regions, then they would be nearly unstoppable in battle with other fast biters of their size.  Neither neck strikes, groan slashes, or ankle bites would deter them.  They would have an unimaginable advantage.

With a stunned expression, he turned his head to Ruby.  He had felt first-hand what a near-mortal wound could do to a dinosaur and Ruby had dealt with the aftermath.  Her eyes stared back at him with a mixture of happiness and determination.  Both of them knew exactly what this meant for the future.

This changed everything.

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Hidden runner territory:

“Mother!!  No!!!”

Calin winced at the scream of the youngling as he ripped out his mother’s throat.  Hidden Runners were easy to kill when they were no longer camouflaged and he was quickly tiring of this boring operation.  Where was the challenge in killing younglings and mothers?  It was all too easy.

With an unflinching expression he turned his attention to the youngling that had cried out.  Hmmm... Maybe I can make this a bit more fun?

He slowly walked closer to the youngling as the sounds of blood-curdling screams and anguished cries erupted from around him.  The rest of his pack was making quick work of this pack’s communal nests.  However, Calin was simply focused on the task in front of him.  A single youngling was attempting to defend his hatchling brothers and sisters.  How pathetic!  Calin thought to himself.  I think that I will give the little one a lesson before I leave!

Calin approached with slow deliberate steps as the youngling hunkered down and placed his claws in a defensive position.  This proved to be an impotent gesture to Calin, as hidden runners had small claws.  They were specialized for eating small mammals and some plants, not for taking down larger prey.  To have a youngling fast runner act defensive was like having a small longneck try to defend himself against a sharptooth.  Too easy.

Shluck!

“Ahhh!!!”

The youngling cried out in pain as Calin slashed his abdomen open in one swift motion of his sickle claw.  The youngling collapsed to the ground as his intestines splashed onto the damp ground like a freshly caught fish.  His breathing took on a frantic pace as his body went into shock at the catastrophic wound.  This was already enough to ensure a painful death, but Calin wasn’t done.

Shluck!

The screams of the youngling now took on a higher-pitch as Calin ripped into the small hidden runner’s back.  With a swift motion, he threw the youngling away from the nest and proceeded to the hatchlings who were still screaming for the mother who was no more.

“Shall I teach you a lesson, youngling?  It seems the least that I can do considering that I have killed you.”  Calin asked the fallen youngling with mock compassion.  The fearful expression of the dying youngling’s eyes told Calin that he was still aware of him, so he continued with his perverse monologue.  “The world is quite easy to understand.  In this world there are givers and there are takers.”  As he said this Calin bit into one of the screaming hatchlings, drenching the nest and the other hatchlings in blood.  He then swallowed the hatchling whole.  “It is always better to be a taker.”  He then smirked as he noticed tears falling from the fallen hidden runner’s eyes.  This is quite fun!  Perhaps I should do it this way for some of the other nests!   “The givers are only there to serve as food for the takers.”  He then ripped the arms off of two of the hatchlings and threw the severed arms at the now mournful youngling.  As the hatchlings convulsed upon the blood-soaked floor of the nest, he broke the neck of the last hatchling and placed in front of the youngling’s face.  

“You see?  You were born a giver... you were born to die.”  

With a final exaggerated gesture, he forced the hidden runner’s mouth open with his claws and shoved his now dead hatchling brother inside.  He held the hidden runners mouth closed as he convulsed and kicked to no avail.

“I am being generous, you see?  I will let you feel what it is like to be a taker before you die.  Aren’t I generous?”  

He watched as the little hidden runner tried to cry out despite the body in his mouth.  The little one’s suffering and torment must have been enormous at this moment, Calin deduced.  He found this curious as he did not experience emotions in that way.  For him the youngling was just an object to be used for his own amusement.  His emotions simply being weaknesses for Calin to exploit as he saw fit.  Despite the fun he was having, Calin realized that if he were going to try this with some of the other hidden runner nests then he needed to find another nest soon.  Based upon the screams around him, his pack was making quick work of this hidden runner pack.

Time to finish up here.  He affirmed.

With a final sadistic smile, he slashed open the youngling’s throat.  The final spasms of the dying youngling seemed rather unsatisfying after the fun he had just had with the youngling.  It had all gone too quickly. Oh well, there are other nests to destroy.  I have to convince Red Claw of my good intentions.  I see no reason why I shouldn’t have some fun in the process.

As the blood-soaked predator left the nest, he did not see a pair of eyes staring at the scene from the bushes.  Tears clouded their vision and silent sobs were stuck in their owner’s throat.  The little hidden runner had seen everything.

And she would make sure that the other hidden runners knew of this atrocity.


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Review of chapter 53

The Threehorn's are very accepting of the change. It just shows how much this changed Topsy...

So many surprises... :DD For the parents anyway. So... when's the wedding? :p We need treestars, steaks... ^^
Calling a meeting is probably the best option, as well as allowing the sharpteeth to see their siblings. Bringing them to the meeting is not a good idea but necessary... interesting :)

Cera and Taunt... :lol

Littlefoot's grandparents are happy about Littlefoot's "girlfriend". The story about eating other dinosaurs is of course a difficult topic to talk about...

Ducky's siblings got quite a shock, huh? :p

Petrie's siblings too... Though it has a very good emotional part to it :yes
Old scars of Petrie are reopened again. The reaction of his family is heart-warming and tear-jerking. Though who is entering the scene? This can't be good...

Oh, for a moment I thought Rinkus and Sierra would disturb the peaceful scene :p So Guido has hid reunion with Petrie as well, and quite a stormy one at that :)

Tricia is accepting her step-sister as well. What about Topsy's opinion about Taunt? :smile

Oh oh oh... It's good to know that Grandma is willing to protect the sharpteeth if need be but she might wanna think about that twice after Littlefoot is finished...

I say it again: Cera and Taunt... :DD

To repeat what Breeze said: Crap! I wouldn't want to be in any of the nine Sharpteeths situation now... Facing Ali when the grown-ups are listening. Ouch! I'm excited :p

Holy Spiketail! The situation has turned insane. I'm happy to see action yet I'm glad it didn't outright escalate :)

This chapter is utterly great! I might have some critism nevertheless but I can only tell if it's valid critism after I've read the next chapter :yes

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Review of chapter 54:

This chapter continues where the previous left off: The Seven Hunters aren't trusted thus Littlefoot makes a very smart move...

They seem to agree to the definitiveness of their departure. They're ready to move on, to be what they have to be... or aren't they?

Petrie... :o Quite an act of courage...

Whitehorn seems to be capable of leading... I hope the valley defences will not break.

Sierra, Sierra... this scene just proves his dangerousness... I hope Petrie is able to keep his true personality hidden.

I don't know if Ducky's plan is gonna work but it sounds promising. I wonder though... when did Spike get the sticks?

Uh oh... What's Ali up to? She seems to have realised that she miiiight have overreacted a bit in her rage.

Well, you're about to exceed the death toll of Dosu's fic :lol
The battle has undoubtly begun...
Ducky's plan was amazing! Yes, yes, yes! I wonder what Zarc is up to doing against 7 fastbiters, all alone...

Ali has now realised what harm she has done. However, she has also done her object of hatred a tiny little favor which is the first step on the long way to redeem herself...

Well Zarc... guess your pack doesn't have the sort of vow Seeker's pack agreed on. :p

Uh oh... not Shorty and Ali. I hope they will be alright... and I hope you go for the ending of this I would have chosen.

Hmm, seems like Petrie's plan has worked. Now it's up to Volant to do the rest...

It's a funny thought that the Gang is trying to defend the children, being children themselves.
Chomper's rage is fully understandable as is the threehorn's wariness towards the sharpteeth...

Ali in trouble... now that's something I would've done in this situation as well :smile Though now I'm scared... :unsure:

I KNEW you were going to have them save Ali! That's just the best and most impactful of all possibilities you could've chosen here...

Cera sure seems to have something against that fastbiter... Wasn't Shorty wondering where Dinah and Dana were? Now we know... Though even Cera knows that she is better off defending the weak and injured as opposed to having her revenge.

WHAT a battle! I want more! :D Well, I suppose there will be more to tear apart in the next chapter ;)
Great job again! Too bad Calin lives to tell about it :lol

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Thank you very much for your review.  :) I have made the corrections that you have noted.  Damn those typos!  :p

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The Threehorn's are very accepting of the change. It just shows how much this changed Topsy...

Yeah, I was concerned that I had not elaborate on that enough.  Topsy's reaction would have been unthinkable a mere few months ago, but the intervening months have caused him to grow as a person.  The rainbowfaces need some of the thanks for this.

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I say it again: Cera and Taunt... dino_happier.gif

Yeah, those two really compliment one another.  :DD Considering Taunt's personality, tt is probably a very good thing that Topsy can't understand sharptooth.  :unsure:

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To repeat what Breeze said: Crap! I wouldn't want to be in any of the nine Sharpteeths situation now... Facing Ali when the grown-ups are listening. Ouch! I'm excited dino_tongue.gif

Holy Spiketail! The situation has turned insane. I'm happy to see action yet I'm glad it didn't outright escalate smile.gif

Oh yeah, in a way it is out of character for all involved, but when you consider the situation it makes sense.  All of that grief and all of that torment is finally coming to the surface.  Now everyone knows exactly who everyone is and what everyone has done.  There are no secrets anymore.

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Petrie... ohmy.gif Quite an act of courage...

Yeah, Petrie has changed quite a lot as a sharptooth.  He is now capable of doing things that would have terrified him as a leaf-eater flyer.

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Sierra, Sierra... this scene just proves his dangerousness... I hope Petrie is able to keep his true personality hidden.

Oh yes.  Sierra is not in a pack of ambitious sociopaths and opportunists.  He no longer needs to keep his impulses under control.  Especially if the flyer in question is trying to take the role of leader from his ally.  Petrie was wise to keep his emotions in check during the murder.

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Ducky's plan was amazing! Yes, yes, yes! I wonder what Zarc is up to doing against 7 fastbiters, all alone...

Yeah, Ducky's plan was quite effective.  The pack may not have the numbers, but they do have one thing at their disposal: cleverness.  It was certainly used with devastating effect here.

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Chatper 55 was just amazing, Rhombus. All of the eotional stuff had to be gotten out of the way, from the two "We're a lot alike" conversations between Cera/Topsy, and Shorty/Littlefoot/Bron, to Ali's going away conversation with Littlefoot.

It's really good that they we're able to come to some kind of understanding of one another, and that Ali was able to forgive them for what they've done, but it's just sad seeing her go now. I know you said it's about the best conclusion that could happen form this, but I'm still sad about it.

If you remember a week ago, Rhombus, I was so moved by this little chapter after reading it after work, I just couldn't go to sleep. Think I better save these till I wake up again, so I don't get any more insomnia from your writing!

Now for 56, I guess.

Wow, Calin is just being plain sadistic in the latest chapter! 0.0

I know you said you get creeped the hell out whenever you write Colin, because you try to put yourself in your character's heads, but I really enjoyed this! Just the kind of things you'd think him to do. Doesn't really surprise me at this point, honestly :DD

The gang's game kind of surprised me, though. Didn't expect that they'd just start playing with the severed head of one of their kills. Must be one of their little ways to deal with being sharpteeth now, but it just seems like to me it'd freak them out on some level. Oh well, they've been sharpteeth for so long at this point, I guess it's natural.

This is just bringing up weird images of the Gang playing around with Rhett's head, and Ali cheering them on. Kinda weird, like Chomper emerging form Mr. Threehorn's backside, while Tria's telling him to keep pushing. :lol

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Thanks for the review, Vonboy.  :)

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  Chatper 55 was just amazing, Rhombus. All of the eotional stuff had to be gotten out of the way, from the two "We're a lot alike" conversations between Cera/Topsy, and Shorty/Littlefoot/Bron, to Ali's going away conversation with Littlefoot.

It's really good that they we're able to come to some kind of understanding of one another, and that Ali was able to forgive them for what they've done, but it's just sad seeing her go now. I know you said it's about the best conclusion that could happen form this, but I'm still sad about it.

Yeah, Chapter 55 was a chapter for tying up loose ends for the most part.  Now the gang has had a reconciliation with their friends and companions over their role in life.  However, the end result is predetermined.  They all most stay apart from their friends and family in order to spare their safety and well being.  In the case of Ali, this means leaving and having a new start altogether.  Several plot points end in this chapter, although the seeds of new plot points have also been planted.

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Wow, Calin is just being plain sadistic in the latest chapter! 0.0

I know you said you get creeped the hell out whenever you write Colin, because you try to put yourself in your character's heads, but I really enjoyed this! Just the kind of things you'd think him to do. Doesn't really surprise me at this point, honestly dino_happier.gif

Yeah, Calin is unbound now that his disability is known to all and he knows that he is safe as long as he serves Redclaw's will.  He is in a situation where he is simultaneously in a weak position (as Redclaw can retract his support at any time in which case Calin is dead) and a strong position (in that while Redclaw does support him, Calin can do virtually anything without reprisal.)  As Calin is a sociopath, we can expect more horrible things from him in the future.  Putting myself in his mind while writing this chapter was certainly an interesting experience.

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The gang's game kind of surprised me, though. Didn't expect that they'd just start playing with the severed head of one of their kills. Must be one of their little ways to deal with being sharpteeth now, but it just seems like to me it'd freak them out on some level. Oh well, they've been sharpteeth for so long at this point, I guess it's natural.

This is just bringing up weird images of the Gang playing around with Rhett's head, and Ali cheering them on. Kinda weird, like Chomper emerging form Mr. Threehorn's backside, while Tria's telling him to keep pushing. dino_laugh.gif

What self-respecting sharptooth doesn't like a good game of Headball? :DD  Somehow I suspect that the pack won't let their parents know about that particular game.  That conversation probably wouldn't go well.

Topsy:  "That's barbaric!"

Cera:  "Well... uh... Not really when you think about it.  It is just the pinecone game with a head instead of a pinecone."  :unsure:

Topsy:  :anger

Cera:  :bolt

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Wow, FINALLY caught up. Get into a new show, and look what happens. :lol
That was AMAZING! I like how it went from pretty sad to a HUGE battle that left many dead, dying or injured. And I LOVED Petrie's part in it. It was nice to see the aftermath leaving the others talking, and doing a lot of thinking. And, I actually thought you were gonna kill off Ali, and then I thought it would be Littlefoot! I'm glad none of the Pack died. Or Shorty or Ali. Pretty sad about Dinah and Dana, though. That was a nice bit with the Rainbow Faces, too. And now the new problem of the Repressor has arisen. This is gonna end in an exciting way, I'm sure.


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Thanks, CeratheRed. :)  I am glad that you enjoyed the latest chapters.  I hope that you enjoy the forthcoming chapters.
I'm sure I WILL. The fact that the Rainbow Faces are in it already makes it EXCITING!


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I have two main thoughts about this.

1. I imagine Petrie's Sandstorm lie is going to come back to bite him in the tail. His lie had ultimately caused Redclaw to target the hidden runners. Had he not done that, they would have been fine, at least at the time. So what's going to happen if the hidden runners eventually find out that they were targeted due to the words of some flyer named Sandstorm? I'm not sure how vengeful they would be, but I imagine they would not be happy if they were to meet Petrie and find out he orchestrated the whole thing.

This would be a case of dangerous ignorance. Petrie did know he was going to land Calin in trouble, but he didn't seem to think of what other consequences would have come out of it. He didn't consider that Redclaw would want to target any supposed 'opposition' to his leadership and plans. So one little lie that Petrie thought would be restricted to just Calin had ended up with a whole 'village' of sorts, of hidden runners being slaughtered left and right.

So one can only imagine when they find out that they were killed all for a lie. A little white lie that spread into something much bigger. I can see Petrie landing in some really hot water later on once the hidden runners learn that he is the cause of their tragedy. And of course, that will happen if Sierra finds out that Sandstorm never existed and that he had been played by Petrie? In fact, perhaps that's how the hidden runners find out. Sierra learns the truth and he tells the hidden runners Petrie is the reason their loved ones are dead, all just to get back at Petrie. I can see Sierra being so angry that he would do something like that, even against Redclaw's orders.

2. I do have to wonder just what Calin is going to do if he finds out certain hunting details the pack made. Perhaps, most pressing, Cera's slow disemboweling of the children. I'm not sure how into mind games Calin is, but would he try to employ a 'not so different' tactic with her? Calin may not have empathy, but he seems to understand emotion enough to know that he can use it to his advantage. He could shake up his adversaries a little, even if just one of them, if he were to strike the heart. Sometimes emotional pain can be more devastating than a physical one, and Calin could gain the upperhand in a struggle if he made a low blow that targeted the mind.

I'm not sure how he could find out, but if he does, I can see him using that against her. In a one-on-one fight, perhaps Cera is winning, and after she refers to him as a monster, Calin could callously tell her that she is no different, and remind her of what she had done to the baby threehorn. He could tell her that slowly killing the child, and making her suffer, making her scream as loud as possible, would be something akin to what he would do. Even though the chances are unlikely he'd ever find out, if he did, I can see a potential, interesting conversation between him and Cera. It could also be a moment to show more of his depravity.


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1. I imagine Petrie's Sandstorm lie is going to come back to bite him in the tail. His lie had ultimately caused Redclaw to target the hidden runners. Had he not done that, they would have been fine, at least at the time. So what's going to happen if the hidden runners eventually find out that they were targeted due to the words of some flyer named Sandstorm? I'm not sure how vengeful they would be, but I imagine they would not be happy if they were to meet Petrie and find out he orchestrated the whole thing.

This would be a case of dangerous ignorance. Petrie did know he was going to land Calin in trouble, but he didn't seem to think of what other consequences would have come out of it. He didn't consider that Redclaw would want to target any supposed 'opposition' to his leadership and plans. So one little lie that Petrie thought would be restricted to just Calin had ended up with a whole 'village' of sorts, of hidden runners being slaughtered left and right.

That is an extremely astute observation.  When Petrie finds out about the consequences of his actions could be very important also.  If he finds out before the Hidden Runners then he might be in for an interesting conversation with the rest of the pack concerning what his lie has wrought.  He might also have to seek out the hidden runners first in order to head off Sierra in telling his side of the story.  

Now if the hidden runners find out first from Sierra or someone else... Yeah.  That would be unfortunate for the pack.

Alternatively, Petrie might not hear the story until during a battle.  In that case he would be rocked with guilt over the other packs that are now dying because of his lie.  Either way, as I have mentioned before on FF.net, Petrie's lie will have major repercussions in the future.

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2. I do have to wonder just what Calin is going to do if he finds out certain hunting details the pack made. Perhaps, most pressing, Cera's slow disemboweling of the children. I'm not sure how into mind games Calin is, but would he try to employ a 'not so different' tactic with her? Calin may not have empathy, but he seems to understand emotion enough to know that he can use it to his advantage. He could shake up his adversaries a little, even if just one of them, if he were to strike the heart. Sometimes emotional pain can be more devastating than a physical one, and Calin could gain the upperhand in a struggle if he made a low blow that targeted the mind.

I'm not sure how he could find out, but if he does, I can see him using that against her. In a one-on-one fight, perhaps Cera is winning, and after she refers to him as a monster, Calin could callously tell her that she is no different, and remind her of what she had done to the baby threehorn. He could tell her that slowly killing the child, and making her suffer, making her scream as loud as possible, would be something akin to what he would do. Even though the chances are unlikely he'd ever find out, if he did, I can see a potential, interesting conversation between him and Cera. It could also be a moment to show more of his depravity.

It is probably doubtful that Calin would find out about their hunting methods, but he could indeed try to rely on mind games in order to disrupt the pack.  He also might begin to take hints from his last few encounters with the pack.  If so, then that would be most unfortunate for them...

Thanks for the thoughts on the story thus far.   :) I don't want to give any future plot developments away to my readers, but your thinking is definitely on the right track.  I hope that you enjoy the path that I eventually decide to take the story.


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Didn't Colin call Seeker Littlefoot a couple times? Did he catch Seeker's original name at some point, or was that just some little oversight?, or am I just seeing things? :p

If he does find out about the gang's past, I'm sure he could really come up with some mind games then. This does bring up another interesting little thing, too. I wonder if Redclaw is ever going to find out that this pack used to be the leafeater children that killed his brother?
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^ I will have to double-check, I don't think that I had Calin refer to Littlefoot as anything other than 'Seeker', but I could have goofed up a few times.  :confused


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