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The Land Before Time: Far Away Home

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Ah nothing like a new chapter of Far Away Home to brighten the day.  It's a shame I can't do these faster but of course RL demands often get in the way unfortuantely.  Anyways, things are building up so well I can almost taste the radons pulsing in the atmosphere as the Black Dawn approaches! Keep reading and reviewing, and I promise the story will continue to be written and posted regularly.

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Part VI: Confrontation:


“And the sharptooth swiped at me with his vicious claws, missing by so little I could hear the air hissing as it passed my face,” recounted Glide dramatically, “Undeterred, I hit him again and again until he was spent, and we were both dragged beneath the waves.”

“Wwwwowwww,” said the children collectively in wonder.

“What happened next… did you escape!?!” pushed Landar eagerly, hanging on Glides every word.

“No I didn’t… I died a horrible, gasping death,” replied Glide sarcastically.

Xavier stood onto his feet slowly and prodded into the conversation.

“This is a really great story and all… but weren’t you supposed to be telling us about when you met Ruby and the others at the bottom of the cave?”

Aura the swimmer, Kala the spiketail, Nincea the flyer, and even Wayne the threehorn all murmured in agreement.

“Hah, but that’s so boring!” butted in Landar the fourwing, “I wanna hear about the fights and the chases and… and...”

The rest of the children were fairly divided, since there was no denying that when it came to the really dramatic events in the tale Glide certainly did a good job.  Where Sky told his tales much like a creator reveals his best work a single piece at a time, Glide tended to skip the parts he didn’t like and went straight to the blood and the fighting.  This was all swell at first but as it carried on the older Littlefoot began to get annoyed.  So much graphic imagery was being implanted in the children that it wasn’t healthy, and as a loving and concerned parent he didn’t want to see the story re-enacted outside the Glowing Cracks story time.

“My son is right Glide, perhaps you should continue along as Sky would have intended; all this violence isn’t right for such young children,” Littlefoot asserted.

“I’m not asking you to stay longnecks,” snubbed Glide, “if you don’t like what I have to say then you can go swallow dirt for all I care.”

Xavier ground his teeth in anger.  A slight tap on the side from his father told him that Littlefoot was going to handle this.

“Tell me Glide, all these glorious battles and bloody fights you speak of would you tell them the same to your aunt and uncle, to your sister, or perhaps to your youngest next of kin?” the large longneck questioned calmly.

To his credit, the black wingtail actually thought about it.

“Of course I would,” Glide spat, “the world is a cruel and merciless place that devours the unwary like you hatchlings.  I await the day when you all finally know what it feels like to lose the ones who cared for you.  You’ll get to suffer just like me!”

He was ranting now, and it was getting on Littlefoot’s nerves. The longneck had thought maybe the wingtail had changed as he grew older, but if Glide had then it was so minute than Littlefoot wouldn’t notice it if he stepped on it.

“Alright,” replied Littlefoot with a smile, “then I suppose it is time for you to, shall we say… scram.”

Glide’s eyes widened at the mention of Bron’s method of getting rid of him so long ago.

“You wouldn’t dare,” he challenged.

Littlefoot, who was still smiling, rose to his feet and swung back his tail in preparation to strike.  In an instant Glide took to the air and the longneck’s tail wacked the bushes just behind where he had just been, missing on purpose.  The black wingtail circled above the glowing cracks, and hissed at them.

“Some things never change,” laughed Littlefoot as Sky’s unkind brother-in-law disappeared over the tops of the trees.

“You show him dad,” said Xavier proudly.

“But what about the story?” asked Wayne, “it was just getting good, and we’re not tired yet.”

“Yeah,” emphasized Nincea, who looked up eagerly to Littlefoot.

The Landar just rolled his eyes, pouting about the indignation inflicted upon his new role model.

“Well it is quite late,” answered Littlefoot as he noticed the great circle had almost completely disappeared beyond the horizon, “what will your mothers say if I keep you any longer tonight?”

“Please!” they all begged, except for Landar of course.

“Oh alright… I guess I could continue from here,” sighed the longneck in submission.

The children let out a cheer of joy, albight a silent one lest their parents would hear it.

“I remember after our first day in Verdant Valley by the large smoking mountain, finding out from Petrie that Sky was abandoning us…”


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Littlefoot had wandered through the Verdant Valley for most of the morning, observing and enjoying their newest resting place.  It didn’t take long however before he was displeasured at how crowded the place was… even  the children he might have played with seemed hostile to ëoutsiders’ so he spend the day on his own.  As fate would have it, eventually Littlefoot would meet up with Ali on the banks of the main river, bored and disillusioned as well.

“Hey Ali, this place is great isn’t it?” Littlefoot lied, trying to be positive.

“No,” lamented Ali as she hung her head slightly, “everyone’s so mean around here – even to other longnecks like us.”

Seeing that Ali was on the level, he simply decided to concede the truth.

“Yeah, it is kind of stuffy here,” replied Littlefoot, “it’s like they’ve never seen any farwalkers before; just like you were when we first met.”

The longneck bit his tongue as he realized what he let slip.  Recently he had become really close to Ali, but one bad remark and it all could end.

“I know what it’s like to have friends of all types now Littlefoot,” responded Ali with dignity, “I wish everyone else would feel the same though.”

Ali had grown up quite a bit, and Littlefoot was impressed.  So far she had come from her naÔve beliefs of longneck supremacy when they first met that the young female longneck was actually just like a resident of the Great Valley.  It lingered on the edges of his mind, but Littlefoot knew when they finally came home he wanted her to stay.  Remembering the talk he once had with his late father, the longneck was sure that she was the one and that the feeling he felt know was not wrong or a growing pain, but the start of a lifelong relationship that went far beyond the friendship they now shared.  It was so strange, and yet it felt so right.  Littlefoot was sure he was beginning to understand love, but there was so much after the initial admission that he was also intimidated.  Step one was to admit how he truly felt, so he might as well get it over with.

“Ali,” choked Littlefoot as she sapped up water from the fast flowing stream.

“What is it?” asked Ali curiously.

“I think I love you.”

He couldn’t believe he had just said that.  Immediately as the words escaped his mouth he regretted saying it and wanted to take it back, but it was too late.

“Wha…what do you mean Littlefoot?” asked Ali, a bit confused.

Littlefoot almost bit his tongue, but it had to come out.

“We have had so much fun together, I mean we’ve been on so many adventures and done so many things.  Before now I wasn’t sure, but now I think I am.  Ali, I love you and I was wondering if…you know… you want to stay in the valley with us when we finally get home.”

Ali thought about it for a long time, so long that Littlefoot had actually begun to sweat a bit and occupied himself by sipping water from the river.  After a while she smiled and replied,

“Hmm, I think I will.”

“Really?” asked Littlefoot in amazement.

“I’ve walked a long way Littlefoot,” she answered, “but it’s always more fun when I do it with you.”

And on that note she turned and licked the side of his face.  It was so scerene and beautiful Littlefoot felt like he might faint.

“Well I…” he started.

“Littlefoot, LITTLEFOOT!” Hollered Petrie at the top of his lungs as he swooped in and landed on the rocks.

“Petrie…what is it?” inquired Littlefoot with alarm as he momentarily forgot his pleasing exchange with Ali.

It took Petrie a few seconds to catch his breath, but when he did he did not hesitate to yell his news to the world.

“Sky, he abandon us… he fly away!” lamented Petrie as he sat on the brink of crying again, “he talk to other flier and turn all mean!”

“What!?!” peeped Littlefoot and Ali together, more in surprise then in anger.

“What do you mean he’s abandoning us, that doesn’t sound like Sky to me,” stated Ali with a bit of disbelief.  Apparently she didn’t trust Littlefoot’s friends as much as he did.

“Come on Ali, Petrie is telling the truth!  We have to find Sky to clear this up,” Affirmed Littlefoot.

Bounding along, the young male longneck followed Petrie without hesitation leaving Ali behind.  He may be in love, but his first duty was as a leader and he had to make sure that Sky was indeed doing as Petrie proclaimed.  It was a quality that later Ali would come to admire, even if it sometimes came at her own expense.  In a show if initiative and perhaps loyalty the female longneck went the opposite way, intent on warning Spike and Ducky of what had transpired.  As it would turn out, her action would save their lives.


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Chomper’s peaceful sleep was interrupted by a shrill scream.  It was so piercing that the sharptooth was shuttered awake and back into the world of the living by it’s volume.  Somewhere, in the dark of the caves, Ruby was in trouble.

“Ruby,” he shouted almost instinctively, “are you okay?”

He was just awake enough to dodge the vicious swooping of a wing, followed by an aggressive hiss.  Either Glide had turned on them, or there was another more villainous wingtail in their midst.

“Out of the way hatchling,” sneered Barrau, “this is not your business.”

In the half light of the background the two wingtail brothers had restrained Ruby, and with a hand over her mouth were preventing her cries from escaping.  Barrau turned briefly to ensure their extraction was going to plan, before smiling with satisfaction and turning back to Chomper.

“Go back to sleep if you know what’s good for- Ouff!”

The brown wingtail was so concentrated on Chomper’s iron gaze he totally missed Cera, who had silently charged into his side.

“That’s for kidnapping me you bird brains!” exclaimed Cera after pushing Barrau off his feet.

The flyer coiled and snapped back with his double pointed tail, slapping Cera in the face before pouncing on her in a display of dexterity.

“I don’t think so,” added Chomper as he hopped into the air and managed to snap into the wingtail’s forearm.

Barrau screeched with indignity and thrashed about vigorously using his size to his advantage against an unknown number of opponents.  He was sure that Glide would have finished them all off by now, but sometimes you can’t have everything you want.

Thylo watched as Chomper and Cera relentlessly attacked the foreign wingtail, while two more in the background picked up a struggling Ruby from the ground.  She had seen it happen before of course, and since the one taken was always returned there was no reason to be alarmed.  Instead, she watched the fight with childish delight revelling in every strike and slash and charge, taking it all in with wonder.  Gentry, on the other paw, had seen this before too and pretended to be asleep as to not notice.  He had been taken up once or twice, and it wasn’t that big of a deal.

“Had enough, sharptooth?” taunted Barrau as he tossed Chomper aside just in time to block another one of Cera’s charges.  With a strenuous effort he threw her to the ground, overpowering her relatively small body into submission.  Exhausted, she could only sit and watch as Barrau stood alone and triumphant.  The only one who could oppose him now was Glide, who was standing watching the proceedings with a completely neutral look on his face. His treestar tail flicked from side to side and his arms were crossed, but other then that he did not seem to be making any moves to join the battle.  Barrau smirked at him.

“What’s the matter Glide, too afraid to stand up for your friends?  Oh I’m sorry… I forgot you don’t have any,” he taunted, “I’m sure my master is enjoying himself with your sister right now… shall I send him your best wishes?”

Nothing, not even a growl escaped the black wingtail.  He simply stood, motionless, and looked through Barrau as if he wasn’t even there.

“Have you nothing to say son of Allisan, or have you simply given up to the inevitable?” Barrau added with venom.

Again, nothing.

“Very well, if that’s all you’ve got than we will be going now…  Happy ventures hatchlings.”

Spitefully, Barrau followed the twins as they carried Ruby out through the gap in the rocks, passing over the deathly waves as they crashed on the jagged shore.  Chomper and Cera brooded over the futility of their attempts to enact vengeance on their kidnappers.

“Oooo, I wish I was just a bit bigger so I could have crushed that fish breath to a pulp,” fumed Cera as she kicked the dirt.

Chomper took the defeated disheartedly.

“I can’t believe she’s gone…again, and I am too little to do anything,” the sharptooth lamented.

“Don’t get too wrapped up in this mate,” insisted Gentry carefully as he rose from his false slumber, “she’ll be back.  They always bring ëem back when they’re done.”

Having nothing else to draw hope from, Cera and Chomper calmed down and accepted the reality of their situation.

“Oh well… we’ll get those wing-heads or whatever their called when they bring Ruby back!” proclaimed Cera.

“Yeah I guess,” replied Chomper without enthusiasm.



Before long everyone was back to bed, and the whole incident had passed.  The young dinosaurs were fast asleep, and some were even dreaming (Gentry was taking nonsense in his sleep about eggs).  All that is except for Chomper, who couldn’t get over Ruby’s sudden removal.  Something about it tweaked his senses, and he knew something was wrong that he needed to fix.  His friend needed him, and he had to be there for her like she was for him.

“What are you doing?” asked Glide insensitively as Chomper stood on the edge of the rocks, glancing down at the waves crashing on the shore below.

“I’m going to rescue Ruby,” stated Chomper with absolute certainty, “And I don’t care what I have to do to find her.”

“So your plan is to drown in the depths?” added Glide as he crossed his arms.

“Better that then have her get taken away by evil flyers who will hurt her for their own selves,” replied Chomper.

“Hmm,” snubbed Glide, “why would a young sharptooth like you be so loyal to a treacherous backslashing runner like her?”

Chomper growled in defiance.

“Because she is my friend!”

“Tell me the truth,” insisted Glide coldly, “even children don’t risk their lives to help others like this… why are you really doing this?”

“Because… because…,” stuttered Chomper, “Because she is like my sister and my only family!”

Glide leaned back a bit, signifying his surprise.

“Your…sister?”

“Yeah… we may not come from the same nest but since my parents left Ruby is the only family I have left.  She takes care of me when I’m cold and afraid, and she understands when I do sharptooth things while nobody else does.  To me, she is family…”

The revelation was a shock to Glide.  This little sharptooth was just like him… no parents, and only a sister to call family.  The black wingtail was actually beginning to admire the little hatchling.

“So I’m going to find her, whether you or Cera or anyone wants me to or not,” insisted Chomper, and he prepared to jump into the abyss.

“Of course you are,” continued Glide, “but you won’t be going that way I’m afraid.”

“What?” responded Chomper in bewilderment.

“You will be riding on my back,” answered the black wingtail, and he bent over to make space for the little sharptooth, “and we will get back what these villains have stolen from us.”

It was unexpected, and sincerely appreciated.

“Thanks,” said Chomper as he climbed up the black feathers to the crest of Glide’s neck.

“Don’t thank me yet landwalker… we still have a job to do and you’re going to help me do it.”

And so the unlikely team took off from the cliffside, diving into the air pursuing the justice and vengeance they had been denied by fate.


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Great to have you back! :D And the chapter’s a nice long one, too! Thanks! :smile

Just to think out loud a little, I’m rather surprised that Glide, who had been so antagonistic against the gang throughout the first two Acts, was evidently accepted into the Great Valley afterwards. From the looks of things, he ends up doing something to make the gang trust him a lot more. (Don’t tell me what it is!) I’m eager to see how this plays out.

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The young dinosaurs were fast asleep, and some were even dreaming (Gentry was taking nonsense in his sleep about eggs).
That part made me chuckle. :lol

Something I’m a bit confused about: apparently Glide can still fly (or, if he was too injured to fly at any point, he’s healed sufficiently by now to be able to fly again), and there’s an exit in the caves that he can fit through. Seems unusually careless of Eybron to have him imprisoned there, considering that he wanted to prevent Glide from going to the wingtail elders. (If there’s a spoiler here, don’t tell me about it.)

I’m guessing Cera’s going to be pretty mad when she wakes up and finds that Chomper and Glide have left. :unsure:

Ah, yes... Time for the dreaded spellchecking segment of the review: :p

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So much graphic imagery was being implanted in the children that it wasn’t healthy, and as a loving and concerned parent he didn’t want to see the story re-enacted outside the Glowing Cracks story time.
I think there’s a word missing here... Should it be “at story time”?

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The Landar just rolled his eyes, pouting about the indignation inflicted upon his new role model.
Unnecessary word, probably left in accidentally.

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In a show if initiative and perhaps loyalty the female longneck went the opposite way, intent on warning Spike and Ducky of what had transpired.
That should be “of”, shouldn’t it?

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Chomper took the defeated disheartedly.
Should be just “defeat”.



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Just to think out loud a little, I’m rather surprised that Glide, who had been so antagonistic against the gang throughout the first two Acts, was evidently accepted into the Great Valley afterwards. From the looks of things, he ends up doing something to make the gang trust him a lot more. (Don’t tell me what it is!) I’m eager to see how this plays out.

Glide is actually not a resident of the Great Valley... indeed with him around AND Syndra it would be enough to strain the tolerance of the parents to the breaking point.  :lol  Glide is nominally a guest... his real home is of course the Feral Forest (this has been stated in the story).  

As for why he has come to the Great Valley, that is thus far unrevealed, but I assure you it is for a good reason.

Note too that Glide's antagonism has been almost exclusively directed at Sky, with only a passive aborance of his friends.  The only real antagonistic encounter between Littlefoot and Glide would be when Bron gets him to "scram"  :lol hence Littlefoot as an adult doesn't really take him seriously.

Also, you missed a spelling mistake in your quote:

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The young dinosaurs were fast asleep, and some were even dreaming (Gentry was taking nonsense in his sleep about eggs).

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Quote from: Caustizer,Feb 26 2010 on  08:36 AM
Glide is actually not a resident of the Great Valley... indeed with him around AND Syndra it would be enough to strain the tolerance of the parents to the breaking point.  :lol  Glide is nominally a guest... his real home is of course the Feral Forest (this has been stated in the story).
Ah...I never caught that particular detail. :oops

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Note too that Glide's antagonism has been almost exclusively directed at Sky, with only a passive aborance of his friends.  The only real antagonistic encounter between Littlefoot and Glide would be when Bron gets him to "scram"  :lol hence Littlefoot as an adult doesn't really take him seriously.
Still, Littlefoot, Ali, Spike, Petrie, and Ducky were all present the first time Glide attacked Sky, so I wouldn't expect that they'd take him too lightly, or be especially quick to trust him.

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Also, you missed a spelling mistake in your quote:

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The young dinosaurs were fast asleep, and some were even dreaming (Gentry was taking nonsense in his sleep about eggs).
Oh, crap. :slap :oops :oops :oops So much for my editing skills. :rolleyes More evidence that I'm losing it. :crazy



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I'd like to give an update on the next chapter of Far Away Home.  It's taking a while, but since it's so important i don't want to rush.  I can't promise a date but it shouldn't take any longer then another week.

On that note I'd like to apologize for a critical continuity error I just noticed in the story.  In Part II Chapter II Ruby says the line:

“Oh my daddy taught me,” replied Ruby, before adding sadly, “… when he was alive.”

Should be ammended to:

"Oh my daddy taught me," replied Ruby, before adding sadly, "...when he was still running."

As stated in the Rise of Storm Tide Epilogue, he does live to see his children grow up and since Ruby is still a child this line doesn't make sense.

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^ It was Act II, Part III, actually. And didn't I point that out in my review for that chapter? :p

I'm looking forward to the upcoming chapter, but as usual, I can wait. :)



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Hmm, I thought you would put it up on the week before this one... I was quite disappointed.  :(
No rush at all. :yes The longer we wait, the more epic it will be!  :lol:


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Part VII: Eybron’s Culling



A line of potent yellow covered the horizon from north to south, proclaiming to all who looked upon it that the morning was on its way.  The smaller flyers had already risen from their slumber in the Feral Forest, keen to feed before all the larger and more aggressive wingtails filled the skies.  There was almost no wind, as if the darkness was in no hurry to escape the encapsulating resonance of the dawn… and resonate it would, for even the Abyss Lake was hesitant to move its shallow waters anywhere fast.  The Whirlpool had settled down into a dull roar, nulling its usual dominance of the waterline and revealing the glorious and fertile floor of the lake.

The Abyss Lake was an odd and wondrous place, and so it was when the first wingtails found it nearly two dozen generations before.  Being large and inquisitive fliers, it was only natural that such a place of convergence would attract them to stay longer then their normal migratory patterns would allow.  Because of the Lake’s unique drainage it had no rivers flowing out, but rather was emptied purely via the Whirlpool into an as yet unexplored system of caverns below the surface.  Wingtails were not the best of swimmers and sometimes one would dive too low or strike too deep, only to be sucked into the vortex and drowned.  Being somewhat superstitious, the surviving birds believed this place to be a refuge for the dead, where the living did not go.  Whether it was true or not though was anyone’s guess.

Chomper was surprised at how easily their escape had gone.  Riding on Glide’s back the view was quite incredible, and the calm stillness of the air was not lost on him.  It was almost too quiet.

“I don’t know where they have taken Ruby,” lamented Chomper, “I can’t smell her anywhere.”

Glide sneered.

“If Eybron was using you hatchlings for something to do with the Sonicron, it would follow that she was taken there now wouldn’t it?”

The black wingtail certainly had a hard time being nice, even to his friends.  This was something that Chomper was used to though, since he had had a few such encounters with Thudd that went the same way.  Sometimes he wished that the fast-biter would come around, but that could only happen when Thudd came to respect him and in the sharptooth world there was only one form of respect – dominance.  Maybe Glide was the same way, only being friends with those who he could look up to as stronger then himself.  Such a strange way of thinking.

“Whoa!” said Chomper as a sudden drop made him nearly loose his grip.

“Hold on tight sharptooth… if you fall I’m not going back to pick you up,” The black wingtail grumbled.

Suddenly a familiar scent hit his nostrils with a potency not matched by most other dinosaurs, and it was a bad scent.

“I just love flying just before dawn,” remarked the lighter of the kidnappers almost whimsically as he soared up next to Glide’s right side, “it makes me feel fresh and ready to take on the day.”

“And you know what I love about it?” added the darker kidnapper spitefully, who had also flown up on their left side, “throwing little whelps back into the cold dark caves where they belong.”

Both Chomper and Glide growled at the same time, for different reasons.

“Where did you friend-stealers take Ruby?” snarled Chomper, baring his teeth, “tell me before have to I hurt you again!”

Neither one of them balked at the threat; if anything it only made them both even more smug.  Up here in the air was their domain, and the sharptooth and his carrier were at a severe disadvantage… or so they thought.

“Hah, what about you Glide… any words before we drag you back to where you belong?” the lighter one mocked.

The two wingtails made ready to do their signature double grab move, as surely even a fighter like Glide couldn’t take on two of them at once.  For a moment, the black wingtail was silent and stared forward as if he hadn’t heard them.

“Only this!”

In an impressive display of aerobics Glide flipped over onto his back in the air and grabbed both of their legs, just as they moved to do the same to him.  Before either one of them realized what was happening he did a chartwheel in the air, using the momentum to kick away the lighter wingtail sending him spiralling off course and away from the fight.  Glide kept his hand tight on the darker one’s leg and completed his circle in the air with a hard punch directly to his face.  He screeched in shock, and recoiled.

“Not as easy as you though was it?” remarked Glide as he pushed away, and hovered in the air.

The dark wingtail shot him a look of pure hate that was all the more menacing as a droplet of blood ran down his face.  With a feral hiss he dove again at Glide and missed, taking a sharp swat to the body from the black wingtail’s winged tail.  Enraged at his lack of success, he charged again hissing and spitting as he attempted to land a single strike to no avail.

The whole time Chomper hung on for his life, just as Glide had said to do.  The black wingtail may be mean, but he is one heck of a fighter and the sharptooth found himself marvelling at the manuverability and technique his carrier displayed as he engaged the hated kidnapper.  Finally the dark wingtail pushed his luck too far, and jabbed with his wing only to have his hand grabbed out of the air by Glide.  Unable to get out of the black wingtail’s grip the kidnapper flailed and snapped with his beak, but the positioning was too bad to do any damage.  To his horror, Glide was dragging him down further and further towards the water.

“I really hope you can swim…” shined on Glide as the rushing air passed over them both like a hurricane in the steep dive.

Seeing he was doomed, the dark wingtail screeched for help from his brother, who was way too far up in the air to be of any assistance.  With a smoothly practised sweeping motion Glide swung his attacker below him, and with one hard kick drove him down deep into the water.  Pulling out of the dive, the black wingtail didn’t even bother to look back.

“Can I stop holding on now?” asked Chomper with concern and fear.

Glide nodded silently.
“Wow that was totally awesome!” exclaimed Chomper with energy, “you totally kicked their stuffy beaks into the dirt!”

Glide smiled.

“I’m not the reigning champion of the Fish fights for nothing.”

Neither of them caring about the fate of their attackers, the black wingtail and his blue sharptooth companion carried on towards the Sonicron and the rescue of their friend from the clutches of Eybron’s schemes.





It took some creativity, but eventually the lighter of the kidnappers was able to tow his brother into shore.  The dark wingtail was soggy, bruised, bleeding, and above all else was adamantly furious.

“Thanks for the help brother,” he seethed as he shook his wings to dry and dry them off, “you knew perfectly well I was no match for Glide alone and you let him do this!”

“Serves you right,” commented the lighter wingtail, “you should learn to control your temper.”

“Oh, throw me a bone here,” growled the darker one as he wrung out his left wing, “if we don’t get those two back into the caves soon…”

“Then Eybron isn’t going to be pleased,” finished the lighter one, “we should–”

As if death itself was calling out to them, the sound of a dozen ravenous hisses came from the brush nearest to the beach.  Both of the wingtails looked over, only to come face to face with a dozen, hungry eyes.  The fast biters had them surrounded, and some were licking their lips.  Amongst the pack was of course, Thudd… after all he wasn’t about to give up on a free meal.

“Sharpteeth?” uttered the light wingtail in surprise, “but… there aren’t supposed to be sharpteeth here…”

He was right, but being right does not necessarily mean you are safe.  In a moment the fast-biters bounded forward, and a few shrill screeches later it was over.


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It was early… so early in fact that Eybron was having regrets about having his little ëgathering’ at the expense of some extra sleep.  He concealed a yawn with one of his wings, before returning to the task at hand… and that was planning Sky’s demise.  It wasn’t just Sky he planned on getting rid of though, and he had envisioned a kind of culling of sorts.  In his mind there was only the end… the means mattered very little, and that end was today two-fold.  If all goes as planned he will be rid of both of his greatest enemies, and hopefully their cohorts in the process.

The entire thing hinged on the Sonicron of course, Benzon’s ancient horn that survived through the ages and had outlived it’s creator by whole generations.  The great wingtail had discovered that sound was a dimension of its own – a physical force that can be manipulated to an end.  Much like the sounds a prey makes can give itself away to the predator, or the jumping of fish can reveal it to the wingtails above.

“My lord,” informed Barrau as he swooped in, “we’ve brought one of the children as you requested… a runner.”

How curious… he didn’t remember his aides capturing a jungle runner.  All the better to prove his point he supposed, since it could easily be disposed of once it had served it’s purpose.

Ruby’s carriers, a pair of greenish wingtails, came in following right behind her – making sure to aggressively push her forward to make an impression in front of their master.  The fastrunner was looking tired, bruised, and most of all scared.  Gathered in the trees all around were Eybron’s wingtails – twenty six of the largest, meanest flyers she had ever seen.  Every one of them glared down at her with a look of abhorrence and hate, as there existed such a strong racial rift between the wingtails and the jungle runners that, if ordered, they wouldn’t hesitate to kill her on the spot.

The clearing where they stood manifested at the top of a large, arching hill that overlooked most of the Feral Forest, and in the distance could be seen lands far beyond.  The trees stopped before the hill’s peak, being large and imposing enough to hold Eybron’s entire cadre but also to give way to the excellent view.  At the top of the hill sat the Sonicron, and it was the very first thing to catch Ruby’s eye.  The breeze had picked up, and there was a faint whistling emanating from the perfectly concaved tube that only added to the dark eeriness of the scene.  She didn’t like this at all, and as she was moved towards the white wingtail as he rested on the ground, she was more nervous then ever.

“The elders will be arriving shortly… shall I send for Star as well?” mentioned Barrau.

“Yes,” responded Eybron, rubbing his chin a bit in thought as he did some silent calculations about the event to come, “I wouldn’t want my mate-to-be to miss the big show.”

“As you wish,” replied the brown wingtail servant, but before he left he couldn’t resist his curiosity, “If I may ask… what is it that you plan to do my lord?”

Surprisingly Eybron seemed receptive to the question.

“I think I’d like to send our blue friend a little… message.  Unfortunately it will probably be the last one he will ever hear,” relished the white wingtail.

“But, we don’t know where he is… how can we possibly–” began Barrau.

“I have my sources,” interjected Eybron, and as he said so he turned to a distant willow where a large, malevolent flyer sat and watched the proceedings far away from wingtail eyes, “Carry on with your duties Barrau.”

“As you will,” bowed Barrau as he set off.

With that business attended to, the menacing white wingtail turned to his next order – the runner child.

“H-hi,” stammered Ruby as he stepped towards her, “this is a really nice home you make your home in, if I could–”

She was cut off as he gripped the sides of her face, turning her head to face directly towards him.  It was an aggressive and dominating gesture that immediately silenced her vain attempt at a greeting.

“Listen to me,” began Eybron, “you will not speak unless I tell you to, you will not move unless I tell you to.  If you try to escape, you will not only die but you will suffer… am I clear?”

Ruby nodded as she began to shake in fear.

“There are twenty-six of my best wingtails here, watching your every move.  Some of them lost brothers and sisters to your kind – and others, lost their hatchlings as well.  They will show you mercy only as long as I tell them to.  Here, I am the master… a kind of god if you will.  Do you understand?”

Ruby nodded again, this time faintly.

“DO YOU UNDERSTAND!?!” shouted Eybron.

She nodded harder.

“Good,” said Eybron, and he tossed her aside onto the ground lightly, “ensure she remains here while I deal with the council.”

On her face, in the dirt, Ruby began to cry.  For the first time she realized just how far away from home she actually was.





Within fifteen minutes not only had Star displeasurably arrived, but so did the elders and what seemed like half the wingtails in the entire forest.  News spread really quickly in such a small community, especially if it concerned such a great happening.  Nobody really knew what they had shown up to see, nor did they care.  Exciting things didn’t happen in the Feral Forest too often.  As usual, Cinceel and Tenebron were the last of the elders to arrive, positioning themselves surprisingly close to the ground on the branches of a dead tree.  Without the setting of the Elders’ tree, they had to improvise.

“I look forward to your enacting our justice, Eybron,” Cinceel admitted sceptically, “perhaps you would be so kind as to ëreveal’ to us what you plan to do so close to our homeland and without Sky in your possession?”

“Indeed,” added the eldest of the elders, the old male who only spoke when necessary.

A crescendo of whispers broke out amongst the gathered wingtails, and all eyes were now centred on Eybron, who jumped into the air and glided gracefully up to where the Sonicron rested.

“I’m sure you all know about this creation… about it’s past, and possibly a bit about it’s purpose,” started Eybron as he ran a finger down the side of it.

“A useless relic, what’s your point Eybron?” shot Cinceel, who was clearly in a bad mood at being woken up so early.

“Perhaps,” admitted Eybron slyly, “or perhaps just ëmisunderstood…”

And the white wingtail began his speech, selling those gathered on his blighted plan.  

While this occurred, Star couldn’t help but notice the poor runner flanked by two massive wingtails who didn’t seem to care about her obvious distress.  As a teacher and lover of all children – even those of other races – she just couldn’t bear to let it be that way. With a light push, Star soared down to where Ruby was being held.  The wingtails who watched Star for Eybron took care to follow her to the ground.

“Hello, you look like you need a friend,” said Star courteously as she extended a hand to the fastrunner.  The guards looked on in disgust.

Ruby rubbed her eyes, and took Star’s hand.  The scarlet wingtail pulled her in closer, and comforted the runner under her wing.

“Thank you,” whispered Ruby, so the other wingtails wouldn’t hear.

“… and so with the power of sound, I was able to make the earth itself tremble before the wraith of all who would oppose our power.  Today, I will do so again… and when it happens the elements will reach up and drag Sky to his doom… as befits such a traitor.”

The whispers had evolved into uncovered speech and gasps of wonder.  Eybron was playing right into the superstitious nature of his fellow wingtails, and they were buying every line of it.  Even Cinceel, so it seemed.

“Alright Eybron,” the noxious elder said as she yawned, “go ahead and show us this justice you have promised so I can go back to sleep.”

“Very well,” the white wingtail responded.

With a short hop and another glide Eybron was standing in front of Star, and Ruby tried to burrow herself into the scarlet wingtail’s feathers for protection.  He approached and, with a look of lust on his face as he stepped closer to Star, ungentily yanked the runner from under her.  Star did not resist.

“One day you’re going to get what’s coming to you Eybron… mark my words,” Star hissed softly.

“Oh I will get exactly what’s coming to me dear… and that is you.”

He tried to lick her face, but Star was too fast for him and dodged it.  The white wingtail pouted, before turning to the rest of those gathered, Ruby struggling to get free of his grip.

“My fellow wingtails, it is now time for me to give you exactly what you want – justice.”

“GIVE ME BACK MY FRIEND!”

Chomper jumped out from behind the bush where he had been hidden.  He was snarling with his teeth fully bared, ready to kill if he had to.

“Chomper!” Ruby gasped.

“A sharptooth hatchling…” taunted Eybron, “and he’s come to rescue his next meal… how cute.”

 It wasn’t long before Glide emerged as well, tall and weathered as any of the other wingtails present.  It was his presence, as well as the scars and dried blood that still covered him, that caused the crowd of wingtails to go dead silent.

“Glide!” gasped Star with shock.

“And Glide too… come home at last?” teased Eybron.

“I have a bone to pick with you Eybron, and a chance to return all the pain and misery you have caused me,” Glide declared as he cracked his knuckles, “I’ve already put down your pathetic jailors.”

The entire crowd of wingtails burst with outrage, either condemning Glide as a lair or demanding answers from Eybron for the accusations.  This was turning into quite the scene.  It wasn’t until Cinceel screeched at the top of her lungs did order descend once more.

“Eybron…what is the meaning of this? Explain yourself,” She uttered in anger.

Tenebron just shook his head, and didn’t say anything.

“This matter can wait until later,” hissed Eybron, “right now we have justice to be served, starting with this runner… move it!”

The white wingtail shoved Ruby violently, and she grabbed the edge of the Sonicron to prevent herself from falling.

“Not if I have anything to say about it,” piped Chomper as he dashed forward, so fast that Eybron didn’t even notice him while he concentrated on Ruby.  With a practised leap the sharptooth snapped onto the white wingtail’s tail with his jaws.

Eybron snarled, a snarl completely unlike even a wingtail would make when in pain.  It sounded like a bloodthirsty animal.  One hard trash and Eybron had thrown Chomper away, taking a good part of his tail feathers in his mouth with him.

“KILL THE SHARPTOOTH!” Eybron shouted.

The entire place erupted into chaos.  As the guards descended out of the trees they rammed into other wingtails who were fleeing, or otherwise so invigorated that they took to the air.  Only a few actually reached Chomper, but when they did the sharptooth was able to dodge them, for a time.

“Glide,” shouted Star as she pointed at Ruby, “Glide help her!”

So much was happening at once, he didn’t know what to do.  On one wing Eybron had taken a hold of Ruby, and shoved her head into the narrow end of the horn.

“SCREAM!!” he bellowed, “SCREAM OR YOU DIE!!”

Ruby was so confused and in pain that she had burst out crying, and couldn’t hear Eybron’s demands.  Else ware Barrau finally caught up with Chomper.

“Gotcha!” the brown wingtail said with relishment, and slowly he squeezed the sharptooth tighter and tighter until almost all the air had been pushed out of his lungs.  Chomper was dying.

“GLIDE!!” shouted Star, but he couldn’t hear her.

Glide had made his choice.

With a cold, hard blow he connected right with Barrau’s face, hitting him so hard it amounted to an instant concussion.  Another sweep of Glide’s wing and Chomper was out of his grip and on the ground, gasping for air.

Eybron could see the child wasn’t going to do what he wanted, so he took matters into his own hands.  Lowering his head he snapped with his toothless jaws as hard as he could into the frontal lobe of Ruby’s tail, and she screamed.

Glide, who had been on his way up to free the fastrunner, was driven to the ground by the intensity of the sound.  All around the clearing the chaos faded as wingtails covered their ears, or crashed to the ground in surprise.  The sound was so pure, so terrible that none of them could move their arms from their ear holes for fear of losing their hearing.  After a few seconds, the sound stopped.

As if reanimated, all around the clearing the wingtails slowly rose to their feet, some of their ears still ringing.  Even Glide was feeling woozy, and could only remark at the total and complete silence of the moment.  It was if the entire Earth stood still, waiting for the end to come.

Just as it seemed the sound would not return, Eybron smiled as the earth rumbled.  Slowly at first it resonated, but it soon picked itself up as the pitch of the still vibrating Sonicron hit critical levels.  Soon the wave of crushing sound moved on, and carried through into the distance picking up speed.  In it’s destructive path trees feel down, cliffs collapsed, and columns of age old rock shattered their death throes.

As Ruby watched wide-eyed, lines of the tears still covering her face, the wave of sonic death descended towards the Black Mountain, and the Verdant Valley that lied directly on the other side.


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I finally caught up to this story and what can I say? The story is amazing. Vivid descriptions (especially of Wingtail culture) and all around awesome plot line.

Also there are some little mistakes I caught (I am getting tired so Pangaea will probably beat me to it.)

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A line of potent yellow covered the horizon from north to south,

"Potent yellow" sounds rather odd

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nearly loose his grip

Should that be "lose"?

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Ohh, this was a good chapter. :yes I had one of my little adrenaline rushes reading this chapter, right about when Thud’s pack attacked the wingtail jailers. And what a place for a cliffhanger! :wow

You know, even though I basically already knew how the Sonicron worked, Eybron’s demonstration in this chapter was awesome. Extremely well described, and to those readers (or characters) who don’t yet understand it, it illustrates the mechanism very clearly. (I felt horrible for Ruby, though. Poor thing. :cry)

It’s a little depressing that the sharptooth world is so devoid of altruism and friendship, but I really like how you’ve portrayed their society as being markedly different from the leafeaters’. You’d make a good xenofiction writer. (Actually, considering what you’ve already done with the wingtails, I suppose you are one.)

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"Potent yellow" sounds rather odd
I kind of liked that choice of words myself. :p Serris is right about the loose/lose thing, though (which, by the way, I didn’t notice myself).

By the way, Serris, I may be the (self-)designated human spellchecker for this story, :P: but you are more than welcomeónay, encouragedóto point out things that I miss. :)

Speaking of which...it’s that time again, I’m afraid. :p (I’m trying a new style of emphasizing the parts of quotes that need editing. Tell me if you prefer it over my previous method of underlining.)
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“Not as easy as you though was it?” remarked Glide as he pushed away, and hovered in the air.
Should be “thought”.

I noticed a number of instances in this chapter where you shifted into telling the story in present tense. This works okay for some narrative statements, but other times it just sort of causes dissonance with the rest of the narration. The next three quotes are examples that I think you should change to past tense (there are also some spelling errors):
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The black wingtail may be mean, but he is one heck of a fighter and the sharptooth found himself marvelling at the manuverability and technique his carrier displayed as he engaged the hated kidnapper.
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The black wingtail may have been mean, but he was one heck of a fighter and the sharptooth found himself marveling at the maneuverability and technique his carrier displayed as he engaged the hated kidnapper.

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If all goes as planned he will be rid of both of his greatest enemies, and hopefully their cohorts in the process.
Should be “went” and “would”, respectively.

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The entire thing hinged on the Sonicron of course, Benzon’s ancient horn that survived through the ages and had outlived it’s creator by whole generations. The great wingtail had discovered that sound was a dimension of its own – a physical force that can be manipulated to an end. Much like the sounds a prey makes can give itself away to the predator, or the jumping of fish can reveal it to the wingtails above.
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The entire thing hinged on the Sonicron of course, Benzon’s ancient horn that had survived through the ages and had outlived its creator by whole generations. The great wingtail had discovered that sound was a dimension of its own – a physical force that could be manipulated to an end. Much like the sounds a prey makes can give it away to the predator, or the jumping of a fish can reveal it to the wingtails above.
Also, this isn’t necessarily a mistake, but I don’t understand what a prey animal alerting a predator to its presence has to do with sound being a physical, manipulatable force, or how they are analogous. :confused

In the following two quotes, all of the highlighted words should be “its”.
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All the better to prove his point he supposed, since it could easily be disposed of once it had served it’s purpose.
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“I’m sure you all know about this creation… about it’s past, and possibly a bit about it’s purpose,” started Eybron as he ran a finger down the side of it.

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The entire crowd of wingtails burst with outrage, either condemning Glide as a lair or demanding answers from Eybron for the accusations.
Should be “liar”.

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Else ware Barrau finally caught up with Chomper.
Should be “elsewhere”.

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Lowering his head he snapped with his toothless jaws as hard as he could into the frontal lobe of Ruby’s tail, and she screamed.
Again, not so much an error as a quizzical observation: I’ve never heard the term “frontal lobe” used to describe part of an animal’s tail.

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In it’s destructive path trees feel down, cliffs collapsed, and columns of age old rock shattered their death throes.
Should be “its” and “fell”, respectively.

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As Ruby watched wide-eyed, lines of the tears still covering her face, the wave of sonic death descended towards the Black Mountain, and the Verdant Valley that lied directly on the other side.
Should be “lay”.



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I'm surprised nobody has ventured a guess as to who Eybron's 'source' is on where Sky was to be found.

If this chapter was dramatic, the next one will probably be more 'revealing'.

One thing I really like about this chapter is that, to Littlefoot and Sky's group Glide is a villian, while to Ruby and Chomper's group he is turning into a hero.  This could explain why in later times he is tolerated in the Great Valley as a vistor - because there are some who regard him as a friend.

It's very interesting the contrast between Littlefoot's and Ruby/Cera's group in that they both regard the main villians of the story very differently and provide a different perspective in every chapter  :angel


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^ Are you dropping hints again? Shame on you! :p

I have wondered why Eybron is so confident that he will succeed in killing Sky on this particular day, but I haven't thought about who could have told him where he'd be. In any case, it's not in my nature to openly postulate on events or details of a story that, were they to be revealed by the author, would be considered spoilers (which, as I'm sure you already know, :p I hate). If you'd like to hear predictions from me, you can request them by PM.



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As I expected, it was an awesome chapter! Finally some more action. :D
I actually never thought about Eybron's 'source'. But I guess the next chapter will be, as you said, more revealing to answer this question.  :smile

So, when will the next chapter be up? *is excited* :3


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I don't know when the next chapter will be completed, since the speed of completion is based on two things:  (A) How busy my University schedule is, and (B) How inspired I am to continue with the story.

I can guarentee though that if you finish that Sky, Star valentines picture it will probaby be done sooner because I'll be inspired all the more :angel


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Hehe, I don't want to force you, but this chapter clearly inspired me to work on that picture. :smile


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I think I feel like working on Far Away Home tonight.

Is it just me or does the GOF feel dead around this time of the year?


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^ I can't tell if it's a yearly pattern, but I was thinking the same thing. :(

Good to know you're making progress on the story, though. :smile



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It could be that many GOF members are college students and they're just busy at this time, though I'm sure we'd see the same pattern in the fall if this were the case :unsure:.


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Part VIII:  Sky’s Secret


Littlefoot was so agitated he didn’t even notice his fatigue as he finally topped the wall of the basin that held the Verdant Valley. He made a breakneck pace in the direction Petrie alluded to and the flyer was with him, keeping up and occasionally guiding on.  The great circle was just beginning to rise, reminding them both that they had stayed awake all night chasing their friend.  Once the Verdant Basin wall was behind them the flyer and longneck continued onward into a near desolate span of land known as the Steppes. Here, the poisoned gases spewed by the Black Mountain deposited often and excessively making it difficult for plant life to grow.  Fortunately these emissions were not immediately toxic to living things, so a simple passer through could expect to come out as healthy as they came in… provided they made it out that is.  The Steppes was known for its sharpteeth, and though Tyron held no sway here in the best of times a herd could only hope to avoid attack by sticking together.  For a small group of adolescent dinosaurs, venturing through such blasted lands could be the last, fatal step they ever make.

“Me soo tired,” whined Petrie as he landed on an outcropped rock, and flopped onto his stomach.

“Me too Petrie,” agreed Littlefoot, “but we have to keep going… we have to find out why Sky left us.”

Admittedly, the task was a daunting one.  The Steppes were a massive rocky place with any form of vegetation few and far in between, but…

“Hey,” thought Littlefoot out loud, “since there aren’t many trees… there aren’t many places he could land. Petrie, fly up and take a look at all the trees you can see, he has to be around here somewhere.”

It was good thinking, but Petrie didn’t care as he was so tired the only thing he could think about was curling up and going to sleep.  Reluctantly, the flyer obeyed and after a moment or two he was back up in the air, scouting for their friend.

Just as Petrie had all but disappeared from sight, Littlefoot had another thought.  He remembered when Ali and him had looked for Sky before… and they had found him on the Great Wall, overlooking the sunset.  Since it was just breaking dawn, it would make sense that the blue wingtail would be resting in a place where he was facing the exact opposite direction – towards the retreating night.  A place kind of like…

“That spire right over there,” finished Littlefoot as he his eyes met the greatest likeness of the Great Wall he could hope see.

The rock was shaped similar to a rough cone emerging from the rocky desert like a needle piercing the heavens.  While it was certainly imposing enough, the dull orange of the dawn light portrayed it as probably the last place a young and alone longneck would want to go.  Nonetheless, Littlefoot walked onward cautiously in case there might be any lurking sharpteeth or other enemies.  A dull roar rang out through the air from far away, as if the death knell of some distant and forgotten leaf-eater had come, and it certainly didn’t help calm Littlefoot’s nerves.

Overall the longneck found he was liking this setting less and less the deeper he travelled into it… it reminded him of the Mysterious Beyond back home he had ventured through time and time again on his past adventures. More specifically though, this place reminded him of his mother… and the sharptooth.  There was no more hurtful memory then that, and yet there was something else he remembered too – fear.  Littlefoot just couldn’t shake the feeling that something terrible was about to happen, but what it was he could only guess.



It took Littlefoot an hour to reach the rock, and fatigue was really starting to set in.  The great circle had almost completely risen over the horizon, and he hadn’t had a minute of sleep.  Fortunately Petrie had seen him and caught up with his findings.

“Me not see him anywhere,” sighed Petrie, just barely keeping aloft.

“I think I know where he is, follow me Petrie,” Littlefoot proclaimed.

The pair rounded the rock until they were facing the side bent towards the darkness.  Littlefoot narrowed his eyes, and eagerly scanned the ledges towards the top.  The light from the dawn was so bright and it was getting brighter by the second, making it almost impossible to see.

“I see him, he up there… look!” shouted Petrie.

At that moment Littlefoot noticed Sky too, resting near the top far out of reach of any potential predators. He couldn’t tell whether the large flyer was still sleeping, or staring down at him intently.

“Sky, Sky we’re down here!” called out Littlefoot.

Up above Sky yawned, breaking out of a thankfully dreamless sleep.  To his dismay, the longneck was down below, calling up to him.  His heart sank… Littlefoot had followed him.  Silently the blue wingtail lamented the adolesant’s loyalty – he was so naÔve to think that he could leave Littlefoot and his friends so easily.  With a depressed look, the blue wingtail glided down to the ground, and landed in front of Littlefoot.

“Finally, we’ve been looking all over for you,” said Littlefoot with a smile, trying to look to the positive side of the situation.

Petrie on the other hand, cowered in fear behind one of Littlefoot’s back legs afraid that Sky might start yelling at them again.

“What are you doing here Littlefoot, why have you followed me?” the blue wingtail questioned without anger, but with what sounded like regret.

“Because we’re friends,” answered the longneck without hesitation, “and friends stick together, always.”

Sky sighed, and rubbed his head briefly.

“You shouldn’t be here,” he concluded, “do you have any idea how dangerous this place is?  If you had, then you would understand why I had to leave you and your friends back in the Verdant Valley, where you would be safe.”

“That’s it?” questioned Littlefoot, “we’ve come all this way just because you wanted us to be safe?”

“That is correct,” answered Sky with a bit of dignity.

“But what about you’re far away home,” urged Littlefoot, “what about the place where you were supposed to be taking us?”

“The Verdant Valley is your home now,” hissed Sky, “and you should have stayed there with your friends.”

 Littlefoot felt a pang of anger rising.

 “But…but… what about Cera and Chomper and the others… why didn’t we go back for them if all you wanted for all this time was for us to all be safe?”

“Littlefoot… ”

“We could have gone back to look for them… we could have stayed in the Forgotten Forest with the rest of my dads herd… I thought you had a good reason for bringing us along instead of just dropping us off whenever it suited you; I thought we were going somewhere important!”

“I am, but where I am going you cannot come with me,” Sky responded hardly.

“What do you mean we can’t come with you?” Littlefoot asked, trying hard to contain the feelings he felt inside, “If we couldn’t come with you then why didn’t you just leave us back in the Great Valley with our families and our friends?”

“You and Ali were stubborn… I wanted to go alone but you hatchlings wouldn’t leave me to my own…” Sky countered.

At that moment Littlefoot stopped, this was going too far.  He sat in silence to cool off for ten seconds, then twenty, then a whole minute.  Finally, he gathered himself to ask the question he had been yearning to ask the entire trip.

“Sky…” the longneck began quietly, without a trace of spite or anger, “what is really going on here?  Why are the sharpteeth still chasing us, and why is your own kind attacking us… Why is my father dead?”

Sky knew the answer, and Littlefoot could tell by the way he turned away that he was hiding something… a big something.

“Not us,” lamented Sky, “it’s… me.”

Littlefoot did not respond… it wasn’t needed.

“Long ago, when I was young,” began Sky with his back still turned, “I did a terrible… terrible thing.”

There was another few seconds of silence, as Sky wiped away a small tear and turned towards his friends.

“I was young, and I was angry.  All I wanted… the thing I wanted most in the world was to be together with the one I loved… another wingtail named Star.”

Sky used his wing to give a remissive gesture.

“But the elders, when they heard about the fights me and her brother got into… they separated us forever.  Following this heart wrenching act, they then had the nerve to put me to service for them in a ëquest’ without any reward.  It was a dictatum, a method to keep me away from that which I desired most… and for that I resented and hated them with every feather on my wings.”

The blue wingtail clinched his fists, matching his actions with his words.

“My quest was to find a holy object to my kind, a site of the Creators that had been long lost to us over the generations – a creation with unparalleled power of vision into all areas of the world – a place  known as the ëEye of the World’,”

For some reason the words sent shivers down Littlefoot’s spine, even though he hardly knew what they meant.

“And I found it,” proclaimed Sky, “I found it, but after what they had done to me there was no way I was returning to the Feral Forest with what I knew.  For splitting me up with Star and forcing me away I wasn’t about to do their dirty work… and so I… I,”

Sky turned away again, unable to complete the thought.

“You told someone else,” finished Littlefoot, now catching on to what exactly was going on, “but who did you tell?”

“After all I have taught you Littlefoot, after all the lessons you have learned the answer to that question should be clear…” Sky scolded, unwilling to reveal the truth.

Taking the lead, Littlefoot thought long and hard about everything, drawing on every memory and every thing that had been said and done up to this point.

“I see you are one tooth short of a full set,” Sky remarked as he eyed Chomper’s missing tooth.

“His name is Tyrus, he is the son of the tyrant king Tyron,” Sky said hurriedly.

Redgar paused as the two wingtails sat helplessly before him, yet he had no enemies here.

“Do you understand why I had to leave you and your friends back in the Verdant Valley, so you would be safe!”

… From the sharpteeth.

“You told them,” said Littlefoot in shock, “you told the sharpteeth!”

With a look of supreme sadness, Sky shook his head in acknowledgement.  It was true.

“You’ve been on their side this whole time,” continued Littlefoot in rage, “you’re the reason the wingtails are chasing us… you betrayed them!”

“Littlefoot it’s not like that I can explain…” began Sky.

“So the sharpteeth could see everything… they could see the entire world and attack wherever they wanted.  That’s how Tyron has been taking over… that’s why my father is dead and why those fast-biters didn’t kill you when they had the chance, because you are on their side!”

“I didn’t want any of this to happen Littlefoot, you’ve got to believe me,” Sky insisted.

Littlefoot would have none of it.

“But what I don’t understand is where you are going,” he growled, “… and why.”

There was no point in trying to keep it in now, Sky’s secret was out.

“Just before you two children came to me on the Great Wall, I was met by a fast-biter that I had not seen for a long time… a villain by the name of Redgar.  He told me, through a translator, that the Tyrant King now had need of my Occular, and that he was willing to forgive my betrayal.  I had removed it from the Eye of the World after I saw the terrible, terrible purpose he was using it for.  Understand me Littlefoot, I had no choice but to obey or else I would have been killed on the spot.”

“So what,” countered Littlefoot, “the Occular is gone and you lost it, so what are you doing out here and why did you abandon us?”

“…running,” the wingtail whispered.

There was a tinge of fear in Sky’s reply, and Littlefoot couldn’t figure out why until he heard the sound of a dozen, ravenous hisses behind him.  Turing around the longneck came face to face with a pack of snarling, hungry velociraptors with their teeth fully bared.  At there head was the one Sky had mentioned, Redgar.

The sharptooth approached viciously, stalking towards the now cowering Littlefoot with a sense of grandiose accomplishment.  There was no need to rush after all, for Redgar would finally get his wish and remove Sky for his deception, and in the process get a nice feast on longneck flesh.

Littlefoot backed up, holing himself against the rock trying his best to keep away from the slobbering pointed teeth bearing down on him.  In a few moments it would be all over.  Nobly and defiantly, Sky stepped in front of him and hissed, at best delaying the inevitable.

Redgar cackled at the gesture, and it was a truly menacing sound coming out of a fast-biter.  Lashing forward he snapped at the air, just missing Sky’s face.  The wingtail did not move… surprisingly he looked quite ready to die.

“Come and get us, slaves of the tyrant,” Sky proclaimed bravely and foolishly.

With a twitch of his head, Redgar signalled his pack to attack.

Suddenly, their screeches were drowned out by a horrible, crackling boom that shook the ground in its fury.  Sky could tell that it was not one of Eybron’s false earthshakes… this was the real deal.  A flash of bright red illuminated the dawn sky with brightness so intense it even distracted the fast-biters.

One by one they all turned and faced the source of the thunderous roar, and the sight was almost indescribable. It turned out that it was Sky who could describe it best.

“By all the mothers and fathers…”

A mushroom cloud of colossal proportions rose high up into the sky, it’s errie red afterglow still lighting up the landscape.  The Black Mountain had exploded.


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Eybron’s goal had been to create an earthshake with the Sonicron, and hopefully catch Sky off guard while he was still sleeping and crush him under the weight of wherever cave or tree he had been sleeping.  It was a crazy, insane plan that only had the slightest chance of working, but it sure made an impression on those who needed impressing.  The wingtails now had a weapon, and they could use it against anyone they chose… the ultimate power over all living creatures.

The white wingtail knew that many other dinosaurs would die in his earthshake, but he reasoned that they were necessary sacrifices considering how valuable Sky was to Tyron's plans.  Eybron’s hate of the Tyrant King was so deep and ingrained in his mind that the elimination of Sky was only a stepping stone towards a much greater goal – the final end of Tyron’s domain.

Eybron’s plan ended up not turning out as he expected.  The sonic shattering wave travelled through the bedrock breaking it up and triggering mass collapse, but the impact was directed away from the Verdant Valley by the presence of the massive volcano – the Black Mountain.  For millions of years the active volcano had been building it’s energy, readying itself for it’s next big eruption within a couple hundred thousand years or so.  The earthquake from the Sonicron sped up this cycle exponentially, and the volcanic cap on the mountain was broken, triggering the direct collapse of the eastern face.

The result of this break away was a cataclysm of epic proportions, an explosive outburst that annihilated the mountainside and burst directly up into the air.  The residents of the Verdant Valley stopped their daily business to look to the heavens, watching in marvel as the Black Mountain displayed its earthly power like prehistoric fireworks.  It would be the last thing they would ever see.  The ash cloud soon cooled, and in one fluid motion the pyroclastic cloud fell from the sky and descended down the face at over supersonic speeds.  Before the hundreds of dinosaurs knew what was happening, the rolling cloud of death was upon their valley, and soon erased it from existence.

Within a space of only ten minutes, the Verdant Valley and all its inhabitants were wiped off the face of the Earth.





The fast-biters fled in fear. The cloud had not only hit the Verdant Valley, but now it was heading their way too, destroying everything in it’s path.

“Littlefoot, Littlefoot … what we do?” begged Petrie as the Sky and the longneck continued to stare at the eerie sight.

“I… I… don’t know,” stammered Littlefoot in fear.

“We won’t be safe here Littlefoot,” informed Sky, “we have to–”

“Littlefoot, over here!” came a call from the bottom of the spire.  It was Ducky.

Ali, Ducky and Spike had followed Littlefoot’s footprints, and eventually tracked him to the big rock.

“Oh no…” whispered Littlefoot.

His friends would be killed by the column of rock.

“There is a cave over here,” stated Sky hurriedly, “we have to get in here or else we will be at our end.”

“Ducky, Ali, Spike… everyone get up here NOW!” shouted Littlefoot, and they obeyed with terrified glances backward as the cloud grew closer.

Barely soon enough, the entire group of them had crammed into the cave that was little more then a hollow in the rock.  It was all they could do.

“Brace yourselves!” yelled Sky.

And with a terrible, thundering roar like nothing any of them had ever heard or felt before, the pyroclastic cloud slammed the other side of the spire rock, knocking some of them off their feet.

The combination of the shock of being tossed off his feet, the betrayal of his best friend, and his own fatigue was too much for Littlefoot to bear, and as soon as he hit the rocky ground of the nook-cave he passed out.


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Nice! You captured the raw power of a pyroclastic flow perfectly in your writing.

I wonder when the destructive power of the Eye of the World will be shown...

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Now for some errors I found:

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poisoned gases spewed by the Black Mountain deposited often and excessively making it difficult for plant life to grow.
Using both "often" and "excessively" at the same time sounds redundant

"Poisoned gases" sounds strange to me but it works.

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The Steppes was known for its sharpteeth
"was" should be "were

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“Me soo tired,” whined Petrie as he landed on an outcropped rock, and flopped onto his stomach.
Was that intentional that you added an extra "o" to "so"?

Also, the comma seems unneeded.

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“Hey,” thought Littlefoot out loud, “since there aren’t many trees… there aren’t many places he could land. Petrie, fly up and take a look at all the trees you can see, he has to be around here somewhere.”
"Thought" may not be the best choice of word here.

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Reluctantly, the flyer obeyed and after a moment or two he was back up in the air, scouting for their friend.
I think a comma may be needed after "two".

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He remembered when Ali and him had looked for Sky before…
"him" should be "he".

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“That spire right over there,” finished Littlefoot as he his eyes met the greatest likeness of the Great Wall he could hope see.
"Finished" seems out of place as Littlefoot did not speak before saying that.

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The rock was shaped similar to a rough cone emerging from the rocky desert like a needle piercing the heavens.
This sentence sounds awkward. I like the simile though.

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Littlefoot had followed him. Silently the blue wingtail lamented the adolesant’s loyalty
"adolesant" should be spelled "adolescent"

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“But what about you’re far away home,”
"you're" should be "your"

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Forgotten Forest with the rest of my dads herd
"dads" should be "dad's"

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The blue wingtail clinched his fists, matching his actions with his words.
"clinched" should be "clenched"

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A mushroom cloud of colossal proportions rose high up into the sky, it’s errie red afterglow still lighting up the landscape. The Black Mountain had exploded.
"errie" should be "eerie".

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For millions of years the active volcano had been building it’s energy, readying itself for it’s next big eruption within a couple hundred thousand years or so. The earthquake from the Sonicron sped up this cycle exponentially
Both uses of "it's" should be "its".

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watching in marvel
This line sounds kind of awkward.

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Before the hundreds of dinosaurs knew what was happening, the rolling cloud of death was upon their valley, and soon erased it from existence.
I think replacing "soon erased" with "erasing" sounds better.

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destroying everything in it’s path.
"it's" should be "its"

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