No offense again, but it's not any funnier at all. In fact, I don't think it even counts as a YTP. Sorry if I sound harsh, but it needs A LOT more work. =\
If I were to give you a suggestion, I'd suggest looking at other people's YTPs before you actually make one of yours. That should give you an idea of what a YTP is
supposed to be like. And try not to use TOO much text in a YTP (like what you just did), unless it's necessary to do so.
