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And yet it is only in a tragedy when the best of some people can be brought out.  :p Good chapter, I guess I still need to continue proof-reading, but it doesn't change how good this is. I really like how you've explored the reactions of plenty of characters here, its good to see.  :DD


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Thanks for the flowers, sir Toby :lol:
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Well, meet a new OC of mine :lol
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Chapter 17: The Stranger/Trapped in the Cave

A lot of blood oozed out of the wound. The sharp rock had torn deep into Cera's back. Littlefoot  pulled it out of the wound causing Cera to utter a yelp. Her legs became weak and she sunk to the ground.
"Cera! You no must give up!" Petrie squawked.
"You can make it, yep, yep, yep!" Ducky confirmed.Cera tried to get to her feet again, tortured by the pain. Then, the earthshake suddenly hit them witheven more force...

The Flyers made it to the others. Everyone pulled themselves through the earthshake; even Grandma managed to keep her foothold. Gathering at the beach, the herd listened to what the Flyers had to announce.
"Four children are missing!" Petrie's Mother shouted from a distance.
"Where's Cera?!"the old Threehorn threatened.
"Each of them is a different kind!" Pterano spoke up. "They ran into the cave while the other children were waiting for us on the ledge of this cave where they were safe!"
"So why didn't ya follow them?!" the Threehorn thundered.
"First, because all of them together would have been too heavy! Second, because the path they chose to flee has collapsed for the most part!" Pterano replied cooly. "The path will probably be impassable after that heavy earthshake!"
"Oh no..." Ducky's Mother whined.
"On top of that, a huge rift has opened and is throwing up lots of fire. It's too dangerous to head to the cave for now," Petrie's Mother added.
"I consider it best if we wait until the situation passes and calms down," Grandpa proposed.
Just then, a Bignose stepped into the circle that the grown-ups had formed.
"You'll have to wait a fair while until the fire from out of the earth stops."
Immediately, agitation and anxiety erupted among the dinosaurs.
"Oh yeah!?!" the Threehorn ranted. "Who are ya and what gives you the right to disturb us with your talltales!?!"
"Stay calm, Threehorn. My intention is NOT to disturb you or to 'lie' to you as you insinuate. It's quite the contrary actually. I want to warn you."
"As if we haven't already endured enough catastrophies and threats," someone hissed behind their backs.
"Warn us from what? 'Nother pack of starving Fastbiters?" Cera's Father questioned, bored. Grandpaand Grandma exchanged meaningful glimpses.
"Once the land that I called home since I hatched was a lush and green place," he spoke."Yet everything began to change... Earthshakes piled up as well as many other things, strange andimpossible to explain... watering holes dried up, the ground became cracked. Whole region seemedto raise and sink plus the ground was quite warm."
"It has been the same with our homeland," Grandpa exclaimed.
"I assumed that. Anyway, one day a terrible earthshake happened. I was some distance away fromit at that time, luckily, so I only came up with a fright. I was told that countless dinosaurs had died because of it so I moved to where the catastrophy was said to be worst. I was shocked by the sight."
"He's an advanced story-teller," Grandma whispered into Grandpa’s ear. Grandpa had been a story-teller himself in his younger years; telling stories to other dinosaurs whilst roaming the open world.
"Where there was once land, was now water. A wide, water-filled rift had appeared out of nowhere, it looked like a scar in the landscape."
"Pah! He lived close to the Big Water for sure!" the Threehorn rumbled.
"By no means, my friend. The Big Water was a good few days' walk away."
"Humpff! He's lying, anyway!" he snorted.
"Ahem... Iëll continue... Shortly after the earthshake, fire mountains and fire pits appeared everywhere, completely destroying the land. I searched desperately for a way out of this cursed regionyet Ihad to notice that the rift had cut a big part of the region."
"What did you do?" Mr. Clubtail asked, interested.
"I swam. Nearly got eaten by a Swimming Sharptooth though!"
"Was did you do next?" Ducky's Mother questioned, excited.
"Well, I travelled through the land hoping to meet someone able to explain what had happened. Many Cold Times had passed until I finally encountered two Rainbowfaces knowing the answers to my qustions. Though they weren't willing to tell them at first. Eventually..."
"Get to the point!" the Threehorn bellowed. "We have better things to do than to listen to your pathetic story!"
"Oh really?" the Bignose asked challanging. "Examples?"
"We... uuhm..." the Threehorn stuttered, clearly cornered. "We... well.. uhm... we need to find our kids!"
"Alright... so the Rainbowfaces had told me that these events were only the beginning of a hugecatastrophy that will change our world for good. The land will be cut up, the parts escaping from each other.New Big Water will grow!"
"And what happens when they arrive at the end of the world, clever dig?!?" the Threehorn retorted inanger.
"Our world has no edge, it has no end. We live on a globe. Didn't you all know that?"
"YOU WANNA TAKE THE PISS OUT OF ME?!? Cera's Father thundered. "Stop disturbing us with yourcrazy stories and GET OUT OF MY WAY!!!"
"I'm telling the truth!" the Bignose protested.
"I have to admit that this is hard to swallow," Grandpa said sounding really apologetic.
"Our world is a huge land surrounded by lots of water! Period!" the Threehorn roared.
"That's a misconception! Our world is a globe! I can show you!"
"Our world... a globe... pah!!!" the Threehorn mumbled to himself though everyone heard what he's just said. "Right! Prove it, smart aleck!"
"Don't be so stubborn Threehorn!" Grandpa reminded him.
"He's just trying to offer help but you're being so unfriendly!" Grandma criticised.
"Longnecks..." he grumbled stomping away from them.
"Well, just ignore him. We've been through a lot and our kids might be in danger. He's always like that if something's wrong with his family but once you break his hard shell he'll show his soft side,"Grandpa explained.
"We'll see," the Bignose sighed.
"Anyway, you wanted to prove that you're right!" Grandma reminded him.
"Of course. Follow me to the Big Water."
The dinosaurs walked to the beach, so did the Threehorn.
"If you were right Threehorn, then you could see things that are very very far away - if the air isn't foggy, that is. However, you can't see very far even though the air is very clear today with no doubt. One can see that the water surface is bent," the stranger explained blow-by-blow.
"Yes, I see it very clearly," Grandpa exclaimed. Though surprised, he had some large doubts about the stranger which he, other than the mulish Threehorn, didn't say loud.
The others seemed to be skeptical at first but then they too realised the bending of the water surface. As the very last dinosaur, after he had examined everything a few times, even Cera's Father agreed: "Well, I believe I owe you a big apology," he said shamefully.
"It's alright, you're not the first dinosaur to considered me a swindler."
"May I ask what your name is stranger?" Grandma asked. "I suppose youëll stay with us now?"
"The name's Oscar! There's safety in numbers therefore I will join your herd for the time being. I suppose your herd has been together for quite some time now?"
"Some of us have lived together for many years now," Petrie's Mother explained.
"Yeah, and others, like you, are gathered here to escape the fire. We'll all be a herd from this moment on. We will help each other where ever possible and we will discuss important things together," Grandpa spoke strongly.

The four young dinosaurs could swear that the whole cave jumped up and down... They were thrown back and forth so violently that Cera blacked out.
Then, suddenly, the ceiling behind them crashed down completely. Littlefoot had almost been hit on the head by a big boulder he could barely dodge.
"We have to get out of here!" Littlefoot cried to his friends after he had gotten to his feet again.
"Yeah, but how we get outta here?" Petrie asked.
"Why we climb up the many rocks, silly!" Ducky explained. She seemed to have completely recovered from her earlier nightmare.
"Me wonder Cera gonna make it?" Petrie squawked worryingly. Cera lay on the ground, her eyes closed and her wound bleeding.
"Cera! Cera! Please get up! We need to get out of here before the cave collapses completely!" Littlefootshouted but Cera didn't react.
"Cera, we must go now, yes we must!" Ducky said shaking Cera's head.
"What we do now?" Petrie questioned.
"Well, we can't leave her behind!" Littlefoot exclaimed. Ducky and Petrie nodded eagerly.
"We do not leave anyone behind, nope, nope, nope!" Ducky chirped.
"Petrie no leave anyone behind neither!" the Flyer croaked.
"But we can't carry her!" Littlefoot sighed.
"Petrie have idea!" Petrie exclaimed. He climbed on Cera's horn and lifted her right eyelid.
"Cera, now no snoozing time!" he squawked with all his might.Cera jerked up sinking to the ground again instantly due to her pain.
"That was a good idea, Petrie!" Ducky lauded.
"You really think so?" Cera asked ironically. She had a terrible pain though she tried to downplay it. Her pride didn't allow her to show weakness.
"Cera, we need to get out of here! The caveës collapsing!" Littlefoot shouted.
"Yes, we must get out, we must, we must!" Ducky gabbled.
"If we donët, we be squished!" Petrie squeaked acting as if he gets squished.
"Hehehehe! You are funny Petrie!" Ducky chuckled.
"Yeah, veeery amusing!" Cera grunted sarcastically.
"Do you think that you can make it up there?" Littlefoot asked pointing at the upward 'stairway' built
when the cave had partly collapsed.
"Sure! That's a stupid question!"Cera snorted showing off. She tried to get up which was trickier thanshe thought. Eventually, she succeeded, her wound still bleeding a little.
"You sure you can make it?" Petrie asked fretfully since Cera was pretty shaky on her legs.
"S-sure!" she grunted laboriously. Cera suddenly felt very dizzy. Everything was moving in circles and her vision became blurry. Her legs began to shake.
"I do not think that she can make it, ohh no, no, no," Ducky muttered quietly.
"She looks like she’s gonna pass out again," Littlefoot guessed.Ducky shrugged her shoulders.
Finally, Cera collapsed again. This time nobody dared attempting to wake her...

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Gonna upload twice a week, need to catch up with myself (about to write chp 40 and only uploaded till 17 :bang)
Anyway, what do you think? Specially about Oscar :smile

Right, the next one will be roughly as long as 17 and there will be a good amount of dialogue (generally, the story is going to become more dialogue-based now), Threehorn's starting a fight again and the gang is trying to find a solution to their unfortunate situation...
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Poor Cera :cry.  I'm all too familiar with the effects of excessive blood loss.  I hope somebody can help her and the others.


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Oscar seems like an interesting and knowledgable character. Whoa, Threehorn either needs to learn to calm down or have some anger management classes. Geez. :o

Poor gang. 'Specially Cera. I hope that injury of hers will be okay in the future. :(

Um, not sure if this is proof-read yet (for those who don't know, I don't proof-read this fanfic anymore), but I have spotted quite a few spelling and grammar mistakes. Some of them I've seen in just your general writing.

First, cutted isn't a word. The past participle of cut is, er, cut. Doesn't change. Irregular verbs are confusing, so I don't blame you for not knowing about that. :)

Secondly, dashes don't go next to full stops. If you're going to use a subordinate clause with two dashes, it'll have to go in the middle of a sentence. If it's at the end, just use one dash to start and end it with the full stop. The two don't go together. Just something to take into account.

Final thing I'll dwell on for now. I think you may the wrong definition of ironic. My understanding of the word ironic is to describe certain events, such as a sudden traffic jam when you're already late for something important, or something failing when it was so well planned. The other definition of ironic is humorously sarcastic or mocking, and I don't think that's what Cera's trying to get across here... I think just sarcastically/with sarcasm would be better to use. :D

That's all I'll nit-pick on for now. I just want to help you improve on you English writing. It was a very interesting read, David. Keep it up!


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Thank you a lot, Molly :lol: I'll take your advice into account next time.

Oscar IS a pretty interesting character, trust me :yes You'll see what will happen to Cera in the next few chapters.

I'll probably upload the next chapter at the weekend :)
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Chapter 18: Who's the leader?/How to help Cera!

Everyone agreed one that. The Great Valley residents that had survived and some other residents of the oasis being in flames and flooded by lava as well as visitors like Oscar were from now on a herd.
The question was: Who'd be the leader?
"Well, so we're a temporary herd now but who'll lead us?" Oscar questioned.
"Well..." Pterano considered loudly.
"I'm gonna lead this herd!!!" Cera's Father proclaimed. "I'm the toughest dinosaur around!" Confident of victory, he looked into the gathered dinosaurs.
"I stated that we will deliberate things, no matter of the situation!"Grandpa reminded him. "We don't need a leader for this! Anyhow, you may fend off any Sharpteeth that dare to attack us alongside me! I don't think anybody will disagree on that we two are the strongest members!"
"Nope! I'm stronger than you, Longneck!" the Threehorn replied.
"This is of no significance, my friend!" Grandpa shed light upon the Threehorn yet he ranted furtherly.
"Oh yes! It quite is!"
"Now don't start out another argument!" Grandma sighed desperately. The Threehorn gradually drove her nuts.
"Yes, we need to find my little Ducky, remember!" Ducky's Mother confirmed.
"As well as the little Flyer, my nephew and your daughter, Threehorn!" Grandpa added.
Cera's Father grunted something along the lines of 'agreed'.
"Works!" Grandma muttered.
 "Why, if you consider yourself so much better than me, don't you make a suggestion!" he provoked Grandpa who, in contrary to everyone, didn't roll his eyes throwing unappreciative glares at the singularly hot-headed Threehorn but stayed cool.
"We will have to find an entry into that cave to pick our children out of it!"
"But how do you imagine this to work?" Oscar questioned. "I mean, even, if I'm proven wrong that the fire outta the ground won't stop in the near future, we plainly can't climb up the ledge!"
"Yeah, good point though I thought of another, better possibility!" Grandpa replied.
"Shall I move to that cave and look out for potentual entries?" Pterano offered.
"Yeah! Make yourself useful!" Cera's Father shouted in an unfriendly way.
"That's the idea, Pterano! We will wait until you return!" Grandpa spoke up.
"Okay!" Pterano flew off.
The dinosaurs disperged into the nearby region. Littlefoot's Grandparents, Ducky's and Petrie's Mothers and Oscar gathered at the Big Water. The water and the chilly wind were exceedingly refreshing for the exhausted dinosaurs.
"How do you guys actually plan to get into the cave? I doubt that the paths can be passed!" Oscar asked.
"The smaller members of our herd will search through the cave, if Pterano spots another entry, that is!" Grandpa answered.
"I hope, that nothing bad occured to my Ducky!" Ducky's Mother sobbed hysterically.
"Calm down, my dear!" Grandma supported her. "They're probably doing well!"
"Yep! Be confident, my brother is going to find a way into this cave!" Petrie's Mother affirmed.
"Our children are not stupid after all!" Grandpa stated encuragingly. "They probably know what to do!"
"May I ask how old your children are?" Oscar questioned.
"They had hatched when the last Cold Time was almost over!" Grandma responded.
"Fairly young, if you ask me!" he hummed.
"That's right! Though they're quite smart considering their age! You should have heard my Littlefoot when the catastrophy at our former home was in its offing! He had realized that we adults were constantly worried. Hence, he had tried to convince us that the numerous earthshakes are funny!"
Everyone had to smirk due to Grandpa's short story.
"Now, that indeed shows that your children are mentally fit!" Oscar admitted.
"Might be the wealth of food that our home had offered us!" Petrie's Mother presumed.
"And the care and love of us parents of course!" Ducky's Mother added enthusingly.
"You forgot the most important point!" Grandma grinned. "They could play and grow up in harmony there!"
"How come? Ain't there any Sharpteeth or Eggnappers?" Oscar wondered.
"Lots of them!" Ducky's Mother shouted.
"Our valley was save from any Sharpteeth due to the huge wall that surrounded it!" Petrie's Mother responded. "And Eggstealers usually didn't dare to get close to our nests since a lot of dinosaurs used to live on a fairly little amount of space so the theft would have been noticed in time likely!"
"From the sounds of it, it must've been quite a paradise!" he wowed.
"The worser that we'll never be able to return!" Grandma said bitterly.
The others nodded in agreement.

"What do we do now?" Littlefoot wondered.
"Me no know!" Petrie responded, sighing.
"We need to do something, yep, yep, yep!" Ducky shouted in worry.
"What?" Littlefoot weared down his head.
Petrie had an idea: "Me climb up there! Then me can see what grown-ups do!"
"That's a good idea, Petrie!" Littlefoot exclaimed.
"Yep,yep, yep!" Ducky gabbled and jumped from one leg to the other.
Petrie climbed the 'stairway' built of the incaved ceiling. Luckily, the boulders had broken into small pieces so the Flyer, since incapable of flying, climbed up the stairs without big difficulties.
While Petrie climbed, Ducky and Littlefoot were having a talk.
"What was wrong with you last night by the way, Ducky?"
"I do not know that, nope, nope, nope! I was having scary sleep-stories!"
"Well, right before the earthshake had started you cried out very very heavy! Then you collapsed!"
"I do not know why that has happened, no, no, no! I have dreamed that my Mommy..." She broke off her eyes watering.
"It's alright, Ducky! I'm with you!" Littlefoot comforted the little Swimmer girl and nestled against her. "T-thank you!" she sobbed, "We are friends, right?"
"Sure! You're funny, Ducky!"
"Yaaay! You are funny, too, Littlefoot! Yep, yep, yep!" The tears disappeared, Ducky was happy again.
"Hmm, I wish we could help Cera now!" Littlefoot sighed.
"I wish that, too!"
"The wound's pretty nasty! It must hurt heftily!"
"Ohh yes! My sister once has stepped on a stone in the water that had plenty of spiky, stinging thorns.  She had them stuck in her foot and everywhere was blood. My Mommy had sucked on her foot. Because she said we always have to do that if someone steps on a spiked-stone because they are poinonous!"
"Uhm.. but why do we have to suck the poison?"
"I do not know! But my Mama is always right, she is, she is!"
"Mine is..." Littlefoot swallowed hard, "was always right, too!"
This time Ducky comforted Littlefoot by hugging his foot.
"It's alright... keep on with your story!"
"Okay! After that she had licked the injury and then she had bandaged it with special leaves. She said that we must do that because the injury must be clean and dirt must not have contact to the wound!"
"Why's that?"
"I guess we must do it because the wound will heal faster, yep, yep, yep!"
"Right, that means we should lick Cera's injury clean and cover it with leaves!?"
"I think so!"
"Okay, call Petrie and tell him to bring some leaves if possible!"
"Will do!"
"I clean her injury!"
Ducky called out for Petrie who nearly had reached the top imparting him the new task.
"You help Petrie?" Petrie squeaked from above.
"I will ask Littlefoot, I will, I will!"
"Okay!"
Littlefoot licked Cera's wound clean. Although Cera's blood tasted terrible, Littlefoot did it not moaning at all since he knew that this low service could make a difference whether Cera would survive or die.
Then Ducky hopped to him.
"Littlefooooooot?"
"What is it, Ducky?"
"Can I help Petrie? He asked-ed me, he did!"
"Sure! But hurry, please!"
"Okay!"
Ducky hopped back to Petrie while Littlefoot continued licking Cera's wound clean.
"Petrie, Petrie!!!"
"So? You allowed to help Petrie?"
"Yep, yep, yep! Though we should hurry!"
"Okay! Me know about it!"
Ducky climbed up to where Petrie who had arrived at the top in the meantime was quickly.
"Can you see our parents, Petrie?"
"No! Me only see fire everywhere, ohohohhhhhhh!"
"Me too!"
Both were frustrated that their parents where nowhere to be seen.
"Me wanna cuddle with me Mama!" Petrie whined.
"Yeah, I miss my Mommy very much!" Ducky agreed.
The two youngsters fell silent for a few moments. They moved closer together to send comfort to each other and listened to their thoughts whereby they spectated the eruption of the fire pit.
"It looks so beautiful!" Ducky eventually whispered.
"Yeah, it nice but it also spooooooooky!" Petrie replied.
"Yep, yep, yep!"
They were silent for some time again.
"Oh no!!!"
"What it, Ducky?"
"We totally forgot to look for leaves, oh no, no, no, no, no!!!"
"Me no see any green stuff, anywhere!"
"I neither see anything! Cera really needs these leaves!"
"But how you gonna do that?"
"I do not know!"
"Hmm, then we go to Littlefoot?"
"You better stay up here, Petrie, because if we have to climb to the top again you don't have to climb the whole thing again!"
"You right, Ducky! Then Petrie wait here!"
"Yep, yep, yep!"
Ducky climbed down to where Littlefoot was who had removed all the dirt from Cera's injury meanwhile to announce the bad news...
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Yeah, told ya there would be a lot of dialogue :angel

In the next one, the four friends go exploring :yes
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Oscar's one interesting individual.  :DD Looking forward to seeing what happens with him next. And Cera... :o Onto the next chapter...


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Bad news? I don't like the sound of that... :cry
Good chapter though - one thing I haven't really noticed before is how well you capture each characters' style of speech, especially Ducky's and Petrie's. Two characters, which, I have to admit, do not get much dialogue in my fic... :p The used of Ducky's 'asked-ed' is so obviously her speech pattern, and yet its very rarely made use of in fics. So, good job! And the adults are acting like kids again.  :rolleyes: And where is Spike?  :o


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Thanks :) I'd use Ducky's speech pattern much more often if I knew on which occasions the little Swimmer uses it  :rolleyes: Guess I gonna ask for help somewhere :yes

I'm glad Oscar is received well :)

And why the bloody heck do people keep asking when Spike shows up?!  :lol I shouldn't have spoiled his existance in chp 9  :rolleyes:
I shall only say, he will show up, but I won't say when  :nyah

Speaking of 'when', I'll indemnify you with the nextr chapter :P:
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Chapter 19: Pterano's no Luck/ Exploring
 
First of all, Pterano flew to the ledge where he and his sister dropped off the children. The vegetation was burning everywhere, rivers of fire were shoving through the region heavily. Dozens of fire spouts of varying height and width shot out of the underground not far away from him.
"No ash, at least!" the experienced Flyer thought landing on the ledge. He looked whether the paths could be passed or not. The one the four kids had used was covered with lots of rubble but it was still passable for smaller dinosaur kinds like his. The tension let his heart beat faster, his knees were shaking slightly. Pterano climbed into the path laboriously...
After a few minutes though he found himself standing in front of a huge rockslide. The partly huge boulders built a massive wall. "No way through!" he sighed, the disappointment could be read in his beakened face. "Then I must discover another entrance! Pterano climbed out of the cave. Outside, he streched his wings, started and flew away...

Littlefoot looked around observantly. He wondered if there would be anything interesting to be discoved deeper in the cave. After some time, he noticed a tiny side path. He evaluated whether he should wait for the others or explore the path on his own. Just, as he had decided for the latter, he heard Ducky jumping down the boulders. He approached her.
When Ducky noticed that Littlefoot was heading toward her, she came to a standstill. "Does Cera feel better?" she asked.
When Littlefoot arrived by the Swimmer, he replied: "Not really! At least I cleaned her injury!"
"Ohhh! I hope she will be fine soon, yep, yep, yep!"
"Petrie hope so, too!" Petrie squawked having jumped down a few boulders to be included to the talk.
"Me too! You seeked out anything?" Littlefoot questioned.
"We no finded anything!" Petrie sighed.
"Yep, yep, yep! We find-ed neither our parents nor green food, oh no!" Ducky confirmed.
"That's not good!" Littlefoot cursed, "Cera's injury needs to be covered with something!"
"Littlefoot right!" Petrie croaked.
After a short, awkward moment of silence Littlefoot spoke up.
"Come down here you two! Let's explore this place a bit!"
"Oohhh, Petrie had already enough adventures today!" Petrie retorted.
"But Petrie!" Ducky shouted, "Maybe, we track down another exit, yep, yep, yep!"
"My thoughts exactly!" Littlefoot declared. "I discovered a side path... though it's a narrow and dark one, we should check it!"
"Count me in, please, please, please!" Ducky chattered excitedly.
"Petrie... no know!" the Flyer said.
"Come, Petrie!" Ducky begged, "Nothing bad will happen to you as long as I am by your side!" She made a sweet face.
"Do it for Cera! Littlefoot adviced.
"Alright! Me come along!" Petrie gave up.
"Yaaaaaaay!!!" Ducky cried with joy.
"Great!" Littlefoot exclaimed, "Let's go then! In here!"
Littlefoot passed the small hole behind which a fairly big and wide path was. Ducky and Petrie followed him coming to a standstill after a few steps.
"It pretty dark!" Petrie shivered.
It was pretty dim indeed so that their eyes had to get used to the sudden rareness of light first. When they were able to see again, they continued their way deeper into the cave. At that, they walked slow and careful since there was rubble everywhere that was difficult to spot in the darkness.
The path became more narrow after a while and none of them talked, not even Ducky. They only did if one of the three spotted an obstacle.
After some minutes, the path divided into three.
"Oh no! What do we do now?!?" Ducky asked, worried.
"Well, seems as if we need to separate!" Littlefoot answered being somewhat clueless.
"Petrie no want to be separated from you, no, no!" Petrie shouted anxiously.
"Don't be such a scaredy-egg, Petrie!" Littlefoot shouted, annoyed. He rolled his eyes.
"Yes, Petrie! You are completely safe because we are all alone here! Yes we are!" Ducky encouraged him.
"You s-s-sure?" Petrie asked self-consciously.
"Of course! How can someone get in?"
"Maybe there is another entrance!" Ducky guessed. "But that would mean that me might not be alone... ohh nooooooo!"
"Yeah, but that's ... unlikely!" Littlefoot quickly added to convince Petrie completely.
"A-alright! Me discover cave, a-all a-alone!" Petrie stuttered.
Ducky walked to Petrie putting her hand on the left shoulder of the Flyer.
"You can do it, yep, yep, yep!" she whispered.
"Me can do it!" Petrie repeated. They grinned at each other.
"Good! Perhabs we should call out before going in!" Littlefoot proposed. "Just in case..."
"Yep, yep, yep, that is a gooood idea!" Ducky prattled, agreeing.
"Heeelloooooooooooo!!! Anyone?" Petrie shouted as loud as he could.
"If you hear us, respond!!" Littlefoot screamed.
"Come out, whereever you are!!!" Ducky added.
They waited though they didn't get any answers.
"Great, so seeya later! Call, if anything's wrong!"
"Got it, flathead!"
"Hehehe, I do, I do!"
This way, the three friends separated. Petrie took the narrowest and smallest path, Ducky wandered along a path that was seemingly a bit less dark than the other two and Littlefoot took the remaining one. But they weren't alone...
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The uploading will be on a hiatus now to give my proofreaders a chance to catch up :angel

What will happen in chp 20... Well, let's just say Ducky discovers something ;)
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No reviews?  :o

Well, that's going to change after this chapter :lol
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Chapter 20: The lonely Spiketail/ Is there an hope left?

Pterano searched through the whole region for hours. Nonetheless, he didn't find an entrance to the cave. Frustrated, he returned to the herd.
Though he had overlooked the opening in the ceiling...

A young Spiketail layed in the dead end of a path crying because his whole family lost their lives due to the carnivore attack. Only he was able to slip through their claws and teeth and fled off. When he  spectated his parents getting eaten alive, he lost his voice - he couldn't even cry out loud -.
Anyhow, he ran until he had fallen into a deep hole. As if by miracle, he was alright shambling along a pretty long path that was continously going uphill sobbing until he discovered a small cave. There he eyed a narrow path which he wandered along until he had reached the place he was at right now. The little Spiketail didn't know what to do. He was all alone, quite hungry and thirsty and had no hope. He just couldn't imagine to live without his parents and his siblings. His father once told him that all dinosaurs reach another world in which everyone could live happily in peace after their demise. No Sharpteeth are said to be around but only those who had always been good and friendly toward their own kind as well as toward other kinds were allowed to go to that place. However, those who had been evil and mean toward their own kind and other kinds were exiled to a dreadful place where they had to live in torment.The little one knew that he would be sent to the good place when he died. His family would be there for sure because they had always been friendly and helpful toward everybody. He just hoped he would see them again soon.
Suddenly, the little one jerked up, out of his death-hooked thoughts as he heard something humming..

Pterano returned to the others. They formed a circle around him immediately.
"So? Any news of interest, Pterano?" the Threehorn questioned his voice threatening.
"Did you find the children??? Please affirm that you found them, pleaaaaaase!!!" Mama Swimmer cried.
"Well, dunno how to put it... I looked everywhere but I haven't found any entrances."
"NOOOOOO!!!" Ducky's Mommy cried desperately.
"Have you checked the path that the children disappeared in?" Grandpa asked.
"Yes, totally caved in." Pterano answered dejectedly.
All dinosaurs, particularly those who lost their beloved little one(s), were shocked. Now they had lost a part of their offspring as well.
Ducky's and Petrie's Mothers weeped due to the loss, Cera's Father knocked down a withered tree and Littlefoot's Grandparents nestled their necks, Grandma weeping slightly.
Oscar spectated them feeling quite awkward.
"You mustn't loose hope!" he tried to break the silence. "If your little ones are as smart as you described them, I'm fairly confident that they will make it outta it!"
"As if you know..." Cera's Father grumbled having given up any hope.
"Perhabs Pterano overlooked something?" Grandpa piped up.
"Yes, perhabs he can't see the entrance from high above?" Mr. Clubtail added.
"Well, that obviously might be the case." Pterano admitted silently. He had the feeling in his guts he  really overlooked something.
"Shall I head off again?" he offered.
"Preferably not," Oscar piped up, "It's late and there'll be a lot of Skywater tonight!"
"How do you know!?" the Threehorn barked.
"Don't you see these clouds?" he asked in return and pointed to the Big Water.
"Yeah, I'm not blind!" the Threehorn replied insolently.
"Well, these clouds show that colder air from the Cold Lands is on its way towards us. They look like a wall! There'll be a lot of Sky Fire, you'll see."
"If you say so!" Mr Threehorn moved away from the group.
"How come that you know so many things???" Petrie's Mother marveled.
"Well, I travelled a lot. I told you I met this couple of weird Rainbowfaces, right? They considered me clever, very clever to be honest, so they taught me some parts of their ingredible wisdom."
"Anyway, it's getting dark. Let's find a place for the night!" Grandpa suggested.
The herd agreed so they walked along the beach until they had discovered a sheltered place. Unfortunately, it didn't become silent. Some of the children weeped, many had sleepstories. The arising storm with its side effects like thunderstorms, heavy wind or high breakers let the dinosaurs sleep very poor...
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Who's dat Spiketail?! :lol Well, I hope you guys enjoy this chapter  :angel

Chapter 21 will be about that Spiketail and I think I'll upload it fairly soon..
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:o Ooh, Spike!

 :lol Nice chapter...I like how you opened with (well, I presume it was) Spike, and I have to say I find the fact that his father had a concept of an afterlife interesting. I wonder if other people share his views?

And as for Oscar, well...he just keeps on surprising me. If he knows the Rainbowfaces, who knows what he'll bring out next... :lol:


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Finally got around to leaving a review  :p

I really liked the small reason you gave for Spike (or is it :lol) not being able to talk in your version, I thought it really added a layer of depth to his character, rather than just having him not talk.

The mention of the rainbowfaces was pretty nice too. I wonder if they'll have an impact on the story later on...

This was a good chapter, looking forward to finding out who the spiketail heard humming  :yes


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I like how you opened with (well, I presume it was) Spike, and I have to say I find the fact that his father had a concept of an afterlife interesting. I wonder if other people share his views?
Thanks :) I didn't think this would be so special.. I was just.. sorta trying to descibe the death thingy :lol
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I really liked the small reason you gave for Spike (or is it dino_laugh.gif) not being able to talk in your version, I thought it really added a layer of depth to his character, rather than just having him not talk.
Glad you think so... I thought that would be a very reasonable reason :p
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The mention of the rainbowfaces was pretty nice too. I wonder if they'll have an impact on the story later on...
Well, you will see ;)

Anyway, here we go!
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Chapter 21: Spike

Littlefoot discovered a big hollow after a short time already its ground being covered with countless red luminous lights. He wondered what said red lights were so he approached for a closer look. Upon closer inspectation, he could behold that they were luminous pebbles touching one of them. They felt strange, as if someone had wrapped some kind of moss around them. 'Hmm, these stones might give us some light' he thought. 'I'll get everyone to see them!'
Littlefoot continued exploring the hollow - after all he could see fairly well due to the light the pebbles spent.

Petrie came to a standstill after a couple of steps since the Flyer was too frightened in the darkness...

Ducky wandered along the path jauntily and hummed and sang. The path didn't seem to end though. Just, when she began to be bored, she suddenly crashed into something soft and tumbled to the ground. She uttered a loud scream in surprise...

Littlefoot turned around instantly when he heard Ducky screaming. At that, he forgot to grab some pebbles due to him hurrying. He actually had in mind to show them to Ducky and Petrie.

Petrie got scared when he heard Ducky screaming. He darted to the spot where they had separated to wait for Littlefoot since he didn't want to enter the sinister path on his own...

Cera woke up having terrible aches. When she realized that she was all alone, she began to search for the others and called for them, panicked...

The Spiketail knew that his end had come. He thought of his family. Shakily, he curled up himself and waited for the bite that would seal his death...

At first, Ducky ran some distance but she slowly creeped closer again when she realized that she was neither chased by something nor were there any noises. Despite the thick darkness, she could eye a shaking creature curled up in a corner that seemed to be the dead end of the path.
"Hello?" she called quietly. "I will not harm you, no, no, no."
The creature stopped shaking like an aspen.
"What is your name, heh? Heh?" Ducky questioned, a little louder this time.
The creature stood up to scan Ducky. For the sake of safety, Ducky went a few steps back because the alien dinosaur was far bigger than she was.
"Maybe you cannot talk yet? Heeeh?" she asked.
The creature mumbled something pretty sad and tormented sounding.
"You are all alone, you are, you are," Ducky diagnosed. "So where is your family then? Or do not you have  any family?"
The lively Swimmer didn't get a response so she approached the other dinosaur. Just, when she was about to touch its face, tears rolled down its cheek hitting Ducky.
"Oh, you do not have to cry, nope, nope, nope," she said. "Did you lose your family?"
The creature nodded and uttered some sad sounds. Subsequently, it made a face looking like a Sharptooth and even suitable noises.
"Did you lose your family because of the Sharptooth attack as well? Because my daddy had been eaten and m-my Mommy is v-v-very f-far away. W-we were separated, y-you know?" Ducky started to weep. It felt as if a rather spiky thing had drilled right into her heart. The other dinosaur joined her sniveling soon.

Littlefoot was surprised when he met Petrie at the crosspaths.
"Come! Climb up!" he instructed him.
Petrie didn't need to be told twice. He climbed up Littlefoot's tail rapidly and got comfortable on his back. The little Longneck stormed along the path that Ducky had chosen.
"Me sorry me no gone along the path," Petrie said quietly, obviously ashamed.
"Not now, Petrie!!! We must hasten to Ducky's aid!" Littlefoot shouted.
"Me geddit. Me be silent now..."

Cera heard sounds coming out of a little crack in the wall. She went into this crack and found another path that she was following for the sake of discovering what was going on.

After a few minutes both of them calmed down.
"Do you want to come along?" Ducky asked. "My friends and I are trying to find our families again. You could join us if you want, you could, you could!"
The creature considered quickly, then nodded.
"Hooray!!!" Ducky rejoiced and danced around. "Come!"
The creature grabbed Ducky and put her on its head.
"Hehehehehe! Thank you for carrying me, "Ducky chuckled. She climbed to the back of the creature and realised some little, round bumps.
"You are a Spiketail so I call you Spike," she announced merrily.

The Spiketail already had a name given by his parents. However, as he thought, a new name would be a good start into a new life that would help him accept and forget the death of his family. Though, he would never forget them. Besides, he liked the name 'Spike' thus he nodded in agreement.
"Yep, yep, yep!" Ducky chattered.
 
Cera eventually arrived at the crosspath and listened for any sounds carefully. There seemed to be someone walking step by step in one of those three paths and she also heard Ducky talking. She entered the path.

Littlefoot, with Petrie on his back, ran as fast as he could run through the thick darkness. Again and again, he touched or even rammed the walls or obstacles blocking his way.

Finally, they heard Ducky's voice. Relieved, Littlefoot slowed down to a jog.
"Ducky!" he called.
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So yeah, now we have a true Gang of Five or is it... Well, see it yourself as soon as I'm able to put the next chapter online :yes

PS: Thanks a bunch proofreading this, bushwacked  :exactly
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Looks like they're finally going to be the gang we all know and love  :D I thought the part where Ducky and Spike met was really nicely written - I'm trying to imagine what Spike trying to pull a sharptooth face would look like  :lol

The glowing pebbles are kind of creepy too - I don't trust the 'moss' around them :p I'm looking forward to the next part!

(P.S Don't mention it  :))


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My apologies for not yet reviewing this story.

It looks like things are certainly coming together. :smile  I especially love how you have depicted Spike in the recent chapters.  Due to his lack of speech, he is often overlooked by authors and they usually portray him in the third-person.  However, you have taken the step of depicting his inner monologue and letting us readers understand his mental and emotional state after he lost his family.  The addition of Spike's thoughts on an afterlife is also an interesting addition in that, with the exception of the first film, allusions to such a possibility are generally lacking in the films.

I also must agree with bushwacked in that the meeting between Ducky and Spike was well written. :yes  You definitely have these characters well-portrayed.  I can easily imagine Ducky and Spike interacting in the way that you have depicted in this story.


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Ah, I'm glad you two think so :) I also tried to include a few quotes from LBT 1 as you probably noticed :smile

The moss on those pebbles is actually a layer of fluorescant bacteria. It has only little impact on the plot overall.. I originally had an idea but I went with something else, I kept the stones since they were still useful to fill my chapters :D There will be a chapter where I refer to the episode of the Shiny Colour Stones (or whatever they are called :p) but *SPOILERS!*
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Well, you were right, I did enjoy it!  :DD

And yeah, the Gang of Five at last! Interested in seeing where it goes from here... :lol I have to say, Spike's introduction here felt a lot fuller and more emotional I think, than the one we now see in the original film, with more of Spike's own thoughts and how Ducky and him connect from the beginning. (not to undermine how great the film is of course!) So, good work on that.

Waiting to see how this continues!  :p



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I really like how this one came out.. and I bet you'll like it as well :yes
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Chapter 22: May Spike stay?

Spike and Ducky, who was already able to understand parts of Spike's unique gibberish being able to  understand languages very well due to her eleven siblings' toddler languages being quite diverse, were just talking when they heard Littlefoot calling.
Spike shook, startled. He wanted to flee being frightened but Ducky calmed him down.
"You do not need to be scared, Spike, oh no, no, no! It is just Littlefoot," she taught him.
Spike untightened. Ducky had already told him about her friends though she hadn't told him how they had become friends yet.
"I am here, Littlefoot," Ducky called in response.
Spike continued trotting.
"You alright?" Littlefoot asked, worried.
"Yep, yep, yep, I am alright," Ducky answered. " I find-ed a new friend, I did," she chuckled merrily.
"New friend?" Petrie wondered, baffeled, "We all thought you in danger!"
Spike glanced up to where Ducky sat on him uneasily.
"Do not worry, Spike! It is just Petrie. He is extra friendly, you will see, yep, yep, yep," she said and eased the Spiketail's worries.
"Who did you just talk to, Ducky?" Littlefoot questioned.
"I talked to Spike, silly," she giggled.
"Who or what the hell is 'Spike', eh?!?" Cera shouted through the cave from a distance.
Everyone was frightened for a moment, especially Spike.
"That was ehm... Cera," Ducky told the Spiketail silently.
"Ducky him found!" Petrie squawked back.
Ducky and Littlefoot finally made visual contact, provided any of them could see each other in the darkness at all.
"He is a Spiketail and he cannot talk, nope, nope, nope, and he lost his parents," Ducky told them.
"Just like we did," Littlefoot commented.
"So??? Are ya absolutely certain ya wanna take him along, Ducky?!?" Cera asked frowning.
"Of course I want to take him along, Cera. Why would I not?" Ducky shrugged.
"Spiketails eat pretty much food and they sleep a lot and they're slower than we are!!!" Cera argued.
"So what? He is all alone. He needs me," Ducky replied.
Cera caught up with everyone.
"But WE don't need him!!!" she shouted madly.
"Cera!!!" Ducky cried indignantly, her eyes getting wet.
"I don't care what'cha think! I don't want him to join us!!!" Cera continued to argue.
"That not nice!" Petrie piped up.
"Nope, nope, nope," Ducky sobbed.
Spike licked her with his tongue.
Ducky suddenly felt that nobody would be able to separate her from Spike. As a last result, she would search for her mommy and her siblings just with Spike. Her mother had always been warm-hearted and tolerant so Ducky hoped she would adopt Spike. Though they had to find her first.
"Why are you so straight against him, Cera?!?" Littlefoot joined the argument.
"Yeah, he not did bad thing!" Petrie replied supporting Littlefoot.
"Humpff! He's only a disadvantage for all of us! He eats our rare food, if we find anything at all, and he slows us down!!!" Cera reasoned.
"SO WHAT!?!?!" Ducky cried, "He is my friend and he will stay with me, yes, yes, yes!!!"
Ducky's words earned her another licking from Spike. The little Swimmer returned the favor by hugging Spike's right front leg.
"If ya wanna survive, ya gotta be tough!!!" Cera roared raging. "And if ya have less food, ya gonna be weaker! Ya chance of surviving is lower!"
"Cera, you're overreacting," Littlefoot tried to settle the argument.
"Yeah, he maybe help us find food," Petrie added.
"You know nothing... My father always s..."
"Your father is a pugnacious, old fool, Cera!" Littlefoot shouted. "And so are you... Another pugnacious, stupid Threehorn!!!"
"You better take that back!" Cera threated.
"I won't!"
"TAKE IT BACK!!!" Cera roared in fury.
"NEVER!!!"
Cera uttered a war cry and charged at Littlefoot who, in return, charged at Cera blindly.
Petrie jumped from Littlefoot back to avoid getting hurt in the fight and darted to Ducky and Spike.
Then the two fighting cocks collided with each other with a terrible sound. Both cringed in pain. Cera took on Littlefoot ramming her massive head into the Longneck trying to hit as much of him as possible. Ducky and Petrie couldn't watch it and they didn't want to either though they didn't see much due to the devouring darkness.
"Petrie no can watch!" Petrie whined.
"We need to stop the fight, we do, we do!" Ducky said desperately.
"But how?" Petrie questioned.
All of a sudden, Spike stormed towards the fighting and rammed his massive body right into Cera's. The Threehorn howled in pain, Spike had caused damage to her injury. Uttering a lot of taboo words, she limped away.
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Dunno what to comment on this chapter, I just hope you like it and leave a comment :)

That being said, the next chapter is a bit calmer and more easy-going... those kind of chapters are just there because they're needed in order not to make the story look rushed or something like that :p
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Oooooh...me no like this last chapter :confused.  I think Spike inadvertently made things worse by getting in a fight he had no business literally jumping into, and making Cera hurt worse.  I certainly hope the next chapter is much nicer.  Yikes :blink:.