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Chomper looks pretty good overall. I like how you have him standing on his toes like an adult sharptooth, but his feet themselves haven’t changed much, so it’s sort of a transition from young Chomper to adult Chomper. :)

His tail looks too thick to me, though (I think it should be proportioned more like the tail on the character below him), and honestly it’s kind of hard to tell that he’s a sharptooth. Of course, the defining feature of sharpteeth isn’t generally visible when the mouth is fully closed (but since sharpteeth are usually seen with their jaws gaping open or their lips pulled back in a snarl, we still get to see their teeth most of the time), so it can’t be called a mistake that his teeth can’t be seen. Perhaps you could try making his claws sharper. As for the head, maybe his snout’s not quite long enough? Or maybe the top of his head is too domed. (Perhaps it’s because his head is angled downwards, but the top of it looks a lot higher and more rounded the other character, which gives him a somewhat babyish appearance.)

I like the new OC drawing, :DD but was confused at first by what kind of dinosaur she was. At first I thought Ouranosaurus (a sail-backed leafeater that has appeared in LBT), but then I noticed the physical similarities between her and the drawing of Chomper and thought, “Oh, she’s supposed to be a Spinosaurus?” That being the case, you might want to make some changes to this character to make her look more sharptooth-like. While her shy expression (I thought it looked shy, anyway) is very cute, the fact that the line of her mouth is relatively short is one of the main reasons I thought she was a leafeater at first. (It could be argued that the corner of her mouth normally lies farther back, but is moved forward here as a result of the expression she is making.) Besides that, you could do the same thing I suggested for Chomper, and make her claws sharper, and maybe make the rounded segments of her sail slightly more pointed. And if you wanted, you could show little tips of teeth poking out of her mouth (though frankly, she’s so adorable as is that I’d almost be reluctant to make any of these changes). And, of course, you’ll want to make a point of differentiating her from babidikrakenguard’s OC Pino (as depicted by DarkWolf91).

One more thing about the character: I think the point where the lines of her chest and stomach meet is too sharply indented. The indentation between her shoulder and back may have a similar problem (though possibly to a lesser extent), but when you look at the two indented areas together, it looks rather strange. (I did the same thing myself when I drew my dinosona. :rolleyes)

As for the name, were you planning to use a pun off the scientific name of some spinosaur? Unfortunately it’s not very easy. I thought of one derived from Spinosaurus marrocanus, but “Marroca” sounds too much like “maraca” to me, and anyway I don’t think it suits her very well. Then there’s Angaturama limai; “Anga” doesn’t sound right for her in my opinion, but there’s also “Turama”, “Tura”, “Rama”, and “Lima”. There’s also Cristatusaurus; you could try “Crista” or “Cristata” (which has the bonus of meaning “crested” in Latin). Other candidates are Baryonyx walkeri, Suchomimus tenerensis, Irritator challengeri, and Spinosaurus aegypticus, but I’m having a hard time pulling good names out of those.



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Hello:
 I also have a Spinosaurus character that I began making since I first saw LBT12. They are a real welcomed sight so it adds variety to the Sharpteeth :DD . She looks very nice too!.
 Chomper looks nice too as a bit older, still keeping most of his cuteness.


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Thank you Pangaea for your great feedback. :^.^:
As for the name, I think "Lima" sounds pretty good. :yes

And as for new art, this time it's not a concept art for my comic but a fully colored one instead:



May introduce... Eybron, the white wingtail and the villian from 'Far Away Home'.  :)
Caustizer asked me to draw a picture of him and after a lot of changing and correcting, it is finally finished. ^^


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Woah...the white and grey of his feathers stands out nicely against the background, and he has this fierce, determined, but calculating look on his face...as if every step he takes, every action he's ever thought about has been planned since the day he hatched. Very impressive work Sky.


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This picture turned out really, really good.

I can't thank you enough Sky for doing it for me. The things I like about it specifically are his tail (the double point implies a devilish personality, compared to if it was a heart or star lol), his seven feathered frill which makes him look older then Sky or Star, and lastly the expression on his face, which is not a pout like Glide but rather a cold, calculated gesture that shows he is in command.

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Wow! :wow Awesome pic!

Eybron’s even paler than I envisioned him as being. :p But he looks fantastic! Even speaking as a reader of Far Away Home, and not the creator of the character, I think his pose and expression perfectly captures his essence in the story. The rigidity of his body and limbs, the stone-set seriousness of his expression, and the fact that he’s not even looking in the direction he’s gesturing gives him the air of someone supremely commanding and ruthless, like all he has to do is lift an arm to make mountains move (which, in a sense, is exactly the case :p).

Like Caustizer, I noticed that Eybron had more plumes on his head than Sky, and I too thought it looked very good for him. :yes And I can’t remember if the shape of Eybron’s tail vane was ever described in the story, but the double prongs you put on him here look perfect on him.

Even the background is excellent; the gray mountains, clouds, and twilight-ish sky form the perfect atmosphere for Eybron. And to have him standing on a ledge was...well, let’s just say I couldn’t imagine it any other way. With that pose, Eybron looks EXACTLY right for being perched on a precipice.

It’s extremely difficult to come up with any suggestions for improvement for this picture. I do slightly consider the rich brown of the ledge Eybron is standing on to look a little odd when all the surrounding mountains are gray, but it doesn’t really detract from the image. The only mildly significant thing I could come up with is that the underside of Eybron’s right wing looks quite a bit darker compared to the rest of him, even the few visible corresponding feathers on his left wing. So I might suggest lightening them a bit.

Quote from: Sky,Apr 15 2010 on  02:44 PM
Thank you Pangaea for your great feedback. :^.^:
As for the name, I think "Lima" sounds pretty good. :yes
You're very welcome. :)

I'm glad you like the name, though to be honest I'm a little surprised that you do. I didn’t expect that you'd find any of the names I came up with to be all that great. :!



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I'm surprised there isn't more praise or at least more comments for Sky's work on Eybron.  It is so rare that the villian from any particular fan fiction is drawn out in such detail, that in this case it is worthly of extra commedation in my opinion.  :angel

Perhaps everyone is so deep into exams and whatnot it was released at a bad time.

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Nevertheless, I'm happy that I even get any comments at all. ^_^ And I'm glad you guys like the concept of Eybron too. :D

Yay, new LBT art!  :lol:
This time with an older Ruby and Chomper:

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Ruby is giving Chomper lessons to prepare for his life as a sharptooth. Knowing that he can't stay in the Great Valley when he's fully grown, he needs all the wisdom he can get to survive in the Mysterious Beyond...
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Yeah, so I guess this is my first 'official' art for 'Dawn of a Wingtail'. :^.^:
Chomper is still very young and wouldn't survive in the Mysterious Beyond all by himself, so he's allowed to stay in the Great Valley a little longer.
This may be a possible scene, but I'm not quite sure yet. I also tried to make it movie/screenshot-like but it still needs some improvement. :p

Enjoy!  :)


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Beautiful! I really like Ruby and Chomper’s poses, and how you did Ruby’s head. Good job on the feet, too! :) (I still might make Ruby and Chomper’s toe claws and Chomper’s hand claws just a little more pointed.) And again you did an outstanding job with the background (though those long blades of grass sticking out here and there look sort of odd). Chomper, however, has the same bulging cheeks as your original drawing of an older Littlefoot, so his face looks younger than the rest of him. In addition, the way his forehead slopes downward in a steep arc, forming a right angle with the top of his snout, looks rather strange to me. Not only were his snout and forehead less distinct from one another in the TV series, but I would expect that as he grew up, they would merge. (The top of an adult sharptooth’s snout is nearly level with the top of its head.) Also, I don’t think the top of his head should be nearly so high and domed, seems to be missing his left nostril, and his teeth are a tad blunt. As for Ruby, her neck looks a bit too thick, but other than that (and her aforementioned blunt toe clawsóthe front ones only), she looks perfect to me. :yes



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Great picture... i can't wait for your finished comic  :smile

Ruby looks like she has aged excellantly, with the head being the most striking difference.  Chomper looks slightly awkward though since the pose looks unrealistic for him.  Both characters are very well done.


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Looks like Chomper still needs some improvement. :) Always appreciate your constructive criticism guys, especially yours Pangaea.  :lol:


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You did the coloring slightly softer, I have that feeling anyway, and I really like it! Great job Sky!


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Now that I have finished the requests over at deviantArt, finished writing the story and that school is almost over, why not update here? :^.^:

I thought I give a second try on Littlefoot and Petrie since they are the ones who I had the most problems with:


I think Littlefoot looks ok now. Though, his face looks still too young for me. D:
I like how Petrie came out. :) The only flaws in my opinion are his hands and feet. =/ I might even consider to make them look like Pterano's.

Speaking of Petrie, I've been thinking if I should keep his "grammar" or not.  :D
And if Spike should talk or stay the way he is. :p What are your thoughts?


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I agree, Littlefoot's face does look a bit young, though you can always edit that later, or say this is Littlefoot in older childhood before he hit his teen years.  

Petrie does look overall best of the 2, and you can always study Pterano's body parts like feet, hands, ect to get how they look, and how different and similar they are to Petrie and his mother.


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I like both these pictures, though I have to agree with Kor.  Littlefoot's eyes are far too small for his face and his nose looks a little bit too unemphasized.  The second problem is easily fixed just by making the lines there darker so it stands out.


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Also... just so you know your picture of Eybron still occupies the desktops of both my computers  :yes

I get to look into his menacing eyes everytime I log on  :lol


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The new Littlefoot looks fantastic! :wow While your previous attempts were still great drawings, this one is a vast improvement in terms of making Littlefoot look older. The angle is great; I love how you did the legs and the neck; even the ridge on his spine looks perfect. :yes

Regarding your concerns about his face, I personally think the size of his head looks just about right (and you shouldn’t make his eyes any smalleróif anything they should maybe be just a teense bit bigger), but perhaps you could make his muzzle slightly longer. Not only would make him look more mature, but I think it would look better.

The only other thing I would change about him is his tail. It looks too thick, and not tapered enough at the tip. I wouldn’t touch the tail’s upper side; the way the top of his tail connects to his body makes it look like it is realistically merging with his spine, and that looks good. I also like how you’ve made the edges of the dorsal “stripe” wavy along his tail (compared to the earlier drawings in which they were straight); to me, that gives the impression that Littlefoot is larger and has more “room” for patterning detail (no pun intended). And despite its thickness, the shape and position of the tail look very good; the curve is very smooth, and the way it is held up implies a lively and still youthful character: the Littlefoot we all know and love. If you wanted, you could make the width of the stripe a little narrower, but the wavy edges are something you should definitely keep. (Should part of the paler “belly stripe” also be visible on the underside of his tail from this angle?) Anyway, if you’re going to decrease the width of the tail, you should whittle it down from underneath and from the right.

I hope this doesn’t sound too harsh, but to be perfectly honest, I think your previous image of an older Petrie looked better in most respects. In that version, the top of his beak (above his nostrils) ended at about the same level as the tops of his eyes, whereas here it is slightly lower. It doesn’t merge with his forehead as much, and somehow I don’t think it looks as good. Also, his head looks rather bulbous here; it seemed to be lower and more streamlined in the earlier picture. And I don’t think the point where his chest meets his stomach doesn’t need to be as pronounced (Both it and the ruff around Petrie’s neck looked just right in the earlier picture, I thought). The biggest issue, however, is that the line of his stomach no longer curves down to his left leg, so there is much less of an indicator that his left leg is in front of his right. As a result, his legs and lower body look much more two-dimensional, and very strange. I would strongly suggest reinstating that line.

Okay, now for the good news: Petrie’s legs (apart from the aforementioned detail) and wing membranes look very good in this image. :yes You pulled off the capelike look of his wings excellently, and furthermore you added those little lines in the corner of his left wing that indicate stretching or flexion of the wing membrane. That’s one thing this image has over its predecessor. The other is the shape of the legs. The knee and ankle joints are much more clearly defined, whereas in the earlier version they looked kind of shapeless. And the feet and toes have much more dimension to them than before.
 
Speaking of feet, I personally think Petrie might look a little odd with claws on his digits in the manner of Pterano’s, especially since his hands and feet are much darker than the rest of his body. However, his fingers and toes (fingers especially) might benefit from being made slightly thinner and more pointed, with more obvious joints. Also, perhaps the dividing lines between his toes could extend further back along his feet, to give the impression that his toes are longer.

Personally, I’ve always liked the idea of Spike remaining voluntarily mute his entire life, maybe uttering an occasional word (or a few words) if it’s really important. As for Petrie, I’ve sometimes envisioned him as having improved grammar as an adult, but lapsing into his juvenile speech pattern when he’s panicked or excited. Alternatively, maybe you could have him talk the way he did in the original movie, using “I” and “the”, but still leaving out linking verbs.



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I never thought that Petrie came out that bad... :o I have to consider that while drawing the comic...
Actually, I'm sure their appearance will change sometimes when I draw the comic. It's hard for me to keep them the way I drew them before.

But I really appreciate your feedback Pangaea. :)

Anyway, I want to update a newer version of Cera as she still looked the same only with three horns instead :):


I used her father as a reference to be honest. I also gave her eyelashes so she won't look too much like a male. :unsure:


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Quote from: Sky,Jun 6 2010 on  11:19 AM
I never thought that Petrie came out that bad... :o I have to consider that while drawing the comic...
Sorry; :oops I didn’t mean that it looked bad, just not as good in most respects as the one you had done before (in my opinion, anyway; does anyone else agree or disagree?). I figured that, considering that you intended for it to be an improved version (you did succeed with the wings and legs, at least), it was something I ought to emphasize.

In any case, you seem to have done the opposite with this picture of Cera. :wow I thought the older version was good (though I have to agree that it DID look pretty much identical to the image of Cera we’re all familiar with, just with a more adult-looking head), but this one fits in perfectly with your other drawings of a noticeably older gang. :yes I think it’s fantastic how you’ve drawn the ridge on her back in such a way that it appears to be in the process of developing into the multiple rows of armor-like scales on adult threehorns. Her limbs, tail, and general body shape, meanwhile, are reminiscent of the younger Cera. And as you did with Petrie, you kept the little jagged projection on Cera’s upper beak. I love that! :DD

There’s honestly very little in this image I can suggest significant improvement on. There are a few minor details that I think could benefit from change, one being the toes. Except for Cera’s right front foot, all of her toes seem to be lined up right next to one another, as if the fronts of her feet are square. I would try to make some toes look as if they are sticking out more or less than others (and possibly in slightly diverging directions), to give the impression that the fronts of her feet are rounded. The other thing is that Cera’s innermost toes do not merge with the sides of her feet, as they did in your original drawing. From the top “corner” edge of her toenail, a line ought to slope directly up to her ankle. There should be no skin beside the nail; that would imply that there was a bulge on the inner side of her foot behind her innermost toe. (Please let me know if I need to be clearer or explain myself better; this is a pretty confusing thing to explain. :wacko)

Also, I’ve noticed that the tails of adult threehorns, while tending to droop, are also more tapered than those of youngsters. In this picture, Cera’s tail is in the same position as her father’s, despite being shaped more like a young threehorn’s than an adult’s. This is just a thought, but you might want to consider redrawing her tail so that it is a bit higher off the ground, nowhere near as high as Littlefoot’s in your recent picture of him, but somewhere between the nearly horizontal posture of young Cera’s tail and the drooping position you have now.

Finally, I do have an extremely slight bit of concern that Cera’s face looks TOO adultlike. It’s possible that her head (not including her frill) is just a teeny, tiny bit too small in comparison with the rest of her. :unsure:

Say, Cancerian Tiger! Are you there? What’s your critique?



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I think Cera looks pretty well done.  Some touches here and there maybe to improve, but there is always room for improvement.    I'm sure if you looked at all the lbt movies and episodes you'd find their characters do not look exactly the same all the time so don't feel bad about that.  And you'd find they have made some mistakes also.

Also having some features that are maybe ones a child had could be what one may have during being a teenager.



By her expression it looks like maybe Spike has been eating from her favorite bush or something.